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The bar chart and table give information about one country's export earnings from five distinct groups of items between 2015 and 2016.

In some countries, even though the rates of serious crimes are decreasing, people feel
less safe than ever before.

What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to
solve it?

People in some parts of the world today feel more safety concerns than they used to feel in the past, despite the drop in the rates of dangerous criminal offenses. In my view, while the growing levels of impurities in the air and hectic lifestyle are causing this issue, governments and people should take certain critical steps in order to mitigate it.

In the past few years, the level of air pollution has increased drastically in the world, particularly in developed countries. Humans have contaminated the air significantly by developing vehicles, chemical factories, and other amenities. Although these developments offer comfort and happiness to humans, many people find it worrying as they do not get enough pure oxygen to inhale, and thus fear of suffering from respiratory diseases. To improve this situation, state authorities should focus on developing better public transport systems so that people can use them in lieu of their personal cars or motorbikes. Moreover, a government should levy a huge tax on owners of companies that release a lot of carbon dioxide in the air every day. Both of these measures, I think, will certainly help to reduce pollution in the air, and consequently, to make people feel safer.

I believe the stress associated with the modern lifestyle is the other cause of the concern. People nowadays have far more job responsibilities than ever before. A decade ago, no one was expected to work extended hours to meet work-related deadlines, but these days, such working practices have become a common part of most corporate jobs. This leaves people who work more than 72 hours a week to suffer from mental disorders, such as depression or anxiety, or to make them feel disconnected from their families. To curb this issue, I would suggest people should do meditation or yoga on a daily and consistent basis. This will help them not only to divert their attention from all their worries for a few minutes or an hour, but also to recharge their batteries and feel completely rejuvenated. As a result, people will no longer feel less safe due to tension in their lives.

In conclusion, although air contamination and the modern lifestyle make people feel more insecure than ever before, the government’s initiatives, such as developing environmentally friendly buses and trains and enforcing additional taxes on factories that emit carbon fumes, and regular physical and mental exercises can certainly support to alter this situation.

Vishaal

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=*_VERB+safety+concerns%2C++concerned+for+their+safety%2C+concerned+for+their+own+safety&year_start=1800&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t2%3B%2C%2A_VERB%20safety%20concerns%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Bare_VERB%20safety%20concerns%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Baddress_VERB%20safety%20concerns%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Braise_VERB%20safety%20concerns%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Braised_VERB%20safety%20concerns%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bciting_VERB%20safety%20concerns%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Braising_VERB%20safety%20concerns%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Braises_VERB%20safety%20concerns%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bhave_VERB%20safety%20concerns%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Baddressing_VERB%20safety%20concerns%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bcause_VERB%20safety%20concerns%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cconcerned%20for%20their%20safety%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cconcerned%20for%20their%20own%20safety%3B%2Cc0

https://www.google.com/search?tbo=p&tbm=bks&q=%22are+more+concerned+for+their+safety%22&num=10

"used to" + "in the past" = tautology.

"while the growing levels ... ": misuse of "while" to introduce reasons instead of concession. -> In my view, the main causes are... and government needs to

" chemical factories, and other amenities": chemical factories are hardly amenities. (IN the last chemical factory I worked in, two people died as a result of industrial pollution. And there is Bhopal....)

"and thus fear of suffering": the phrase "fear suffering from" does not come up on Google books. Perhaps: they live in fear of respiratory diseases.

" pollution in the air" -> atmospheric pollution

"This leaves people who work more than 72 hours a week suffering ....

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=*_VERB+this+issue&year_start=1800&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t2%3B%2C%2A_VERB%20this%20issue%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Baddress_VERB%20this%20issue%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Baddressed_VERB%20this%20issue%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bdiscuss_VERB%20this%20issue%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bresolve_VERB%20this%20issue%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Baddressing_VERB%20this%20issue%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Braise_VERB%20this%20issue%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Braised_VERB%20this%20issue%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Baddresses_VERB%20this%20issue%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bexamine_VERB%20this%20issue%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bclarify_VERB%20this%20issue%3B%2Cc0

"can certainly support to alter this situation" : https://www.google.com/search?tbo=p&tbm=bks&q=%22support+altering%22&num=10

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