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Thank you so much sir.Sir, we have to do task 1 questions from Cambridge 14 also.So, here are questions :
1) The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
2)The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in
each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
3) The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
4)The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Wow thank you Simon! It is so simple and clear.

Hi Simon,

I have a question. Inparagraph 3, you write "This bus station is accessed via two new roundabouts; the first roundabout is ... , while the second is ..." The question here is that why don't you use past simple when describing the bus station and the roundabouts because we are talking about the map in the year 2010, a point of time in the past.

I would appreciate it if you could give me an explanation.
Thank you for your assistance.

Hi Dao Chuong
I think there's nothing wrong with using present simple, as he is explaining what is presented in the data. For example, if you describe the plot of a book, you can do it in present simple, because the things you talk about are still there whenever you open the book. I think that will help.

FROM SIMON:

Well noticed Dao Chuong. I used the present tense on purpose (it isn't a mistake), and I was expecting some comments about this. I'll try to explain:

First, the simple explanation: I always use the tense that seems most natural to me as a native speaker. So, the parts that you highlighted were written in the present because it felt right.

Now for a more specific explanation, because most of you don't have "native speaker feeling" in English:

I started using the present tense when I wrote "we see the addition of a bus station". So, I'm describing the picture as we see it rather than what it represents. This is why I continued to use the present simple.

So, when describing what the pictures / maps represent (i.e. the reality) I use past tenses, but if I describe the picture itself (the representation of reality), I can use the present because we're looking at the maps now.

I hope this makes sense! I'm using tenses in a sophisticated way, which is part of the reason why I gave myself a band 9 ;)

Hi Simon,
I got two questions regarding the sample answer you gave.

In the middle of the third paragraph, you use a semicolon to give a further description to the two new roundabouts. I'm not very clear about the use of semicolon like this. So, could you please provide us a quick illustration about it? Besides, can we replace it with two brakets as '()' to reach this goal.

In the end of the third paragraph, you directly depict the second roundabout by using two adverbial clauses with a comma to separate them. Also, I cannot figure out this kind of expression.

Any respond to these problems will be greatly appreciated.

By the way, thank you very much for the sample answer.

The maps indicate the number of changes which took place in the road access to city hospital from 2007 to 2010.
Overall, It is clear that the road access to city hospital has been completely transformed after the construction of several facilities.
In 2007, there were a few bus stop located along the Hospital Road which lead to City Hospital. By 2010, these bus stop has been disappeared and a new massive Bus station was constructed to the west of the Hopital Road. Over the same period, at the intersection of this road with Ring Road and City Road, two roundabouts were built to help circulate the crowded transportation.
In addition, there was a car park to the east of the Hospital Road which still keep the unchange in size over the following 3 years is used just for the staff of the hospital. So, that is the reason why a new enormous car park for public was constructed just to the east of the hospital.

Trieu Hoang

".. maps indicate the number of changes": using "the" in front of 'number' suggests that the maps will only provide statistical information as to how many changes took place.

"a few bus stop": singular or plural?

"the Hospital Road": no articles in front of street names in English (unless the article forms part of the name such as "The Esplanade", "The Embankment").

"which lead " and " these bus stop has": singular or plural?

"has been disappeared": disappear is intransitive and therefore cannot be passive: also tense error.

"By 2010 ..... was constructed": needs to be past perfect.

"crowded": do not over-interpret the data.

"which still keep the unchange in size ": "unchange" is rarely used as a noun. Also check the verb tense.

"there was a car park.... is used ...": faulty clause syntax.

"enormous": too opinionated -> large

Hi Simon,

Thank you for your detailed explanation. From what you have explained, I have two more questions:

(1) Is it also correct if I use past tense to rewrite the sentence "we can also see the addition of a new bus station... This bus station was accessed via... The first roundabout was... while the second was..." because I am taking the time (2010) into account?

(2) The first sentence in paragraph 3: "we can see that in 2007 there were three bus stops on..." Am I right when using present tense (change were to are) because I am describing what I see in the map regardless the time 2007?

FROM SIMON:

Hubery,

1) I often use a semicolon when I want to show a very close relationship between two sentences. In other words, the two sentences are about the same idea, so I decide not to separate them with a full stop.

2) Don't worry about the comma. I'm just adding more information about the exact position of something. This is a very common thing to do when we're describing a location.

...

Dao,

1) Yes, that would be fine.

2) You could use 'are', but the past is best here because it feels like I'm describing the 'reality' of what was there in 2007, rather than what we see on the map now.

Hello Everyone

I came across this lesson today and I noticed two important points about using some grammars (had + pp and will have + pp).

In a previous lessen (https://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2015/08/ielts-writing-task-1-school-buildings-answer.html) the aim was to describe some changes in 2024, and a description was:

By 2024, a new building will have been constructed in the school.

In today's lesson we have:

By 2010, a new parking area had become designated to the staff only.

That was an interesting point to share.

Thank you so much Simon.

I am going to take the real exam soon.

Dear Simon,
I have seen many model answers from the expert even in the cambridge ielts book where there are no overviews. Yet they claim as 9 band or very good example. But band descriptor 7,8 say there has to be clear overview. I m really confused .

Jubino

It is relatively easy for a native speaker to score Band 9 for Vocabulary, Grammar, and Cohesion/Coherence. If they miss out the overview they will still have an average of Band 8 for Task 1.

Non-native speakers often struggle to achieve Band 7 for Vocabulary and Grammar, so they must include a clear overview bring the average for Task 1 up to Band 7.

So always put a good clear overview in. It is also good communication to write an introduction first, then a general overview, and only then move on to the details, even if you are just writing a business email.

Hello
Is it right to say
The City Road
The Hospital Road0?

Amina

Most street names are not preceded by "the". However there are some names which normally take the article; for example: the Mall (outside Buckingham Palace), the Embankment (the only one in London), the Old Kent Road.

hi simon
i appreciate all of you efforts in making ielts clear .
regarding task 1 , i belive it is logical to write
*introduction , detailed discription ,followed by summary if the question was about charts.
and * introduction , overview , detail if the q about map.
to waht extint this statment is right ?

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i also want to ask ,a part from charts , tables and map , do we have any other type of q for task 1 ?

Hi Simon,
I really appreciate your sample answer.
I have a question with regard to name of the road. You used capital letter when you are mentioning Hospital Road and City Road but ring road was written in small letter. Could you please explain the reason of this?

Thank you so much Simon.

Yumi,

Good question. This comes down to my knowledge of English life I suppose: Usually, a 'ring road' is a type of road (like 'main road' or 'highway') rather than the actual name of a road.

It wouldn't be a problem if you used capitals.

Hi Simon,
Thank you for your sample answer which is very helpful.

There is a question about preposition.In the last paragraph"In 2007, staff and visitors used the same car park, which was situated to the east of Hospital Road and accessed via the ring road. "Can I use "situated on the east of..."instead? If I can't, why?
Thank you!

Shen,

Here's a good explanation:

https://www.englishclub.com/vocabulary/nsew-usage.htm

sorry SIMON, i don't understood why do you use "be made to... in this sentence:'...that were made to a city hospital's transport infrastructure between the years 2007 and 2010' . what does this exactly mean ? I really appreciate if you can explain to me .

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