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Thank you, Simon.

I'm a new user on your site, and I'm hoping to improve my writing. I'm taking the GT test in less than 3 months.

Sir Simon is best teacher in IELTS. SO everyone who starting new find his lessons and tips very good.

In most of the nations in these days, people are usually preferring in urban areas either alone and in the nuclear family rather than tend to live with joint family. In my opinion, I believe that this will be led to the negative trend among the people, because of less parental support and even lack of moral values and etiquette have seen in among the grandchildren.

One negative consequence is being seen among the people who are living alone in major cities, that is lack of parental support. In other words, people in these days might be suffered from various levels of struggle especially youngster, who have less knowledge and experience about how they can able to cope their problem in this fast pace era when the level of inflation is reaching at the highest place. At this moment, they really need someone else who has much more experienced regarding these kinds of fundamentals problem and stimulate them to tackle their problem such as homesickness. As a result, without parental support, people are usually struggling these kinds of problem which may be mere addressed by living with parents.

Another possible consequence is that, lack of moral values among the children who are living in the nuclear family far from their grandparents. To put it on another way, people in these days are more money minded both parents are working now that is the reason behind this, they have less time to spend with their teenagers who often spending their most of time playing aggressive video games and watching violence videos such as WWE. This may turn the children to become more aggressive and stubborn. Therefore, children have less etiquette and ethics because they are unable to get a chance learning these kinds of moral values from their grandparent while living in a nuclear family. Consequently, this will be also led to reducing the love and sense of security among their children because they are unable to acquire sufficient etiquettes and values in an earlier time, which they may be needed to become responsible citizens in adulthood.

In conclusion, I think that it will absolutely lead the people to live in a negative way without having the support of parents and living far from their joint family.


How is essay simon?????????

Sobi

At 376 words, the length is quite ambitious.
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In most of the [Which nations? If you mean all, then no article is needed. -> In most nations ...] nations in [No prep needed.] these days, people are usually preferring [Why continuous? ] [to live] in urban areas [Move: people in urban areas ..] either alone and in the [a?] nuclear family rather than tend [Why tend? ] to live with joint ['Joint' suggests a blended family. Multi-generational? ] family. In my opinion,[Redundant!] I believe that this will be led [Why passive?] to the [Wrong article] negative trend among the [Why use an article?] people, because of less parental support and even lack of moral values and etiquette have seen ["Because of" is followed by a noun phrase, not a finite verb.] in among [Why double preposition?] the grandchildren.


There has been so much argument about the format of living in the modern world. The tendency of people for living alone or with nuclear family is increasing, and they no longer prefer to live in large extended families. In my opinion, this trend is inevitable, and has so many benefits that I am going to discuss here.

On the one hand, there are several advantages of living lonely, and the most important benefits would be more freedom, tranquility, and independence. Firstly, most of the time living alone can provide calm and composed energy to a person, while in another format of living with other people, this would be rarely possible. Thus, the person who lives alone might experience some sort of calmness and silence in his/her life. Secondly, it is obvious that when you live alone, you would be able to eat anywhere without being worry about the expectations and preference of others. This experience does not confined to restaurants, pubs, or café, but you can eat anywhere in your house. Obviously, you will not be annoyed and irritated by other’s complains about cleanliness. Finally, living alone has this benefit that you can enjoy your life without any possible interference. In fact, there would be no rules to restrict your daily routines; and one can live and create his/her own rules and boundaries for life without even thinking about the opinion of others.

On the other hand, those people who get married aspires to live separate, independent life in a small family house, rather than living with an extended family, and I believe that there are several good reasons for that. The first and most important reason is financial benefits that it provides for the couples. In extended family groups, parents face much greater expenses than in small families with few children. The next advantage is that living independently would allow couples to have more free times, when they can spend on leisure activities and entertainment. In addition, their privacy could not not be restricted because they do not need to share rooms with too many people. Finally, living in small family units would allow families to do effective parenting on children, which means that they would have more responsible, well-organised kids in the house.

In conclusion, I cannot see any negative aspects in living alone or in small family units since they provide enormous advantages for individuals, family members, and society as a whole.

Sobi

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One negative consequence is being seen among the people who are living alone in major cities, [and] that is lack of parental support. In other words, people in [No preposition reqd.] these days might be suffered [Why passive?] from various levels of struggle [Comma needed here.] especially youngster [Why not plural?], who have less knowledge and experience about how they can able [Can be able? Really? ] to cope [missing preposition] their problem [Just the one?] in this fast pace ["Pace" is a noun. Adjective needed.] era when the level of inflation is reaching at [No preposition required.] the highest place. At this moment, they really need someone else who has much more experienced ["Experienced" is an adjective: here we need a noun.] regarding these kinds of fundamentals [Adjective in English do not show number (except for "these/those")] problem [How many? ]and stimulate them to tackle their problem [One?] such as homesickness. As a result, without parental support, people are usually struggling [missing preposition] these kinds of problem [Missing comma.] which may be mere ["Mere" is an adjective; here we need an adverb.] addressed by living with parents.

Sobi
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On the other hand, those people who get married aspires [Subject/verb agreement?] to live separate, independent life [Singular countable nouns generally need an article or determiner except in set phrases.] in a small family house, rather than living with an extended family, and I believe that there are several good reasons for that. The first and most important reason is [missing article] financial benefits that it provides for the couples. In extended family groups, parents face much greater [Don't you mean "less"?] expenses than in small families with few children. The next advantage is that living independently would allow couples to have more free times [Uncountable in this usage.], when [-> which] they can spend on leisure activities and entertainment. In addition, their privacy could [would] not not [Duplication.] be restricted because they do not need to share rooms with too many people. Finally, living in small family units would allow families to do effective parenting on children, which means that they would have more responsible, well-organised kids [use "children" in IELTS] in the house.

In conclusion, I cannot see any negative aspects in [to] living alone or in small family units since they provide enormous advantages for individuals, family members, and society as a whole.

[I am not sure I agree or totally follow your logic. Also, you have focused on young people: there are plenty of older people living alone in some countries.]

thanks, Lara, gave me these valuable suggestions.

@lara

Thank you very much for polishing, editing, and giving me advice.

Could you please tell me which of the following is preferable in IELTS when we want to talk about possible benefits or disadvantages of something:

Their privacy will be restricted ...
Their privacy would be restricted ...

Could you also tell me what is the score of my writing?

Cheers,

Mahdi

Dir Simon, please help me review this essay. Thanks in advance.

In many cities, there is little control on the design and construction of new houses. Some people think that people can choose to build houses in their own styles instead of building them with the same as the old house style in local areas. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

People argue that building a new house should follow the style of its householder whereas some suppose there are several benefits to construct the same houses in the local area. In my opinion, owners need to have a right to decide the design of their house.

On the one hand, it can be an eyesore as if each house has its own style when it comes to architecture. First, if the houses were in a small town or ancient village, they would be able to have historical significance. This means it acts as a tangible cultural heritage. Second, these same houses can attract a lot of tourists by their unique feature, particularly a strong sense of identity. For example, in Finland, it has been many picturesque villages above water which have the same design and construction.

On the other hand, I firmly argue that people should welcome change in their house and this even does not lead to the loss of traditional cultures. Householders should be chosen whether the internal or external design which depends on their own style as long as they can feel comfortable in their own space. This does not mean to contribute to the disappearance of traditional ways of life but helps the owner possess their particular character of the house. Moreover, modern construction materials, which need to build a new house, are more likely to seek than traditional materials, such as wood or natural stone. House maintenance costs therefore would be more affordable than before.

In conclusion, although it can be incompatible with housing surrounding in terms of general architecture, I believe that people should be free in the decision of their own house.

mahdi/Sobi

Apologies, I seem to have muddled the two essays.

"Their privacy would be restricted ...": we often use "would" when discussing a hypothesis or theory, or a situation based on an assumption. "Their privacy will be restricted..": this suggests a firm prediction.

"If you can get down to under 8 errors in a Task 1, then your vocabulary and grammar scores are likely to be at least 7, and the same for the essay if you can get your errors under around 12.

My advice is always the same to candidates who want to achieve 7+. You must increase the number of 'error free' sentences. Learn what your common errors are, and eliminate them." per Mr Sjm

Hoàng Nguyễn

"Dir" would be an abbreviation of "Director".

On the one hand, it can be an eyesore as if each house has its own style when it comes to architecture. ... For example, in Finland, there are many picturesque villages ...

On the other hand, I firmly would argue that people should welcome change in their house and this even does not necessarily lead to the loss of traditional cultures. Householders should be chosen whether choose the internal or external design which depends on according to their own style, as long as they can feel comfortable in their own space. ... helps the owner possess their enjoy the particular character of the house. Moreover, modern construction materials, which are needed to build a new house, are more likely to be sought seek than traditional materials...

" with housing surrounding" -> with surrounding housing

-> free to decide the design/style of their own house.

Thank you Iara, so I think in all of writings that we need to discuss the advantages of something we can use the "would" structure.

I am making my ultimate effort to achieve 7+ in the real exam.

In many countries today, people in cities either live alone or in small family units, rather than in large, extended family groups. Is this a positive or negative trend?


Nowadays, many cities around the world are going under the change of the form of families. As people tend to live in the form of smaller nuclear family or even alone, there are contrasting views on this issue. While many argue this is a negative change, I believe there to be more positive sides to this trend.

On the one hand, traditional forms of extended family provide a benefit to individuals. Firstly, larger family could give a sense of comfort from more family members. Since there are always siblings or adults next to one another at home, one could receive mental comfort and great direct advice from the elderly. Moreover, many societies consider it to be crucial that youngsters learn the family tradition or certain manners from the adults in the family. Nowadays, as many students start to live in school dormitories or even alone from a very young age, parents worry that they are losing the chances of learning social skills and table manners at home. Furthermore, young people can more easily get financial aid from their adults or grandparents when living together, and have less burden in managing the budgets of their own apartment rents or living expenses.

On the other hand, the benefits of this trend seem to outnumber the negative sides. To begin with, nuclear family is the most suitable form of living in the modern society, as new generation has different living patterns and thoughts in life. One could gain more freedom compared to when they lived with grandparents or relatives. For instance, when one lives alone, he or she can have flexibility in time management and in the way of doing the chores. Also, living alone gives more chances of creativity and enthusiasm in living form. Airbnb, shared houses or shared flats have become a huge trend recently, and this proves that people are enjoying different living patterns in smaller groups than in the past. In addition, as people easily move to other cities or countries for better working environment and chances in career, smaller family units are better to move and live together in different situations.

To conclude, there are both positive and negative sides in the trend of living in smaller families or alone. While some people still stress the benefits of living in large families, I believe it is a beneficial trend that people are living in smaller family units nowadays.

Hi! I have my exam tomorrow, plz help me !

Thank you so much, zsófi! I hope you give me some review of coherence, cohesion and task response in this essay.

Daisy

Are you really going to be able to write 400 words in the time available in the exam?
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Nowadays, many cities around the world are going under [undergoing] the [wrong article] change of the form of families. As [Incoherent: why do smaller families create contrasting views?] people tend to live in the form of smaller nuclear family or even alone, there are contrasting views on this issue.

On the one hand, traditional forms of extended family provide a benefit to individuals.[individual family members] Firstly, larger family [a larger family OR larger families] could give a sense of comfort from more family members. ...

[missing article] nuclear family is the most suitable form of living in the [No article required.] modern society, as [each] new generation has different living patterns and thoughts in life. ... In addition, as people easily move to other cities or countries for [missing article] better working environment and chances in career [career opportunities], smaller family units are better to move and live together in different situations.

To conclude, there are both positive and negative sides in [to] the trend of living in smaller families or alone.

Many developing countries are currently expanding their tourist industries. Why is this the case? Is it a positive development?

The tourism industry is developing in many countries which have a developing economy. This is a case that is resulted in by a lot of reason and I believe that this development has several benefits in terms of some fields.

There are several essential features that would be able to explain this statement. Most of developing nations expose fewer threats to the environment than other countries like air pollution and waste. In fact, it is a few gas emissions from factories and exhaust fumes from vehicles due to their investments of business and incomplete infrastructure. This means these countries do not produce greater quantities of waste than any parts of the world and do not therefore have much more devastating effect on the planet. Not contaminating the earth, pollute rivers and oceans, these countries would be a perfect place for visitors from all over the world.

Besides, I believe that this improvement can bring a wide range of advantages to local residents and even governments. First, people from the rest of the world visit cultural or historical attractions in developing nations and this means there are many opportunities to inhabitants. For example, related jobs would rely on visitors, from food and souvenirs to accommodation and travel. In favour of governments, visiting important sites and monuments will be able to contribute to the economy of the country with the money they spend on a wide range of goods and services, such as paying money to these sites through the tax system. As a result, this would certainly promote the nation’s cultural heritage and important buildings.

In conclusion, in order to attract tourists from overseas, many developing countries should invest fund and human in tourism industries, especially the tertiary industry.
(288 words)

I'm confused about my essay's grammar. Please help me!

In a number of nations, men and women in most metropolises nowadays prefer more to live alone or in a nuclear family than in large family groups. I think this is a significantly negative development as their lifestyle is often stressful as well as they have to carry all the burden of financial responsibilities on their own shoulders.

People’s lives are usually hectic when they decide to live on their own or with their wife and children. This is mainly because they have to manage almost everything at their home, such as cooking, maintaining cleanliness and tidiness, and even washing clothes and dishes. When all these activities add up to their job responsibilities, they mostly feel severe stress and anxiety. In India, for example, many working people living in an isolated family have often been found to suffer from the psychological problem called depression. But, this does not happen when people live with their parents and siblings as they usually receive huge support from their family members in many things.

Not only this, but they also have to take the complete responsibility of fulfiling the money-related needs, such as renting an apartment, electricity and the internet bills, groceries, and many other things, of their families. Also, the overall cost of living in urban areas is much This means that they cannot save enough money for the future, and often have to take loans from some banks just to meet their daily basic requirements. For instance, it has often been observed that the people living in extended families mostly have a higher bank balance than those who live in nuclear families.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is a negative trend that many inhabitants of cities these days choose to live in a smaller family than a large family as they would have to struggle a lot in satisfying family’s monetary needs, and suffer from a huge amount of mental stress.

In many countries today, people in cities either live alone or in small family units, rather than in large, extended family groups. Is this a positive or negative trend?

Nowadays, there is a global trend among city dwellers to live alone or with immediate family. In my opinion, this trend has more disadvantages than advantages because the elderly feel abundant and lonely as well as children do not see a good example of family bonds.

First, the resent trend of living by small groups of immediate families, which replaced the living style of our grandparents, can be considered as negative development because the elderly after certain age are left behind. They are forced to live in elderly houses that obviously cannot replace a family. Even though somebody can argue that they have professional care in the face of nurses and communication among the peers, still they do not have any of family members surrounding them. As a result, old people feel lonely and abundant because their children are not able to visit them on daily basis.

Meanwhile, living in a large house with children and grandchildren brings them sense of joy and happiness. In addition, the older generation can help to up bring the youngsters while their parents are hectic at work. Living with the older members of the family would teach children compassion and respect to the elderly. As well as this, extended members of a family would be able help each other with house chores and taking care of children. It is understood that this way of life help us to strengthen family ties, which are rare nowadays. To illustrate, my mother grew up in a large family, where everyone tend to help each other. As a result, all member of her family have close bond with each other and they still stay in touch.

In conclusion, living separately from the family or having a nuclear family may look appealing from the first glance, however, I think that it is negative trend, which is more harmful than beneficial.

Honu
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The tourism industry is developing in many countries which have a developing economy. [Repetition of "developing" undermines the thrust (focus/gist/point) of this sentence.]

This is a case that is resulted in by a lot of reason [Incoherent!]
and I believe that this development has several benefits in terms of some fields.[Too vague!]

There are several essential features that would be able to explain this statement.[Too general!]
Most of developing nations expose fewer threats [How does a nation "expose a threat"? ] to the environment than other countries like air pollution and waste.[Why are we talking about pollution when the topic is tourism? ] ..... [You will need to plan the essay and connect to the topic or you will lose the examiner by this stage. Otherwise the score for TR might be as low as Band 4.]

Vishaal

"living in an isolated family": this would suggest that the whole family was living in some remote area. There is little alternative to the phrase "living alone" in English. It is used as an adjective in the phrase "living-alone allowance".

-> the overall cost of living in urban areas is high.

"extended family" includes aunts, uncles, grandparents, and the MOTHER-IN-LAW.

"nuclear family" is just both parents and their immediate children.

"blended family" is an adult couple living together plus their children (including children from previous relationships).

https://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/nuclear_family

https://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/extended_family#English

Important to get the terminology right.

-> fulfilling (spelling)

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Statistics:

Currently, more than 50% of the American adult population is single compared to a mere 22% in 1950. Moreover, approximately 1 out of every 7 adults live by themselves. The more economically developed societies in East Asia such as Japan, South Korea, and Taiwan have the highest proportion of one-person households in Asia, at 32.4%, 23.9%, and 22% respectively. These percentages represent a dramatic growth from the corresponding rates in 1980 − 19.8%, 4.8%, and 11.8% respectively.

https://www.psychologytoday.com/us/blog/happy-singlehood/201904/living-alone-together-growing-trend

https://www.demographic-research.org/volumes/vol32/40/32-40.pdf

Apart from Japan, Taiwan, and South Korea, OECD countries, that is Europe, Australia, NZ and USA, all have 17-37% of households consisting of one person. The rate for mainland China is below 15% and for India below 5%.

In Asia, older women more likely to live alone due to widowhood. There is also a higher prevalence of young male residents living alone in urban than in rural areas.

In countries such as Bangladesh, Cambodia, and Thailand, in particular, as high as 60% to 80% of those aged 15 to 25 who live alone in urban areas live in group quarters.

For young adults, living alone is not necessarily associated with loneliness,
social isolation, or lower socioeconomic status.

Many older adults who live alone in Myanmar, Vietnam, and Thailand are actually living close to their child or children. Therefore, living alone is not necessarily associated with financial distress, loneliness, lack of support, less social participation, or poorer well-being; though in general solo dwellers report more psychological distress than those living with others.

The number of people living alone globally is skyrocketing, rising from about 153 million in 1996 to 277 million in 2011 – an increase of around 80% in 15 years. In the UK, 34% of households have one person living in them and in the US it's 27%.

One reason that more people live alone than ever before is that they can afford to.

Living alone and being alone are hardly the same, yet the two are routinely conflated. In fact, there's little evidence that the rise of living alone is responsible for making us lonely. Research shows that it's the quality, not the quantity of social interactions that best predicts loneliness. What matters is not whether we live alone, but whether we feel alone. As divorced or separated people often say, there's nothing lonelier than living with the wrong person.

There's good reason to believe that people who live alone in cities consume less energy than if they coupled up and decamped to pursue a single-family home.

Mirabella:

To illustrate, my mother grew up in a large family, where everyone tend [Tense!] to help each other. As a result, all member [Plural!] of her family have close bond [One or several? Article?] with each other and they still stay in touch.

"abundant" -> abandoned?

resent : spelling?

Hi Simon,

Is it possible to give the advantages and disadvantages of living alone and extended family for this question.

Here is my essay:

It is true that nowadays, it has been more common for people to have small family or even live alone. I believe this pattern can have both benefits and drawbacks.
There are several advantages of living individually. Firstly, we can be more independent. Being alone teaches us how to do our daily work ourselves with no help. For instance, we learn to do the dishes, do laundry, iron our clothes, cook, clean home, pay bills, do shopping and many other tasks related to daily life. This helps us to be more confident and build an independent personality which leads to maturity. Secondly, another benefit of having small family or living alone is that we will be able to manage our budget and become financially stable. Of course, the cost of living reduces dramatically when we are alone. This makes it easier to save money for the future when a crisis happens. For example, I have been living alone since ten years ago and I could save much more money compared to my friends who are married and have children.
Despite the benefits of having a small family, being raised in a large family has also several benefits. I believe that those who were brought up in a big family are more social than those who did not. Being alone can cause depression or other mode disorders which leads to less communication with friends, relatives and other members of the society. This is not the case when we see that there are several family members around us. By having brothers and sisters we feel happier and more connected. Siblings can share their experiences, help each other in hardships, and support each other both emotionally and financially if something bad happens to one of them. Being in a big family is like being in a team that cooperate with each other all the time, and we can even learn how to do teamwork as good as possible. This can be a helpful feature for our careers which is a key factor that many job advertisements ask for.
In conclusion, in my opinion, there are pros and cons with both living alone or in a tiny family and living in an extended family.

ninavvvv
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"nowadays,[No comma needed.] it has been more common": [Present perfect is rarely used with a specific time marker. 'nowadays it has become more common' would be possible. ]

There are several advantages of [to] living individually.['Living alone' is the only phrase that works: do not attempt to paraphrase.] Firstly, we can be more independent.
clean home -> to do the cleaning

Of course, the cost of living reduces dramatically when we are alone. [No it doesn't: two can usually live as cheaply as one.]

[Living in a multi-child family can be good OR bad: it depends on the relationships. ]

pros and cons [I would avoid this phrase in IELTS: it comes across as staged.] with [to] both living alone

Thank you for your review, Fruzsi!
I will rewrite this essay according to your advice.

Fruzsi, thank you for the corrections. I appreciate it.

Thank you zara for your comments. Do you think this essay deserves band 7. I really need band 7 and my exam will be in 10 days.

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