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Here is my sample answers. Any feedback from anyone is welcomed.

The two maps show the change happened to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
From the maps, it is clear that there were three changes made in the city hospital. The changes included the development of the intersections, the upgrade of the bus service and the parking system.
In 2007, there were two intersections in the north and south of the hospital road. The intersections were replaced by roundabouts in 2010. For the bus service, six bus stops were once available but they were demolished. In return, a bus station in the west of the hospital road was constructed. To connect it with the roundabouts, two sided road were also built.
In 2007 the old car park in the east of the hospital road was used for staff and public. It was separated in 2010 by constructed the public car park in the east of the city hospital. After the construction, the old car park was used only for staff.

elizabeth
Just some ideas:

The two maps show the change[s that] happened to [OR: occurred at] a city hospital in [between] 2007 and 2010.
From the maps,[No need to mention the maps again.] it is clear that there were three changes made in [at] the city hospital. The changes included the development of the intersections, [improvements to the traffic flow at both ends of the access road?] the upgrade of the bus service ['upgrading' the bus service suggests that there were more buses more frequently. It was the bus stops that were upgraded not the service.] and the parking system.[Not really the system, but the parking facilities.]

In 2007, there were two intersections [junctions] in the north and south [at either end ] of the hospital road. The intersections [crossroads] were replaced by roundabouts in [by] 2010. For the bus service, six bus stops were once available but they were demolished. In return, a bus station in [to] the west of the hospital road was constructed. To connect it with the roundabouts, two sided [side-roads/bus access roads] road were also built.

In 2007 the old car park in [to] the east of the hospital road [NO ARTICLE ON ROAD NAMES unless it is part of the name such as "The Esplanade": Hospital Road (with capitals)] was used for staff and public. It was separated [public car-parking was hived off] in 2010 by constructed [constructing] the public car park in [to] the east of the city hospital. After the construction, the old car park was used only for staff.

Hi Khe, thank you!

These maps compare the infrastructure at the surrounding of the City Hospital in 2007 and 2010.

It is clear that there are three significant changes between 2007 and 2010. These changes are relocated bus station, inserted roundabouts and expanded car park spaces.

In 2007, there were two intersections on hospital road with ring road and city road at the east of the City Hospital. And these intersections were replaced by roundabouts in 2010. Also, the six bus stops along the side of hospital road were demolished, and a new bus station was built on the westside of hospital road. Moreover, these roundabouts and this bus station were connected by the side roads to flow traffic.

Another major change was the car park on the east side of hospital road between ring road and city road in 2007. This car park was used by staff and the public, however, this car park was no longer used by the public, it became only for the staff car park. In 2010, the public car park was built on the east side of the City Hospital, and the public patients and family members were able to access from ring road to the public car park.

Tae

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"there are three significant changes between 2007 and 2010": tense

https://www.google.com/search?q=%22have%20been%20changes%20between%22&tbm=bks&lr=lang_en

-> These changes include/consist of/comprise relocating the bus station (OR the relocation of the bus station), inserting/introducing roundabouts, (OR upgrading the intersections/improvements to the traffic flow) and expanding (OR the expansion of) the number of car park spaces. (OR providing more parking)

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-> The junction at the northern end of Hospital Road with the ring road, was upgraded to a roundabout, and the southern intersect with City Road improved/treated similarly.

-> to allow buses to flow.

"This car park was formerly used by both staff and the public. It became ..."

Hi Zaofi

I've appreciated your advice.
I will rewrite again:)

Thank you Simon.
But can you teach us Cambridge 6 test2 writing 1?

thanks

Here is my answer, could you feed back your ideas?

The diagram below the developments of road to a city hospital between 2007 and 2010. There were mainly three changes such as construction of roundabout, bus station, and car park of staff and public.

First of all, new two roundabouts were built at the both ends of hospital Rd; the one was placed the south of city hospital, and the other were located at intersection where hospital Rd and city road met.

Secondly, the place of bus station was replaced; it was removed from both along hospital Rd and set up in the west of hospital Rd, which has roads to two roundabouts established on the tip of the hospital Rd.

Finally, car park was divided into two places in dependence on use of it. the original place of car park was changed for use of hospital staff, and customers of hospital have been using new car park which built in the east of city hospital, facing on the east of ring road.

Here is my VERY FIRST POST, please give me some advice. Thank you so much.

The two maps show main changes of the area around the city hospital over the span of thirteen years from 2007 to 2010.
Overall, there are some significant changes which include the relocation of bus stops, the increase of car park and the addition of roundabouts.
Look at the details, back in 2007, the car park staff and public was formerly used by both the staffs and public. In 2010, it was only used by the staffs because the car park public was built and connected to the ring road in the East of the city hospital. As for parking space, it is expanded to accommodate more vehicles.
As regards the immediate area surrounding the hospital road, many developments have taken place. The two junctions, that connect the hospital road to the ring road and the city road, was upgraded to two roundabouts. These roundabouts help people who use the bus access to the city hospital more conveniently. Moreover, another roundabout was constructed in the East – South to serve increasing number of traffic around the city hospital

* it was expanded *, not "is expanded"
* the South-East*, not "East-south"
I confused about the comma "," before "that". Please help me. thanks a lot.

The two junctions, that connect the hospital road to the ring road and the city road, was upgraded to two roundabouts. These roundabouts help people who use the bus access to the city hospital more conveniently

Thomas

"The diagram below the developments of road to ...": there is a verb missing here. Also, the maps show more than road developments.

"car park of staff and public": for staff ...

"the place of bus station was replaced" -> the bus station was re-sited.

"Finally, [missing article] car park was divided into two places in dependence on use of it. the ....": sentences begin with a capital letter. The car park was not split up: a new one was built for public use. The existing car park was retained for/dedicated to/restricted to staff only, and a new, dedicated park built for public use.

Quy

"the increase of car park": more car parking

"Look at the details" -> Looking ....

"the car park staff": this would mean the car parking attendants

"staff" is very rarely plural.

"car park public": adjectives normally precede the noun in English.

"The two junctions.... was were upgraded

->to serve increased traffic flows/volumes

dear Zoe,
thank you so much!

The two maps show the layout of the road around a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
On the southern side of the hospital, the Hospital Road first intersected with the Ring Road and the City Road which ran from east to the west. Similarly, two junctions were both replaced by roundabouts. Moreover, on the eastern side of the Hospital Road, between the Ring Road and the City Road, a car park for the hospital staff and the public only opened to staffs in 2010. Meanwhile, a new public car park was built on the east of the hospital, just along the Ring Road.
The most significant change of the layout around the hospital was on the bus stop. Instead of having 3 bus stops on each side of the Hospital Road, a new bus station was constructed on the left part just opposite the staff’s car park across the road, linked by two roads to two roundabouts.
Overall, the Ring Road, the Hospital Road and the City Road around the city hospital almost remained the same, while some facilities changed notably.

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