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Sir, I write my mistakes many times. Still, it doesn't improve my w.r.t. in basic skills. But I some times think I have wtitten is correct but I also feel mistakes there. I get one mistake right, then other mistake happen. It is no end.

Pachu

w.r.t. -> writing

"some times" is almost always written as one word: sometimes

..I sometimes think what I have written ...

... then another mistake happens

There is no end (in sight).

Punctuation correct. :=)

There are fewer controls on the designs and construction of a home and office buildings. So, people can build them whatever they like.
Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

It has often been argued that there are less than enough regulations on the structure and building aspects of residential and work premises, and this gives people the flexibility to construct as per their will. I believe the benefit of better space utilization is clearly outweighed by the drawback of rising in the illegal constructions.

The primary advantage of lesser rules for construction of buildings is that people could use their spaces as per their requirement. This allows them the flexibility to plan the size of each room according to their future needs, and thus they could design the structure of their offices or homes in a way that people working or living in these buildings will benefit, in terms of comfort, the most. In India, for example, most builders today can sell apartments of customers’ choices due to the less stringent government controls for constructing buildings. But, this benefit is less significant as it persuades some people to deviate with even these relaxed rules.

However, these relaxed regulations are disadvantageous as many corrupt business people would take advantages of them in an illegal way. Not only this, but also they would construct their buildings by covering the land of other innocent people as states rules are not rigid enough to restrict them from doing so, and as a result, both good citizens and governments would suffer losses. In Gujarat, for instance, many cases of illegal constructions are being reported in the newspaper, called Times of India, almost every day as the State regulations are such liberal that any business minded person can manipulate.

In conclusion, although lesser laws for building different premises are beneficial in terms of flexibility to design the construction, I would argue that the disadvantage of increase in unlawful constructions is more significant.

Please assess my work.

Nowadays more and more people have to compete with young people for the same
jobs.
What problems does this cause? What are some possible solutions?


These days, a greater number of people has to face competition with younger individuals for the same employment. The major issue this causes is that governments would receive less money as an income tax, and the most viable solution is the implementation of legal policies providing equal opportunities to both young talent and experienced workforce.

When freshers and experienced people apply for the same jobs, states would receive lesser tax from employees. This is primarily because most companies nowadays prefer young workers for certain jobs over other workers who have already worked in that particular field for many years. By this way, they could save more money by recruiting young staff at low salary packages, and this directly affects the tax contribution done by such employees. In India, for example, working people whose annual salary is less than 5,00,000 rupees do not require to pay the income tax as per the most current regulation.

To tackle this issue, state authorities should enforce revised employment rules which dictate that all firms ought to maintain the 50-50 ratio of young and experienced employees. This would benefit them a lot as the overall tax contribution from employment would rise as the annual pays of older working people are far higher than people who are amateur. The workforce of the technological giant Google, for instance, contribute more income tax to the Indian Government than any other IT companies in India as it maintains an equal number of fresher and experienced staff.

In conclusion, the main problem associated with the competition between people of different age groups is the reduction in the income tax towards state authorities, and this issue could be sorted out by imposing legal regulations to all firm which mandate them to hire fresher as well as elderly people in equal numbers.

@vishaaal

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Vishaal

1) "There are fewer controls..": fewer than when or where?

2) It has often ["often"? really?] been argued that there are less than enough [-> not enough] regulations on the structure and building aspects of residential and work premises, and this gives people the flexibility to construct as per their will [at will?].

3) I believe the benefit of better space utilization [Who said there was "better space utilization" and what exactly is meant by this? ] is clearly outweighed by the drawback of rising [..outweighed by the drawbacks arising from the uncontrolled spread of illegal construction ??] in the illegal constructions.

4) The primary advantage of lesser rules [-> fewer rules / deregulation of the building sector or industry] for construction of buildings is that people [are free to build whatever they wish? ] could use their spaces as per their requirement.

5) This allows them the flexibility to plan the size of each room according to their future needs, and thus they could design the structure of their offices or homes in a way that people working or living in these buildings will benefit, in terms of comfort, the most. [Surely building regulations are more about sound construction, good engineering, fire protection, proper heating and ventilation? Without them buildings tend to collapse and kill many people. Building regulations do not usually place unreasonable restrictions on the size of rooms: for instance in my country, bedrooms must be over six square meters, the must be adequate access to toilet and running water, and so on.] In ... to deviate with [from] even these relaxed rules.

6) However, these relaxed regulations are disadvantageous as many corrupt business people would [Why mix first and second conditional? ] take advantages of them in an illegal way. Not... ..regulations are such [so] liberal that any business minded person can manipulate [them].

7) In conclusion, although lesser [fewer] laws for building different premises [building regulations/ less restrictive building code] are beneficial in terms of flexibility to [for the ] design the construction, I would argue that the disadvantage of [an] increase in unlawful constructions is more significant.

Vishaal

8) These days, [slightly informal]

9) a greater number of people has [have] to face competition with younger individuals for the same employment. [there is more competition for jobs from the younger generation]

10) The major issue this causes is that governments would receive less money as an income tax, [Don't understand why: please explain.] and the most viable solution is the implementation of legal policies providing equal opportunities to both young talent and [the more] experienced workforce.

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=new+entrants+to+the+workforce&year_start=1800&year_end=2000&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Cnew%20entrants%20to%20the%20workforce%3B%2Cc0

11) When freshers [new entrants to the workforce] and [more] experienced people apply for the same jobs, states would [Why mix first and second conditionals?] receive lesser [less] tax from employees.

12) This is primarily because most companies nowadays prefer young workers for certain jobs over other workers who have already worked in that particular field for many years. By [In] this way, they could save more money by recruiting young staff at low salary packages, and this directly affects the tax contribution done [made] by such employees. In India, for example, working people whose annual salary is less than 5,00,000 rupees do not require [are not required] to pay the income tax as per the most current regulation.

13) ... This would benefit them a lot [informal] as the overall tax contribution from employment would rise as the annual pays [salaries] of older working people are far higher than people who are amateur [Amateurs by definition are never paid].

14) ... any other IT companies [company] in India as it maintains an equal number of fresher [new entrants/trainees] and [more] experienced staff.

15)... imposing legal regulations to [on] all firm [singular -> plural] which mandate them to hire fresher [new entrants] as well as elderly ["Elderly" suggests retired] people in equal numbers.

Thanks a lot Lara! You just realized me that I'm still standing at a band 6.5.

@ Pachu

The purpose is not getting free corrections but is learning from mistakes made by me or anyone else in this group.

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