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Dear Simon,
Is the final linking idea important to get high score in WT2.

***Each body paragraph should aim to make a point, explain it, give an example and link this idea back to the question.
For example, here is a given body paragraph that ends with this linking idea: "‘Thus, we could argue that video games can actually serve a very useful purpose and are not always detrimental
to our health."

Murad

a) The marking criteria do not mention this specifically but do state: logically organises information and ideas; there is clear progression throughout.

b) Recently Simon commented on a model answer:
Notice how I finish [the paragraph] with a reference to the original question: "I doubt whether... in the long term" refers to the idea that "individuals don't really want to do these activities in their spare time".

c) The main body paragraphs in Simon's model answers often end with a sentence that links the paragraph ideas back with the question.

https://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2019/01/ielts-writing-task-2-write-the-conclusion-for-me.html

https://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2018/10/ielts-writing-task-2-power-of-advertising-essay.html

https://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2018/12/ielts-writing-task-2-artificial-intelligence-essay.html

Check out the British Council model answer here:
https://takeielts.britishcouncil.org/sites/default/files/2018-01/Writing_practice_test_1_IELTS_Academic_Model_Answers.pdf

https://takeielts.britishcouncil.org/sites/default/files/2018-01/Writing_practice_test_1_IELTS_Academic_questions.pdf

Oleg, thank you

I also suggest to write two main ideas in the introduction for clear response.thanks sir.

another confusing issue is whether it is necessary to write an outline within the introduction. Some sources say it is necessary to bring as the third sentence. However, I count on Simon as the last word.

Milad

Check out the British Council model answers:

https://takeielts.britishcouncil.org/sites/default/files/2018-01/Writing-practice_test_1_IELTS_General_Training_Model_Answers.pdf

https://takeielts.britishcouncil.org/sites/default/files/2018-01/Writing_practice_test_1_IELTS_Academic_Model_Answers.pdf

Eating too much sugar is harmful to health. Some people think that it is the government responsibility to limit people's sugar consumption while others think that it is individuals’ responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It has been argued by some that state authorities should control individuals’ intake of sugary food products, whereas others believe that people are accountable for limiting such food. While politicians can stop people from consuming a higher amount of sugar by banning related advertisements, I tend to agree with those who believe that people can make better dietary decisions for themselves than others.

Some might think that adverts of sugary food have been on the rise in the past few years and governments ought to stop them from limiting people’s sugar consumption. This is crucial because many people are not knowledgeable enough to understand long-term health risks involved in frequently eating sugary food and might significantly be influenced by such ads, which persuade them to consume more and more high sugar food for gaining short-term pleasure. In India, for instance, the number of diabetic patients have risen by a greater number due to the boost in ads of such food products in the last five years. However, I disagree with this argument because states have no control over individuals’ eating habit and people can do better for themselves in these regards.

Others might argue that individuals can think the best for themselves, particularly about what diet choices they should make, than anyone else. That is to say, even if governments banned lucrative adverts on sugary food items, they could not prevent people from consuming them as they are predominantly available in most supermarkets. For example, although many food items, with higher sugar content, are not being advertised on television or radio, the majority of Indian people prefer to buy them just to satisfy their taste buds. Therefore, I firmly believe that people are primarily responsible for limiting their daily sugar intake and governments cannot really deter individuals from taking sugar.

In conclusion, although politicians can partially discourage people from consuming sugar by prohibiting related adverts, I think individuals are mainly responsible for deciding whether or not to eat sugar because others truely have no control over their willingness.

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