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In conclusion, Following trends and fashions or not, it is up to people. They choose the most suitable things for themshelve.

In conclusion, I argue that the changing of people's preference would depend on types of leisure activities that they chose.

In conclusion, some hobbies can temporary popular while some can last for ages.

Dear Simon,
I have some confusion regarding the modal essay of 2nd March, 2016 about Task 2. Question is " More people migrating cities search of better life but face difficulty .
Explain difficulties & how government make urban life better? "
1) confusion no. 1 is thesis statement of introduction where
you have mentioned only one idea (solution) but missed to address difficulty . Conclusion is fine acvording to your tips in your blog. You only paraphrased the thesis.
Pls reply .
2) Amother confusion is the "Real content " Topic in your blog in which you have mentioned that to score 7 or more one must focus on "Real Content " rather than grammar, linking and structure. But somewhere I found that Impressive idea is not important; one should focus on .....
So I m really confused. Could you pls explain Simon?

Sorry . My querries have already been addressed .

Individual free time activities become fashionable for a limited time and then vanishes when a latest trend emerges, whereas other hobbies appear to be permanently famous.However,I agree with the idea that hobbies are reflection of changing fashions rather than personal true interests.

it is true that some entertainment becomes old-fashioned these days but there are other popular entertainments that trends have not affected on them

In c0nclusion, from the above arguments, I could conclude that some people are too much trendy in term of their preferred interests and hobbies in which they are not confined in for a long period whereas others are always very interested in some life-long interests so far.


Is it okay??

In conclusion, I would like to reaffirm my position that even though there have always been trendy hobbies temporarily appealing to people, the fact that any individuals choose their favourite activities based on their personal taste has stood the test of time.

I would appreciate it if any of you correct my mistakes😊

Akter:

In conclusion, from the above arguments, I would conclude['conclude/conclusion is repetitive: use agree/concur] that some people are too much [wrong word order: more? ] trendy in term [singular/plural?] of their preferred interests and hobbies in [wrong preposition] which they are not confined in for a long period [comma needed here] whereas others are always very interested in some life-long interests so far [always or so far: not both together].

Roxana:

In conclusion, I would like to reaffirm my position that even though there have always been trendy hobbies temporarily appealing to people [Perhaps: ... hobbies which hold some temporary or transient appeal], the fact that any individuals choose their favourite activities based on their personal taste has stood the test of time. [..., the facts/evidence supports the view that ...]

in conclision hobbies which people enjoy doing is things in their spare time

In conclusion, while some popular pastimes seem to be changed in order to reflect the newest trends, I believe that people choose their own favourite activities doing in spare time that best fit their abilities and interests.

In conclusion, some people are more inclined to have spare time activities which are according to the current fashion but there are some others who ignore the recent trend and stick to their priority all the time. This means that the hobbies and interests are totally dependent on the type of individuals.

In conclusion, although I partially agree with the view that certain free-time activities are getting updating from time to time for some people, I believe that others are long-lasting, which genuinely mirror individuals’ personal choice rather than recent trends and fashions.

Employers should focus on personal qualities over qualifications and experience when choosing someone for a job. To what extent do you agree with this?

People have differing views about the criteria companies should consider while hiring employees. I completely agree with the idea that firms should give more importance to individuals’ character than their education and work experience because this would allow any organization to grow faster and keeping privacy.

First and foremost, companies can boost profit by selecting individuals having good work ethics, honesty, and loyalty. This is essential because such people are highly likely to be dedicated towards their company’s development and are mostly ready to stretch out of their comfort zone to achieve company’s objectives and goals, and thus their productivity would significantly be increased and because of this, such companies would earn higher financial success. Conversely, if any firm hired highly qualified or experienced candidate having a corrupt mind, it would massively fail in achieving targets, because such workers are usually selfish and prefer to only work for their personal gains. For example, it is often indicated in many newspapers that companies having stable and loyal employees grow tremendously in the current market.

Additionally, employees with higher personal values are crucial for any organization in maintaining privacy. That is to say, many directors and managers are well aware of their company’s future development and business plans, and if they shared these secrets with other competitors, their companies would lose income dramatically. Therefore, employees with greater ethical and moral values are always more crucial for firms than educated and experienced workers having lower personal qualities. For instance, a reputed pharmaceutical firm recently got sued by its rival and lost 1 billion rupees as a penalty just because one of its employees shared the company’s secrets to its rival for getting some money.

In conclusion, I think it is always better for firms to consider employees’ personal values first, and then education or experience or both for rapid progress and maintaining secrecy.

in conclusion,some hobbies and interests are changable time by time according to individuals while some of them everytime are liked people doing.

My first post! please check if it is fine. Thank you.
In conclusion, even though some hobbies are ephemeral and people have them only to follow the fashion and make social contacts. There are some interests, which are developed by people’s true love and enthusiasm, can definitely go down in history.

Sorry; my request doesn't related with the answer. I have met the simon blog a bit late:( and i really like it. So i want to read all archieve. But i can't see before april 2018:(. How can i obtain the archieve which is written before april 2018??
Please help.

Thanks Simon for this blog.

In conclusion, I partly agree with the idea that some games and activities reflect the trends. However, some traditional hobbies are still popular among people who have true interests in it.

In conclusion, I think that hobbies just partly reflect latest trends. As there are bunch of popular activities which are not trendy at all and stay popular for years.

Onurlu-alp,

Here’s the link to my full blog archives:

https://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/archives.html

Oleg
Thanks a million

In conclusion,some hobbies are never be obsolote whilst we clear understand that some hobbies maybe become trend for a while but as we know easy come easy go.

In conclusion, some hobbies change with incoming trends, whereas others become popular regardless of changing trend.

In conclusion, while it's true that some hobbies are popular temporarily, I believe that there are some interests which can last for long term.

In conclusion, the varying fashion would no doubt influence the choice of people as to what leisure activities they love to do, our own interest is still playing an important role in finding out and developing our hobbies.

In conclusion, while some popular pastimes that change reflecting the new trend, I believe there are still some pleasures and interests that are not obsolete over time.

In conclusion, while I agree that trends and fashion may have a huge impact on individual’s interests, I do believe that many people spend their time doing what they truly like.

Here is my conclusion for your essay

In conclusion, trendy activities can cover popular hobbies, but real interests have existed for a long time to admit their position that is not inherently left behind by any of trendy. In my opinion, people should find one hobby that suits to them and permanently pursue it. Through true interests, they can realize who they are, what they want and why they live. People who change their hobbies consistently because of trendy would find their life messy and lose their direction in life.

while I believe that some hobbies and games seem to be more fashionable and trendy, I would argue that other leisure activities would reflect individual real interest.

People have differing views about whether young individuals, reaching adulthood, should live solo. While some believe that young adults should live with their parents to avoid financial problems, I would argue that they ought to live independently for learning crucial life skills.

The main reason why people think that young adults should live with their family is to avoid risk which comes due to the lack of money. That is to say, the majority of young people are either pursuing their third level education or searching for suitable jobs when they get mature. If they are forced to leave their home at this stage, they may have to deal with the severe financial scarcity or, in the worst case, participate in some criminal offenses just to pay their rents or university fees. For example, although my younger brother earns only 10,000 rupees per month, he never faced any financial problem just because he has been living with my parents since his childhood and gets instant help from my parents whenever he wants.

Despite the above arguments, I believe that young individuals should live solo to become responsible and mature adults later in their lives. Most of us have to take responsibilities of our spouse and children in our adult lives, and we could develop all the skills required to manage these duties effectively if we stay independently. Many young professionals, such as engineers, pharmacist or doctors, are often appeared as responsible husbands or wives as they have to live alone in different metropolitan cities or countries because of their jobs and manage all of their personal expenses and other duties from the start of their career.

In conclusion, although young people could avoid financial struggles by living with their family members, I think that they should live alone in order to prepare themselves for future responsibilities.

Vishaal
..ought to live independently in order to learn crucial life skills.

third level education -> tertiary education

"when they get mature"?? Not clear what you mean by this in the context.

https://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/mature-student

deal with severe financial scarcity -> face financial hardships

pay their rents -> pay the rent

gets instant help -> receives financial support

take responsibility for our spouse and children

we would develop ... if we stayed independent. (No -ly)

engineers, pharmacists

are often appeared -> often become

In conclusion, I would argue that some hobbies become the vouge by following trends, but there are many people who have interests in something reflecting their own personalities.

Thanks Zsofi!

In conclusion, some hobbies and interests are popular for a period of time and become out of fashion soon, but some do stay over time and have a durable attraction for people.

Thank you.

Jojo

ephemeral: https://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/ephemeral

HI,
I have rewritten the essay. I need you to comment.
Here is my essay:
Some time off activities become trendy for a short time and then fade away when a new style comes along, whereas others seem to be fashionable. I am partly agreed with the affirmation that hobbies reflect changing fashions rather than our true interests.
On the one hand, it is obvious that some hobbies are changing with the newly erupted trends. Children and teenagers, in particular, like to follow activities whatever currently has gain popularity. For example, a friend of mine has started doing motorbike stunt sport. He has been obsessed for more than two years. Similarly, there have been several other some sorts of sports activities such as yoga and jogging on the streets, but I am skeptical whether adults continued to work out on these fitness trends.
On the other hand, many people spend their leisure time playing untrendy games. For instance, a game that is far from trend is Carom board. Youngsters and children who play this game certainly do not follow new styles and even waste their time on other activities that they do not admire. In addition to the truly enjoy the game of their passion, and they find it amusing and fascinating. I am of the same view about other hobbies such as reading, listening to music and swimming. Hobbies from reading to swimming are with true interest. For this reason, they would not be reflected by changing fashion ever.
In conclusion, some hobbies disappear when the new fashion enters society, but others with true interest continue to be in the same style.

Hi colette, thank you for your reply, but it looks like you meant to reply to another person's comment since I did not use the word ephemeral in my answer.

Some people think that giving gifts and presents to friends and family is important to show them that we care. Others think that there are more important ways. Discuss both and give your opinion.

People have different views about the method of sharing care with their loved ones. While some argue that presenting materialistic things to our friends or family members is essential for expressing our care towards them, I firmly believe it is absolutely crucial to spend quality time with them to show our care.

On the one hand, giving gifts or presents to friends and family is one of the common ideas of expressing care. Many people are giving things like flowers, chocolates, gold jewelry and many other such things to their loved ones, as a token of love, to make them feel happy and being cared. My wife, for instant, presented me my favorite Sony’s music system on my last birthday, although she hated the loud music, in order to express her care for me.

However, in current busy lives, I think the majority of people feel being loved or cared only when their partner or friend spend an ample amount of time with them on many occasions. For example, even if any husband gave many gifts to his wife but he was unable to give her sufficient time due to hectic professional responsibilities, she would likely to feel being ignored or less cared by her husband. Hence, it is pretty evident that giving time to our parents, spouse or friends is a far better way to express our feeling of caring than presenting gifts.

In conclusion, although giving presents is one way of expressing care, I think this method is outdated and unworkable in recent times and one needs to spend more quality time with his or her closed ones to show true care.

In conclusion, while many people take up hobbies to become fashionable or trendy in a short-term, Others regard them as an irreplaceable part of their lives.

By way of conclusion, popular hobbies and interest can be more or less common due to many circumstances.

In conclusion, although it's true that some hobbies are just a mere of fashions, there do exist activities that are truly enjoyed by people.

In conclusion, though people's mood and preference varies from time to time and with the influence of environment as the strongest factor, hobbies and activities that convenient are inheritable and modifiable to individuals.

Hi, Simon, My question is not related to the conclusion. I just a little bit concern that is that OK to write the main paragraph only with examples?
In this essay, the first main paragraph talks about children and adults' hobbies using example and the second main paragraph does the same.

Should we develop the topic sentence, then supporting points, and then add example?

Thank you

In conclusion, based on the arguments above, I feel that we can not generalize the statement to all leisure activities after they become fashionable since their longevity truly depends on the nature of the activity and the age of the person interested in it.

Hi Simon, i think there is a little mistake in your essay, squidgies should be changed to squishies. Thank you for posting this sample essay!

Admittedly, as per time period hobbies and fashion interest is automatically change amid people .therefore most of people spent their recreational time on other activities rather than expend money on fashionable thing which interest not live for long time,.according to essay statement I would discuss agree point instead of agree .so I will explain my perspective notions in upcoming paragraphs.


Hi simon
I see that the 2nd paragraph is shorter and is not detailed like the first one.Doesnt my task response get affected as it may fall under band 6(some parts are fully covered than others)

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