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1.8 million children played football in 2008.
2. The figure for young athletic players stands at 2m, more than twice as the one for children who chose swimming as their extracurricular activities in the year of 2008.
3.2010 saw a drastical increase in the number of involvements in athletics, from roughly 1 million to 5 millions.

- In 2008 about 8 million children played
football.
- About a million children liked athletics
less than swimming where approximately 2
million children liked swimming.
- From 2010 to 2012, number of children
played athletics increased rapidly.


1. nearly 8 million children have participated in the football game in 2008 which was the highest of the three categories.

2. The number of children took part in swimming was almost twice in the size compared to the young players who chose Athletics in 2008.

3. There was a dramatic rise in the number of attendants in Athletics division from 1 million to exact 5 million.

The number of children attending in football match were approximately 7.5 million in 2008.

The figures for children participated in swimming were increased from 2.5 million in 2008 to 3.25 million in 2014.

There were an increase of about 3.75 million children taking part in athletics over the period of six year.

1. The number of children who played football stood at around 8 million in 2008
2. In 2008, children taking part in swimming were about twice as many as those who involved in athletics
3. There was a rapid increase in the number of young athletics players between 2010 and 2012.

In 2008, nearly 8 million children had participated in the football game and this trend significantly increased to over 9 million to mark the highest proportion.

About a half million and 2 million children had participated for both athletics and swimming in 2008 respectively. In 2011, both games had same numbers of children participation. While swimming consistently increased by 1.5 million.

After 2010, a drastic change was recorded in athletics game by participating nearly 3 million children.


Ameet/Kaycee:

“Drastic” means “severe” and generally has negative or frightening associations. Drastic measures are not just extreme, they are likely to have harmful side-effects. Don’t use this word or “drastically” in a positive or neutral sense. A drastic rise in temperature should be seen as downright dangerous, not just surprisingly large. Often when people use phrases like “drastic improvement,” they mean “dramatic” instead."

https://brians.wsu.edu/2016/05/25/drastic/

On Google books "drastic increase", when used by native speakers, generally refers to something bad or unwanted. It is too emotional a word for an objective report as required for Task 1.

Thanks Mona for correction!

I have replaced it by a word "dramatic"

1. The glance of the graph reveals that number of children who prefer football was approximately 7.6 millions in 2008 and remained constant the next six years.

2. It is obvious, that football’s participating (~7.6 millions) were considerable higher than swimming (~2.5 millions)and athletics (~ 2.1 millions) during analysis period almost in two times.

3. In contrast to quantity of swimming people which grew moderately from just under 2.5. millions in 2008 to 2.7 in 2014 and number of athletic teens which remains stable that is 2.1 in first 2 years afterward significantly increased up to 5 millions.

Hi Ameet

"In 2008, nearly 8 million children had participated i...."

"About a half million and 2 million children had participated .... in 2008..."

I was wondering why you were using past perfect here and not past simple?

1. In 2008, football was by far the highest number of teenage participants, with over 8 million.

2. At the same year, approximately 2 million children engaged in swimming, while only 0.5 million children practised athletics.

3. Between 2010 and 2012, athletics saw a dramatic increase in the number of children, with around 4.5 million.

Hi,zsófi.

I concur your thought, and I prefer using sample past as well.

The diagram shows the number of children involved in the three different sports.

As can be seen, from 2008 to 2014, football was the most popular sport among the children. The number of children has steadily increased from around 8M to 9M over a 6-year period.

In 2008, around 2.3M children were involved in the swimming sport while the figure in athletics sport was only around 0.5M.

In 2011,Athletics overtook swimming, and became the second popular sports among the children. A significant change can be seen in the numbers of children participated in athletics from around 0.5M in 2008 to around 5M in 2003.

Hi Simon,
1. In 2008, around 8 million children took part in the football course.
2. There were at about 2 million children participated swimming, while the figure for children joined in athletics just about 0,5 million.
3. Over the following 2 years, the number of young people saw a significant increase in athletics participation, reached a peak of 5 million in 2012.

I try to describe as a paragraph based on your questions; and I follow strictly with the figure at a first sentence, and then try to change various kinds of sentence about the 2nd, 3rd. How do you feel that?
Thanks.

Hi Simon,

There is a sample writing test here from official IELTS website: https://www.ielts.org/-/media/pdfs/120430_academic_writing_task_1a.ashx?la=en

Which overview paragraph could be better in your opinion?

It can be seen from the chart that the number of women in further education increased in both part-time and full-time studies over the period shown while only the proportion of male students in full-time education increased gradually and the number of men who studying full-time fluctuated in the same period.

or

It can be seen from the chart that the total number of men studying part-time were more than the proportion of women who receive part-time education over the period shown while the total figures for full-time education were almost same for male and female students.

sena

There is a sample band 6 answer with examiner comments for this chart here:
https://www.ielts.org/-/media/pdfs/113313_ac_sample_scripts.ashx?la=en

There are two or three main trends/features:

1) The number of females has either overtaken or caught up with the number of males.

2) There is a trend toward an increased full-time enrolments.

3) Overall student numbers rose.

So something like:
Overall, there was a trend toward equality in the number of male versus female enrolments. There was also an increasing number and proportion of full-time, as opposed to part-time, students. Total student numbers were significantly higher in the final period.

It might help to start the overview with "overall", and include the word "trend", either as a verb, or noun. I avoided "ratio" in this case as that might imply that the overall total enrolments remained the same, whereas in fact total enrolments increased.

1. More than three quarters of participants chose to play football in 2008.

2.At the beginning, roughly one in four of children participated in swimming,whereas the small minority engaged in athletics.

3.Interestingly, there was a dramatic change in number of children involved in athletics from 2010 to 2012,from less than 2 million up to 5 million.

Football was by far the most popular activity and the number of the participants stayed steady over the 6 years. Between 8 and 9million children involved in every year of the period.

However, there was less than 1 million children interested in athletics compared with 2 million children involved swimming activity in 2008.

Since 2011, the number of children who participated in swimming had rose dramatically to 2.5 million and the figure kept growing to reach 5million in 2012 and remained steady by the end of 2014.

However, swimming activity had a gradual growth and was taken over by athletics. It resulted in the least popular activity in 2014.

1-Football sports was the most played game by the children during the 6-year period around 8 million.

2-In contrast, in 2008, the number of children who participated in swimming is as twice as those played athletics.


3-From 2010 to 2012, the athletics reported a dramatic increase in the number of young participants from around 2.5 million to approximately 5 million, after that there was a slight decrease in the number of kids to just below 5 million.

1- It is obvious that the most popular sport was football with almost 8 million for children in 2008.
2- The number of children who selected swimming and athletics sport was just under 205 millions and approximately 0.5 millions respectively in 2008.
3- between 2010 and 2012, there was a sharp rise by roughly 4.5 millions to 5 millions.

1. in 2008, nearly 8 million children participated in football.
2. 2 million youngster joined swimming in 2008, almost doubled that of athletics.
3. there was a dramatic increased of 3 million in the number of children participated in Athletics between 2010 and 2012.

Kaycee:
"8 million children played football in 2008": was it exactly 8 million?

"young athletic players" would be read as players who are "physically strong and good at sport", rather than referring to "Athletics".

https://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/athletic

2m: write this as "two million" in the exam.

... more than twice as many as those who chose swimming as their extracurricular activities in the year of 2008.

How do we know it is extracurricular?

... the number of involvements[-> of those involved in] in athletics, from roughly 1 million to 5 millions.[-> from roughly one million to five million: (no 's' on numbers) ]

Being 'involved in' is not an exact equivalent to 'participate in ' or 'take part in', as the timekeepers, coaches, ground-keepers are all involved in athletics, just not as competitors.

Kamal

a)"About a million children liked athletics": 'liked' is an over-interpretation: some children may be participating but not actually liking it.

less than swimming where approximately 2
million [-> two million]children liked swimming.

- From 2010 to 2012, number of children
played [grammar error: -> playing ] athletics increased rapidly.

We would normally 'play football', 'do swimming', and 'do athletics'. "Do football" might be more appropriate in the context of making a curriculum choice.

"play athletics" is a poor word choice.

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=play+athletics%2Cdo+athletics%2Cplay+sport%2C+do+sport%2C+play+football%2C+do+football%2C+play+swimming%2C+do+swimming&year_start=1960&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Cplay%20athletics%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cdo%20athletics%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cplay%20sport%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cdo%20sport%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cplay%20football%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cdo%20football%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cplay%20swimming%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cdo%20swimming%3B%2Cc0

Unfortunately the choice between play/do/go is quite idiomatic. "Do" is often used for recreational activities and an individualistic sport where no ball is involved.

Dmitrii

Re: a glance at ...

https://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2016/01/ielts-writing-task-1-dont-use-these-phrases.html

Collocations with 'athletics':

https://www.google.com/search?tbm=bks&ei=io_7W-vBKMforQH6wrvIAQ&q=%22children+in+athletics+programs%22&oq=%22children+in+athletics+programs%22&gs_l=psy-ab.3...18780.20683.0.21388.4.4.0.0.0.0.241.553.0j2j1.3.0....0...1c.1.64.psy-ab..1.0.0....0.1I0YKkCW-e4

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=athletics+players%2Cathletics+*_NOUN%2Cin+athletics+programs%2Ctake+athletics%2Ctaking+athletics%2C+children+taking+athletics&year_start=1960&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t2%3B%2Cathletics%20%2A_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Bathletics%20program_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bathletics%20programs_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bathletics%20director_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bathletics%20department_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bathletics%20team_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bathletics%20coach_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bathletics%20meeting_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bathletics%20meetings_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bathletics%20events_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bathletics%20club_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cin%20athletics%20programs%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Ctake%20athletics%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Ctaking%20athletics%3B%2Cc0

Akter:

Nearly 8 million children have participated [why present perfect? ] in the football game [Which game is being referred to? The world cup final? "the" with a singular noun implies one specific game which is already known to the reader. ] in 2008 which was the highest of the three categories.

2. The number of children who took part in swimming was almost twice in the size compared to of the young players who chose Athletics in 2008.
["Twice the size of" is often used to refer to physical height, rather than a headcount.-> ... was double that of those who chose Athletics ...]

3. There was a dramatic rise in the number of attendants in Athletics division from 1 million to exactly 5 million. [There was a steep rise between 2010 and 2012, yes. Beware of using "dramatic", as Task 1 is meant to be an objective, dry and unbiased report. ]
['attendants' (like flight attendants) are there to help, assist, and provide service. They are not competitors or competing in a sport. 'Attendants' at an athletics meeting brings to mind the coaching staff, organizers, paramedics, and perhaps even the spectators, rather than those actually competing. ]

Hi Dmitrii

"7.6 millions" -> 7.6 million (no 's' in English)

'teens' is an informal word; in IELTS use 'teenagers'. Secondly, who says they were teenagers? It says children, (presumably at school) therefore 5-18 year-olds.

The paraphrases must be accurate: if in doubt, just use the label from the graph.

Dmitrii

It is obvious, [NO comma here in English ]that football’s participating (~7.6 millions) were considerable higher than swimming -> that those participating in football (about 7.6 million) outnumbered those doing swimming ....

It is okay to use brackets in one sentence only in Task 1, but examiners are looking for more the ability to include the figures in multiple ways, and so demonstrate your range and flexibility in the use of English.

Re: "It is obvious that" - possibly borderline impolite, or too argumentative.

'Whenever you want to say "it is obvious" you should read it as "you dummy" and see if it still seems reasonable.'

Probably better to avoid this in IELTS, and substitute something less finger-pointing like: the graph shows that ....

jb

1. In the year 2012, the number of participators Athletics reached a peak of its, with 5 millions children.
2. In 2008, while around 0.5 millions children took part in Swimming, the figure for Football was much higher with 8 millions children joining.
3. There was a steady increase in the number of children who spend their time for Swimming.

1. There is a constant rise in the number of attendants in swimming between the period of 2008 and 2014, established at approximately 2.5 millions children.
2. Apparently, the figure of kids participated in football was as twice as the the number of young athletes in 2014.
3. As can be seen in the graph, the figure of children enjoyed athletics experienced a exponential increase to around 5 millions from 2010 to 2012.

paul

'M' is a Roman numeral meaning one thousand. In IELTS it is best to write it out as 'million'.

Here is the Daily Telegraph style guide:

'Spell out numbers below 10: one, nine, first fourth, 17th, 123rd, 999. One million, two million, 10 million, 999 million. Give broken millions in full only when it is misleading to decimalise to two places; 2,736,123 but prefer 2.74 million. If possible leave a thin space between the number and the "million".'

... football was the most popular sport among the children. The number of children playing has steadily increased from around eight to nine million over a six-year period.

In 2008, around 2.3 million children were involved in the swimming sport while the figure in athletics sport was only around 0.5M half a million.

In 2011, Athletics overtook swimming, and became the second most popular sports among the children. A significant change can be seen in the numbers of children who participated in athletics, with a rise from around 0.5M half a million in 2008 to around five million in 2003.

arch1001face

Refer Daily Telegraph style guide above.

1. In 2008, around 8 eight million children took part in the football course->football courses. (in general: there is not one specific course as 'the' plus a singular would imply.)

2. There were at about 2 two million children who participated swimming, while the figure for children who joined in athletics was just about 0,5 half a million.

[The decimal point in English is a full stop/period NOT a comma: sometimes a comma is used to mark off thousands, so 3,141 would be three thousand one hundred and forty one. Using a comma for a decimal point leads to huge errors !]

3. Over the following 2 two years, the number of young people participating in athletics saw a significant increase in athletics participation, reached reaching a peak of 5 five million in 2012.

Oley

->a small minority

Shaza

Between 8 and 9million children were involved in every year of the period.

However, there was were less than 1 one million children interested in athletics compared with 2 million children involved in swimming activity in 2008.

Since 2011, the number of children who participated in swimming had rose [Why past perfect? Past simple is the default.] dramatically to 2.5 million and the figure kept growing to reach 5 five million in 2012 and remained steady by the end of 2014.

However, swimming activity had a gradual growth and was taken over overtaken by athletics. It resulted in became the least popular activity in 2014.

Angie

1. in In 2008, nearly 8 eight million children participated in football.
2. 2 Two million youngster children joined swimming in 2008, almost doubled double that of athletics.
3. there There was a dramatic increased increase of 3 three million in the number of children who participated in Athletics between 2010 and 2012.

Capitalization at the beginning of each and every sentence matters!

"Steep" increase would be more objective and thus better for Task 1. 'Dramatic' is emotive.

'youngster' is an old-fashioned word.
https://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/youngster

1:The number of children who experienced football sport was almost 8 Millions, which had a higher level.
2:Athletics sport trend had the less popular in the start point compared to that of swimming with approximately 1 MILLIONS and just under 2.5 Millions respectively in 2008.
3:There was a significant increase from nearly 1 millions to 5 Millions between 2010 and 2012.

Maivu:

Numbers do not take plurals: five million (no 's')

"Participator" is comparatively rare, and the phrase only occurs once on Google books:

"Although not an active participator in Athletics ..."

https://www.google.com/search?tbm=bks&ei=vIn8W5umLIzEvwTJqZ_IBw&q=%22participator+in+athletics%22&oq=%22participator+in+athletics%22&gs_l=psy-ab.3...58596.61144.0.61516.10.10.0.0.0.0.193.1290.0j8.8.0....0...1c.1.64.psy-ab..2.1.175...33i10k1.0.gQU9tcGueZY

1.In the year 2012, [ 'In the year 19/20xx' is used for dramatic/epic effect in songs and melodramatic writing: "In the year 2525, if man is still alive, if woman can survive, they may find ...". Do not use it in IELTS.]

...the number of participants in Athletics reached a peak of its, with...

2.In 2008, while around half a million children took part in Swimming, the figure for Football was much higher with eight million children.

3 There was a steady increase in the number of children who spent their time for Swimming.

Charlotte Ho

See comments re "attendants" by Oleg

Charlotte Ho and fanan
"kids" is informal: do not use in IELTS.

Colette,
Thanks for your help!
And I'd like to ask you a question.

On Simon writing task 1, I saw hundreds of times to write number instead of word ( 8 million >< eight million ) Do you just refer to ' Daily Telegraph ' as alternative choice or must be written this style?

Thanks.

1.It is clear that football was by far the most popular sport with about eight millions children participated in 2008.
2.In 2008, the number of children took part in swimming was close to two millions, which was almost quadruple the figures of Athletics around 0.5 millions.
3.Between 2010 and 2012, Athletics saw a biggest rise from roughly 0.5 millions to 5 millions.

arch1001face

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Manual_of_Style/Dates_and_numbers#Numbers

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Manual_of_Style

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Style_guide

There are quite a number of style guides for English, and they are mostly similar. There is no style guide mentioned in the public marking scheme for IELTS, although the phrase "some awareness of style" does occur in the context of vocabulary choice.

However, Task 1 is a quasi-academic report, and so writing out short numbers in full would be a good style choice/alternative for this task, although at the end of the day it is unlikely to be critical to your score.

1. About 8million children played soccer in 2008.
2. While the figure for child athletes started off at 0.5million in 2008,2.5million kids were involved in swimming that same year.
3.The number of youngsters who participated in athletics rose sharply by 4.5million between 2010 and 2012 thereby, overriding the figure for children swimmers at 2.5million within the same period.

1.In 2008 about 8 million persons played football.
2.While around 2 million people were actively involved in swimming in the same year, there were almost 1 million athletes, the lowest among the respected categories.
3. The number of athletic participants increased dramatically between 2010 and 2012, where along with swimming players it reached 2.5 million by 2011.

"Athlete" does not necessarily mean someone who engages in track and field events: this is a chiefly British usage.

It often means simply someone who is very good at a sport in general.

https://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/athlete

https://www.thefreedictionary.com/athlete

https://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/athlete
https://dictionary.cambridge.org/dictionary/learner-english/athlete

https://en.oxforddictionaries.com/definition/athlete

Colette,
Thanks for your recommendations.

Honestly it took me sometime to read and I got a little bit confused as well, but I also got a few ideas that I have never searched for it before.
Humbly I think I should work harder at my case ^^.

TASK 1 IN REAL LIFE:

https://assets.publishing.service.gov.uk/government/uploads/system/uploads/attachment_data/file/539029/Taking_Part_2015_16_Child_Report_-_FINAL.pdf

Well worth reading: lots of real life reporting. For example:
"There were a number of gender differences in participation at the level of individual sports. Boys in both age groups (5-10 and 11-15) were more likely to have played football than girls, while girls were more likely to have done gymnastics, trampolining or climbing frame activities."

"In 2015/16, 80.7 per cent of all children reported that they had participated in some form of competitive sport in the last 12 months. More than three quarters had taken part in competitive sport in school (76.9 per cent), and over a third had taken part in competitive sport outside school (36.2 per cent). These figures have remained stable since 2011/12 (the first full year this question was asked)."

Note 1) that "competitive sport" is distinguished from non-competitive sport, and "in-school" from "outside-school".
2) the word "kids" appears nowhere in the report.

More examples of wording:
a) Amongst all children (5-15 year olds), 88.9 per cent had taken part in sport in the four weeks prior to interview, a similar proportion to 89.9 per cent in 2008/09 and 87.2 per cent in 2014/15.

b) Among children aged 5-10 years old, 83.5 per cent had taken part in sport outside school, a similar proportion to 84.5 per cent in 2008/09 and 81.1 per cent in 2014/15.

c) The proportion of 11-15 year olds who took part in sport in the four weeks prior to the interview remained stable at 95.8 per cent in 2015/16, compared to 96.0 per cent in 2008/09 and 94.9 per cent in 2014/15.

d) In 2015/16, 80.7 per cent of 5-15 year old children reported that they had participated in some form of competitive sport in the last 12 months. Over three quarters had taken part in competitive sport in school (76.9 per cent), whilst over a third had taken part outside school (36.2 per cent). These figures have been stable since 2011/12, which was the first full year this question was asked.

Note that throughout "per cent" is written as two words.

There are more relevant real life examples here:
https://www.bls.gov/spotlight/2017/sports-and-exercise/home.htm

The more real life Task 1 reading you do, the better your answers will be. "You can't write it till you know it."

Hi Simon!
1. In 2008, around 8 million children took part in football
2. Meanwhile, the number of kids was interested in swimming was higher than the figure for Athlete, at about 2 million and 0.5 million respectively.
3. From 2010 to 2012, there was a sharp increase in the number of children participated Athlete, by about 4 million.

Re:
https://assets.publishing.service.gov.uk/government/uploads/system/uploads/attachment_data/file/539029/Taking_Part_2015_16_Child_Report_-_FINAL.pdf

"participated in" occurs 20 times
participate: 23 times
participating in:9
take part in: 7
took part in: 12
engage(d) in: 5 times, but always in relation to arts and culture, not sport.
attend(ed): 10 times, but never in relation to sport
involve(d) in: zero

re:
https://www.bls.gov/spotlight/2017/sports-and-exercise/home.htm

The phrases used are:

"participation in"
"participation rates"
"engage/ed/ing in sports/exercise/activities "
"participate/ing/d in sports "
"accounted for"

Neither text shies away from repeating these verbs multiple times.

Julie Đỗ
-> the number of children participating in Athletics,

Mila
-> with about eight million children participating in 2008.

The number of children who participation in athletics, with 2 million in 2008, saw a dramatically increase between 2010 and 2012, to 5 millions, following this figure slightly fell to about 4.9 millions in the end of period.

HARK

The number of children who participated in athletics was two million in 2008, but saw a dramatically increase between 2010 and 2012, to five millions. Following this, the figure fell slightly to about 4.9 millions at the end of period.

Thank you,Manuel.

Mona:

I’m really appreciate for your corrections,thank you!

Kaycee

Thanks, @Oleg. I owe you for your immediate correction.

1) In 2008, there were over 8 million children played football.

2) In 2008, there were 1 million children took part in athletics, while the figure of swimming was doubled.

3) The figure of athletics rose dramatically from 2010 to 2012.

Miyako

"the figure of swimming was doubled."

A) Using the passive here ('was doubled') suggests that someone or something caused the increase.

-> the figure for swimming doubled.

Compare:
i) The sun rose.
ii) The sun was raised. (Nonsense! It rises of its own accord.)
iii) Interest rates were raised. (This does happen when the central bank deliberately intervenes and raises the base rate.)
iv) Interest rates rose. (By themselves, from natural market forces.)

B)
Referring to:
https://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/figure

'Figure' is normally used in the plural to refer to numbers, as opposed to money.

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Check out the graphs, and it becomes evident that the phrase needed is 'the figure for'.

Although Simon does use this phrase, please be aware that "the figure" might also mean "the diagram" or "the graph" in scientific writing. I have rewritten to avoid using this phrase as follows:

2) -> In 2008, approximately one million children took part in athletics, and about twice that number in swimming.

3) -> The corresponding number for athletics rose steeply from 2010 to 2012.

Correction: 3) The corresponding figure for athletics...

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=the+number+of+*+is%2Cthe+figure+for+*+is%2Cthe+number+for+*+is%2C+the+corresponding+figure+for&year_start=1800&year_end=2000&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t2%3B%2Cthe%20number%20of%20%2A%20is%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Bthe%20number%20of%20which%20is%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthe%20number%20of%20cases%20is%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthe%20number%20of%20these%20is%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthe%20number%20of%20them%20is%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthe%20number%20of%20inhabitants%20is%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthe%20number%20of%20whom%20is%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthe%20number%20of%20observations%20is%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthe%20number%20of%20members%20is%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthe%20number%20of%20chromosomes%20is%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthe%20number%20of%20species%20is%3B%2Cc0%3B.t2%3B%2Cthe%20figure%20for%20%2A%20is%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Bthe%20figure%20for%20which%20is%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthe%20figure%20for%20women%20is%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthe%20figure%20for%20men%20is%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthe%20figure%20for%20this%20is%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthe%20figure%20for%20Japan%20is%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthe%20figure%20for%20India%20is%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthe%20figure%20for%20Sweden%20is%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthe%20figure%20for%20whites%20is%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthe%20figure%20for%20England%20is%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthe%20figure%20for%20Britain%20is%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cthe%20number%20for%20which%20is%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cthe%20corresponding%20figure%20for%3B%2Cc0

1) The figure shows 7.5 million children participated in football since 2008.
2) In 2008 one million children participated in
athletics whereas in swimming the ratio doubled.
3) In 2014 the athletics ratio increased upto 5 million children.

Approximately 8 million pupils take participation in football
In beginning of 2008 two million children participated in swimming however,only one million children took participate in athletic
A dramatic increase was observe in athletic sport that was nearly up to 5 million

Humera

1)'Since 2008' would mean from then to the present day, and require present perfect.

2) ratio is the relationship between two numbers, eg. 2:1, 4:2, 100:50 37:18.5. These all have the same ratio. -> and about half that number in swimming.

3) In 2014 the athletics the number of participants increased to 5 million children.

Ajay

-> took part in

-> At the beginning of ... took part in athletics.

-> was observed

The graph below shows children's sports preferences between 2008 to 2012. Clearly, football is the favourite activity, because since 2008 about eight million pupils have played soccer.
In 2008 the second most popular activity is swimming, as twice as those played athletics (two and a half million and only half millions people respectively).
However, over the years 2010 and 2012, the last activity has increased nearly up to five million.

@ LIsa

The graph below shows children's sports preferences between 2008 and 2012. Clearly, football is the favourite activity, because since 2008 about eight million pupils [nowhere does it state that the figures relate only to in-school activities] have played [present perfect here implies that the numbers in some way represents cumulative results over the entire period, which is wrong]soccer.

In 2008 the second most popular activity is [Is 2008 past,present, or future?] swimming, which was twice as popular as athletics (two and a half million compared to only half a million<> respectively).

However, over the years from 2010 to 2012, the last activity [Yes but what was the last activity? Need to spell it out. ] has increased up to nearly five million.

"Pupil": as the graphs below demonstrate this is less used outside the UK, and perhaps becoming unfashionable. I would be wary of using it in IELTS.

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=best+student%2Cbest+pupil&year_start=1800&year_end=2008&corpus=0&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Cbest%20student%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cbest%20pupil%3B%2Cc0

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=elementary+students%2Celementary+pupils&year_start=1800&year_end=2008&corpus=0&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Celementary%20students%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Celementary%20pupils%3B%2Cc0

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=pupil%3Aeng_gb_2012%2Cpupils%3Aeng_gb_2012%2Cpupils%3Aeng_us_2012%2C+pupil%3Aeng_us_2012%2Cstudent%2Cstudents&year_start=1800&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Cpupil%3Aeng_gb_2012%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cpupils%3Aeng_gb_2012%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cpupils%3Aeng_us_2012%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cpupil%3Aeng_us_2012%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cstudent%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cstudents%3B%2Cc0

1、In 2018, the numbers of children participating in football,swimming and athletics activity were around 8 million, 2 million and 0.5 million respectively.

2、The number of amateurs for swimming was almost four times that of children choosing football as priority.

3、The period from 2010 to 2012 witnessed the highest increase in number of athletics among the three sports.

Claire

The word "amateurs" is usually used to contrast with "professionals": neither seems relevant here.

The meaning of "priority" revolves more around importance, rather than preference:

https://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/priority

"Athletics" does not usually mean people.

In 2008,nearly 7.5million children were interested in playing football.
Around one third of the children prefered to participate in swimming and athletics when compared to the number of children involved in football
There was a steep climb up in athelets of around 5 million in 2014 whereas there were a gradual raise of about 2.5 to 3 million children prefered to participate in football and swimming
Overall,as per thr given data, football enthralled a huge number (over 10 million) of children from 2008 to 2014.

In 2008, nearly 8 million children played football. Around 2 million children participated in swimming, this number rose double in 2014. There was a sharp increase from about 0.3 million (in 2008) to 5 million (in 2012) kids took part in athletics.

(1)In 2008, around 8 million children participated in football.

(2)In 2008, the number of children taking part in swimming was nearly 2.3 million, almost twice the number of athletics(1 million).

(3)Between 2010 and 2012, the participation rate of Athletics rose steeply, from one to over five million respectively.

1. In 2008, the number of children playing football started high figure at well over 7.5 million and remained steadily until 2010. Then, there was a slight increase to just under 8 million in 2012 and remained static in 2014.

2. Swimming had just under 2.5 million children joined in 2008 while athletics begun at under 1 million children in 2008.

3. There was an upward trend in the number of children participating swimming between 2010 and 2012, meanwhile, the proportion of children's participation in athletics soared sharply at around 5 million until 2012 and maintained steadily at just under 5 million in 2014

1. In 2008, football with around 8 millions attendees was the most favorite sport among the children.

2. In 2008, nearly 2 millions of children's favorite sport was swimming, while this figure for athletics was the lowest number, with approximately half of a millions participants.

3. Between 2010 and 2012 the number of attendees who chose athletics rose dramatically to a peak of 5 millions.

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