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It is true that people work hard in study and job.while work hard give you good result in economically, also effect your health.

Topic senator para 1.

Some people work hard

- good grade at education
- good position in their job
- give better opportunities to progress
- financial freedom
For example. Student get good grade and get admissions in higher study where his dream cum thrue.
For job person give higher position and respect

It is always not good to work hard

It effect your health
Nor getting enough rest, lead to health diseases
Distract from friend and family

In conclusion, working hard lead to financial freedom where as it's had also negative impact on personal and social life

Pl simon look T above plan and idea and advice me to improve

A number of people are diligent worker because of their personal views. In my opinion, It is depend on the concerning person's ability but too much hard work can be counterproductive.

Some people want to get higher position in the Society in order to get honor and money. They compete each other for a position in an institution and thereby sometimes thousands of job seekers or candidates deliberately work hard to secure this position.

Dear Simon, the proposed introduction is not reflecting education and employment.



A number of people are diligent workers OR Some people are more diligent in their approach to work because of their personal views/values/work ethic/cultural background and beliefs.

"It is depend " -> it depends on...
Exactly what depends on? The referencing is not clear to me.

"the concerning person's ability" ->the ability of the person concerned.
Certain adjectives are normally placed after the noun:


"higher position": position here is a singular countable noun and therefore requires either "a" or "the" or some other determiner such as "each/every/this/that/my..."

"in the Society": which society are you talking about? If you mean "society in general" then "society" (like quite a number of other words) becomes uncountable and needs not "the". Meaning #4 here:


It is safer to avoid using "get" if possible in the exam, as it is often considered less formal. Substitute words like: obtain/achieve/become/receive/gain.

"They compete with each other... "

The phrase "in an institution" might well refer to a hospital for the mentally unwell. Maybe "with a particular employer".


The use of "thereby" does not quite fit the context. Consequently?

Here are some (left-wing) quotes from "work ethic" on Wikipedia:

"The work ethic has become obsolete. It is no longer true that producing more means working more, or that producing more will lead to a better way of life..This is especially true as regards our needs for air, water, space, silence, beauty, time and human contact."

"Socialists believe that the concept of "hard work" is meant by capitalists to delude the working class into becoming loyal servants to the elite,..."

Given that "42 people hold as much wealth as the 3.7 billion who make up the poorest half of the world’s population", hard work is just a myth: mostly "hard work" equals "exploitation".


Maybe all the hard work put into passing IELTS in the (mistaken?) belief that it is the gateway to a better life - maybe that is just part of being exploited.

It is true that some people are hard working and efficient while others do not wish to perform their highest. Earning more and reaching of goals would be reasons for this differences. However I trust that too much hard working will be effect to sever drop of certain productivity and badly impact to personal healthy

This is introduction and please advice to improve

hi sunita,
really appreciate your response and for the positive feed back and correction on various topics on ielts .i am going to ask about the occupational english test,do you come across or do you have any experience like where can we get the materials, books etc for practice of the occupational english test.

It is true that some people are hard-working and committed while others prefer not to be persistent.There could be a number of reasons for different attitudes.While I agree that hard-work plays a key role in success and high achievement,I believe that it could be harmful and even unhealthy.

Generally, some people tried to do the best in their job and be smarther than other.There could be a number of reasons to support this fact. In my opinion, working-hard is the one of personal way to improve their qualitiy but i believe sometimes this attitude could be harmful and even unhealthy.


We can mention education and employment later in the essay, but we don't need to mention these words in the introduction - we can paraphrase more "loosely".



Thanks for your help, and for sharing those interesting views.

When I write my essay, I'll probably express some typical "traditional" views about hard work. However, in reality I agree with the ideas that you shared: Unfortunately, many of those who work the hardest in this world are being exploited.

I also see the way that the "hard work ethic" is used by the media and politicians to judge and manipulate people.

But I don't fancy the challenge of expressing these ideas in an IELTS essay!

Thanks. I know very little about OET, but there are details and materials available at:


Mr Simon:
You are absolutely right, just keep it simple in the exam. But hard work is such a good thing when someone else is doing it for you. As I lounge beside the pool, I am always so grateful for the people being exploited in my father's sweatshops..


It is true that some people are hard-working and diligent while others prefer not to push themselves, and there could be several reasons for these different attitudes. In my view, a positive work ethic is desireable up to a point, however too much work can be counterproductive and even unhealthy.

At the present time, the rising cost of living has been one of the main reason to encourage many individuals to work harder in order to gain extra bonus in their salary. This might occur due to significant number of companies have been implementing this method in order to improve the performance of their employees. On top of that, people might want to achieve high position in the job. This could be beneficial in relation to pride as they could boast themselves to the public. Finally, the other reason might be self-satisfactory as there are types of people who are very dedicated to their job.

In spite of the reasons above, people might argue being either hardworking or diligent have nothing to do in terms of job satisfactory if an individual is not comfortable or happy in what they are doing. As they need to undergo various inconvenience ranging from extra work hours or even to be delegated huge responsibilities as they are considered trustyworthy by the head-officers or even the colleagues. This also may lead to implementing the unhealthy lifestyle, which most would prevent.

In conclusion, being a top performance employer might offer significant benefit in terms of pride and the amount of money received monthly. However, I believe it is necessary to also look at other aspects such as health and the delightment of working.

@ Dilini

Earning more and reaching of goals would be reasons for this differences. ->
Striving to earn more and reach one's goals would account for these differences.

However I trust that too much hard working will be effect to sever drop of certain productivity and badly impact to personal healthy. ->

I am sure, however, that persistent/continual overwork leads to a severe drop in productivity and has an adverse impact on personal health.

British Council warn against starting too many sentences with a linking adverb, so it is safer to move "however" along the sentence.

desirable (spelling)

one of the main reasons

to gain receive a extra bonus in on (top of) their salary.


"Bonus" already implies something extra: check in a dictionary.

a significant number

a high position in the job -> promotion

"beneficial in relation to pride as they could boast themselves to the public." -> boost their standing/social status in the community

self-satisfactory ->greater intrinsic job satisfaction


either hardworking or diligent have nothing to do in terms of job satisfactory -> neither hard work nor diligence have anything to do with/have no impact on overall job satisfaction

As they may need to undergo accept/handle/suffer various inconveniences

lead to implementing the unhealthy lifestyle -> lead to/make for an unhealthy lifestyle

which most would prevent avoid/not choose.

being a top performance employer employee

the delightment of working.-> overall quality of life and contentment.

There are various reasons why some people work harder than their peers, and there may be both positive and negative outcomes.

Some people are driven by early experiences in grinding poverty. One can meet people who grew up in a refugee camp, yet with determination and hard work succeeded in owning their own factory, home, BMWs and so on. Others often have little choice but to slave away at a job near the city, sometimes working seven days a week and sleeping in the factory, because they have family, parents, grandparents, siblings relying on them for support. This is sometimes the case for children of the rural poor in some countries such as India or China. Yet others have some degree of intrinsic motivation: junior doctors, for example, work long hours and brutal shifts because they are dedicated. They could obtain more lucrative work with easier hours elsewhere.

That hard work is all good is just a myth, mostly it equates to exploitation. This is the prima facie explanation for the massive inequality in the distribution of wealth and living standards in the world today. Apparently, just the forty or so wealthiest people in the world own and possess as much as half rest of the world put together, which suggests there is no direct causal link between hard work and success. Sometimes it is all wasted. For instance in the 1920s the pioneer heroes of the Soviet Union overwintered in sub-zero temperatures to found the city of Magnitogorsk. Unfortunately they built the city on the wrong side of the river and in the succeeding decades thousands died of industrial pollution until eventually the city was relocated. But governments (and capitalist parasites alike) continue to foster a strong work ethic because it suits their purpose.

Both intrinsic and extrinsic motivational factors play a role in people's attitudes at work, but overworking is not per se a sure-fire gateway to success.

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Hello simon i need your help can i send you my essays and can you give me useful advices

i am freshman at this site

Thankyou very much @Oleg!

"Generally, some people tried to do the best in their job and be smarther than other."

"tried": use present simple to when generalizing, that is, past-present-future unspecified.

"do their best" does not exactly mean "put more effort into their work than others".

"work smarter" is often contrasted with "work harder" as it implies working more intelligently without any extra effort.

others !

One possibility is to start:
Some people do put more ....

Using "do put" here suggests that we are conceding the fact as true. Or perhaps "do indeed put". "Generally" is not needed as it is implied by the verb.

"their quality" (note spelling): what does "their" refer to - people or reasons. Not clear. Did you mean "their quality of life", or "job prospects", or "career prospects", or...?

Hi Simon,I found you used 'could be' and 'can be' in your example. I am confused about these two , could tell me when I should use could and when to use can? Thank you.


In the above context, "can be" suggests something is definitely possible, whereas "could be" indicates it might be possible (or true).

To a some extent these meanings overlap for practical purposes.

https://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/can (meaning #4)

(meaning #2)

In general, looking at the pairs can/could, will/would, shall/should, and may/might, the second verb in the pair is often used where the idea is more hypothetical or tentative.

It is true that in each system either educational or vocational, there are those who willing to work harder than others and they all have their own justifications. I personally prefer working wisely and efficiently rather than hard, which might have an adverse impact on one's health and well being.

It is certainly true that a lot of people are hard working while others do not work as hard as they could. While I understand that there are various reasons for these different attitudes towards work, in my opinion, a good work style is to be able to manage work and personal life accordingly.


"to be able to manage work and personal life accordingly": perhaps "to manage work life balance well/properly/appropriately".



Ah, I see they have a hyphen: work-life balance.

Is it ok to not mention people that prefer not working hard and the different work attitude in the introduction?
I didn't get it why we need to mention the counter attitude of work, there is no cue in the question that we need to talk about it.

In education and employment, some people work harder than others. Why do some people work harder? Is it always a good thing to work hard?

It is true that some people are working harder on their education and career while others are not. The main reason is the hard working person has goal and dreamers, as well as idlers, do not know what they really want in their life. Obviously, people have something to pursue and fight for themselves is always a good thing.

In my opinion, there are three main factors make people working hard these days. First of all is the parental pressure, they do not want to disappoint their family. For example, the parent always wants their kids could become a doctor, lawyer or some high position job. There out, it is because of the changing of society in the world. We are living in globalization century, life is getting harder and harder. If people give up themselves, somedays they will be left behind. Last reason is they work for their future, their family. Life is unfair, some people were born in wealth, but others are not. But they can not control it, the only thing that they can do is admit it, fight for their future and hopefully one day they could get a reward.

Hard working is a good character, everybody needs to work hard, play hard. People who work tremendously should be honored and be a good example to the others. Likes Jacky Chan, Obama, Jack Ma etc... These people are the proofs for us to believe that if we work hard likes them, we can become them either.

To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that working hard is the main key to approach our dream. there are no short cuts to success, you want something, just do it and make it happen.

Kelvin Ta

"people are working harder" -> people work harder (present simple more usual when generalizing).

"the hard working person" -> hard-working people (using "the"+singular is comparatively rare, academic/formal, may be misunderstood, and is better used for inherent characteristics)



"person has a goal" or: The main reason is that hard-working people have specific goals, whereas dreamers and idlers do not ...

"people have something to pursue and fight for themselves is always a good thing." -> it is always a good thing when people ....

"a good thing": "thing" is a very vague word, and might suggest a lack of vocabulary. Perhaps something like: motivation and goal-setting are the key drivers for success.

" there are three main factors that make people working hard these days."

"First of all is the parental pressure, they do not want to disappoint their family." We mean "parental pressure" in general here, so no article, uncountable. There is also a comma-splice. Using "first of all" makes it sound as if parental pressure is the most important. Either: The key factor is parental pressure. Or: Firstly, there is parental pressure: they do not ....

Kelvin Ta

"the parent always wants their kids could become a doctor, ". Again, it is usually safer to use the plural with no article when generalizing a countable noun. "Kids" does appear in fiction, and self-help books aimed at the general public, but would be uncommon in more formal/academic writing. It is much safer to use "children" in IELTS.
-> parents always want their children to become doctors, lawyers, or some other highly paid or high-end job.

"There out, it ...world" -> The second factor is that we live in a changing society, a changing world.

"globalization century" -> in an age of globalization

"If people give up themselves"

"The Last reason is.."

"they could get a reward."-> they could be rewarded for their efforts/ their efforts could pay off. Avoid "get" in formal writing if possible.

Kelvin Ta

"Hard working is a good character,"-> Not being afraid of hard work is a positive character trait ....

"work tremendously" -> work long and diligently

"These people are the proofs for us to believe that if we work hard likes them, we can become them either." -> These people are an inspiration to us all, and living proof that hard work pays dividends.

"To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that" -> In conclusion, ...

"the main key to approach our dream" -> the key to success/ the main key to achieving our dreams

...short cuts to success. If you want something...



Some of the community prefer working harder; however, rest of it just accomplish what they have to. In order to be successful and self-satisfaction people may choose to work harder. I believe doing great business with quite effort is the nice thing.
There is a non-negligible difference between people. Some of the population enjoy working harder because of several reasons. Psychological pleasure is the severe impact. For example, when people are flattered with their success, they feel boosted and they want to keep pace. A person can enjoy with working harder. It can occupy their mind so that get rid of real problems that they have. Some people do not want to add another problem to their problems and they work harder because they know that if they don not work enough, employers will not be happy about situation. Mobbing can press people to work harder, and employees feel like it is an obligation to try more.
The contribution of working harder on peoples’ life is not open to debate, for this reason people have to work harder. Great art piece like mona lisa can only be created with the hard study. Although some people think that art pieces can only be exist with skills, i believe that it can be succeeded with working hard. Also, people may feel that they are self-satisfied with the job they have done. Another satisfaction is feeling like deserving the money they get as a salary and they feel clear conscious.
In conclusion, Even though people work hard because of psychological reasons and mobbing, it is a good thing to do and it allows people to have a clear conscious and to generate quality staffs.

1) Checkout the precise meaning of "mobbing" here:

2) "Some of the community": which community is being referred to? Alternatives to "some people" are few, but include "some individuals", "There are those who..., while others... ".

3) "In order to be successful and self-satisfaction improve/increase job-satisfaction "

4) "with quite effort" -> as a result of making conscious/considerable/special efforts

5) "is the nice thing": be ware of using "thing" in your IELTS essay: it is better to find a more precise word. Perhaps: "can be very rewarding".

6) "non-negligible difference": this phrase seems to be mainly used in a scientific context. More common would be "substantial/significant difference".

7) " between people. Some enjoy.... Others .... Yet others .... ": alternative constructions.

8) "Psychological pleasure is the severe impact plays a key role/is a major factor/has a profound effect on behavior." "Severe" implies something bad.

a) "A person can enjoy with working harder."

b) "It can occupy their mind so that get rid of real problems that they have." -> It can provide a break (distract them) from their personal/private/financial worries/problems/issues (in their personal life).

c) "about situation": "situation" is countable here and needs an article.

d) "Mobbing can press people .." -> Social pressure can make people work harder.

e) "contribution" is followed by "to": The contribution of working harder to peoples’ life lives....

f) "Great art piece": singular and countable, so needs an article.

g) "art pieces can only be exist created with skills," -> art pieces need special skill and talent to create them, I believe hard work can be equally effective instead.


h) "Self-satisfied" generally has a pejorative connotation:
-> People may feel immense job-satisfaction as a result of their efforts.

i) " they feel clear conscious." -> they have a clear conscience ?

j) " generate quality staffs." Not sure what is meant in the context.


Thank you for all your corrections. :)

h) Better: people may gain immense job-satisfaction from their efforts.


h) Even better: people may derive immense job-satisfaction from their efforts.




It is no secret that some people have the tendency to work diligently while others tend to live in a more slow-paced and less hardworking way. For people having these two distinctive attitude, they both have a variety of valid reasons to support their view points. In my opinion, being hardworking is a good virtue to a certain extent, but too much of it can be disturbing to others and has a negative effect on one's health.

Some people work hard while others not ,those who are work hardly they are become a good position also they can live good standard level in their future ,mainly they will escape from the poverty .in case of students ,won't study hardly they will failure the exam

It is true that some people are hard-working and diligent while others prefer not to push themselves, and there could be various reasons for these different attitudes. In my view, a positive work ethic is desirable up to a point, but too much hard work can be counterproductive and even unhealthy.

For one thing, diligent people desire to have good performances and achieve excellent marks during the learning time so as to facilitate their profiles to apply in a reputable company. In addition, adults are passionate and enthusiastic with their favorite jobs with a view to realizing their dreams. For example, without being well trained for a long time and interning in several jobs in hospitals, one is less likely to become a professional and skillful doctor. Also, being dedicated to the job than others helps them acquire a good opportunity to make higher progress as well as be independent in finance. Therefore, there are an increasing number of people willing to work harder in both education and employment.

Working too much also brings people the counterproductive effect in some aspects. It is apparently true that people have to face up with healthy problems. That is to say, officers, who continuously sit in front of the computer screen for many hours, are prone to the poor eyesight and pain in bone in the long run. Besides, there is little or even no pastime for relaxing, entertaining, or getting involved in outdoor activities with family or fellows, which consequently leads to distract from loved people, easily get depressed and probably greatly reduce the quality of work in case of overworking. There is no doubt that hard-working people tend to confront some physical and mental situations than others.

To sum up, personally, there are many people devote time and energy than others in order to gain their personal purpose, yet associated with its drawbacks.

It is true that, there some people that working hard in education and employment while , others do not do similarly. I personally believe working hard is acceptable principle intrinsically to the extent that do not damage health.
According to psychological views that dispute over the hard working, there are some reason for this. First of all, there exist a direct relation between hard working samples and personalities. Psychologists believe that, it is one of human characteristics that caused people to work hard. Like for instance, Japanese people used to work hard in their activities and in opposite side in the middle east, people do not work much hard and they waste time and resources. Also the feeling of backwardness could be viewed as an another reason. The people who feel retardation, always try hard to make achievements in order to reach their goals.
Undoubtedly, working hard is not bad on its own and it is acceptable principle that, it is necessary to make tremendous efforts in order to achieve goals. It is hard to be excellent and harder to stay thus working hard is essential. However, according to the results of researches, working hard may be harmful and people who work hard will deal with the numerous diseases caused by hard working. Mental perturbation or digestive diseases will be resulted in since to an increase in working.
In conclusion, as I mentioned above there are some reason to work hard and it is not good things if it would damage to health. Although the negative sides of working hard like psychological views, in my point of view it is necessary to work hard.

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