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Sir,

I think that method is very useful. It makes you create an argument to start with. Even though I admit that I can't come up with an idea right then and there. Thank you for the tip sir.


Real opinion:

It is true that sports programmes have become so popular recently. While some people may blame these programmes for the declining level of health of the young who prefer to be spectators rather than the participants, I completely disagree with the idea that these programmes have negatively affected these people's health.

Easiest Opinion:

It is true that sports programmes have become so popular recently and some people blame these programmes for the declining level of health of the young who prefer to be spectators rather than participants. Whilst I agree with this idea, I also believe that there are a number of other reasons, which should also be considered, for this worrying trend.


Dear Simon,
I'd like to ask a question about a writing topic on your blog quite a long time ago. Here it is:

"Wednesday, November 09, 2011
People nowadays work hard to buy more things. This has made our lives generally more comfortable, but many traditional values and customs have been lost and this is a pity.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?"

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My doubt here is that it seems such topic contains a lot of information. In your ideas, you only mentioned "buying things makes our lives comfortable", but simply ignored the 1st sentence in the topic, which contains "work hard". So how to verify if we have covered all the points in the topic? How to avoid penalty for TR without mentioning every tiny part of information that is given? I'm quite confused here.

Many thanks in advance..

can i have some outlines for this essay...Actually i understand this title but what the title means deeply what issue...

Real opinion:
Sports programmes has become very popular in many parts of the world today.Although some people think that this lead to poor health of some youths by being viewers of many kinds of sports rather than practicing them, however I hold a completely different opinion as I believe these programmes encourage the younger generation to do sports more often.


Easiest Opinion:
Sports programmes has become so popular today in almost every part of the world,some people put the blame on these programmes as the cause of poor health in young people.I partly agree with this thought but there are many other reasons we should put in consideration as the causes of the poor health status of some young individuals.

Fu Bin

You have to separate 'background information' from 'the topic of the opinion'. In this case, the opinion topics is 'buy more things' and 'people work hard' is just there to give the opinion topic more context. We know this because the next sentence refers to 'this has made our lives more comfortable' and clearly, 'working hard' doesn't make our lives comfortable, but 'buying many things' can do so.

Yes it is occasionally difficult to separate background from opinion statements, and sometimes it requires a high level of English to do so. I know that IELTS is aware of this, and more recent questions tend to be clearer.

Dear Sjm,

According to your reply,isnt the health of young people in the question of today's post a 'background information' ?
Simon said that he will discuss that there are another reasons of why the health of ypung people is bad.isnt that off topic? Or it seems that I misunderstand the rubric and couldnt separate the topic of the opinion well?
Another question please, as a girl and besides i dont understand or follow anything in the world of sport, could you tell me what sports programmes are? And what is the relation between watching them and gaining poor health?

Many many thanks in advance,
Kind regards

Lana,

Sport programmes are soccer, basketball, ice skating, car racing, etc you name it. I think the question mainly means if young people watch sport programmes too much rather than actually doing sports, their health condition will be worse.

Hence Simon said he partly agrees with the topic, but there are also other factors that are equally important to consider for the poor health of young generation. Discussing one or two other causes would be a way of expanding the question and supporting your arguement to make it stronger.

Regards,
Kevin

Real opinion:

Some people argue that the popularity of sport programmes on television is the main cause for young people's poor health condition due to their preference of watching rather participating in physical activity. Personally, I completely disagree with that statement and that there are other factors to blame.

Easier opinion:

It is true that sport programmes have become increasingly popular on television recently. Whether or not this is the main reason for the poor health of young generation, whom prefer watching rather than doing physical exercises, is a debated issue. Personally, I agree that sport shows have certain influence on the youths' well-being, but there are also other factors that are equally important to consider.

These are my introductions. Please comment and help me reflect on myself. Any feedback would be appreciated.

Thanks

(Real idea)
It is sometimes argued that TV sports programmes are the major cause for poor health because people prefer to watch them for a long time in front of the TV. I completely disagree with this idea because I believe that there are quite a mixed variety of other factors related to this problem.

(Easy idea)
It is sometimes argued that TV sports programmes are the major cause for poor health because people prefer to watch them for a long time in front of the TV. While some sports TV programmes might lead to unhealthy sedentary lifestyle, I think there are much more important factors involved with this problem.

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I feel like I can make decent two main paragraphs based on the latter idea!

Lana

No. Clearly 'the health of young people' comes after 'some argue', so it is definitely part of the opinion you are agreeing or disagreeing with. The background information here is 'are hugely popular on television' and you are not required to address this. It is presented as a fact.

If you partly agree, then you should introduce other factors to support your opinion.

Real opinion

In my personal experience, I totally disagree with this statement about sports game are very popular today are related to people's health conditions. And this might be partly blamed for unhealthy lifestyle such as inactive life.

Easiest opinion

It is true that the sports games on TV are very popular among youths today. But some people accuse that young generation’s preferred watching them rather than physical activity partaker and causing the badly health condition. Personally, I think that other key factors are equally important.

Thanks a lot Kevin and Sjm, in fact the only sort of sports programmes I know on Tv is those who feature men or women doing aerobic workouts with enthusistic music, i found them encourage many people to do so. But i am not sure that those could be called sports programmes as I saw most sof the comment agreed that sports programmes might be responsible for poor health of young people, so I thoughy they are not sports programmes. Could anyone tell me if thise programmes which I mentioned are regarded sports programmes? So that I can write a paragraph that I dont agree and another one that there are other factors responsible for the poor health of young people?

Dear Simon,
I had given exams today and would like to share the writing task 2 which was our exam question .
" Leisure is a growing industry .
People no longer entertain themselves they used to be because of the use of technology has made them less creative ."
Do you agree or disagree?
Though your materials dos help a lot but I felt I couldn't manner time appropriately , your video course did help a lot I hope to get the desired score thank you for all the support and tips .

-Real opinion
There are numerous kinds of sprots programmes on TV these days, and some people believe that watching these shows make young people unhealthy by atrracting people and discouraging them to do phisical activities in actual. I completely disagree with the opinion and don't think that the sports programmes are responsible for any health problems on young people.

-Easiest opinion
I agree with that to a certain point. Too much sport on TV may be partly to blame, but that other factors may have equally or even more positive effect on thier health.

Hi Simon

I just want to say that you are really a great teacher


thank you very much

It is true that in recent years the sports programms are widely famous among television viewers. but some people believe that these sports programmes does not encouraging to participate in sports instead it makes physically unstrong by making the youngsters to sit infront of the tv for long hours. In my opinion i strngly disagree with this idea / in my opion i partially agree that youths are showing less participation in sport activities which led them into poor health.

Lana,in some country those sports shows were attracted by age range from 16一50 YeavsㄧO1d,why different generations wou1d Keen on?
On my View ,A heroic act deep influence the men World ,And some people Watching it the Purpose only bid Wnere team win and glambing

it is hard to deny the fact that the role of media coverage on sports has become much more popular than in the past which creates a growing concern that few youngsters take up sports activity with most of them enjoying lives sports events on TV.
As far as I am concerned, being able to watch sports on TV arouse young people's motivation and interest in sports and encourage them to play sports instead of discouraging them from participating themselves in sports.

Real opinion:
I agree with the view to certain extend. People who enjoy a lot of sport programmes tend to have little time exercise so they may gain much weight, leading to their poor health.Many sport programmes aim at entertaining the public and do little to encourage people to work out at gym. People back from work often watch such programmes to relax rather than do some aerobic exercise to relax their bodies, gradually it becomes a major way for people to enjoy their free time.

Easier opinion:
I completely disagree with the view. People who prefer such programmes can spend some time on working out even if these programmes take much of their time. Some of the programmes can offer professional guides to people, so people can benefit more from some simple exercises without being hurt. Furthermore, I believe that most of people who enjoy such programmes don't like working out, they tend to spend most of their time on watching TV.

Further more, these people may also have some bad habits and eat an unbalanced diet. For example, they like to stay up late and eat a lot before they go to bed. I think these habits are very harmful to a person's health. And also people who meat a lot of meat and no vegetables tend to again more weights, which can increase the possibility to suffer some serious diseases, such cancer and heart diseases.

Hi Simon,

this is my essay for "real opinion". I am studying to tackle the Ielts test once again. Last time was my first time doing the test and I got 6 in Writing. This time I really want to aim for band 8 or at least 7. Please give me some feedback and your opinion of which mark this essay could receive. I would be very much appreciated.

Everyone is welcomed to comment and give me feedback as well. I do appreciate your effort.


Thank you.

Regards,
Kevin

It is true that sport programmes have grown increasingly popular on television nowadays. While some people argue that it is the main cause for the youths’ poor health condition, whom prefer to be spectators rather than participants in physical activity, I completely disagree with that argument and that there are other key factors which should be put into consideration.
First of all, young people with low level of health condition should not blame sport TV channels, but rather their inactive lifestyle instead. If the youths are willing to be healthy, they still could partake in outdoor exercises despite the high frequency of broadcasted sport programmes. Furthermore, sport channels actually inspire and motivate the young to keep fit by encouraging them to follow their sport idols such as Ronaldo, Michael Jordan, Maria Sharapova. My two younger brothers, for example, practice soccer regularly thanks to the influence of soccer stars like Ronaldo and Messi. Undoubtedly this will only lead to an improvement in young individuals’ well-being and not the contrary.
In saying that, sport programmes do have certain negative impact on their young audiences. Specifically, spending significant amount of time watching sport shows on TV causes soreness and pain to human body. However, this phenomenon is applicable to every other TV shows, not only sport category, thus making it a weak argument. Another opinion is that watching sport exercises helps young people reduce the guilt of not exercising regularly and hence creates problem to their health. Again, this is not totally true as researches have shown that the guilt of being inactive will only go away once it is replaced by satisfactory feeling created by the release of hormones during physical activities. Therefore, these assumptions are not strong enough evidence to prove that sport programmes are the first to blame for poor health condition of young citizens.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that sport TV shows should not be perceived as the main cause for declining level of health of the youths, but instead a source of inspiration and motivation for them to live a more active and healthier lifestyle.

Sorry here is another cleaner version with added space between paragraphs.

It is true that sport programmes have grown increasingly popular on television nowadays. While some people argue that it is the main cause for the youths’ poor health condition, whom prefer to be spectators rather than participants in physical activity, I completely disagree with that argument and that there are other key factors which should be put into consideration.

First of all, young people with low level of health condition should not blame sport TV channels, but rather their inactive lifestyle instead. If the youths are willing to be healthy, they still could partake in outdoor exercises despite the high frequency of broadcasted sport programmes. Furthermore, sport channels actually inspire and motivate the young to keep fit by encouraging them to follow their sport idols such as Ronaldo, Michael Jordan, Maria Sharapova. My two younger brothers, for example, practice soccer regularly thanks to the influence of soccer stars like Ronaldo and Messi. Undoubtedly this will only lead to an improvement in young individuals’ well-being and not the contrary.

In saying that, sport programmes do have certain negative impact on their young audiences. Specifically, spending significant amount of time watching sport shows on TV causes soreness and pain to human body. However, this phenomenon is applicable to every other TV shows, not only sport category, thus making it a weak argument. Another opinion is that watching sport exercises helps young people reduce the guilt of not exercising regularly and hence creates problem to their health. Again, this is not totally true as researches have shown that the guilt of being inactive will only go away once it is replaced by satisfactory feeling created by the release of hormones during physical activities. Therefore, these assumptions are not strong enough evidence to prove that sport programmes are the first to blame for poor health condition of young citizens.

In conclusion, I firmly believe that sport TV shows should not be perceived as the main cause for declining level of health of the youths, but instead a source of inspiration and motivation for them to live a more active and healthier lifestyle.

Regards,
Kevin

Hi Simon,
I have a question about agreeing partially.When we have to write both sides of the issue,I know that we have to reason out why people blame sports programmes,but in the paragraph with opposing veiw (when we say sports programmes are not badly affecting )what should we include?Is it whether I should include the other reasons for health related problems or the positive effects of these programmes on heath?Please advise..

Champa,

In my opinion, in the opposing view paragraph (sports programmes are not entirely the main cause for young people's health problems), we can have two main ideas. Firstly, there are other equally important factors to consider such as inactive lifestyle and unhealthy diet in which the youths are responsible themselves. Secondly, sport programmes can actually inspire and motivate people to participate in physical exercises by presenting the healthy image of fit athletes on television. Examples of those could be sport stars like Cristiano Ronaldo, Michael Jordan, Roger Federer,...

Hope this can help you get some ideas to write your paragraph.

Regards,
Kevin

Kevin ,
thank you, As you said writing both points would make more sense to me .
Regards,
Champa

Real opinion:
It is true that the increase of TV sports causes bad effects on teenager's health condition. I disagree with the statement that sports programmes are mainly responsible for any health problems for young people, and there are other factors which make their health balance worse.

Easier opinion:
It is true that the increase of TV sports causes bad effects on teenager's health condition. While I partly agree with the statement that sports programmes are responsible for some health problems for young people, I believe that there are other main factors which make their health balance worse.

Hello kevin
In this plz me help to find out the main ideas and its suggesting views or results.in writing section i 'm confuse in developing ideap with suggest.

Help me plz

Hi Shila,

For the opposing view please see my reply to Champa above.

For the view that sport programmes do affect people's health negatively, you can have quite a few reasons. It could be because sport TV shows take up significant amount of time from the youths and hence they could not find enough time to do exercises. Another reason could be sport programmes causes human body soreness and pain if they spend too much time sit down and watch it, hence their well-being is influenced in a bad way.

These are just general ideas. You have to reword it so it sounds good as well. Also you should try to think with your own ideas, that way you can develop a logical thinking for yourself that could help you to approach any question.

Regards,
Kevin

Thank u kevin for great advices for me

My try:

In our times, sports programmes have become exceedingly popular. Oftentimes, such programmes are believed to be the precursor to poor health of the young population, who opt for spectate as opposed to participate. Whether what was outlined just before is a fair assertion, is yet to be ascertained.

Hi Simon here's my try:

It is true that sports programmes attract a huge amount of young audience nowadays. Consequently, some blame them for the lack of excise of the young viewers.

real opinion: I strongly disagree with this and will explain my views below.

easiest opinion: While I agree with it to some extent, I believe there are causes that are more significant than the effect of the television.

P.S.
I've been reading your ebook for about a week, it's really helpful!
So I think I should also participate in this forum to get as much help as possible.

Really appreciated for your effort. ; )

Some people suppose the reason for the poor health of many young people is that there are too many sports TV programmes and they lead people to watch but not to take part in physical exercise.

One-sided introduction:
In my opinion, I completely disagree with this idea and I think there is no relationship between the popularity of sports programmes and people’s health.

Balanced introduction:
In my opinion, while sports programs indeed occupy the time people take to do exercise, there are many other more important reasons for people’s poor health, such as lifestyle of modern society and failure of physical education.

Real opinion
There is hardly any doubt that the most popular T.V programmes are sports.Be it foot ball or cricket many are glued to telivision inorder to watch the match. While some believe that such programmes are responsible for lack of physical activity among the fans as they watch the matches instead taking part. However, in my opinion, these programmes do not promote poor health instead they inspire young minds to be fit and active.


Easiest opinion
Sports have emerged as the most popular TV programme. Some people believe that these programmes are responsible for poor health among the fans. In my opinion, I completely agree with the argument as I believe, people are only interested in their team winning rather than getting inspired by the physical fitness of it's players.

Easiest opinion Essay


Sports have emerged as the most popular TV programme. Some people believe that these programmes are responsible for poor health among the fans. In my opinion, I completely agree with the argument as I believe, people are only interested in their team winning rather than getting inspired by the physical fitness of its players.

The principal reason for this is that most people follow sports for entertainment. In addition, they are only interested in the strategy used in games and the result of winning or losing the match.In other words, sports programmes do not inspire people to play sports. While there are some programmes like chess which do not even promote physical fitness. These indoor games are responsible for poor health.

Another reason is that the die hard fans in order to watch the match live, wake up early in the morning. This seriously results in the lack of sleep which is detrimental to health. In addition, while watching Television people overeat; this is due to the fact that the mind is unable to understand whether a person is full. Binge eating with the combination of lack of exercise results in obesity and other diseases.

In conclusion, it is clear that sports programmes indirectly impacts the health of people as they spend long hours on television. obesity, lack of exercise, erratic sleep timings are some of the health problems which most people face, especially the die hard fans. In future, the government should either reduce the number of sports channel or spread awareness about health and physical fitness.

Dear Mr. Corcoran,
Here is my real-opinion introduction for this topic.

The popularity of sports programs has been surging nowadays, but some people argue that these programs are responsible for the health problem of many young people who prefer to watch rather than take part in sports activity. I completely disagree with this view because I don't think that these programs are causing any health problems.

Here is the easist-opinion introduction for this topic.

The popularity of sports programs has been surging nowadays, but some people argue that these programs are responsible for the health problem of many young people who prefer to watch rather than take part in sports activity. While I have to admit that these programs may be partly blame, but I believe that other factors may be equally or even more important.

Yours sincerely,
Calvin Cho

Dear Simon,

This essay below seems a bit long. I hope I will receive some comments from you. :)

ANSWER:

There has been a huge development on creating television shows, and sport programmes are not the exception. While some people content that these sport shows do even not bring audiences any benefits but get them to live in a less healthy lifestyle, I completely disagree with that perspective.
On the one hand, we are living in the age of communicating development; thus if any programmes or products get a chance to be displayed on the television screen, they can soon become popular to the audiences. Firstly, it is not a bad idea to raise sport popularity through television shows, because everyone can be aware that playing sport can help improve their health effectively. Secondly, people who usually watch sport competitions on the television like soccer, tennis or basketball may have a tendency to find themselves a true interest in a particular type of sport, which can lead them to practice that sort of sport in real life. For example, it was only about ten years ago when almost no people live in Vietnam knew what is tennis and how to play it. Therefore, recording sport contests to show them on the screen can make a huge impact on how people recognize and interact with that sport.
However, there are still some people who do not accept the development of displaying sport games on the television, with the argument that it may have the audiences sit all the time in front of the TV screen to watch rather than play it. To some extent, it may consider to be reasonable; nevertheless, in fact, people who are truly passionate on any types of sport, they will likely to get motivation from that sport itself and the athletes who play it as well. Shortly after that, they will practice rather than just watch it. For instance, for those people having huge taste in sport field, sport news or any sources of information relevant to that topic may attract them most of the time. Therefore, they will have their mind developed toward the spirit of sport and gradually improve their physical life by practicing themselves, not just passively sitting and watching it over the screen.
In conclusion, I believe that displaying sport programmes through television will bring people more benefits than drawbacks. This method should continue to be applied in the future.
(387 words)

real opinion:Televised sports programmmes enjoy huge popularity. However, some people perceive that young people's health might be damaged as a result of excessive television viewing and a lack of physical excise.I agree to some extent that sports programmes contribute to the poor health of younger generation.
easiest opinion: Televised sports programmmes enjoy huge popularity. However, some people perceive that young people's health might be damaged as a result of excessive television viewing and a lack of physical excise.I completely disagree with this. I do not think sports programmes are responsible for any health problems

it is the fact that sport programs on television are getting popularity in various parts of the world. Some people think that these programs are imposing negative effect on the well-being of youth and causing some health problems. I partially agree with this thought because these popular sport programs involve the youth immensely and they continue to watch such programs for long period of time which ultimately cause eye problems and other physical effects on their health. They prefer to watch rather than to participate in these games in real life.

However, this is not only the factor of causing poor health but there are other factors which are culprit of poor health of youth. Also, these sport programs sometimes encourage the youth to take part in sports in their real life.

Easier opinion:

Some people believe that sport programmes are responsible for the poor physical state of young people. I would argue that this idea is partly correct, because there are many other factors could be taken into account.

I agree to a certain extent that television sports shows are contributing negetively to people's health. However, I would argue that other factors are having more of contribution towards nunhealthy lifestyles.

(My real opinion = the easier opinion I thoutht)

Nowadays, many people are more and more into watching sports programs on TV and some people believe that this is a contributor to lack of physical activities among young generations. Personally, I completely disagree this idea because other unhealthy habits can easily be seen for poor health.

Hello friends, I am not sure whether I chose the ideas for first main body.

It is no doubt true that nowadays more and more people follow TV programmes, especially sports shows are so popular among teenagers. People have different views about whether spending too much time on watching sports programmes can cause some health problems. However, I would argue that these programmes may have both drawbacks and benefits.
On the one hand, in my opinion, watching sports programmes are beneficial for young adults for a variety of reasons. Firstly, when teenagers follow this kind of attractive sports shows, they are also forced to take in interest in doing sports, and therefore it would be said that these programmes encourage young people to be active or moving rather than being immobile. Secondly, some of these programmes including informative aspects are extremely helpful source of motivation to keep fit for adolescents. Finally, young adults who are interested in this kind of sports programmes or news can acquire different useful habits that will help them in other parts of life, and they become more sensitive to what is happening in the world.
However, in spite of the arguments I mentioned above, this addictive TV viewing habit can have some negative consequences among teenagers. The main aim of these programmes are to enhance the profit of channel by keeping viewers interested and getting them excited. Thus, young adults spend too much time in front of television without awareness, and therefore these young people are more likely to experience any health problems related to sedentary lifestyle. For example, recent studies have shown that obesity is more commong among people spending more than three hour on watching TV than those who are more active. At the same time, those young adults who are addicted to watching sport programmes tend to be more isolate and self-consious, leading to depression.
In conclusion, sports programmes can be seen as useful for adolescents for a variety of reasons, but it seems to me that there are some negative effects of these programmes on health of young adults.
(333 words)

Hello friends, I am not sure whether I chose the ideas correctly for the first main body.

It is no doubt true that nowadays more and more people follow TV programmes, especially sports shows are so popular among teenagers. People have different views about whether spending too much time on watching sports programmes can cause some health problems. However, I would argue that these programmes may have both drawbacks and benefits.

On the one hand, in my opinion, watching sports programmes are beneficial for young adults for a variety of reasons. Firstly, when teenagers follow this kind of attractive sports shows, they are also forced to take in interest in doing sports, and therefore it would be said that these programmes encourage young people to be active or moving rather than being immobile. Secondly, some of these programmes including informative aspects are extremely helpful source of motivation to keep fit for adolescents. Finally, young adults who are interested in this kind of sports programmes or news can acquire different useful habits that will help them in other parts of life, and they become more sensitive to what is happening in the world.

However, in spite of the arguments I mentioned above, this addictive TV viewing habit can have some negative consequences among teenagers. The main aim of these programmes are to enhance the profit of channel by keeping viewers interested and getting them excited. Thus, young adults spend too much time in front of television without awareness, and therefore these young people are more likely to experience any health problems related to sedentary lifestyle. For example, recent studies have shown that obesity is more commong among people spending more than three hour on watching TV than those who are more active. At the same time, those young adults who are addicted to watching sport programmes tend to be more isolate and self-consious, leading to depression.

In conclusion, sports programmes can be seen as useful for adolescents for a variety of reasons, but it seems to me that there are some negative effects of these programmes on health of young adults.

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