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Hello Simon,my result came yesterday..I need 7 for all module,but again I missed for writing (6.5).This was my fifth attempt.Though every time I score 7 or more for all other 3 I can't acquire 7 for writing....last time I studied your essays and graphs and went for exam..I was confident, but I lost..feeling very depressed...can you suggest me what to do??? Can you correct my essays/graphs....hope you would reply....

The presented table chart give data on the number of tourist and their spending in five different countries in the year 2012 and 2013.
As is observed,among all the figures for tourist spending in the five mentioned countries,U.S.A ranked top in both years,although highest number of people visited france which was more then eighty million.

please anybody correct my introduction...please please please.

more than 80 million,table chart GIVES not give,as it is observed ,the first letter of 'france' should be capital...

Dear simon sir,here is my full essay.

The presented table chart give data on the number of tourist and their spending in five different countries namely France,U.S.A,Spain,China,Italy in the year 2012 and 2013.
As is observed,among all the figures for tourist spending in the five mentioned countries,U.S.A ranked top in both of the years while highest number of people visited France which was more then eighty millions in the given year.
According to table,although the number of visitors in Spain and China were almost same at more then fifty million but China's tourist number were actually declined slightly compared to spain's tourist in 2013.Howevere visitor's expenditure were increased fairely in both Spain and China in 2013.
The least number of tourist was in Italy at 46.4 million in 2012 though this number was raised one million in 2013.Similarly,tourist spending were also as low as their number in Italy in both of the given year.
Overall,tourist spending in five different countries were soared up considerably in 2013 compared to 2012.

The chart provided illustrates the proportion of the people visted and their expenditure in five different countries during the years 2012 and 2013.
It is clear from the figures that USA has highest tourists spending in both years as compared to France,China,Spain and Italy.However,the figure for the number of tourists visiting France is highest than the rest of the countries.

I think its is better

The tabular data illustrates the variation talking place in the number of tourists from different countries and also depicts the expenditure was incurred by tourists over a 1-year-span(2013-2014)

Maya
Your mistake is 'gives' not give

Simon I select highest and lowest number and spending. France and Italy and from expenditure side I choose USA and Italy
For my summary

Here my answer

At flecting glance,it is crystal clear that the maximum number of people paid visit to France which was witnessed to be 83 and 84.7 million in 2012 and 2013,respectively.contrarily,Italy had the lowest number of people visiting there accounting for almost as less as 47 million in both year

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The table compares figures for visitors to France, USA, Spain, China and Italy and the amount of money spent in the years 2012 and 2013.

Overall, although France was tourist’s favorite destination in both years, visitors spending represented only the second lowest amount of the five countries mentioned. By contrast, Italy had the lowest number of tourists and gathered the smallest amount of money.

Thanks a lot Robin.Could you please check my full essay?

Hi Simon,

This is my summary:

It is clear that France is the country which people visited the most while visitors spent the most money in the US. However, while the Western nations saw an increase of the number of travellers, the figure in China decreased. (I'm not sure about an increase)

Body 1: France and USA. I would compare the number of tourists in France and USA, and then the money per tourist spent in two countries.

Body 2: Spain, China, and Italia. I would re-highlight the number of visitors in China (decrease) while show the money spent on China increase.

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I would like to ask you a question: Should I put the money per tourist in each country on summary?

Thank you,

The table compares figures for visitors to France, USA, Spain, China and Italy and the amount of money spent in the years 2012 and 2013.

Overall, although France was tourist’s favourite destination in both years, visitors spending represented only the second lowest amount of the five countries mentioned. By contrast, Italy had the lowest number of tourists and gathered the smallest amount of money.

The number of people who travelled to France increased slightly from 83 million in 2012 to 84.7 million in the following year – representing the highest figure for the 5 countries, but these visitors only spent 53.6 and 56.1 million respectively. However, USA, the second most visited country, received the highest amount of money from tourists, of 126.2 billion dollars in the first year, and the amount increased considerably a year later by $13.4 million.

The number of travellers to Spain saw only a small increase and this reflected in the $56..3 billion spent in 2012 and $60.4 billion in 2013. By contrast, despite the decrease in the number of visitors from 57.7 million to 55.7 million, in China, the amount spent increased noticeably in 2013 by $1.7 billion from $50 billion in the previous year. Italy was people’s last choice as a tourism destination. Consequently, they only spent over $40 billion in both years.

218 words

I just want to add something to my introduction....

The table compares figures for visitors to France, USA, Spain, China and Italy and the amount of money spent by them in each of these 5 countries in the years 2012 and 2013.

i select the main points here is :
- the highest number of tourist in the table was france , the second was usa ; the highest tourist expenditure was usa
- china decrease slightly in the number of tourist; italy increase slightly in both tourist and spending

Overall, most of these countries had an increase in spending money of tourists and number of visitors, except China. The amount of visitors in France was the highest, while the highest spending money was in the USA in 2012 and 2013.
I manage to include these numbers in my paragraphs:
Paragraph 1: France: 83.0m and 84.7m; the USA: 69.8m; Spain & China: over 57m in 2012; Italy: 46.4m and 47.7m
Paragraph 2: the USA: 126.2b and 139.6b; Spain & France: over 55b in 2013; China and Italy: slightly increase (51.7b and 43.9b)

Hello Simon, I don't know where should I post this so just forgive my off-topic.

Yesterday I recieved my results and I got a solid 7.5 overall score (8.5 listening, 8 reading, 6.5 speaking and writing) and I'm really happy and amazed. Writing has always been my biggest weakness and I had just few days to train and get ready for the exam. Basically I just read and analysed your essays but still I achieved in my first attempt a farly good score.

Thank you for your help, I owe you one!

Dear simon
Can I use example to support my opinion but I write the the of example incorrectly for example Amazone is online company and choverlet is a car company ????

Hello everyone.Recent speaking cue card topic which come in my hometown.. DESCRIBE TREE WHICH IS UNIQUE IN YOUR COUNTRY....If you haven't prepared for this question I suppose you will do it right now;

It is noticable that tourists spent more in China than before, while the number of visitors dropped. Although France was the most popular destination among those five countries, tourists prefered to purchase goods in the USA.

This table compares the number of tourists and their spending among five countries in the years of 2012, 2013.

It is noticeable that tourists in USA had the highest spending in both 2012 and 2013 with the amount of $ 126.2biiilon and 139.6 million respectively while the figures for their counterpart of Italy were only $ 41.2 billion and $43.9 billion.

In both 2012 and 2013, France had the most tourists with the number of 83 million and 84.7 million in each year, but only had less than half that of spending in USA, and the data were 53.6billion and 56.1 billion for each year. Meanwhile, USA had the second most tourists with the number of 66.7 million and 69.8 million in each year. By contrast, the least tourists were seen in Italy which had 41.2 million and 47.7million

In 2012, Spain and China had nearly the same number of tourists, which were around 57.5 million. However, the number of tourists in Spain increased to 60.7million in 2013 while slightly decrease was seen in China with the number of 55.7 million. Tourist spending in Spain was 563.million in 2012, and reached to 60.4 million in 2013. The figures for China were 50 million and 51.7 billion for each year.

The table compares the changes in the number of foreign visitors and their expenditures in France, USA, Spain, China and Italy between 2012 and 2013.

It is noticeable that the number of tourists and their spending increased significantly in most countries over the 2-year period. The USA had the highest revenue from tourists in both years.

In 2012 France with 83 million visitors who brought $53.6 billion was the most popular destination for tourists between five nations, and this figure increased by 1.7 million visitors who spent $56.1 billion in 2013. Meanwhile, China once visited by 57.7 million tourists in 2012, by 2 million less tourists in 2013 lost its popularity, but its revenue from tourists has increased by $1.7 million from previous year.

Spain by 3.2 million increase and USA by 3.1 million increase saw the biggest changes in the number of foreign visitors over the 2-year period, however the money brought by these visitors was the highest among any other nations mentioned in the figure.

Hi Simon
When you want to put a comment, the web blog does not ask the "CAPTCHA" anymore.
Have you taken away this option from the website or now it recognizes us?

Hello Simon!
It was from IELTS Cambridge Book 10,Test 3,Speaking part 2.
Describe a present which you were given and that you broken occasionally.

You should say,
What it is.
for what occasion it was presented to you.
how you broken it.
what you felt when you broke it.

(How to answer and make a mindset in speaking test if we haven't broken any present in our life? do we have to lie?)

the tabular chart shows data about the number of people were visited and the expenditure assess in five different countries over a two year period between 2012-13

anyone tell me is it correct or I have done something wrong in my grammar

Hello Maria,

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Regards,

Aria, I read your report. It is very strong and correct. You wrote every single line very prompt and effective. It is very new for me. I really need suggestions and experienced view. if you like to talk to me and give me some suggestion. I'd feel glad please

@ amitc:
Thanks for your compliment. I just followed what Simon put in his blog and Videos. I don't know how familiar are you with this blog, but a thoroughly review of the contents of this blog at previous two years can help you a lot.
It is not too demanding, just begin with the skill that you need to improve and follow the related links , for example, Writing task 1 or Speaking on side bar and read what you find.
Then, do more practice, passively at the beginning as you can write or memorize whatever you find there, then actively, try to do your writing or speaking samples.
After 3-5 month you will obviously see your progress and improvement.

Take care

@aria
thanks for Your suggestion. It means a lot. thanks again hope you'll get great success in future.

The table compares the numbers of tourist and how much did they spend during that in five countries between 2012 and 2013.
It is clear in each of these years in Italia was lowest by tourists between 46,4 and 47.7 millions in addition to the spending was same level by 41.2 and 43.9 billions dollar. After that in 2012 and 2013 the most number of tourists was France by 83/87.7 millions. On the other hand the USA was the highest tourist spending by 126.2 billions dollar in 2012 and it increased to 139.6 billions dollars in 2013.
we can see in the table in spain the more tourist spending than France and China between 2012 and 2013 while in 2012 was quite similar of number of tourist between Spain and China.

@ Arya,

If you don't mind I'd like to leave comment on your task 1.

*In 2012 France with 83 million visitors[,]who brought $53.6 billion (into this country)[,] was the most popular destinationS for tourists AMONG five countries.

*There is no information about Italy as the least number of tourists.

*This sentences below is a little bit long made it vague to the reader. I guess breaking it into two sentences makes it more clear.
. Meanwhile, China once visited by 57.7 million tourists in 2012, by 2 million less tourists in 2013 lost its popularity, but its revenue from tourists has increased by $1.7 million from previous year.

regards

Dear All

Kindly need you comment please:

The table graph illustrates the population of tourists and their spending in five different countries in 2012 and 2013.

It is clear that the number of visitors in four out the five countries had increased over the mentioned period, except in China which decreased. It is also noted that the spending of the tourists in all countries had grown, but the figure in USA was the highest among the others.

France had the highest number of travelers in 2012 at around 83 million, and it increased by 1,7 million in 2013. It was then followed by the figures in USA and Spain. The population of visitors in both countries stood at 66.7 and 57.5 million in 2012, but in 2013 they had risen to 69.8 and 60.7 million respectively. It is noticed that the population of the tourists in China had dropped by 3 million people, as it reached 55.7 million in 2013. Meanwhile, Italy had the lowest figure, as the number was below 48 million in both years.

In 2012, the visitor’s spending in USA was approximately $ 126.2 billion and it rose to $ 139.6 billion in 2013. The disbursements of the tourists in France, Spain and China had increased considerably over the two-year period, but their figures were still less than half of the USA’s figure. And for the tourists spending in Italy, it had the similar increasing pattern as the other countries, but the amount was only one third of the USA’s figure.

Hi All

I haven't posted for a while...

1. Martin - the tree question in speaking is in Part 1, so you only need to make a comment or two.
2. Mariya - the most common reason for continuing 6.5s is the frequency of error (both grammatical and vocabulary). Get an idea of how many errors you are making, and reduce them in those areas.
3. Robin - watch out for 'unnatural' vocabulary
4. As a teacher, I advise everyone to please be careful when receiving advice from other candidates. Sometimes they are correcting mistakes, and other times they are recommending you change something good into something wrong. I see this constantly (not just on this site...). Remember, one or two errors can easily be the difference between a 6.5 or a 7.

It's great to have your help as always sjm. Thanks!

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Congratulatons Francesco! I'm glad my lessons helped you to pass.

Hi a ..... it's good if it has started to recognise us - Finally!

Dear MAriya,
I know that feeling. I am trying hard to get individual 7 with overall score 7.5. My problem is writing too.
My attempts are double than yours. But i keep trying hard and this blog is my only learning resource. I have faith in myself. You have to believe in yourself too. Good luck !!!

Dear Simon,

Would truly appreciate your feedback. Thanks so much

I have discussed about number of tourists in one para then about tourist spending in a separate para. Is this style okay?

Number of words: 240. Will the examiner think it is too much?


Here's my report:
The table compares the number of visitors to five countries and the tourism revenues earned in 2012 and 2013. It can be clearly seen that the number of tourists is not directly proportionate to the tourist spending.

France remained the favourite destination among tourists. It received the highest number of visitors at 84.7 million in 2013, while Italy had the fewest visitors at 47.7 million. With the exception of China, all other countries saw a marginal increase in tourist footfalls. Inbound tourism to China dropped by two million to 55.7 million in 2013. At the higher end of the scale, the tourist figures for USA and Spain grew by a little over three million each.

Although France had the most visitors, its tourist spending was nearly the same as Spain which received approximately 25 million fewer tourists. In fact, tourism revenue for Spain grew sharply by $4.1 billion to $60.4 billion in 2013, while France had a marginal increase of $2.5 billion to $56.1 billion. Interestingly, tourist spending in China grew by $1.7 billion to $51.7 billion despite a significant drop in the number of tourists. USA earned the highest tourist revenues ($126.2 billion in 2012, and $139.6 billion in 2013) which were more than double the amounts spent by tourists in other countries.

Overall, there is no connection between tourist spending and the number of tourists. We can see that tourism revenues earned depend on the country visited

Marie

I would say 240 words is too long. When you write this many words you are not 'highlighting' the chart/graph, you are basically describing everything you see.

Also, the overview is too short, especially for a report of this length.

i think you are good Marie.yes. i am similar to sjm . it is too long.

my own introduction.

the table shows that the numbers of tourists and the amount of money they spent in five countries, namely france, USA, Spain, China and Italy over period of ten years.

hi sjm
i would write my introduction here.i am reading throughout all the comment and i still not have any ideas to write in overview
could u leave us some ideas about overview, sjm? hope u would help.

the table compares the number of foreign visitors and their expenditure in the five different countries from 2012 to 2013.

Hi Marie,

Your writing is very good, and I really admire it. I can see what is the next level up to band 8+ in writing. I am studying on your report. Thank you for posting it.

@sjm and Dong Nguyen: Thanks for your feedback. I will learn to write less:)

One point:
Is it okay to describe the number of tourists in one paragraph AND tourist spending in another? I have compared the relevant details in each para though

I do not like to club both types of information because I personally feel it becomes a mish-mash:)

So is this style okay? Thanks so much

well Marie, i think you should put the overview in second paragraph. i mean that you wrote the introduction, and then is the overview. after that two paragraphs which describe and give more details.

1. Introduction
2. Overview
3. Paragraph 1.
4. Paragraph 2.
if you do step by step, i would be easier for the examiner focusing on.

3. Paragraph 1.
4. Paragraph 2.

it seems to me that you can use superlative in paragraph 1. for example. the highest number of tourists who have travelled in 2012 and 2013 was France.something like that.

In Paragraph 2, you can use comparative. higher, lower...

The table compares the number of tourists and the amount of their spending in five different countries in 2012 and 2013.

It is clear from the table that the number of tourists entered Italy and their spending were the lowest among other countries in 2012 and 2013. It is also noticeable that a higher number of people visited France than other countries, yet the USA gained the highest profit from tourists' spending all over the period. The trend of Spain and China seems similar.

In 2012 and 2013, tourists' number in Italy slightly rose from 46.4 million to 47.7 million, and they spent around $85 million in both years. On the other hand, about 167 million tourists traveled to France for tourism in the same period, and approximately $109 billion spent. Although the USA had a lower number of tourists in compared to France(135 million), tourists there spent around as twice higher as what spent in France($266 billion).

The figures for Spain and China were nearly similar. The number of visitors was around 115 million for each of them; however, the financial return of tourism in Spain was slightly more than that in China, at $117 billion and $112 billion respectively.

Details can consist three fact.
1)General: This table shows a slow increase of tourist numbers and their spending if the whole table is considered.
2)As seen on the table,number of tourists who visited USA less than France and almost same other 3 countries,however people spent in USA significantly more than tourists' spending numbers in other TOP 5 countries.
3)Despite the fact there is a slow increase number of tourists/passengers visiting these countries,inversely there is a context that China's attraction and tourism revenue weakened with a drop of tourist spending around $ 2 million.

My opinion we can write a summary around these observations. I can add some numbers, details and comparisons as well.

Did'nt have time to write whole summary :)

Hoops..China does not lose revenue.Spending increased number of people declined. sorry :)

hi simon i am facing a problem in my speaking module,, so tell me what should i do for that

Dear Simon
I an a new comer who have difficulty in writing( my last score was 6.5).
Kindly give me your advice on my overview below, for my further improvement.

Overall, it is clear that both number of visitors and amount of money they spent in each countries increased over 2 years. While tourists spent most in the US, their overall expenditure was the lowest in Italy for both years.

Thank you.

Sorry, " each country", wrong grammar!

My introduction is bellow:

The table provides statictics about the number of tourists who visited five various countries and their spending between 2012 and 2013.
It is obvious that the number of visitors as well as the amount of money they spent increased over two years, except China. the most tourists visited France; however, the USA received the highest revenue.

I'm taking IELTS this Saturday. Anyone please take a look, will i have 6.5 with this?
The table reveals information about the number of tourists of five different countries namely France, USA, China, Spain and Italy, and how much did they spend in the year 2012 and 2013.
A glance at the graph would show that France was the country that had the largest number of tourists, while the USA had the greatest tourist expenditure.
Among the five countries, France, which had over 80 million of tourists during the given year, was the number one country regarding the number of tourists, far ahead of the second one, the US, with just over 65 million. Next come Spain and China with about 55 million each. It is interesting that China was the only country in the five whose tourists decreased slightly in the two-year period from 57.7 to 55.7 million, while the others all increased although not noticeable. The bottom of the list with the least number of tourists is Italy with just about 45 million.
Despite having 20 million of tourists lower than France, the US still had double of tourist spending compared to France, with the former was about $55 billion and the latter was about $125 billion. The other three countries stayed at the same place. The tourist spending of Spain, China and Italy were at about $55 billion, $50 billion and $40 billion respectively.

Dear Simon, It's my full essay. I'm a beginner. Hope for your advice.
The table displays the numbers of tourists and the amount of money they spent in 2012 and 2013 in five countries namely France, USA, Spain, China, Italy.
According the table, although France ranked first in the numbers of tourists, USA ranked first in the money tourists spent in the both of year. USA is the second country having the big number of tourist with 66,7 millions people in 2012 and 69,8 millions people in 2013. Spain had the number of tourists which is smaller than that of France but the money tourists spent in Spain was not like that. The number of tourists in China was similar to that in Spain. Italy ranked last in both years and in both articles.
In conclusion, all of countries always had the development between 2012 and 2013 in the number of tourists and the amount of money they spent for touring.

Great contribution from all.

Hi Mariya and ayelyan,
Seems like we all are in the same boat. I too need 7.5 overall band and minimum 7 in all the sectors for my further course. I had taken exam in last December and got I9 R7.5 S7 W6.5, unfortunately I was short of 0.5 in writing. My point is we can be of great help for each other to improve our band. If u guys are interested please contact me, my email id is sangamshane@gmail.com
Thank you

Dear friends,
Im a infant in ielts writting, so that is my type about the Simon' table. Please give me comments and show me my mistake in using of English. Thank for all. :D

The table show the number of people who travel to each of five countries namely: France, USA, Spain, China and Italy in 2012 and 2013 and how much they spent in those contries.
Obviously, France received a highest number of traveller in both 2012 and 2013; While, USA received much more money from tourists in both two years. The figure for Italy exhibits the least not only in number of tourists but also in tourist spending in both years.
The France ranked at top in number of tourists at 83 and 84.7 millions in 2012 and 2013, respectively. The money they received just placed in third position with about 53 and 56 billion dolars.The Italy’s row show the lowest number of tourist at 46.4 and 47.7 millions and the lowest money at 41.2 and 43.9 billion in 2012 and 2013, respectively.
Almost countries welcome a bit more of traveler in 2013 than 2012 from 1.3 to 3.2 millions, except a decrease in China at 2 millions. The money that tourists paid in all five countries, including China increased a bit from 1.7 billion for China and 13.4 billion for USA in 2013. It is evident to say that USA was the most developed contry in tourism with the largest spending from the tourists and the fastest growing over a year 2012 to 2013

The table illustrate the number of the tourists visiting the five various countries and the amount they spend on these countries between the year 2012 and 2013.
According to the diagram it shows that there is highest number of tourist visited in France in both years 2012 and 2013 where as Italy is in the lowest position .In the case of the total Number of tourist and amount they spend, USA and France are both opposite .Though more tourist visited in France but the amount they spend is highest in USA.
Like wise ,Though the number of travellers are same in Spain and China in year 2012 but there is slightly increase in their number in Spain by 2013.
In conclusion between the year 2012 and 2013 there has increase in the number of visitors in all these five countries and also the amount they spend.

Dear sjm can you please give me feedback on my this essay
regards
son pau

Comments please sjm? thanks

The tabular data shows five different countries including France, USA, Spain, China and Italy their number of tourists as well as their gained revenues in given two consecutive years (2012-1213).

In summary, France has noted the most number of tourists both in 2012 and 2013 while Italy has the least visitors among the five countries. However, in terms of spending, USA, the second among popular destination has the highest spending tourists both in two consecutive years.

It can be seen in the chart, France leads the figures of tourists in both mentioned years at 83.0M and 84,7M respectively while Italy has the least number at 46.6 and 47.7 in the given two consecutive years. The USA is the second leading destination as they maintained their figure at around 60M number of tourists in two mentioned years. Meanwhile, Spain and China have almost the same in numbers ranging from 55 to 60M number of visitors in both years.

In terms revenues, USA leads the four other countries as the tourists in the country spends $126.2B in 2012 and further increased to $139.6B later in 2013. Italy on the other hand, has the least spending tourists as visitors spend $41.2B and $43.9B in two mentioned consecutive years. Moreover, all three remaining countries have quite the same in figures at around $50B in two given years.

overall, dollar spend by tourist increase as increase in number of tourists in all countries, except china have lowest number of tourist in 2013 compares with in year 2012.

Overall, all countries saw increases in both tourist number and their expenditure except for China with a slight decrease in the number of tourists. It's noticeable that France was the most popular tourist destination but another European country, Italy was least visited in both years.

the table shows number of tourists and thier expenditure in two separate years in France, USA, Spain, China, and Italy.

It is clear that number of tourists and money they spent rose in all five westren countries from 2012 to 2013. Overall, Frans saw by far the highest number of tourists in both years, wereas USA saw the highest levels of spending in 2012 and 2013.

In 2012, France had the highest number of tourists at 83 million while the second highest number of visitors was in USA at 66.7 million. By 2013, although, number of tourists had risen to 84.7 million, France'S revenue was less three times than from USA which had 69 million. The year 2013 also saw slight increases in the number of tourists in France and USA, number rising by 1.7 million and 3.1 million respectively.

Number of tourists in other three countries Spain, China and Italy were lowe than those described above. Small increase, between 2013 and 2013 can be seen in each country. Finally, it is also noticeable that the levles of spending remained at 60 million or bellow in all two years.

Hello Simon, Could you tell me whether my essay looks logically well-designed or not ?


The given table compares five different countries in terms of the number of visitors and their spendings in the years 2012 and 2013.
It is clear from the table that out of five countries France was visited by the most number of tourists in both years while they spent by far more money in the USA than in other five countries. It is also noticeable that all of five countries shown on the table managed to increase their earnings from tourists from 2012 to 2013.
In 2012, 83 million tourists visited France, and this figure rose by 1.7 million in 2013. However, although the USA was visited by 66.7 in 2012 and 69.8 million travellers in 2013, tourists spent overall the biggest amount of money in this country, with 126.2 billion dollars and 139.6 billion dollars respectively.
On the other hand, China was the only country that saw a decrease in the number of tourists that visited country, with the figures falling from 57.7 to 55.7 million visitors. By contrast, whereas Italy and Spain hosted more visitors in 2013 than in 2012, Italy’s incomes from tourist spendings were lowest among five countries, with the revenues rising from 41.2 billion dollars in 2012 to 43.9 billion dollars in 2013.

Hello Simon,
I have a serious question here.
Why do you write two specific countries(France and USA) in the overview paragragh, instead of the "overall tendency"(increase, decrease)? For me, it is the most important information of the chart, so we need to mention it as the overview.
I reaaaaaaally need your help urgently, or anybody else can suggest an answer?
Thanks for all!!!!

The table compares the number of visitors and amounts of tourist expenditure in five different countries between 2012 and 2013.

It is clear from the table that the number of tourists increased slightly in each country except for in China from 2012 to 2013. In the same time, it is remarkable that tourist spendings rose in five different countries over a period shown.

France was the most visited country by 83 million travelers in 2012, rising to 84.7 million people in 2013. By contrast, Italy was the less preferred country for both years from 46.4 to 47.7 million travelers. Besides, China was the only country which experienced a reduced in the number of visitors, totally 20 million.

On the one hand, although the USA was the second most popular destination among tourists, the American government gained noticeably the highest of money from the expenditure of travelers, 126.2 billion dollars in 2012 and 139.6 billion dollars in 2013, considerably more than double of the other countries earned. On the other hand, Italy, which had both the smallest number of visitors and the least of cash from visitors in 2012, remained in the same line, by contributing its budget to 43.9 billion dollars from tourist expenditures in 2013.

Gib Simon,
It is really difficult for me to choose the two main feautures and to describe it. Please how can ou help me? I don’t find your video on that table.

Gib Simon,

The table demonstrates the number of tourist and their expenditure on five disparate countries in the year 2012 and 2013.

evidently, The number of traveller to france in 2012 was 83 billion which was certainly increased by 1.7 billion along with the expenditure by 2.5 billion in the year 2013 .Within the interval of two years,USA had second highest number of visitors(69.8 million)which significantly aided to accumulate the revenue of 139.6 billion from its tourism sector.Because Italy had least number of tourist i.e. 47.7 billion in 2013, it had been only able to generate 43.9 billion of income which was comparatively lower than that of other countries.

furthermore,though the external population of Spain and China were almost same in 2012 ,it went on rise and their amount of expenditure got desperate and witnessed to 60.4 and 21.7 billion in 2013 respectively.

overall, although the france had attracted large number of tourist ,people were preferring to spend most of their income in USA while fewer in Italy.

please check my weakness and mistake sir!!

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