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December 31, 2014

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Thank you simon sir.This is the last lesson in 2014.Hope you will bring more technique and resources to improve our english.Happy new year 2015 to every human being.This new year will return more happiness and fulfill wishes

Thanks Pachu. Happy New Year!

hello
simon, thank you so much for your support. May god give you more strength to help us. I always inspire from your way of writing and i have your ebook as well, which also have a collection of topics n related vocabulary.
thanks a lot
happy new year simon 2015.

happy new year simon

Happy New Year, dear Simon and friends...Hope this year will bring you luck, happiness, and full of amazing days...May our each day will be more intresting than our today...

Thank you for your advice Simon :D
And btw, wish you a Happy New Year with full of success and happiness!

Relying on computers by students is growing fast more than they used to around the world and this has been keeping them on various skills. Although playing computers is affecting on different issues of pupils in case of study, major benefit of this should be considered and I would disagreed the above mentioned topic.
Certainly, without reading and writing any subject in academic career, good results are not achievable but those who are maintaining the education by the role of computers, are able to target their glorious successful result which proves the evidence of affecting on reading and writing negatively. Rather than they are shining in future because of utilizing computers. In addition, instead of remarkable adverse effect on study, communication in English and downloading variety of IELTS courses and others enhance the capability of realizing the large complicated passages or stories, for example, that they would have to collect from related books causing them plenty of time in collection. Whenever they practice the different issues from websites which are not possible rapidly from books. Finally, if school children have weakness in reading and writing, teachers can help to eliminate it by taking regularly.
Although dependency on computers has a great benefit, some negative impacts on it have been noticed nowadays. Firstly, teachers should take necessary step to keep in touch with them in lieu of using computers constantly. Incessant computer utilization makes the students lower quality of reading and writing. Secondly, teaching method can change the student’s learning method.
In recapitulation, I think that computer can help the student to extend their ability learning instead of endangering the skills.

dear sir,
please assess this essay how score I can get.
thanks.

Dear Simon,
Thank you for your lessons. I wish you and your family a very happy new year
Best regards,
Binh

I think your score is between 5.5-6.

thank you for your advice simon

Dear all learner, i don't buy simon's video
writing lessons due to lack of opportunities for Bangladeshi. I'm incapable to open the pay pal account. Please anybody can give me your collected materials by cost. If possible contact me afrinbau@gmail.com. I'm waiting for anyone's response.

hello simon, i am going to write main body paragraphs as shown below.
as you written in the introduction that you completely disagree about wildlife essay. so, i continue from that point. its a opinion essay but examiner own view as well.
paragraph 1.
Wild animals have several benefits for human's life. Firstly, many extracts from animals are used in curative and health sustaining food supplements. Squalene in sharks, for example, is a remarkable benefit to prevent cancer and other life threatening disease conditions. Secondly, wildlife helps to promote biodiversity which is essential for a healthy and balanced ecosystem. for instance, if wild animals extinct due to deficiency of their natural habitats, the delicate balance will be disturbed and the species below in food chain will be affected automatically. Therefore, promoting diversity is the main reason to save wildlife. Thirdly, wild animals also serve food to humans such as number of coastal and marines (fishes, shell, crabs) support human population among natural resource dependent countries.

hello simon
i will be really thankful if u will have a quick look on my one paragraph. just the way of style. is it right way to start main body paragraph. i will be really appreciated.
thanks

paragraph 2.
however, opponents of saving animal's life might be thinking about other resources to save for human's life such as food, shelter and clothes to meet the basic needs for survival. But they are completely unaware that animals promote scientific and medical knowledge through animal testing and thousands of people are saved from painful diseases and deaths in hospital everyday. This incredible gift of medicine would not be possible without animals. Thus, animals give us a number of benefits which can not be ignored according to my point of view.
thanks simon.
can u check my way of writing. is it right way to do writing for task 2
thankyou.

I have written my own opinion essay as below. I have left the introduction same.

Some people argue that it is pointless to spend money for the protection of wild animals because it should be allocated to humans. But I completely disagree with this point of view.

In the recent years, the places and land areas where human live have been kept pace with soaring population throughout the world. With so many areas of woodland being cut down, a lot of wildlife is losing its natural habitat. Creatures across land, rivers and the seas are being decimated as humans kill them for their consumption, while polluting and destroying their habitats. Because of destroying forest areas, where wildlife keep the main eco balance of our planet, desertification is being happened dramatically. These consequences of the way extend beyond jeopardizing human health and wild nature.
The argument in favour of wasting resources to protect wild animals would be definitely wrong view. Firstly, the key factors to manipulate ecosystem and to keep balance equally are human and wildlife. If majority of wild animals are decimated without integrated protection, the motherland will be certainly renewed the nature. Secondly, even wild animals have equal right as same as human. So people in the worldwide have to agree with the point that wild animals have to be shared the natural resources with them. People are not the only one owner of those resources.
In conclusion, I would like to highlight the view of point that protecting wild animal is one of the main key factors of natural habitat, and I believe that there are plenty of space for wild animals in the 21st century.

PS: I have expressed my view in the second paragraph with firstly and secondly, without finally. Is this ok or should I certainly include finally? any comments and corrections are welcome all :) Happy new year!

Dear all,
i am registered the date of this month, I need someone to revised my essay as below:
It is true there are no safely place for Wild animals today, while some of critics saying that it isn’t worth to using the resources for protect them, even waste money, but I completely disagree with this statement.
On the one hand, I don’t think that it is a waste of resources and budgets ,as man who dominated the world from God , whose were managed the kinds of species having more place to live and to free activity on earth¬
for instance, in some of country, they had been setting the big plan or projects, which means the authority took the duty ; to spend amount of money on the Animal conservation area , that is meat not allowing people to distrust .
Furthermore, the scientific research projects was the government hired the scientist what it is using the biodiversity for revered endanger species’ gene , whereas, training the local resident to take care the new beast . let them growth up in natural, consequently, if the man is more aware of protecting the wild species. The more benefits shall be feedback to us. The species maintained inhabit in natural environment for thousands years; those are the balanced ecosystem and the food chain.
In conclusion, I totally disagree that it is a wasting money and resources for protecting the wild species, whatever, man shall be courage take duty on wild animals . let them have more place to live and more kinds of beast.

if possible assessment this essay according to the Ielts 4 standards . there are Loxical , Grammar, .....etc ,
Merci

Some people argue that it is pointless to spend money on the protection of wild animals because we humans have no need for them. I completely disagree with this point of view.

Firstly, animals make this world richer and more interesting and more beautiful place for us to live in. Secondly, animals help us in many important ways. They give us meat to eat, milk to drink and we can make things to wear from their coats. Scientists learn a lot from animals and this help them to understand people. We take things from animals, alive or dead, to help ill people. Thirdly, it is natural for us to protect animals because we are animals too. Without helping, many animals will be extinct. People and animals live in one world, our land is their land, our rivers are their rivers. We want to protect animals because at the same time we are protecting our world.

To maintain biodiversity and preserve life, spending resources on animals will never be a waste. In fact, protecting animals guarantee our children a better future world. Countries can open national parks, big and beautiful places without buildings. These are home for animals living freely, but also for bird, trees and flowers. Visitors can go there but they cannot hunt or take things away. Another possibility is that politicians can think of ways of stopping hunting and pollution. But the most important is that each of us must join hand to protect animals. Every act of saving animals is appreciable.

In conclusion, we have no right to decide whether or not wild animals should exist, and I believe that we should do everything we can to protect them.

Dear Simon, I finally got 7 in writing today. I feel so grateful and just want to say thank you. Your work on this website has been helping me to build confidence and every time I come here I will learn something regarding each section of IELTS test.

Thank you again and I believe many of us have the same feeling.

hello sir,
i have question

my teacher suggest me to write following way of opinion type of task 2 essay.

Introduction

*general statement (rephrase topic)

*opinion sentence 1. (Wild animals have no place in the 21st century)

*opinion sentence 2. (so protecting them is a waste of resources)

*Thesis statement (in this essay, i will discuss some arguments for and against )
there will be total 4 sentences for the intro

conclusion

" in conclusion, i am convinced that".....(summary of personal opinion.)

a suggestive ending e.g wild animals should be treated well etc

my question are

can we mention any suggestion in conclusion?

this intro and conclusion is good for band 7 or 8? i know body of essay is also important .

please sir guide me i am very confused .
i shall be very thank full to you for your kind response .

my test is on 29 jan

How to approach this topic .

Children today play very violent games. This must be the reason for the increase in violence and crime in most major cities of the world.

What are your opinions on this?

hi Simon. here is my answer for this essay. can you give me a comment for my essay.

Some people argue that it is pointless to spend money on the protection of wild animals because we humans have no need for them. I completely disagree with this point of view.
There are a variety of reasons, it would definitely be wrong to have no defense on animals. Firstly, visitors will travel and view the zoos where animals are living in, and it can bring back benefits for local or country. Secondly, it is obviously difficult for police to find out criminals who use illegal drugs if they do not have instructions. For example, dog can have ability to navigate the place where thieves are lurking and help police officers in this case. Finally, some restaurants are using animals in the processing of making food. They provide the demand of meat and cooking meals.
In my opinion, protecting animals is a way of balance ecosystem. Nowadays, with a lot of companies which are building up. It makes the country becomes noisier and people feel less relaxed, and they want to go to some places which have plants and animals to have fun. Secondly, it is not waste too much if we have places for animals. The reason for this is, animals can receive food from plants which they are living naturally, and we do not have to provide a lot of food for them.
In conclusion, we have no right to decide whether or not wild animals should exist, and I believe that we should do everything we can to protect them.

Dear learners and simon,

Here is my introduction:

It is true that there are no habitats for wild life in the 21st century. However, i do not agree with idea that they should not be protected.

Some people hold an opinion that spending money on wild animals is entirely useless because their presence on earth do not provide any benefit to human. However, my point of view is completely opposite to this phenomenon.

In conclusion, it is not necessary that everything born in this world for human's advantages. I believe that wild animals are as important as endangered animals.

Please elaborate

Thank very much ielts friend's Khan.

Some people argue that it is pointless to spend money on the protection of wild animals because humans have no need of them. I deplore with this point of view.

It is completely understandable that wild animals have no right to live on the earth as humans do.Prominently, it is not our job to decide who can live or cannot live.Secondly,they have their place in ecosystem because it must be halted due to extinction of species.To cite an epitome, food chain will be disrupted.Finally, variety on the earth is utmost necessary because we can do entertainment in the wild area of the zoo and can also know about creatures of the GOD. Moreover, it is beneficial for the Government to collect money from the local and foreign visitors.

In my opinion, money spent on wild animals not at all a waste.They are very useful to us because scientists do experiments on animals and make new medicines, which are useful for us but sometimes, medicines leave lethal affects on animals.So, it is the moral duty of human beings to take care of good companions of ourselves.Last but not least, these animals are beneficial for study of evolution.For instance, scientists create new breeds of animals with the help of theories and usually new breeds are giving enormous benefits to us.

In conclusion, it seems to me that human beings have no right to decide whether or not wild animals should exist, and I believe that we should do everything we can to protect them.

How much band score I can get with this essay? Please simon tell me.Is it sufficient and how can I improve?

Why is Simon not replying to you all?

You all wrote many paragraphs for him to check and asked many questions but I cant see the answer at all. He just replyed once and that was for new year. Wish you all good luck for next time when you ask the question.

Hi Mashood and Gurinder,

I'm afraid I can't reply to most comments because I receive too many. It's impossible for me to offer essay checking here - I would receive hundreds of essays if I did this. I hope you understand.

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