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Tuesday, September 27, 2011

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Hi Simon,

Thanks for this clip. It's helpful.

Hi Simon,
my answers...I can‘t catch those words...
shorter life
weight

Aids
killer
healthy care

1. Life Span
2. overweight
3. die-related
4. killer
5. health care

1.shorter lifespan
2. overweight
3. diet-related
4. killer
5. health care

1.shorter lifespan
2.overweight
3.diet-related
4.killer
5.health care

thank you

Thanks for sharing !!!

shorter life
overweight
diet-related
killer
health care

thanks=)

Hi Simon thankyou for sharing nice video on obesity.I have got one question abt writing task 2. Can you tell me whether i have written right idea about topic or it looks that i am off from topic. Can you plz rectify my grammer sentences esp those i have point out plz b/c i cannot found right words.Here IS THE QUESTION

Some say that artists (musicians, writers, painters) should be supported by the government. Others think it would be waste of money. Discuss both arguments and give your opinion. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Here is my answer.

People hold different views about whether or not goverment should help artists. Altough i accept that goverment have many other responsiblities where they need to allocate / invest money, i disagree with the idea that artists should recieve no support from the state.
There are several reasons why assisting musicians, painters and writers could be seen as waste of money. Firstly, goverment need to ...... about many global concern such as unemployment, poverty , crime and pollution.Therefore goverment need to balance needs carefully before spending large amount of money on art. Secondly,people need jobs, food housing and good medical care before any form of entertainment. Finally, sometime goverment tend to spend unwisely.They build huge museums or fund expensive projects like theaters and operas without measuring quality. As a result, people don not like it and find it as waste of money.

simon have i used word allocate correctly or invest is the right word there.ASSISTING is correct or not
LOOKAFTER TAKE CAREIS RIGHT WORD WHERE I LEAVE SPACE. if u will give me little feedback it wold be very helpfull for me
THANX

sorry for many minor punctations spelling mistakes.

My answers are as following:

1-shorter lifespan
2-overweight
3-diet-related
4-killer
5-health care

Here is 3rd para and conclusion. plz tell me one thing more is coherence is ok.

Despite the above arguments,i believe that goverment should try to support artists. Art is important part of nation's culture. We need to remember our poems,songs historical books,languages and crafts,these all are provided by artists.Furthermore,art tell us how to live a life. After having a hectic day people like to listen to music.Which lead to relax their mind. In addition, we should not forget that art provides a way for humans to express themselves, and it makes us realise the beauty around us. By spending money on artists, goverment may also help and entertain people.
In conclusion, altough goverment have many urgent demands on their bugets. Money can fulfill body's need but to fulfill soul's need, we need art too.

Simon i don not like my conclusion how can i improve it plz tell me abt things which i asked. SORRY to bother you but at this time i need ur urgent help b/c i can not afford to higher a teacher. I found abt ur website its really good.

1) short life span
2) overweight
3) Diet Related
4) killer
5) Health Care

1. shorter lifespan
2. overweight
3. diet-related
4. killer
5. health care

CORRECT ANSWERS FROM SIMON:

1. shorter lifespan
2. overweight
3. diet-related
4. killer
5. health care

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Hi rk,

I'm afraid I don't give essay feedback or corrections (everyone would ask for the same help if I did this). Just one tip: we don't say 'look after about' or 'take care about'. Just write: 'governments HAVE many (global) concerns...'

You seem to have the right idea. Sorry I can't help more - it wouldn't be fair on other people if I did.

Dear Simon
You are great . Thanks for your amazing website & useful tips .

God bless you

No problem Ali

Hi simon
I impressively guided by your informative advice in the way to prepare for my IELTS.

for now here are my answers

ten years younger
overweight
diet related
killer
your health
care
looking your for wards
thank u

Hi tesfit,

I'm glad you like the site. Here are the correct answers:

1. shorter lifespan
2. overweight
3. diet-related
4. killer
5. health care

life span
overweight
die related
killer
health care

Thanks a lot Mr.Simon it's very helpful

Shorter life
Fat
Diet-related
problem
health care

cant find the clip...

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