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Hi,Simon.
The figure above illustrates the emigration and immigration rates to the U.K. between 19999 to 2008. or (over the last 10 years).
The most obvious things are;
1,the figure for emigrants in 2004 and 2007 recorded the highest rate compared with other years.
2,the lowest rate of emigration was in 2003 and 2002,nearly 170 thousand emigrants.
3,both immigration and emigration trends oscillated over those years,but it is clear that the immigration trend is twice as high as emigration trend,approximately 600 thousand and 400 thousand respectively.
This the most crucial findings I have noticed.KIND REGARDS. AHMED

1999 and 2008,sorry for that.

The graph illustrates the intenational migration of the number of people in the United Kingdom over a period of ten years.

In 1999, just over 4million people immigrated, and this figure soared to 5million by mid 2001. By 2004, the number of people reached to around 6million, and remained approximately at the same level by the end of 2008. Conversely, emigration rate in 1999 was 3million, and it soared attaining roughly below 4million by 2004. By the end of 2008, the number went up to just above 4million.

Moreover, the net figure remained below 2million during 1999to 2003. However, from 2004 to 2007, it was slightly above 2million, whilst by the end of 2008 the figure bounced back to the same level as it was in 1999.

In a nutshell, the immigration rate was higher than emigration. whereas, the net rate remained relatively stable during this period.

Thanks Ahmed and Sachin. You've got the right idea.

The main thing to notice is that the figures for immigration were significantly higher than those for emigration. However, both immigration and emigration rates rose over the period shown. Net immigration peaked in 2004 and 2007.

Tricky!

Hello Simon,


The graph explains the trend of migration, in and out of United Kingdom from 1999 to 2008.
The overall trend of both emigration and migration is increasing over the period of ten years. It is clear that more people came in then moved out.
According to the graph the number of immigrants rose continuously from 450000 in 1999 to 600000 in 2004, and remained constant till 2008 with only slight fluctuation in between.
Whereas number of emigrants remained constant at 300000 till 2001 then it increased gradually to 400000 in 2006 followed by a slight drop in 2007 and then raised again.
Overall it shows that number of migrants remained between 150000and 200000. However maximum number was recorded in 2004 and 2007.

Thanks.

As an overall view, it is evident that the populations of immigrant and emigrant of the UK both had increasing trends with different paces during the period given, so the net of them influented in the same period and peaked in 2004.

The graph illustrates the figure of international migration in the United Kingdom between the years of 1999 and 2008.
By and large, the number of immigration was always bigger than the one of emigration over the ten-year period. There was a constant discrepancy between these two figures during the 1999-2003 period. It peaked in 2004 when the number of immigration was roughly 600 thousand and the one of emigration was about 350 thousand.
Generally, the number of immigration increased steadily over the ten-year period whereas the one of emigration dropped sharply in 2003 then peaked afterward in the following year.

Please give comment on my writing.
Thank you a lot, Simon.

The given chart compares the statistical data concerning long-term international migration to the UK over a period of 9 years.
It is clearly can be seen that Immigration's figures is considerably more than Emigration and net and the most striking characteristic also is that most international migration was occured in 2004 and 3years later.

The line graph compares the differences between the number of immigration and emigration in thousands whereas the table describes long-term migration to the UK over the last 10 years. Although the there was an increase in the number of both immigrant and emigrant people, the net migration trend showed few changes in number during the period

1. the number of immigration gradually rose, from around 450,000 people in 1999 to nearly 600,000 people in 2008. Similarly, starting from two-thirds the rate of immigration, the figure of emigration recorded an increase of approximately 150,000 during the period.

2,Over the first 5 years, the rate of net migration remained constant around 180,000 people. The number peaked of about 250,000 in 2004 and reached a plateau of 200,000 following 2 years. The last 2 years of the period experienced a slight drop, recording a decrease of more than 40,000 people.

The graph presents the movement of long term international migration in the UK from 1999 to 2008.

It is clear from the graph that the number of immigrants was higher than that of emigrants by a large margin over the period. Also, both figures show upward trends with slight fluctuations.

From 1999 to 2004, the number of people who moved to the UK increased constantly to just under 0.6 millions and remained there until 2008. On the other hand, the figure for the emigrants which grew up to 0.4 millions by 2006, plunged about 50 thousands in 2007 and soared in the next year peaking at over 0.4 millions.

Turning to the net migration, there was no significant change during the period, hovering just around below 200 thousands. 2004 and 2007 were the only years when the number exceeded 200 thousands, reaching at 250 thousands and 230 thousands respectively.

FROM SIMON:

Thanks for your contributions. Everyone seems to have the right idea.

As you might already know, I don't correct or score people's writing on this site - if I did this, too many people would send me their work.

However, I hope you found it useful to do this task and to see what other students have written. I recommend reading all of the paragraphs above because you can learn something from each of them.

Good work!

Simon

Hi,simon.sometimes I find out some grammer mistakes done in writing by mates ,shall we advise each other and correct mistakes on your website .THANKS.AHMED

Hi Ahmed,

If you are happy for other students to correct your mistakes, I'm sure they won't mind if you help them with theirs.

Simon,
hello....
Can you give an ideal essay to the given illustration so that I will have a perfect idea on how to prepare for the tast 1 in writing ielts exam.
Thanks in advance.
july

Hi July,

I'll put my essay on the website on Thursday.

Hi simon,
Is it correct to say "the figure bounced back to the same level as it was in 1999."? can we use the expression "bounce back" instead of decrease?
Thanks,

Hi Lulu,

"Bounced back" is correct English, but it's not really 'academic' style - it's more journalistic. I'd write "returned".

Hope this helps

Thank you so much.

I have another question please, I translated the words "immigration" and "emigration" and I found that it's the same meaning, isn't?

Hi Lulu,

No, "immigration" means coming IN to a country, and "emigration" refers to leaving a country. It's almost the same because you leave one country and arrive in another.

Thanks a lot for clarifying it to me.

No problem Lulu.

The chart presents statistical information from a survey regarding the number per thousands of immigration, emigration, as well as net migration in the United Kingdom between the years 1999 and 2008.

It can be clearly seen that both immigration and emigration had significant increase after the 10-year period. However, the net migration did not show noticeable change after 10 years.

In 1999, immigration rate started at about 450,000, the figure incessantly increased until it reached its peak on 2004 at almost 600,000. There was an erratic change from 2004 up to the last year where the number ended at the same number in 2004.

On the other hand, the emigration rate started at almost 300,000 in 1999. The figure continuously escalated until 2002 at about 260,000 and remained constant until 2003. The result became unpredictable from 2003 until 2007 until it managed to reach the highest rate at about 420,000 in 2008.

Lastly, the net migration scale began at less than 200,000 and remained on the same level until it reached the highest number on 2001 at about 250,000. Surprisingly, on the last year, the rate ended same as on 1999.

Hi Brisbane,

My advice is to try to compare the 3 things rather than write a separate paragraph for each. You will get a higher score if you compare the figures.

Have a look at my essay:

http://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2010/11/ielts-writing-task-1-sample-essay-migration.html

thank you for your comment simon. God bless you!

No problem.

Hello simon,i am going to write ielts on aug 13.i am really desperate without a teacher to give me feedbacks especially rsgarding my writing tasks.could you help me with that.thanks in advance.GOD BLESS U.

Hi Minumol,

I'm afraid I don't offer essay correction and scoring. If I did this, everyone would send me their essays.

I do know another teacher who offers a correction service (you have to pay). If you're interested, send me an email and I'll give you his details. My email is: ieltssimon@gmail.com

The graph illustrates the changes in the number of immigration and emigration in Britain over a period of one decade from 1999 to 2008.

It is clear that both the two kind of people increased over the period. There was more immigration then emigration in the UK, and the difference between 1999 to 2008 remain stable although there was fluctuation during the period.

The chart shows the immigration process in the UK, over a period of 10 years.
Overall, the rate of immigration fluctuated throughout. In addition, the year 2004 recorded the highest figure.

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