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1. There are around 2 - 3 sentences for each paragraph that you wrote.
2. Paragraph 1: show -> illustrate; planned development -> proposed changes; the center -> the central area.
3.The 2nd paragraph give the main point of the change. And the next paragraph describe more specifically about this main point.
4.The present and future tense are used in the answer.
5. The use of direction vocabulary helps the reader easily identify the location of subject described in the essay.
6. It is clear that...; with regard to; we can see that...; Currently; However, it appears that...
7. remain; reduced in size, more new houses
8. pedestrianisation, demolish.

6. LINKING:
Para 1: introduces topic word "changes"

Para 2: -> "principal changes" -> "other developments" (substituting developments for changes)

Para 3: (ideas) change = (first) "map as it is now" -> "second map"

Para 4: now -> "Currently" (map 1) vs "However" (map 2) This sentence mentions "shops" and final sentence picks up on "shops" too.

I totally agree with Thao Tran's answer, and I just want to give my grasp to this essay.

Generally, the essay develops by describing the changes of the road as it is summerized in the second paragragh.

So in the third paragragh, the comparision is mainly about the main road and the planned pedestrian zone, plus the diverted ring road. Following it, the fourth paragragh is about the shops along either side of the main road. It reveals the changes of the two sides.

@ Liu Xi

"I just want to give my grasp to this essay." Not quite idiomatic.

Perhaps -> I would just like to demonstrate my understanding of this essay.

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=shows+no+grasp+of%2Cshowed+no+grasp+of%2Cshowed+little+grasp+of%2Cshows+little+grasp+of%2Cshowed+little+grasp+of+the%2Clittle+grasp+of+the+*%2Cdemonstrated+his+grasp%2C+demonstrate+my+understanding&year_start=1900&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Cshows%20no%20grasp%20of%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cshowed%20no%20grasp%20of%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cshowed%20little%20grasp%20of%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cshows%20little%20grasp%20of%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cshowed%20little%20grasp%20of%20the%3B%2Cc0%3B.t2%3B%2Clittle%20grasp%20of%20the%20%2A%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Blittle%20grasp%20of%20the%20situation%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Blittle%20grasp%20of%20the%20real%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Blittle%20grasp%20of%20the%20nature%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Blittle%20grasp%20of%20the%20meaning%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Blittle%20grasp%20of%20the%20realities%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Blittle%20grasp%20of%20the%20issues%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cdemonstrated%20his%20grasp%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cdemonstrate%20my%20understanding%3B%2Cc0

OR -> explain my understanding of..../explain my viewpoint.

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=explain+my+viewpoint+%2Cexplain+my+understanding+of&year_start=1900&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Cexplain%20my%20viewpoint%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cexplain%20my%20understanding%20of%3B%2Cc0

Note that it would be "viewpoint on" not "of".

You can use "grasp" as per the phrases in the first graph.

Task 1 is not an essay. We refer to it as a 'report'.

I just want to add some examples to Thao Tran's answer.

2. Another example of paraphrasing:
the construction of ring road -> the building of this road (Para 2)

4. Simon used future simple for almost the whole essay. Exceptions are those depicting the map (using present simple in both cases):
_ Looking at the map..., we can see... main roads run through..
_ The second map shows
8. Some academic vocabulary:
"with regard to"= on the subject of
"accompany"= partner
"pedestrianisation"
"divert on to"= reroute

I'd like to correct my previous answer
4. Simon used 2 tenses in this report. _Sentences depicting the layout of the town centre at present are written in Present Simple.
Ex: The first sentence in each paragraph.

_ Future simple is used for those presenting changes in the future.

1) Introduction:1 sentence
Overview : 2 sentence
Each Bp :3 sentence
2) The maps= The diagrams
show= illustrate
centre=the central area
now and plans for development= some proposed changes
3)Idea of construction of a ring road,
current situation of town
Number of changes around the ring road
4) Introduction : present simple tense
Overview : Future simple tense
Body paragraphs : present simple + Future simple tense
5)East to West (Right to Left)
North=top
South=bottom
6)cohesive devices :with regards to, However, and, but,either
7)comparison language : Ist and last sentence of last paragraph
8) less common vocabulary :accompany, pedestrianisation,some

Good analysis guys.

Dear Simon I really appreciate your website ~
I go through many essays
AND I am really confused about how to use correctly over the __-years period! !!!
Which one is so-called 10-year period?!
(A)2001-2010 (B)2000-2010

I tried to find the answer online ,but just failed !
Hope you can answer !!! So many thanks 🙏

@ Kristin

There are examples of both on google books:

https://www.google.com/search?lr=lang_en&biw=1213&bih=958&tbs=lr%3Alang_1en&tbm=bks&ei=-DROW-yqAs7X-Qad9Y7IDw&q=%22over+a+ten+year+period+from%22&oq=%22over+a+ten+year+period+from%22&gs_l=psy-ab.3...16287.17261.0.18070.5.5.0.0.0.0.195.583.0j3.3.0....0...1c.1.64.psy-ab..2.0.0....0.Dbi-feuTvpc

https://www.google.com/search?lr=lang_en&biw=1213&bih=958&tbs=lr%3Alang_1en&tbm=bks&ei=dzVOW4H5Jpbu-Qb0yLr4Cw&q=%22over+the+10+year+period+from%22&oq=%22over+the+10+year+period+from%22&gs_l=psy-ab.3...8905.10664.0.10911.4.4.0.0.0.0.196.579.0j3.3.0....0...1c.1.64.psy-ab..1.0.0....0.Lzl0MayAHkU

There are fourteen instances of "10 year period from 1990 to 2000" and twelve of "10 year period from 1990 to 1999", so it seems both are used about equally.

https://www.google.com/search?q=%2210+year+period+from+1990+to+1999%22&lr=lang_en&tbs=lr:lang_1en&tbm=bks&ei=NTZOW5CNKoSi-QaKsZfIBQ&start=10&sa=N&biw=1213&bih=958&dpr=1

https://www.google.com/search?q=%2210+year+period+from+1990+to+2000%22&tbm=bks&ei=aDZOW43jL5ndhwP6xpL4Cw&start=10&sa=N&biw=1213&bih=958&dpr=1


dear Mr. Simon
I bought Cambridge IELTS 13 yeastarday.There are two difficult map questions in writing task 1 in this book.can you help me an give me an example answer for these question?

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