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Hi Simon,

Can you give me some suggestions about the Writing task 2 in the Test 2 of Cambridge 13 book?

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

I thank you so much!

Hoa

We have published Band 9 samples for all the essays in Cambridge 13 on our Chinese Wechat and Weibo pages.

If you are not Chinese and you want to see them, please give me a way to contact you and I can send them to you.

Hi @Sjm

Could you please send to my email address at thanhhuong015@gmail.com?

Thank you so much!

Hi, sjm
Could you send me Cambridge book 13 if It is possible then I will send you my email.


Thank you buddy

Puneet

Sorry but I am not distributing other people’s material, only samples written by me and my team. As I said we have posted the samples already. I’ll see if I can post a link here for those of you who are not Chinese.

The essay is at this link

https://www.dropbox.com/s/kaaqvpo446o0a0w/IELTS%2013%20Essay%202.pdf?dl=0

Thank you!

Hi @sjm
Could you also send the sample essay to me, thanks a lot. My email:fenris_peter@yahoo.com.tw

Click on the link in the comments.

Hi Simon, I have a question about a word of organizing essay. We would get lower scores if we give our perspectives in IELTS writing Task 1, would not we? Does the word of interestingly consider as an opinion?

C.K.

BRTISH COUNCIL state:

IELTS Academic Writing test
Write in a formal style in the IELTS Academic Writing test.

In Task 1 you will be presented with a graph, table, chart or diagram. You will be asked to describe, summarise or explain the information in your own words. This might involve describing and explaining data, describing the stages of a process or how something works, or describing an object or event.

In Task 2 you will be asked to write an essay in response to a point of view, argument or problem. You should find the issues interesting and easy to understand.

"Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant."

Notice that Task 2 is argumentative, and requires a response, whereas Task 1 is purely descriptive, or explanatory, and there is no mention of "point of view". That is not to say, however, that to some degree it is necessary to interpret the data in order to make comparisons, so that we can write X is much higher than Y.

To me, "interestingly" falls more into the category of interpretation, rather than expressing a point of view.

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=_START_+Interestingly%2CIt+is+noteworthy+that%2CIt+is+noticeable+that%2CIt+is+noted+that%2C_START_+Similarly&year_start=1800&year_end=2000&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2C_START_%20Interestingly%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2CIt%20is%20noteworthy%20that%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2CIt%20is%20noticeable%20that%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2CIt%20is%20noted%20that%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2C_START_%20Similarly%3B%2Cc0

https://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/interestingly

https://www.google.com/search?q=%22interestingly%22&lr=lang_en&tbs=lr:lang_1en&tbm=bks&ei=tGALW6_NJIGg8QXunKvgAw&start=10&sa=N&biw=1216&bih=958&dpr=1

https://takeielts.britishcouncil.org/prepare-test/test-day-advice/writing-test-advice

Hi Oleg,

Thank you for the explanation.

I answered this question before reading the comments.What score could be this description?

The bar chart compares the number of Northern Ireland’s people in different age groups who visited the emergency care ward of hospital during the December in 2016 and 2017 ( Numbers are per 1000 people)

As can be seen from the chart, the figures for December 2017 experienced a gradual increase compared to those of December 2016. It can be clearly seen that the highest proportion of visitors were aged 75 and over.

In 2016, around 6.5 percent of elderly people, who were older than 74, visited the emergency care department of the hospital, which was the highest proportion among all age groups. The second most proportion was children younger than 5, about 5 percent. The least proportion of people, just over 2%, who visited the hospital emergency care was aged 5-15. The figure for 16-74 age groups was about 3 percent which was roughly half of that of those who were 75 and older.

The figures for December 2017 were fractionally higher than those of 2016 in all age groups, less than 0.5 percent.But, all groups has roughly the same trend as the year 2016.

@Yazdan

https://www.google.com/search?q=%22number%20of%20people%20in%20northern%22&tbm=bks&lr=lang_en&gws_rd=ssl

https://www.google.com/search?tbo=p&tbm=bks&q=%22the+figures+show%22&num=10

https://www.google.com/search?tbo=p&tbm=bks&q=%22+The+second+highest+proportion%22&num=10

https://www.google.com/search?q=%22the%20smallest%20proportion%22&tbm=bks&lr=lang_en

all groups has -> have

@ Yazdan

"Gradual" suggests a steady increase over a period of time:

https://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/gradual

However the chart gives us no information at all about what happened in the intervening months. For all we know, there was a massive slump, or wild fluctuations. So it is the wrong word.

-> the figures for December 2017 show a small increase over December 2016

"As can be seen from the chart," + "It can be clearly seen that" : repetitive and unnecessary. Simply state the overall trends and features: There was a small increase in .. The highest proportion ....

6.5 percent or 6.5 per mil ?

Although you have given the percentages, it might be better to frame the detail around the comparisons and relationships: the top two outstripped the rest by around 3:1.

Otherwise it might seem like 'mechanical iteration' through the detail. Select the detail to support your overview and supply only the relevant figures to this end, not all of them.

In your final sentence you mention "trend". A trend requires at least three data points and we only have two.

Hi,I want to ask why this sample answer did not mention the area of reading ability and handwriting????
Thank you for your answer.

Hi,
How's my introduction?
The bar chart illustrates enrollment rates to emergency health departments by agr groups in Northern Ireland in December 2016 and 2017.

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