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I'm sorry, but I need your help, Mr Simon. Can you help me?
I have a question. Can we change the sentence : " My family has lived here since 2010" into short form : "My family's lived here since 2010" ?
I'm looking forward to your answer.
Thank you very much.

Please find my answers below:

0. the population of some countries includes ... young adults = younger adults make up ... of the population of some nations

1. countries = nations

2. a relatively large number = a significant proportion

3. this situation = this kind of population structure

4. the individual, social and economic benefits = to be advantageous in a variety of ways

5. older people = elderly people

5. advantages = benefits

6. drawbacks = disadvantages

Le Luyen

Yes, you can certainly change it. Native speakers would usually do this when they are speaking.

I'm sorry, but I need your help, Mr Simon. Can you help me?
I have a question. Can we change the sentence : " My family has lived here since 2010" into short form : "My family's lived here since 2010" ?
I'm looking forward to your answer.
Thank you very much.

The right way to say this, you need to use simple tense.

1. My family lives here since 2010.
family's = we only use ' when something belong to that person or group.exp, family's watch or gold.

It is true that the world has recently seen a dramatic shift in the population in which a large proportion of younger adults makes up the population in some nations. While there are certain drawbacks of this phenomenon, I believe there are far more advantages to the economy, the society, and healthcare systems.

In conclusion, the younger population could create some problems, which is always seen as the other side of a coin, however I would argue that this population shift brings more benefits to the countries.

@Nhan

This shows the correct punctuation for 'however':

http://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2010/11/ielts-grammar-however-and-whereas.html

Looking at the entry for 'society' here:

https://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/society

Note that the meaning needed is 'The people of one’s country or community taken as a whole.' and that in this meaning 'society' is uncountable and therefore used without 'the'.

@Nhan

In contrast, "the economy" needs an article as it is countable (and has a different meaning when uncountable):

https://www.oxfordlearnersdictionaries.com/definition/english/economy

"the environment" is similar; "(the) government" depends on the meaning.

All these words are often needed in Task 2, so ..

1. a relatively large number of = a significant proportion of
2. some countries = some nations
3. you adults = younger adults
4. includes = make(s) up
5. disadvantages = drawbacks
6. advantages = individual, social and economic benefits
7. advantages = it is advantageous
8. in a variety of ways = individual, social and economic
9. older people = elderly people

@Khe
Big thanks for the correction!

@Bikram

Google Books gives 583 results for "family has lived here since";

but only 7 for "family lives here since ", of which since=because in two cases, and two others are written by non-native speakers.

https://www.google.com/search?tbm=bks&q=%22+family+has+lived+here+since+%22

My understanding is that apostrophe+s can sometimes represent "is" or "has".

@Bikram

and yes:

https://www.google.com/search?tbm=bks&q=%22family%27s+lived+here+since%22

In this easy, i will discuss the advantages and the disadvantaged of a rather large number of young people in compare with old people in some countries. I think the advantages can offset the drawback.

In conclusion, the number of young aldus is large than old people in some countries. I think the advantages outweigh the drawback.

@Mai

https://www.google.com/search?tbm=bks&ei=7K09Wq-sLonT8QW9u7bACg&q=%22more+than+offset+the+drawbacks%22&oq=%22more+than+offset+the+drawbacks%22&gs_l=psy-ab.3...8042.9673.0.10033.8.8.0.0.0.0.245.447.2-2.2.0....0...1c.1.64.psy-ab..7.0.0....0.S1LXafiXXEw

"the number of young adults is larger than old people in some countries." This is a given (a fact or premise) in the question; so there is no need to address it in the conclusion. The conclusion need only restate your opinion as to net gain or loss.

Hi Simon,

is it ok if I write the benefits of young adults and the drawbacks of older people in the two main parts separately? Thanks

Currently, in terms of population of some nations, young adults account for / make up/ constitue / represent a significantly substantial percentage in comparison with that of elderly people. Despite some unavoidable drawbacks resulted from this type of disproportional population, I would argue this is beneficial.

In conclusion / In brief, the fact that the proportion of young adults in population of some nations is dominant over that of elderly people is advantageous

Hi. I have a question that I am curious to comprehend. I always strive to get at least 7 in writing section , yet foul-up with coming up with ideas to commence my writing task 2 always pops up! Please, could you advise me? How should I modify panache of my writing to get higher? Whatever panacea that you yield is greatly appreciated!

Hi Simon, if you say disadvantages outweigh the advantages, do you give 3 reasons for advantages and 2 reasons for disadvantages to answer the question fully? Or you can just provide 2 arguments for eac view then tell reiterate on your intro and conclusion which one outweigs the other?

Sorry for my grammatical errors and spelling. I didn't proofread my question earlier. hahaha

@Van
The question does not ask for just a list of the main advantages and disadvantages; it asks you you to weigh them up. That might incude their relative importance, and other criteria such as which items are essential and why. However, in the time available it would be hard to cover all this in detail, so just stacking the numbers of examples to support your position might make it easier to maintain a consistent position throughout. See also:

http://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2017/11/ielts-writing-task-2-easy-opinion-not-real-opinion.html

@ Asadbek Akhrarov

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NiKOtoizjDY

Lots of ten-minute planning practice?

One of the keys is to write natural, pellucid prose. Sometimes this might mean using simpler, well-worn phrases. Checkout the following:

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=curious+to+comprehend%2Cis+bugging+me&year_start=1960&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Ccurious%20to%20comprehend%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cis%20bugging%20me%3B%2Cc0

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=*+foul-up%2Chad+difficulty+with+%2Cstumbling-block&year_start=1960&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t2%3B%2C%2A%20foul%20-%20up%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Ba%20foul%20-%20up%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthe%20foul%20-%20up%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bbureaucratic%20foul%20-%20up%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bsome%20foul%20-%20up%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthis%20foul%20-%20up%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bcomputer%20foul%20-%20up%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bof%20foul%20-%20up%3B%2Cc0%3B%3BA%20foul%20-%20up%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bcommunications%20foul%20-%20up%3B%2Cc0%3B%3BThe%20foul%20-%20up%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Chad%20difficulty%20with%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cstumbling%20-%20block%3B%2Cc0

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=*_VERB+panache%2C+improve&year_start=1960&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t2%3B%2C%2A_VERB%20panache%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Bhad_VERB%20panache%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bhas_VERB%20panache%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Badd_VERB%20panache%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bhave_VERB%20panache%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Blacked_VERB%20panache%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Badded_VERB%20panache%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Blacks_VERB%20panache%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bis_VERB%20panache%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bwas_VERB%20panache%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Badds_VERB%20panache%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cimprove%3B%2Cc0

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=*_VERB+panacea%2C+make+suggestions&year_start=1960&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t2%3B%2C%2A_VERB%20panacea%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Bis_VERB%20panacea%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bbe_VERB%20panacea%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bproposed_VERB%20panacea%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bknown_VERB%20panacea%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bperceived_VERB%20panacea%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bfailing_VERB%20panacea%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bseeming_VERB%20panacea%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bwas_VERB%20panacea%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bare_VERB%20panacea%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Baccepted_VERB%20panacea%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cmake%20suggestions%3B%2Cc0

@Buyin
The marking scheme for Task 2 simply states:
"sequences information and ideas logically ",
"there is clear progression throughout ",
"presents a clear central topic within each paragraph ".

There is not necessarily one best way; any plan will do if it gets you to these goals.

These days youth contributes to the major proportion of the population in contrast to elder people in some nations.This kind of trend is detrimental to a country due to the increased crime rate, economic burden, and distorted international image. In my opinion, it is associated with more disadvantages than benefits.

Consequently, it is easy to say that having more number of young population than adults in a country is a strong drawback because of a number of reasons.The elderly population is inevitably a benefit for a country.

@ Namal:
https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=*+the+major+proportion&year_start=1960&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t2%3B%2C%2A%20the%20major%20proportion%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Bfor%20the%20major%20proportion%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthat%20the%20major%20proportion%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bconstitute%20the%20major%20proportion%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bfar%20the%20major%20proportion%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Band%20the%20major%20proportion%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bof%20the%20major%20proportion%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bup%20the%20major%20proportion%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bwhich%20the%20major%20proportion%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bform%20the%20major%20proportion%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bwith%20the%20major%20proportion%3B%2Cc0

"These days youth contributes to constitutes the major proportion ... elder people older generations.."

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=elder+people%2C++older+generations&year_start=1960&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Celder%20people%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Colder%20generations%3B%2Cc0

"This kind of trend .. ": superfluous and more colloquial.

"..that having more number of young population than adults.." -> that having a greater than usual number/proportion of young people compared to adults..

"because of a number of reasons" is tautology. "for a number of reasons" is twenty times more common on books.google.com

"elderly" tends to carry the connotation "frail" (or even perhaps senile), except perhaps in the phrase "the elderly". It does suggest people over sixty.

Safe phrase to use is "older people", which could mean perhaps anyone from their mid-forties up, depending on context.

If contrasting with "young" people (that is under 30, or under 25), one option is to keep it simple and say: "people over 30" or "people over 25".

"inevitably" is not quite the same as "without a doubt".

"on the benefit", or "benefits" can refer to old age pensions, which in some countries are a massive cost and downside to younger taxpayers.

Perhaps something like:

The knowledge, experience, wisdom and skill-set of people over thirty is, without a doubt, a key/irreplaceable asset, and a major factor in economic success (or the foundation for a strong economy and/or for a healthy society) ...

@Namal:
"It is easy to say that": this phrase is often used in English when what is said is superificial or trite; and often followed by by "but" or "however" and a more difficult or deeper truth. It does not mean "the obvious conclusion is" in English.

For example:
" It is easy to say that we can reduce fear, but it is not so easy in practice."

"It is easy to say that success, wealth, friendship, aggressiveness, ego are good for you. However, when these are taken to extremes and misused, they can be damaging."

https://www.google.com/search?tbm=bks&q=%22it+is+easy+to+say+that%22

@Namal:

The collocation "strong drawback" is uncommon but sometimes used in the right context.

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=*_ADJ+drawback%2C+strong+drawback&year_start=1800&year_end=2000&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t2%3B%2C%2A_ADJ%20drawback%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Bgreat_ADJ%20drawback%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bonly_ADJ%20drawback%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bserious_ADJ%20drawback%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bmajor_ADJ%20drawback%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bchief_ADJ%20drawback%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bgreatest_ADJ%20drawback%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bmain_ADJ%20drawback%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bprincipal_ADJ%20drawback%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bconsiderable_ADJ%20drawback%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bsuch_ADJ%20drawback%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cstrong%20drawback%3B%2Cc0

These days, it is clearly seen, in some countries, that the proportion of youngsters is comparatively more than older people. Although there are some drawbacks to this situation, I believe that the advantages greatly outweigh the disadvantages.

With regards to disadvantages, first and foremost, having less number of the experienced older age group is a major con in any community. This is because those people are needed to guide the path of development. For example, most of older team leaders have already completed their training and have more than postgraduate degree plus profound and necessary experiences which are requirements for any successful team leader. As a consequence, huge work-related achievement can be offered by having older manager. Secondly, the situation of having more of younger people is a damage to social connection in the family. The reason for this is that older people often tend to communicate more. For instance, our grandparents usually used to socialize more and gather their children.

Talking about advantages, one sticking pro is people less than 50 years old are more energetic, highly productive, and more tolerant towards harsh work environment. The reason is that this age group are keen to formulate their future. For instance, some governments, nowadays, have put some solid roles to assign 60 % from the active leadership positions to youth. As a result, young people are expected to replace older ones in many sensitive top high opportunities. Another advantage is that young people are less likely to get sick. To illustrate, the prevalence of diseases among older people are nowhere near as common as youngster. Therefore, the health-related budget can be saved to more important sectors like education.

In conclusion, despite the presence of some drawback to the situation of having more young people in the community, like experience and social related issues, my firm believe is that the advantages of productivity, tendency to develop and reduce heath budget are greatly outweigh the disadvantages.

@mohamed
"con" in the sense of disadvantage really only occurs in the set phrase "pros and cons". "A con" would normally suggest a confidence trick.
https://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/con#Noun

Similarly "pro" with the sense of advantage is only used in "pros and cons". Otherwise it would mean "professional".
https://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/pro#Noun

"having older manager" (article required)

"have more than postgraduate degree" (article)

"is a damage to" -> damages (verb)

"usually used to" (implied in verb)

"my firm believe" noun=belief

"are greatly outweigh"

@mohamed

Note that "youngster" is marked old-fashioned here:

https://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/youngster

Terminology and definitions are also discussed here:

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Youth

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Old_age

It would not be normal to equate "youth" with the "under-fifties".

As this vocabulary frequently comes up in both Task 1 and Task 2 it pays to prepare.

"that the proportion of youngsters is comparatively more than that ofolder people." OR simply use the term "youth bulge"

"having alesser number " OR simply "having fewer.."

"most of older team leaders" either: most older team leaders OR: most of the older team leaders. "Most of " is used when we need "the" as well.

"more of younger people": same issue.

"Talking about advantages," OR "Turning to the advantages"

"one sticking pro": did you mean "one out-standing advantage/bonus" or "one enduring/ongoing advantage" ?

"tolerant towards harsh work environment." Environment needs an article. "tolerant of" is more common.

It would not be normal to equate "youth" with the "under-fifties".

"young people are less likely to get sick. To illustrate, the prevalence of diseases among older people are nowhere near as common as youngster. ": this section is incoherent.

http://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2016/12/ielts-vocabulary-words-that-i-dont-use.html

@mohamed

There is some comment on cohesion (which after all makes up one quarter of the score) here:

http://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2012/07/ielts-writing-advice-cohesion.html

Particularly the band nine descriptor: "uses cohesion in such a way that it attracts no attention".

What is noticeable in the essay is that many, if not all, sentences begin with a (perfectly valid) linking or referencing phrase, such as:
"With regards to disadvantages, first and foremost",
"This is because",
"As a consequence", and so on.

Agreed, no one item alone in the essay could be described as obtrusive, but Simon's model paragraph has none, (except possibly "Before ...into account):

"I agree that the majority of people work in order to earn money. Before taking any other factors into account, it is normal to first consider the salary that a particular post offers, and it is rare to hear of a person who happily takes a cut in pay when beginning a new job. We all need money to pay for our basic necessities, such as accommodation, bills and food. Many adults also have families who depend on the wages they earn, and at the same time they are conscious of the need to save for the future. If we no longer needed money, I doubt most of us would choose to continue in our jobs."

Band seven descriptor states: "uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/over-use", so maybe "over-use" would apply.

Can I write?
"It is true that younger people outnumber older people in some nations."

@Linh

72 results for "younger people outnumber":

https://www.google.com/search?tbm=bks&ei=4NBLWrLaHYG88QXjxIigCg&q=%22younger+people+outnumber%22&oq=%22younger+people+outnumber%22&gs_l=psy-ab.3...23468.27087.0.27547.10.10.0.0.0.0.233.1669.0j1j7.8.0....0...1c.1.64.psy-ab..2.1.209...0i13k1.0.RAniZKIODAs

Some journalistic quotes:

"Middle East, Africa, and South Asia are experiencing youth booms of staggering proportions: More than half of Egypt’s labor force is younger than age 30"; then uses "young people" four times.

"Young people under 30 are the majority in many countries"

" a bulging younger generation"

"adults aged 65 and over will begin to outnumber children under the age of 5 among the global population,"

" young people (defined here as those aged 15–29 years) "

"By 2020, the number of people aged 60 years and older will outnumber children younger than 5 years."

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