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Dear Simon,
Thanks for your great, informative and useful website.

May I ask if the second sentence is equivalent and OK?

1) The graph shows numbers of visits to the UK and trips abroad by UK residents and the bar chart gives information about the five most popular destinations for UK travellers. (It was written by a teacher)

2) The graph shows numbers of visits to the UK and trips abroad by UK residents, with the bar chart giving information about the five most popular destinations for UK travellers. (I wrote it)

dear Simon
by imitating your method i have just written an essay about the Cambridge12 book test 6 writing task 1:
here what I wrote
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the two diagrams compare the current layout of a town named Lislip with a plan to reconstruct the same area.
as we can see, development of the downtown involves many distinctive changes to the town's status quo.while most part of the town center will undergo major alteration ,the only part that will remain intact is the school.

it is evident that after the planned development has been done the main road will no longer exist as it will turn into the sidewalk.the shops located across the countryside will be demolished and the big shopping mall with the parking lot on the right and the bus stop on the left will be built.new apartments will be raised as well on the eastern corner adjacent to the car park.
another noticeable modification will be the establishment of the dual carriage which will act exactly like a beltway.this two-way road will connect all part of the city center through which dwellers can commute.the park will also be nearly half as large as it is now;thus,it will take up less space .by cutting down on the Park size, new accommodation will be installed just beside it.

@tiniai

"..., with the bar chart giving information ..." is grammatically okay, but this structure is usually used only to add additional detail about the same item, as the following examples demonstrate:

https://www.google.co.nz/search?q=%22with+prices+ranging%22&tbm=bks&lr=lang_en&gws_rd=cr&dcr=0&ei=UnApWufNA4LJ0gTfxZZ4

https://www.google.co.nz/search?q=%22with+prices+rising+by%22&tbm=bks&lr=lang_en&gws_rd=cr&dcr=0&ei=UHApWpvvN4iq0QT20IHwBA

https://www.google.co.nz/search?q=%22with+ages+ranging%22&tbm=bks&lr=lang_en&gws_rd=cr&dcr=0&ei=U3ApWqz-DsrP0AS41JaoCw

https://www.google.co.nz/search?q=%22with+rates+varying%22&tbm=bks&lr=lang_en&gws_rd=cr&dcr=0&ei=VHApWoHyItD-0gTQh6GgBw

https://www.google.com/search?tbm=bks&q=%22with+the+bar+chart+giving%22

http://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2017/06/ielts-grammar-with-ing.html

M'ambo

In English it is absolutely fine to put a new subject after 'with' and this is perfectly natural, as long as the items share some sort of connection. For example:

Greece recycles 10% of its waste, with the figure for Ireland being slightly higher.


The bar chart shows percentage of waste that recycled ,land fills Incineration and other method practiced in fifteen EU countries.

Overall, Europe countries preferred to practice landfill method than other waste management methods. In fact while most number of countries preferred to landfill only two countries named Australia and Denmark preferred to practice Incineration and recycled method.

Eventhough other methods is not much popular only four countries preferred to practice other methods namely Australia , Denmark, Spain and German.

Second largest preferred method of managing waste is recycle/Compost. according to given graph incineration is the second least method which practiced by the EU countries.

Dear Simon
Thank you for your great lessons. The essay is almost perfect, but I notice a small mistake that is in line 4 paragraph 3. I think that you mean Neitherland instead of "Belgium", is'nt it? Or there are something I misunderstand,can you tell me?

Dear Simon
your essay is amazing
but could use explain why you used present tenses as the chart says 2004 (SOURCE: Detra, 2004)

Thank you

Diep,

No, I chose Belgium on purpose. The figure for the Netherlands is quite similar, so you could add that country to the same sentence if you wanted.

...

HarryLe,

Just ignore that small print about the source. If no past years are mentioned in the question, we have to assume that the figures represent what happens EVERY year.

If they want you to use the past, the years will be given in the question.

@Poornima

"The bar chart shows the percentage of waste in fifteen EU countries that is either recycled , sent to land-fills, incinerationed, , or disposed using other methods."

NB if there is a list, make sure that the items are all nouns, or verbs, but not a mixture.

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=use+the+method%2Cpractice+the+method%2C*_VERB+landfill+&year_start=1800&year_end=2000&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Cuse%20the%20method%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cpractice%20the%20method%3B%2Cc0%3B.t2%3B%2C%2A_VERB%20landfill%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Bproposed_VERB%20landfill%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bexisting_VERB%20landfill%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bcompleted_VERB%20landfill%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Breduce_VERB%20landfill%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bremaining_VERB%20landfill%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bengineered_VERB%20landfill%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bincluding_VERB%20landfill%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bis_VERB%20landfill%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bdesignated_VERB%20landfill%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Boperated_VERB%20landfill%3B%2Cc0

Alternatives to "method":
approach
process
system
(disposal) mechanism

The more I read your writings, the more I feel amayzed.Superb job Simon.

In paragraph 2 used 'we ' its a personal pronoun . We can not use it in task1

Dear Simon,

I found one feature not being mention, which is that while other countries all have at least 3 methods of waste processing, Greece and Ireland only rely on landfill dumping and recycling.

Is this feature too trivial to mention?

@ harjeet Sidhu

https://wordvice.com/first-person-pronouns-in-research-paper/

Dear friends, I've just picked up IELTS 2 days ago. Thus, I am completely a newbie so I need everyone to correct my mistakes if possible. Please help me!!!!
MY ANSWER:
The bar chart illustrates the comparison of recycling level and other less environmentally friendly methods of waste management between fifteen Western nations. The unit is represented in percentage
As can be seen from the graph, most of the surveyed countries put the majority of their waste into landfill sites, whereas only four of them implement other form of waste processing and only two countries recycle approximately 50% of their total waste.
Greece has roughly 90% of waste goes into landfill, followed by Ireland at approximately 86%. These are the solely two nations which do not use incineration nor any other methods. It is reported that Austria has highest percentage of waste recycling among above countries, which is nearly 60%. Denmark, however, use incineration to manage over half of their waste products, while only under 8% and 30% of wastes are recorded to be put into landfill and be recycled respectively. The similar pattern can be found in Luxembourg where the majority of waste is processed by using incineration, which is nearly 57%, compares to only about 20% for recycling and just over 22% for landfill sites.

Dear Simon,
Will it be recommended to replace the starting sentence of overview paragraph"it is clear that"with the adverb"overall,"?

Dear Simon kindly check those 2 paraphrasing and tell me if they are okey please,

-The Bar chart shows different techniques are used by 15 europian countries in eliminating their waste either by recycling or burying in landfills or incinerating which considered as less desirable solutions for environment.

- The bar chart differentiate between the attitude of 15 europian countries in dealing with their wastes either by favorable method like recycling or less encouraged like incineration as well as bury in landfills.

thank u

......which considered as less desirable solutions to the environment ? i guess more accurate?

Dear Simon and guys, I am new to this blog, and here is my answer, plz help me correct it.

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of waste that is recycled, along with other three waste management methods in fifteen particular EU nations.

Overall, more waste goes to landfill sites than to any other refuse management facility when considering all measured countries as a whole. Only two countries recycle at least half of the waste that they produce.

To be more specific, Austria and Belgium are the most environmentally friendly of the fifteen nations as they recycle their waste at around 60% and 50% respectively. Other countries which also put a high value on recycling are Netherlands, Germany and Sweden, with the approximately recycling rate at 46%, 40% and 38%. the remained nations only recycle a small or a negligible portion of their waste.

By contrast, Greece puts nine-tenths of its waste into landfill, which is nine times higher than its recycling rate. Ireland, UK, Italy, Portugal, Spain and Finland also deal with their waste mainly by landfilling. Whilst more waste in Denmark and Luxemburg is incinerated when compared with the part of waste processed by other methods.

The chart shows percentages of various methods of waste disposition used in Europe in different states. It has been studied that states like Greece,Ireland, UK, Italy, Portugal, Spain and Finland mainly rely on Landfill procedure for waste management, with Greece being the highest contributor i.e. 90% and Denmark being the least one with only less than 10 % of its waste going for landfills. Landfill method becomes less famous as you go down the list. With decline in landfill trend, there is reciprocal rise in recycling method. Top most example is Austria which utilises 60 % of its waste for recycling.

Other procedures like incineration are mainly used in Denmark, Luxembourg, Netherlands and Sweden, with the first two being the major utilisers. This trend is non existent in Greece and Ireland and likewise less common in states like U.K, Italy and Spain. Besides these three methods, a small number of countries have also developed some other methods to get rid of waste effectively, of which Germany stands out.

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Hi, Simon

Would that be possible to change the last sentence (Finally~) to this;

In contrast, Less than 30% of wast in Luxembourg and Denmark is buried, while more of the rest is burnt than recycled or used as fertiliser.


Thank you always for your generous sharing of your knowledge.

Claire

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