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Dear Simon,
Thanks for your great, informative and useful website.

May I ask if the second sentence is equivalent and OK?

1) The graph shows numbers of visits to the UK and trips abroad by UK residents and the bar chart gives information about the five most popular destinations for UK travellers. (It was written by a teacher)

2) The graph shows numbers of visits to the UK and trips abroad by UK residents, with the bar chart giving information about the five most popular destinations for UK travellers. (I wrote it)

dear Simon
by imitating your method i have just written an essay about the Cambridge12 book test 6 writing task 1:
here what I wrote
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the two diagrams compare the current layout of a town named Lislip with a plan to reconstruct the same area.
as we can see, development of the downtown involves many distinctive changes to the town's status quo.while most part of the town center will undergo major alteration ,the only part that will remain intact is the school.

it is evident that after the planned development has been done the main road will no longer exist as it will turn into the sidewalk.the shops located across the countryside will be demolished and the big shopping mall with the parking lot on the right and the bus stop on the left will be built.new apartments will be raised as well on the eastern corner adjacent to the car park.
another noticeable modification will be the establishment of the dual carriage which will act exactly like a beltway.this two-way road will connect all part of the city center through which dwellers can commute.the park will also be nearly half as large as it is now;thus,it will take up less space .by cutting down on the Park size, new accommodation will be installed just beside it.

@tiniai

"..., with the bar chart giving information ..." is grammatically okay, but this structure is usually used only to add additional detail about the same item, as the following examples demonstrate:

https://www.google.co.nz/search?q=%22with+prices+ranging%22&tbm=bks&lr=lang_en&gws_rd=cr&dcr=0&ei=UnApWufNA4LJ0gTfxZZ4

https://www.google.co.nz/search?q=%22with+prices+rising+by%22&tbm=bks&lr=lang_en&gws_rd=cr&dcr=0&ei=UHApWpvvN4iq0QT20IHwBA

https://www.google.co.nz/search?q=%22with+ages+ranging%22&tbm=bks&lr=lang_en&gws_rd=cr&dcr=0&ei=U3ApWqz-DsrP0AS41JaoCw

https://www.google.co.nz/search?q=%22with+rates+varying%22&tbm=bks&lr=lang_en&gws_rd=cr&dcr=0&ei=VHApWoHyItD-0gTQh6GgBw

https://www.google.com/search?tbm=bks&q=%22with+the+bar+chart+giving%22

http://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2017/06/ielts-grammar-with-ing.html

M'ambo

In English it is absolutely fine to put a new subject after 'with' and this is perfectly natural, as long as the items share some sort of connection. For example:

Greece recycles 10% of its waste, with the figure for Ireland being slightly higher.


The bar chart shows percentage of waste that recycled ,land fills Incineration and other method practiced in fifteen EU countries.

Overall, Europe countries preferred to practice landfill method than other waste management methods. In fact while most number of countries preferred to landfill only two countries named Australia and Denmark preferred to practice Incineration and recycled method.

Eventhough other methods is not much popular only four countries preferred to practice other methods namely Australia , Denmark, Spain and German.

Second largest preferred method of managing waste is recycle/Compost. according to given graph incineration is the second least method which practiced by the EU countries.

Dear Simon
Thank you for your great lessons. The essay is almost perfect, but I notice a small mistake that is in line 4 paragraph 3. I think that you mean Neitherland instead of "Belgium", is'nt it? Or there are something I misunderstand,can you tell me?

Dear Simon
your essay is amazing
but could use explain why you used present tenses as the chart says 2004 (SOURCE: Detra, 2004)

Thank you

Diep,

No, I chose Belgium on purpose. The figure for the Netherlands is quite similar, so you could add that country to the same sentence if you wanted.

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HarryLe,

Just ignore that small print about the source. If no past years are mentioned in the question, we have to assume that the figures represent what happens EVERY year.

If they want you to use the past, the years will be given in the question.

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