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Hi Simon,

When I first saw this task, my first instinct was to analyze the topic. So I will start by raising questions and identify fallacies in the statement. Then propose other possibilities of not recycling. >> Means I will not agree on imposing legal requirement unless the facts are check and prioritize other alternatives.

In the second and the remaining paragraph, I will provide other alternatives and example.

Do you think this is a right approach? Will this look like a mix of analytical writing and Argument Task in GRE? Is this what IELTS examiner is looking for? I don't know if this is a legacy issue that I am approaching this question like GRE writing. Tho I only get 3 out of 6 on that..

(following post)I mean I just finished GRE and not so sure if I need to approach this writing differently.

@maggie
IELTS is a test of the range of your English and your ability to use it correctly; not of the validity of your logic or powers of analysis, although you are required to support your arguments with examples from your own knowledge or experience. Study the marking scheme:
https://www.ielts.org/-/media/pdfs/writing-band-descriptors-task-1.ashx?la=en

The marking criteria state:
"uses a wide range of vocabulary with very natural and sophisticated control of lexical features;" and "uses a wide range of structures with full
flexibility and accuracy;", so:

"by raising questions and identifying"

"possibilities of not recycling" ?
https://www.google.com/search?tbm=bks&q=%22reasons+for+not+recycling%22

"on imposing any legal requirement "

"the facts are checked"

" provide other alternatives and examples. "

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=a+right+approach%2Ca+good+approach%2Cthe+right+approach&year_start=1960&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Ca%20right%20approach%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Ca%20good%20approach%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cthe%20right%20approach%3B%2Cc0

Youth crime is increasing rapidly in many countries. Why it is increasing? and what solution can be taken to resolve the problem.


It is obviously true that the teenagers crime growing up swiftly in many countries around the world. There are several reasons behind this. However to tackle the problem, we can suggest a number of solutions.

Firstly, the most important issue of rising youth offense is lack of interaction with parents. Nowadays, almost every parents are busy with their job rather than giving time with children. Therefore, children can not get a chance to discuss their opinion with anyone and do what they want without thinking about the right path. In some cases, parents broke their relationship with each other. For example, in western countries, it is quite common to get divorce after few years of marriage and parents do not take any responsibility of child. For this reason, they have no shelter for live and they commit crime. Secondly,increasing poverty another impacts to enhance the range of negative activity. Because of shortage, teenagers mess up with different types of offenses like: theft, pick pocketing, shoplifting.

On the other hand, although it is not possible to resolve the problem entirety. By effective solutions, we can enjoy a little control over it.
One way is to tackle problem is family awareness. Parents should be caring about their children. Because, if a child grow up with a proper way, he will never involve with any negative activity. Another way is to take government action. If government construct rehabilitation club in every division to console teenagers about the negative side and punishment towards crime.

In conclusion, the ways I have discussed in my solution part if are materialized in any nation , the range of the problem will get a steady decline.
Sir,can you please check my essay.."cause and solution" eassy is really hard for me.
Can you please suggest about my mistakes.

@Khadija

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=teenage+crime%2Ccrime+is+growing%2Ccrime+rate+is+growing%2Cis+growing+swiftly%2Cteenage+crime+rates%2Cteen+crime+&year_start=1800&year_end=2000&corpus=15&smoothing=0&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Cteenage%20crime%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Ccrime%20is%20growing%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Ccrime%20rate%20is%20growing%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cis%20growing%20swiftly%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cteenage%20crime%20rates%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cteen%20crime%3B%2Cc0

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=*_VERB+my+mistakes%2C+make+suggestions+for+*&year_start=1800&year_end=2000&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t2%3B%2C*_VERB my mistakes%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Bcorrect_VERB my mistakes%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Brectify_VERB my mistakes%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bdissemble_VERB my mistakes%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bexcuse_VERB my mistakes%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bmade_VERB my mistakes%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bcorrecting_VERB my mistakes%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Backnowledge_VERB my mistakes%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Badmit_VERB my mistakes%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bsee_VERB my mistakes%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bcorrected_VERB my mistakes%3B%2Cc0%3B.t2%3B%2Cmake suggestions for *%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Bmake suggestions for the%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bmake suggestions for improvement%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bmake suggestions for improving%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bmake suggestions for improvements%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bmake suggestions for their%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bmake suggestions for its%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bmake suggestions for a%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bmake suggestions for changes%3B%2Cc0%3

@Khadija

https://www.google.com/search?tbm=bks&ei=M7gMWqarOsXo0gTEjKWwBg&q=%22youth+offense%22&oq=%22youth+offense%22&gs_l=psy-ab.3...3963.3963.0.4165.1.1.0.0.0.0.0.0..0.0....0...1.1.64.psy-ab..1.0.0....0.Hj5ZlOgcxO8

"giving time with children" ?

"parents broke their relationship with each other" ?

"to get divorce" ?

"take any responsibility of child" ?

"have no shelter for live" ?

"increasing poverty another impacts to enhance the range of .." ?

" negative activity" ?

"Because of shortage" ?

"resolve the problem entirety" ?

" is to tackle problem is" ?

"a child grow " ?

" with a proper way" ?

"will never involve with"

"government construct " ?

"the ways ... the range of the problem will get"

@ Guo

Thank you for the feedback. I will look up the information.

Recycling is just a bad joke; so too are laws to force recycling on people. We need to look at the big picture: plastics are killing the environment; and there are too many of us. It is already too late for easy solutions; we need drastic changes if homo sapiens is to survive on lifeboat Earth.

Recycling is a joke because for every kilo of plastic sent for recycling, we need two kilos of new plastic to mix it with and make a usable "new" product. So recycling simply adds to the problem, not subtracts from it. It cannot solve the issue under present-day technology.

No, plastics themselves are a huge mistake; they pollute the oceans and poison our fish. The microfibres from synthetic clothes wash off into our wastewater and thence into our waterways. Plastic bags, plastic utensils, and other plastic products are blown out over the ocean, and form huge gyres, where the plastic is ground down to plankton size. It is estimated that the ratio of plankton to plastic in the ocean is already 2:1. We are going downhill fast.

Laws making people recycle will not stop the rot: laws banning all plastic production, importing, and distribution might make a difference, but I fear it is already too late. It would also require that the cosy relationship, which exists in many countries, between government and industry would have to change dramatically; but it is hard to believe that any government would shoot themselves in the foot like this.

It is tempting to think that banning plastics is a ridiculous idea; they are just too much part of everyday life. How could we live without them? Well, the truth is that just seventy years ago at the end of the second world war, there were almost no plastics, just bakelite, nylon parachutes, and perspex for fighter aircraft cockpit covers. People still lived, loved, laughed, and died just the same, as our species has for the last 300000 years.

Plastics are not essential to life; quite the opposite; they are evil, evil as the people who manufacture and sell them, evil as the short-sighted politicians who support them.

This is the tragedy of the commons, where government is the only body that has the power to intervene and save the world; and they do too little, too late. Because it is already too late.

Just after the world war two, there was still time; there were only two billion people in the world, and our gigantic population explosion lay still in the future. A “one-child per family” policy applied worldwide might have provided a breathing space. Now we are seven billion going on nine.

The only thing that can save us now is something like bubonic plague to bring the population down to a sustainable level, cutting consumption in general and plastics in particular. Nothing else comes close to the mark.

A recycling law? Laughable, just a sideshow, a red herring, wide of the mark, worthy only of a deathly grimace. So forget about having children, and smell the roses, while you may.

@simon
Hi Simon. I have a question out of this topic and decided to post it here. I hope it is ok.

I wrote this introduction; "People have different opinions about the effect of modern technologies to our life. While many of them think that modern communication tools are very useful, others think that modern technologies destroys the variety between different cultures. Although there are some disadvantages of modern technology in my view it has more benefits than drawbacks."

to this question

"Modern technology is changing our world. This has advantages such as bringing people closer together through communication. It also has disadvantages such as destroying the differences between cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?"

and suddenly acknowledged that I am on the wrong way. Am I?

Examiner's intro to this questions is below;

Modern technology with its advantages and disadvantages has changed today’s world enormously. Communication allows people all over the world to stay in contact with each other. For instance, I can easily exchange e-mails with a good friend of mine who recently had to move back to her mother country, Malaysia. Furthermore, if I have to make a really important decision or something is bothering me, I simply have to press the buttons on my mobile phone in order to ask my parents or a good friend for advice.

SIMON, could you please give some tips how quickly decide "what to write?"

Thank you,
Ilkin

Sir,

I think you missed an article in
''ranging from a small fine to (a) community service''... part.

@Jab

"community service" is usually uncountable:

https://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/community_service

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=a+community+service+*%2Ccommunity+service%2Ca+community+service%2C+community+service+*&year_start=1960&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t2%3B%2Ca%20community%20service%20%2A%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Ba%20community%20service%20order%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Ba%20community%20service%20project%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Ba%20community%20service%20organization%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Ba%20community%20service%20program%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Ba%20community%20service%20agency%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Ba%20community%20service%20and%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Ba%20community%20service%20center%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Ba%20community%20service%20to%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Ba%20community%20service%20for%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Ba%20community%20service%20group%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Ccommunity%20service%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Ca%20community%20service%3B%2Cc0%3B.t2%3B%2Ccommunity%20service%20%2A%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Bcommunity%20service%20and%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bcommunity%20service%20organizations%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bcommunity%20service%20projects%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bcommunity%20service%20programs%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bcommunity%20service%20activities%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bcommunity%20service%20in%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bcommunity%20service%20order%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bcommunity%20service%20agencies%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bcommunity%20service%20is%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bcommunity%20service%20work%3B%2Cc0

Rarely is it counted:

"provide a community service"

"A hospital is, after all, a community service.."

hi
"in some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?"

Is this question asking whether taxes should be imposed on fast food or not? or can we write a balanced essay with the approach given in reycling essay?

@ Ilkin

http://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2017/11/ielts-writing-task-2-easy-opinion-not-real-opinion.html

http://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2015/07/ielts-writing-task-2-plan-your-ideas.html

The question does not seem to be restricted to communications and culture; they are just examples. So anything to do with the impact of technology would be fair game.

Next, the criteria, always the criteria! Happiness, health, GDP, or social harmony?

Could you imagine being an examiner and trolling through all the blah-blah essays about how wonderful the internet is? Why not be extreme, go the other way, and point out all the ills of modern techno? Cultures destroyed, no privacy, use of social media to spread violence and porn, ...., maybe even pollution, Chernobyl ... Are we happier for all of this?

@khadija

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=Because+of+shortage%2CBecause+of+the+shortage%2CBecause+of+a+shortage%2Cwith+a+proper+way%2Cin+a+proper+way%2Cwill+never+involve+with%2Cnever+be+involved+with&year_start=1960&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2CBecause%20of%20shortage%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2CBecause%20of%20the%20shortage%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2CBecause%20of%20a%20shortage%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cwith%20a%20proper%20way%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cin%20a%20proper%20way%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cnever%20be%20involved%20with%3B%2Cc0

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=giving+time+with+children%2Cspend+time+with+the+children%2Cparents+broke+their+relationship+with+each+other%2Cmy+parents+split+up%2Ctake+any+responsibility+of+child%2Ctake+responsibility+for+the+children%2Chave+no+shelter+to+live%2Care+without+shelter&year_start=1800&year_end=2000&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Cspend%20time%20with%20the%20children%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cmy%20parents%20split%20up%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Ctake%20responsibility%20for%20the%20children%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Care%20without%20shelter%3B%2Cc0

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=to+get+divorce%2C+to+get+divorced%2C+to+get+a+divorce&year_start=1800&year_end=2000&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Cto%20get%20divorce%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cto%20get%20divorced%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cto%20get%20a%20divorce%3B%2Cc0

Here is my essay! How's this?

It has been an enigmatic quandary as to whether the legalization of recycling the waste is needed to make people recycle more of their waste. However, it is evident that the laws to force people to recycle is required. Although history and literature are replete with countless examples, the event surrounding World War 1 is a paragon that reverberates my point precisely.

A historical event after World War 1 clearly demonstrates the matter pertaining to my point. Right after WW1, because of waging war, German Treasury was drained entirely, so Germany could not pay for the heavy reparations payments imposed by the Treaty of Versailles. Under this circumstance, to save the waste and instill a concept of frugality to its citizens, Germany legalized the recycling as a law through which almost all Germans now have participated in the recycling on a daily basis. Whenever citizens violated the recycling rules, a hefty amount of fine was levied on them, which brought forth the positive outcome. This efficiency of the legalization indubitably ascertains why the laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste, as the history proves.
However, the government should do more than merely legalize recycling the waste. Not to mention the legalization of recycling the waste, the government must initiate the campaigns or propaganda to educate especially children at early ages how much important the recycling is in our environment.

Furthermore, the government should provide many communities with educational conferences about many positive effects the recycling would bring us, so as for them to better keep the recycling. If the citizens observe the recycling laws very well, the government can grant them an accolade to appreciate their compliance to encourage other citizens further to follow the recycling laws.

At first glance, it seems like the legalization of recycling the waste is futile to make people recycle their waste, but the example of efficient German recycling history lucidly demonstrates why the laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste.

@Xavier

1) French, Spanish, Catalan, Portuguese often use definite article when generalizing:

Il déteste le café.
He hates coffee.

La vie est compliquée.
Life is complicated.

La vie est compliquée.
Life is complicated.

J'adore les concombres!
I love cucumbers!

Notice that in English it is often omitted (although it is sometimes possible in academic writing). This would apply in over a dozen places in your essay.

2) Some of the phrases in your essay sound quite odd in English, maybe normal in your own tongue but not for IELTS. Examples:
" enigmatic quandary "
"reverberates my point"
"pay for the .. payments "
"a hefty amount of fine"
"This efficiency of the legalization indubitably ascertains why"
"how much important "
"so as for them to better keep the recycling"
"grant them an accolade to appreciate their compliance "

The challenge is to find more "natural" phraseology, and for this one method is to google around to find a suitable commonly-used phrase.

@Xavier

https://www.google.com/search?tbm=bks&q=%22legislation+to+enforce+recycling%22

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=to+*+recycling%2Cwaste+recycling%2Ccompulsory+recycling&year_start=1960&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t2%3B%2Cto%20%2A%20recycling%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Bto%20the%20recycling%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bto%20a%20recycling%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bto%20encourage%20recycling%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bto%20promote%20recycling%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bto%20make%20recycling%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bto%20increase%20recycling%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bto%20facilitate%20recycling%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bto%20be%20recycling%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bto%20increased%20recycling%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bto%20support%20recycling%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cwaste%20recycling%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Ccompulsory%20recycling%3B%2Cc0

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=*+quandary%2Cin+a+quandary%2C*_ADJ+quandary&year_start=1800&year_end=2000&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t2%3B%2C%2A%20quandary%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Ba%20quandary%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthe%20quandary%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bthis%20quandary%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bhis%20quandary%3B%2Cc0%3B%3B%27s%20quandary%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bsad%20quandary%3B%2Cc0%3B%3BThe%20quandary%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bsame%20quandary%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bgreat%20quandary%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bof%20quandary%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cin%20a%20quandary%3B%2Cc0%3B.t2%3B%2C%2A_ADJ%20quandary%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Bsad_ADJ%20quandary%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bsame_ADJ%20quandary%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bgreat_ADJ%20quandary%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bterrible_ADJ%20quandary%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bserious_ADJ%20quandary%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bmoral_ADJ%20quandary%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bstrange_ADJ%20quandary%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bsimilar_ADJ%20quandary%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bpresent_ADJ%20quandary%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bfine_ADJ%20quandary%3B%2Cc0

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=enigmatic+*_NOUN%2Cenigmatic+question%2Cenigmatic+issue&year_start=1900&year_end=2000&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t2%3B%2Cenigmatic%20%2A_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Benigmatic%20smile_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Benigmatic%20figure_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Benigmatic%20character_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Benigmatic%20words_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Benigmatic%20personality_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Benigmatic%20quality_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Benigmatic%20expression_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Benigmatic%20nature_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Benigmatic%20man_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Benigmatic%20statement_NOUN%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cenigmatic%20question%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cenigmatic%20issue%3B%2Cc0

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=proves+my+point%2Cillustrates+my+point%2Cmake+the+payments%2Ca+hefty+fine%2Cexperience+proves%2Cthe+impact+of+legislation%2C+incentive+for+compliance&year_start=1960&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Cproves%20my%20point%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cillustrates%20my%20point%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cmake%20the%20payments%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Ca%20hefty%20fine%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cexperience%20proves%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cthe%20impact%20of%20legislation%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cincentive%20for%20compliance%3B%2Cc0

Hi Simon
Thanks a lot for the example essay. I notice that you used a lot of would, could, should, might in this essay.
PARAGRAPH 2
S1, ...would...
S2, ...could...
S3, ...could...
S4, ...would...
S5, ...would...
PARAGRAPH 3
S1, ...should...
S2, ....might...
S3, ...could... and ...could...
S4, ...would...
S5, ...could...
Can you please explain why you use all these modal verbs?
And can you please explain the principles to use modal verbs in Writing Task 2?
Thank you very much.

Hi simon,
Why it is not usual to get 9 in task response and cohesion, if the lexical resources and gramamar is 5?
In other words, Is it possible to get 9 in "Task Achievement" and "Coherence and Cohesion" and get 5 in lexical and grammar? (7 overall)
thank you

Hahahah

A grammar question regarding a clean, waste-free environment. Both clean and waste-free are adj, why we don't use "and" between clean and waste-free?

I found the answer for my question. Adj used before noun don't need "and", and comma is free to add between adjs. Adj used after noun should have "and".

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