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Hi Simon,
First off, thank you very much indeed for this blog! It's been very helpful. And may I make a request that the original search function be restored? Coz I'm from a place where Google is officially blocked and now it's getting harder and harder for us to have access to it.So if possible, could you please get it back?
Kind regards,
yichen

From knowledge and Simon's writing style that I learnt , I has just accomplished this report.
Hopefully everybody reads and give me some comments. Thank everyone so much!

The charts compare the percentages of the travelling reasons and the travel issues in a particular year in the US.
It is clear that moving between workplace and home has the largest proportion of the travelling reasons. We can also see that the key issue for the travelling public is the price of travel.
Looking at the first bar chart in more detail, the percentages of Americans going out for social/recreation and shopping are 10% and 16%, respectively. By contrast, working travel is by far the most popular reason of the US people, with nearly half of the US population. Nearly one fifth of Americans travel because of personal reasons, whereas only 6% of them visit friends/relatives.
It can be seen that more than one third of the US population care about the issue of travelling price. While the proportions of Americans having concerns about the traffic congestion on motorway and the aggressive attitude of motorists are 14% and 17% respectively, the figure for safety concerns is slightly higher , at 19%. Finally, the figure for the concern about access to public transport is much lower, at 8% and only at 6% about space for pedestrians.
( 196 words).

This one is good effort to look at by far .

Hello, Simon. Thank you for providing this website to us. I have a simple question for you. Does figures in Task 1 count as words?
(e.g. There are 3 members in my family. Does '3' count as word? )

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The bar chart illustrates why American people chose to travel, and the pie chart demonstrates the problems they concerned about most on public transport in 2009.

It is clear that commuting from work was the biggest contribution to travel, with 49% in 2009. People who went travelling due to individual reasons and who were keen on shopping accounted for 35%, with 19% and 16% respectively. However, interaction with friends and relatives only accounted for 10%, and social and recreational activities took up only 6%, which was the lowest figure in the chart.

As for main issues, the top two concerns people had in 2009 were related to price and safety, with over a half among all the problems. The proportions of them were 36% and 19% individually. While, other issues accounted for a relative small part. 17% of problems were led by irritate drivers, and traffic jams in highways could explain 14% of main issues. The percentage for the availability of public transport and the room for walkers were lower than 10%, with 8% and 6% respectively.

It is noticeable that commuting and travelling price both led dominant roles in explanation for travelling reasons and in issues relating to public transport, respectively.

Hi Simon,
I am grateful for your helpful blog. Also, there are useful comments here.
Thanks

Dear Simon,

I would like to know if this is really true. I attended an IELTS Masterclass by IDP here in Cebu, Philippines. The IELTS examiner, who is from Thailand, discussed that there should be at least 2 sentences per paragraph. By that, the 1-sentence introduction(for single illustration/data) falls off from what IDP wants. Please help me.

The two charts illustrates the reasons for traveling and the main concerns that Americans had regarding traveling in 2009.

It can be clearly seen that the main reason for travelling in US in 2009 was to commute,and the least to visit family or friends. Moreover, the main concern was the cost of travelling and the least the space for pedestrian.

Analyzing the first bar chart from 2009 travelling for work and home represented the highest, 49% of the travelling, while travelling for social/recreations,shopping and personal reasons were between 10% to 19%. However, travelling for visiting family and friends were only 6% of the reasons.

The pie charts shows the concerns that people had due to travelling in US in 2009. The cost of traveling was the main issue and represented 36% of the concerns. The other problems that travelers were concerned were safety concerns, aggressive drivers and the traffic congestion which represented between 14% to 19%. However, travelers worried less about accessing the public transportation and space for pedestrian which were only 9%, respectively 6% of their concerns.

hello sir

i want to ask that
can writing task 1 and 2 be repeated in ielts exam?

ms,
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Thank you for reading my report.

Having read the source which teacher Simon mentioned, I found some good vocabulary to replace my own words:
1, moving between workplace and home => work travel
2, the key issue for the travelling public is the price of travel=> the price of travel is the most important issue for the travelling public.
By the way, I hope that other viewers can see some greater words to replace my own report.
Thank you very much!

The bar chart illustrates the percentile comparison between five different causes to travel in US commuter at their various destinations. Pie chart elaborates the key problems for journeying public in US in 2009.

Overall, the main cause of passengers to travel in America was to and from work and the key issue for travelling public was the price of travel in 2009.

The first chart shows that the majority of commuters preferred the reason to travel in US was to and from work which was the highest ratio (90 percent) compared to all other reasons to travel. Personal reason scored 19 percent and stood second as compared to shopping which was 16 percent. Similarly, social remained second last reason as 10 percent while visit friend was the very last to travel in US.

By the side of pie chart, the core issue faced by commuters to travel in US was price of travel in public credited 36 percent which remained the most popular problem in contrast to others. Safety and concerns was the 19 percent followed by aggressive driver having 17 percent. In case of highway congestion and access to public transport American had reported their problems to travel were 14 and 8 percent respectively. Space for pedestrians was accounted least as 6 percent.

Overall the bar charter illustrate reasons pay the American passengers for travel, And the pie chart demonstrates the main issues for travelling public in the USA in 2009.
We can infer from the bar chart that the biggest portion of American passengers travel for work reasons, nearly half of USA population, on contrast the lowest proportion is for visiting friends or relatives it's 6%, on the other hand it shows about a third of American passengers travel for individual cases with 19%, while shopping and social reason like recreation come as follow 16% and 10% in 2009.
The pie chart shows main issues for travelling public in USA in 2009, it point out that the main two issues are the price of travel with 36% and the safety concerns with 19%. While issues like space for pedestrian for example room for walkers, and access to the public transport counted the lowest proportions with 6%, 8% respectively. Moreover, aggressive drivers counted 17% and highway congestion slightly lower with 14%.
At the end , we can conclude that work and price of travel are the biggest reason and concerning for travelling for American passengers in 2009.

Phong

moving between workplace and home = commuting
"Work travel" suggests travel on business.

Do figures relate only to non-business travel? What about all those sales representatives and business people travelling around? Where to they show?

kiko9
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Thank you so much for your help!
"Commuting" is really useful for me.
Besides, I feel difficult summarising information in paragraph 3 and 4 so that it's shorter and more coherent. Anyone else can help me?
Thank all very much!

I really try my best to writing task 1 its really hard...:(((

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The bar chart illustrate five reasons for traveling, and the pie chart shows the main ideas what people concern about in the year 2009.

It is clear that most people who traveled is because of the case of business. We can also see that price of travel is the significant problem of traveler in America.

According to the bar chart, almost half amount of Americans travel around as they were working, with 49% of population. There are other reasons for travel include 19% of personal reason, 16% of shopping, 10% of social or recreation while a mere 6% of people visit their friends or relatives.

Look at the pie chart, we can see that the majority of people care about is the price of travel, with 36% of Americans. There are 19% of people concern about safety, 17% of people care about the aggressive drivers while only 6% of people concern about the space of pedestrians.

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The graph reveals 6 reasons behind American travellings in 2009 and the pie chart illustrates 6 major problems for public commutes in the same period.

It is noticeable that the majority of Americans travelled for work. Also, public travelling caused people in Amrica face the problems of travel price most of the time.

In 2009, the proportion of Americans going to work and vice versa stood at 49%, nearly eightfold bigger than that of those paying friends or relatives a visit. Meanwhile, people in America commuted for social and recreation reasons stood at 10%, compared to 16% of Americans going out for shopping.

In 2009, price of travel made up the largest portion of major issues for public travels (36%) qjile the percentage of American having issues with promenade space was least pronounced (6%). Travelling public had raised some safety concerns among American society as the proportion of this issues accounted for 19% - the second biggest issue. Problems with aggressive drivers and highway congestion, on the other hand, made up the similar percentages (17% as opposed to 14%).

(Ps.Anyone please give me some pieces of advice on this? I'm about to take the test this month. Thanks a lot)

Hi everyone.

While Simon was having a holiday, I had been reading Steve Jobs biography. I would like to share the word from the book....

Steve's work colleges were in his reality distortion field, so they were hypnotised by Steve,
" You did the impossible, because you did not realise it was impossible"

This phrase inspired me that leaning second language is impossible to me, However if I believe myself impossible is possible;)



The line graph demonstrates the proportion of visiting 's purpose while the pie chart illustrates six categories of public travel ling's limitation in the US over the period in 2009.
Overall, it is noticeable that working reason registered the significant major purpose why tourist would like to visit US while the cost of travel was chosen as the biggest issue in 2009.
In 2009, 49% of US traveler came for business trip which provided by far higher than four other reasons. The second and third highest proportion reasons were for the personal reasons and shopping, with 19% and 16% respectively.Visiting friends and families was seen as the least reason to come to the US with only 6%.
Concerning to the limitation of public travel, 39% of US travels worried about the travel expenditure, which was same as the sum of safety and driver aggressive problems, accounted for 19% and 17% respectively. The figure of highway congestion made up 14% problems which was still higher than access to public transport at 8% and area for pedestrian at 6%.

The two charts compare main reasons for traveling in 5 different categories and six major problems for using public transport in the United State in the year 2009.

It is clear that the top reason for traveling in the US was commute to work. We can also see that main issue for using public transport was the cost of travel.

In 2009, the major reason for traveling in the US was commute to workplace. At 49%, this figure was much higher than any other categories. The second highest percentage of traveling reason was personal reasons with 19%. The percentage of other categories, such as shopping, social or recreation and visit friends or relatives were 16%, 10% and 6% respectively.

Look at the pie chart, the one third of population in the United State considered the cost of public transport. The next highest consideration of public transport among american in 2009 was safety, at 19%. In addition, 17% of people addressed the problems with aggressive driver. Furthermore, the percentage of other issues with access to public transport and space for pedestrians were similar, at 8% and 6% respectively.

The bar chart compares the percentage of five different travelling reasons and the pie chart shows the six main public concerns, while travelling in the US in 2009.

Overall,it is noticeable that commuting to and from the work was the most predominant purpose for travel and the travel cost was the pronounced concern of public.

2 paragraphs, i will upload later.

Trang

this issues ?
percentage of American ?
cause people ... face ?

Can we really use "Americans", "American people", "the population of the United States", when the figures relate only to "the traveling public" ?

Can we use "public transport", when the figures seem to include private transport - cars, scooters?

Isn't it "people are concerned about something" ?

first time posted my work on the blog, hope get some suggestions.

The two charts illustrate the reasons for travel and the several concerns for traveling public in US in 2009.

The main reason for traveling is to and from work and the main concern for traveling public is the cost of spending on travel.

In the bar chart, to and from work represents the highest proportion of people go for travel, with 49%, while personal reasons, shopping and social issues stood between 10% to 20 %. However, traveling for visiting friends and families is the lowest, with only 6%.

The par chart shows the concerns for traveling public in USA in 2009. Cost spending on the trip is the main concern for all interviewee, with 36% followed by safety concern of 19%. The issues like aggressive drives and traffic jam counted for 17 % and 14% respectively. However, people doesn't seems to worry about the access to public transport and the space for pedestrians which scored 8% and 6% only.

Its a good thing to improve writing .

Erin

http://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2010/11/ielts-grammar-while-whilst-whereas-as.html

"While" is not followed by a comma. It is not an adverb like "however" or "obviously".

Hi teacher Simon and others
Can any one pls give reply
In this type of question is it okay to start introduction by the word "Report concerns a bar and a pie chart, bar chart represents the... and pie chart shows the..". One of my English teachers taught like this if two graph are there we can use the words report concerns to start the intro
Thanks in advance

Achu

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=Report+concerns+*%2C+This+report+concerns+a+*%2C+This+report+concerns+a+chart&year_start=1800&year_end=2000&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2CReport%20concerns%20the%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2CThis%20report%20concerns%20a%20study%3B%2Cc0

Both Charts illustrates the reasons for travel and address the front line issues for the public travelling in US in 2009.
Among all the five reasons mentioned ,most people travel to and from work in US was around 49%.However visiting friends constitutes less among all five reasons.Similarly, people in US prefer to travel for personal reasons constitutes around 19%.In addition,shopping ,social recreation remained below 19% and visiting relatives remained lowest in 2009.
Among all the concerns faced by public while travelling,cost of travelling remained the main issue which was around 36%.Second concern faced by US public was safety concern which was around 19 %.Third concern faced by travelers were aggressive drivers which was 17%.High way congestion remained at 14 %.However,access to public transport and space for pedestrians remained below 10%.
Among all the main issues price of travel was the utmost problem and the least issue faced by US public was space for pedestrians.

The two charts provide the data about the American people who travelled in 2009. While the bar chart compares travelling reasons, the pie chart illustrates the proportions of main problems which the travellers experienced.
It is clear from the charts that the majority of the U.S public commuted for work, and cost of travelling was the most concerning issue for them.
In 2009, looking the bar chart in more detail, work related reasons accounted for nearly a half of all reasons for travelling, at 49%. The figures for personal reason and shopping were lower, at 19% and 16% respectively. Furthermore, social/recreation reason stood at 10%, whereas the figure for visiting friends/relatives was 4% less than that proportion.
In the same year, regarding the major problems of public travelling, being the biggest issue travel expense was responsible for 36% of all major issues, compared to 19% for safety concerns and 17% for aggressive drivers. Other problems made up a remaining third of main difficulties: Highway congestion (14%), Access to public transport (8%) and Space for pedestrians (6%).
(176 words)

Mouayad Zeidan

http://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2012/04/ielts-grammar-punctuation.html

and google "comma splice"

Erin - final paragraph

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https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=in+explanation+for%2Cin+the+breakdown+of%2Cin+the+analysis+of%2Cin+the+explanation+of%2Cin+the+results+for%2C+in+the+data+for&year_start=1960&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Cin%20explanation%20for%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cin%20the%20breakdown%20of%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cin%20the%20analysis%20of%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cin%20the%20explanation%20of%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cin%20the%20results%20for%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cin%20the%20data%20for%3B%2Cc0

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=travelling+reasons%2Creasons+for+travel%2Cmotives+for+travel&year_start=1960&year_end=2008&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Creasons%20for%20travel%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cmotives%20for%20travel%3B%2Cc0

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=travelling+price%2Ctraveling+price%2C+cost+of+travel&year_start=1800&year_end=2000&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Ccost%20of%20travel%3B%2Cc0

Hi Simon,
Here's my assignment and really need your advice if possible.

We can have a basic idea about the travelling situation in US in 2009 by reading the above two charts. The bar chart lists the purposes of travelers and the pie chart demonstrates the problems that the travelling public are concerned about.

It is obvious that work commuters are the biggest contribution to travelling public, accounting for 49%. Personal reasons rank the second and shopping the third, with 19% and 16% respectively. Social/recreation and visiting friends/relatives are the bottom two purposes, taking up merely 10% and 6% respectively.

In terms of the main problems US travelers encounter, price and safety are the top priority to consider, convers over half of the total figures. The public are also upset about the aggressive drivers and highway congestion, nearly 1/3. Least thing to worry is the public transport and space for pedestrians, with the figure of 8% and 6% respectively.

That's my answer for this task 1 question:

The bar chart and pie chart give information about the five reasons why people travelled for and the six main issues the commuters dealt with while they travelled with public transportation system in the US in the year 2009.

It is noticeable that the main reason people had to travel was because of work. Moreover, people found the price of travel as the main issue when they opted for public transports in the given year.

Looking at the bar chart more closely, 49% of people travelled due to work. It follows with travelling for personal reasons (19%) and shopping (16%). By contrast, there were only 16% of people who travelled based on social reasons, as well as visiting friends and family.

Moving on to the pie chart, more than a quarter (36%) of commuters found the price of public transports were expensive, while 19% were out of safety concerns and 17% experienced aggressive behaviour from drivers. Highway congestions, as well as the ease to access to public transport and space for pedestrians, shared the same proportion of concerns, with 14% of respondents found that as their main issues.

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I'm looking for improvement here and if any of you guys find any mistakes, do feel free to make any comments! :)

Appreciate that!


The bar chart gives information about why people travel in America in 2009, and the pie chart compares 6 major problems for travelling public in the US in the same year.

Overall, it is clear that work was the most important reason for people commuting in America in 2009. It is evident that travelers concerned about the expenditures on travelling the most.

Looking at the information in more detail, in the year 2009, people traveled in the US for work accounted for the largest proportion of the sample (49%), while merely 6% of the surveyed individuals traveled because of friends or relatives. The figures for people who traveled for shopping and for personal reasons were 16% and 19% respectively.

36% of the travelling public considered the costs of transportation were too expensive, while 19% of them were not satisfied with the space for pedestrians in America. Finally, access to public transport made up 8% of total issues, whereas aggressive drivers accounted for more than twice as many percentages as it.

Fiona

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Try googling "why people travelled for".

Do the charts relate only to the "public transportation system" or "public transport" ?

See second sentence here:
https://www.endsleigh.co.uk/personal/gadget/2015-achievements-for-young-professionals-research/

https://www.google.co.nz/search?q=%22with+respondents+being%22&tbm=bks&lr=lang_en&gws_rd=cr&ei=WSSIWeHzF4bI0ATKhIOQAw

https://www.google.co.nz/search?q=%22with+respondents+reporting%22&tbm=bks&lr=lang_en&gws_rd=cr&ei=NiSIWaOJMcao0ATx1YFY

Try googling "that as their main issue" (singular)

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kali457

Thank you for your help. The links you shared to me are quite useful.

:)

Joan

Is "We can have a basic idea about" formal enough?

https://www.google.co.nz/search?q=%22chart+presents%22&tbm=bks&lr=lang_en&gws_rd=cr&ei=WHWKWaeqDefagAa06JKAAQ

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=*_VERB+a+contribution&year_start=1800&year_end=2000&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t2%3B%2C%2A_VERB%20a%20contribution%3B%2Cc0%3B%2Cs0%3B%3Bmake_VERB%20a%20contribution%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bis_VERB%20a%20contribution%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bmade_VERB%20a%20contribution%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bmaking_VERB%20a%20contribution%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bbe_VERB%20a%20contribution%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bwas_VERB%20a%20contribution%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bmakes_VERB%20a%20contribution%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Blevied_VERB%20a%20contribution%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bpay_VERB%20a%20contribution%3B%2Cc0%3B%3Bhave_VERB%20a%20contribution%3B%2Cc0

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=rank+the+second%2C+rank+second&year_start=1800&year_end=2000&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Crank%20the%20second%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Crank%20second%3B%2Cc0

convers? covering?

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Hi guys,

Here is my best sample answer. hopefully, I can get some evaluations and/or advice from you all if possible :).

Thank you

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The pictures illustrate the percentage of the reasons for travel and the main factors affecting the usage of public infrastructures for travelling in the US in 2009.

Overall, the US citizens have to go outside their home because of work and the cost of travel was the most concerned point to choose the transportation mode.

Commuting to the work place was the main reason for the US people to make some movements which was almost a half. In the middle part, Personal reason and shopping contributed under 20% at 19% and 16% respectively. Thereafter, 10% US people chose to go another place to interact with others or conducting some recreations. While the lowest part was at just above 5% opting to visit their friends.

In the same time, the price of travel publicly became the most considered point about 36%. Safety, aggressive drivers, congestion were positioned in the second group by range 14% - 19%. Then, about 8% and 6% were in public transport access and footpath respectively.

HMKR

http://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2016/10/ielts-writing-task-1-the-overview.html

HMKR

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@ Phong:

I think you should add "we can see that" to the first sentence of paragraph 3 as follows:
Looking at the first bar chart in more detail, "we can see that" the percentages of Americans going out for social/recreation and shopping are 10% and 16%, respectively.

Without "we can see that", the above sentence is a "dangling modifier" and is considered a grammar error.

Let me give you a clearer example.

Wrong: Using the latest technology, the problem was identified. (It is wrong because the problem cannot use technology).
Correct: Using the latest technology, the engineer identified the problem.

Hope it helps.

The bar chart compares different reasons for travelling and the pie chart illustrates the main travelling issues concerning the people in the US in 2009.

Overall, commuting to and from work was by far the most common reason for travelling among the US people and visiting friends/relatives accounted for the smallest proportions of why people travelled. It is also obvious that travelling cost and safety concerns were the two biggest problems of Americans in 2009.

Looking at the bar graph in more details, we can see that travelling to and from work accounted for almost half of all travelling, at 49%. By contrast, travelling for personal reasons and shopping were 19% and 16% respectively whereas travelling to visit friends/relatives and for social/recreation purposes were only 16% in total.

As regards the main issues for American travelers, price of travel was of a concern to 36% of Americans. Safety concerns, aggressive drivers or highway congestion caused a concern to fewer than 20% of American travelers. The least important travelling issues in the US were access to public transport and space for pedestrians, each of which worries less than 10% of American travelers.

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@Phong & Vi

Simon made the comment:

"Note: Examiners are not worried about small phrases like "In conclusion", but if you use too many long chunks like "the key points to note are that" or "looking at the chart in more detail we can see that", the examiner will notice. Two or three of these longer chunks is enough - try not to use more than that."

http://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2011/08/ielts-writing-task-2-different-introductions.html

The bar chart compares the proportions of public reasons to travel in US and the pie chart illustrates the main issues for travelling public in 2009.

The bar graph clearly shows, about half of the travelling public travel to and from the work. Whereas only 19% 16% and 10% of total travelling public travels for personal reason, shopping and social/recreation respectively. Also it is found, 6% pupil travels to visit their friends and relatives.

The main issues in consideration act as effector to travel are price of travel, safety concern, aggressive drivers, and highway congestion. Access to pedestrians, access to public transport is considered by 6% and 8% of the travelling public. The price of travel is considered by most of the traveler which is 49%. Only 14% thinks about highway congestion while 17% and 19% concern about safety concerns and aggressive drivers.

Faisal

elts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2010/11/ielts-grammar-while-whilst-whereas-as.html

http://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2010/11/ielts-grammar-however-and-whereas.html

www.ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2011/06...

The 2 charts describes 5 reasons for travelling by the Americans and 7 common public transportation problems they encounter in the year 2009
Overall, Most Americans travels mainly due to their job while the cost of public transportation is their biggest concern.

In details, 49 percent of Americans traveled due to work purposes, personal reason came in second with 19 percent and 16 percent account for shopping purposes while travels made for social/ recreation and visiting a friends and family sits at the bottom 2 with 10 percent and 6 percent respectively.

On the other hand, American traveler during 2009 encountered 5 major problems related to the use of public transportation mainly the cost of public transportation with 36 percent of Americans having trouble with the price, followed by safety concerns with 19 percent and 17 percent complains on aggressive behavior of drivers. However, few commuters complains on highway congestion with 14 percent, accessibility of transportation with 8 percent and pedestrian space being the least concern of public traveler with only 6 percent.

the charts compares why americans travel and what are the problem faced by americans during travel in 2009

Alex

"zero to nine are spelled out in words" (from wikipedia manual of style) so "The two charts ... "

Tenses inconsistent; check "-s" on verbs.

https://www.google.co.nz/search?q=%22complains+of%22&tbm=bks&lr=lang_en&gws_rd=cr&ei=hZGbWZnbGYiZ8QWXg47YBw

https://www.google.co.nz/search?q=%22complaints+about%22&tbm=bks&lr=lang_en&gws_rd=cr&ei=eZGbWa64KYzW8QWWqYnIBg

hisila

"The charts compare ... "
"The chart compares ... "

Word order:

https://www.google.co.nz/search?q=%22what+the+problems+are%22&tbm=bks&lr=lang_en&gws_rd=cr&ei=2m6cWfr6H4OX8QX96bPAAg

https://www.google.co.nz/search?q=%22what+the+problems+in%22&tbm=bks&lr=lang_en&gws_rd=cr&ei=P2-cWeTZHMKB8wWNg4mwCw

HI SIMON!
1.I think to use by contrast word in body paragraph is inappropriate because the percentile or statement is not opposite the previous statement.

2.In second body paragraph,why access to public transport and space for pedestrians joined together and mentioned total 14%, though they have different percentages of 8% and 6% respectively.
My comments only for constructive reason.

Vi and Oleg
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Thank you so much for both your help.

Vi
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I'm really surprised that you have the same idea as Simon.( I've just read the sample report of Simon).
I hope you 'll comment more in the following lessons.
Best regards

The two charts illustrate why people travelled in america in 2009 and what were the main problems they experienced during their travels.
Overall,Among all of the reasons that US residents travelled for in 2009, Commuting to and from work was the biggest reason but the high expenditure needed for travel was the main concern they faced.
looking at the bar chart in more detail,About half of the US people travelled due to their work (49%). Whereas, merely 6% for visiting friends and family. 10% of asked people travelled for entertainment ,social communication and recreational activities .Other different reasons and shopping made up 19% and 16% respectively.
As regards to the pie chart , the main difficulty was the high cost of travel which made up 36% of all problems in addition to saftey issues and the bad behavior of some drivers accounted for 19% and 17% respectively. Some of surveyed people,about 14%, found problems with the highway congestion. Finally Only 8% and 6% of US travelers encountered problems with accessability in public transport and walking on foot

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