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I have searched the synonym of the word 'antisocial', but there are a lot of words so I am really confused. How do I choose the word which is true and proper?

Hi Jun Ji,
In my opinion you should focus on the reasons to support your thesis statement. Only mention the word antisocial once to lead in.
You can use this: "against social norms". Not exact, but close.

Jun Ji

Other reasonable synonyms you could use are 'rude' or 'inconsiderate'.

sjm
I don't think we can use "rude" in essays - it is regarded by many people as informal.

how about introduction?shall we paraphrase both?

nkd

'Rude' is a standard English word and has no special formal or informal use. No examiner would consider it too informal for an essay.

Good job

It is sometimes argued that mobile phones should be prohibited in public areas like smoking. In my opinion, it would be wrong to make this kind of decision due to various reasons.

First of all, many people agree to meet each other in public places, such as, gardens, parks and streets. If governments do not allow them to use mobile phones in these places, they might find it difficult to meet each other. For example, when they reached the particular place for meeting, they would not be able to call their friend to check where is he or she at the moment, hence, they can see each other. Recent surveys have shown that ninety percent of people use their phones frequently to find someone who he or she should see.

Furthermore, a lot of people enjoy using their mobile phones in public areas. For instance, they go to these places for having a good time such as playing a game by smartphone in a beautiful garden. It would be wrong to force these people to not use their phones in public areas for pleasure. However, if governments established rules for stopping usage of mobile phones in public areas this can
lead to some problems; for example, less number of people would prefer to spend their free time in public areas, and after a certain amount of time these places might become humanless.

In conclusion, governments should not stop people using their phones in public places because this can lead to several problems.

People have different views about whether the use of mobile phones in public should be allowed.
In my opinion, I believe that it is not as harmful as smoking, and people should be allowed to use mobile phones in public places.

I believe that using mobile phones and smoking in public places are not equally considered to be antisocial.
The main reason to ban smoking in certain places is passive smoking has a negative effect on public health, while
mobile phones do not have.
Smoking, for example, is often forbidden in public places so as not to expose children to passive smoking, which can trigger health problems such as a cancer and a heart disease.
Unlike smoking, texting and calling do not cause fatal diseases to those who stand around mobile phone users.
In other words, the levels of damaging effects that mobile phones and smoking have on society are not the same.

Moreover, I disagree with those who argue that mobile phones should be banned in public places.
Firstly, using mobile phones in public helps many people who are busy with work to manage their time more efficiently.
People, for instance, who do not have enough time can chat with their friends and family, work, and shop online while they travel or recharge their energy in certain places.
Secondly, education is enough effective to reduce problems of mobile phones.
Users, for instance, can be educated to have good mobile phone manners such as speaking quietly and putting it on vibrate mode.

In conclusion, I believe that mobile phones and smoking are not equally socially acceptable, and the use of mobile phones in public places should not be banned.

Hi Ena, a few corrections which I am sure will help you.

@Simon, please, advice am I correct?

1 The second sentence of your introduction - "In my opinion" and "I believe" have equal meaning, in this case, hence, one of them is redundant

2. If you use whether make sure you have or condition
your first sentence should be like this

whether the use of mobile phones in public should be allowed or not.



Mobile phones has become an indispensable tool.Some people argue that use of cell phones should be prohibited in public areas.While many people misuse this handy device publicly,I strongly disagree with the idea of banning this as anti-social element such as smoking.
Wireless phones have revolutionized the lives of people.Firstly,it can be used for reaching people in many emergency situations to gain valuable and timely help.Hence,life make easy in difficult conditions with suggestions and solutions.This promote confidence and self reliance. Secondly, phones are multi-functional and can be used as recording devices and cameras.This make better evidence in case of anti-social incident.So the people feel more conscious to their ethics, especially in public places.Finally,they provide a safety for youngsters as parents can easily get in touch with them wherever they are,thus it contribute to maintain optimal relationship between parents and children.
Cellular phones have some drawbacks.It can be intrusive.It can disturb others when they are concentrating,for example,in a library or in the bank.The user can regulate the volume of the gadget or it can easily be turned to silent or vibrate mode.The signal can cause problems by interfering with delicate digital instruments or equipment. So maintaining a full understanding of their regulatory compliance is essential in hospital zones.It all depends on how people use this smart and handy gadget.
In conclusion,prohibiting mobile phone in public places is unequal with smoking ban.They should be allowed as long as they are used with respect to others.

The pie chart gives information about the number of cars people in Canada possess.
The percentage of people who own one car is the largest, accounting for over fifty percent of the whole population. About 25 percent of Canadian people have two cars. Ranking third in the pie chart is the population without a car, with less than a quarter of the Canadian adults. The percentage of people with more than two cars is the smallest.
Overall, the majority of Canadian people own cars. In contrast, only a small percentage of people do not own a car.

The use of mobile phones in public places is as antisocial as smoking. Smoking is banned in certain places, so mobile phones should be banned in the same way. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Mobile phone has been widely used by people around the world. While I agree that the widespread use of mobile phone has negative effect on our daily life, I do not think it should be banned the way smoking is prohibited from the society.

The wide use of smart phone does bring negative effects on many aspects of the society. First, it distracts people from what they are doing and this is not what the society expected of mobile phone. For example, if a driver focuses his attention on mobile phone while driving, he will ignore traffic, which in turn might cause traffic accidents. Second, playing with mobile phones is harmful to people’s health. When people are playing with their cellphone, they concentrate on the bright screen. This is surely a disaster for their eyes. Also, their necks and backs suffer because they keep their body in the same position for a longer time.

Despite those problems mentioned above, it definitely makes our life convenient. To begin with, mobile phone makes it easy to communicate with friends and family members. Without mobile phone, people can only keep in touch with friends and relatives through mail, which is time-consuming. What’s more, various apps in mobile phones make life colorful. For example, the navigation systems in a mobile phone enable drivers to get around in a short time to their destinations. This is unimaginable in the past.

In conclusion, though there are some downsides about mobile phone, in my opinion, its advantages outweigh its disadvantages.

Mobile phone has been widely used by people around the world. While I agree that the widespread use of mobile phone has negative effect on our daily life, I do not think it should be banned the way smoking is prohibited from the society.

The wide use of smart phone does bring negative effects on many aspects of the society. First, it distracts people from what they are doing and this is not what the society expected of mobile phone. For example, if a driver focuses his attention on mobile phone while driving, he will ignore traffic, which in turn might cause traffic accidents. Second, playing with mobile phones is harmful to people’s health. When people are playing with their cellphone, they concentrate on the bright screen. This is surely a disaster for their eyes. Also, their necks and backs suffer because they keep their body in the same position for a longer time.

Despite those problems mentioned above, it definitely makes our life convenient. To begin with, mobile phone makes it easy to communicate with friends and family members. Without mobile phone, people can only keep in touch with friends and relatives through mail, which is time-consuming. What’s more, various apps in mobile phones make life colorful. For example, the navigation systems in a mobile phone enable drivers to get around in a short time to their destinations. This is unimaginable in the past.

In conclusion, though there are some downsides about mobile phone, in my opinion, it should not be banned from the society since it also brings numbers of beneftis.

It seems illogical to consider mobile phones as dangerous as smoking,while we exploit its advantages.While I accept the annoyance this device creates in certain situations, I disagree that it should be banned from public, like smoking,due to its usefulness

On one hand, mobile phones and its  users are a nuisance in certain situations due to various reasons. Firstly,when people not respecting others privacy by talking aloud or not using vibration mode while in public areas.Most people easily annoyed by the ring tones or individual noises in  a theatre or public events.Theatre for instance, group of people watch movies in a constraint environment, where a small sound or even a person's movement could hinder others enjoyment. Use ofsuch devices in these places certainly is a nuisance. Therfore people think about banning such devices in public places though they aware of its benefits.

On the otherhand, the bright sides of mobile phones make it as an unavoidable gadget of the modern era.This electronic device enable us to do everything in our finger tips.This is a great medium of conveying information especially during emergency. In addition,various applications ease our life more convenient. Navigation system as an example, prevent people to get lost in busy towns or placed.Neverthless it would be logical to ban these devices behind the wheels as it is a major cause of accidents.

In conclusion, the mild disadvantages could be easily limited by educating people regarding the mobile phone manners like taking quietly or using vibration mode in those devices. So I believe it's not necessary to curtail it's use in public areas instead it would be ideal to restrict it while people drive.

Hi Artur

Thank you for your help :)
It certainly helps my writing!

Hi Simon

With great respect, I want to suggest you a topic (the topic below) which I think is a really good and difficult topic and I just gave a balenced idea in my eassy. Hopefully you can have a lesson on this topic. Thanks a lot!

Some people think the main benefit of international cooperation is in the protection of the environment, while others think that the main benefits are in the world business. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.


These days ,many people argue that cell phones are antisocial devices and should be prohibited in general public places the same way as smoking . I disagree with this view because smoking is much more harmful for health than mobile phones .
it is true that smoking has many detrimental effects on individuals . in fact , smoking in public does not only harm smokers ,but other people around are also exposed to the serious impacts of smoking as lung cancer which may lead to death . In contrast ,mobile phone use has no such extensive harmful effect on both user and people around him .Though ,some potential minor impacts on person's mind are noted .This demonstrates that cell phones ,unlike smoking , could be used safely in public .

There is no doubt in the fact that the technology has taken the greatest place in the society. we can normally see mobile in the hand of every living soul. In the given statement,i would partially agree. In the following paragraph,i would go more deeper.

plz tell me is this right intro?

It is argued by some that using mobile phone in pubic places is equally antisocial as smoking, therefore should be legitimately banned.However,In my opinion, while I partially believe this view, I disagree that It should be banned same way as smoking.
Many think that use of mobile phones in communal palaces is a antisocial. Recently owing to advancement in smart phones & internet technology people prefer to communicate online through social medias such as facebook, whatsapp etc, And because of it face-to-face communication is lacking in our society. For instance, before people used to visit and meet at homes, hotels, bars but nowadays this trend rarely seen to almost vanished. As a result, many label this kind of social detachment is antisocial and demand complete ban in the same way of smoking.
On the other hand, I think comparing this with smoking and ban on it is not justifiable. Because mobile has gained too much importance in people's daily lives and has made life very convenient. Take for example, people use internet through portable handsets run business, doctors keeps themselves update and communicate twenty four hours with hospitals and their patients. Additionally, usage of mobile in public places is not as detrimental to health as smoking which causes serious health diseases such as Lung Cancer. There fore, It should not be compared with smoking as well as labelled and banned same way.
In conclusion, smoking is dangerous to health for both active and passive smokers.Usage of mobiles in public places is not detrimental and is not justifiable to label antisocial and call for ban in the same way as smoking.

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Dear Simon,

Could you kindly comment my essay, please? I would be grateful if you could comment approximately score for my writing. Moreover, I would be elated if you could point out my weaknesses in order to improve. Please here is my sample essay for this topic.
Using mobile phones in public places is the same annoying as much as smoking, as a result, it should not be allowed as the similar ways of smoking. Personally, I completely disagree with the fact that as long as we respect and value for others privacy, there will not have any problems as smoking. In this essay I shall examine using mobile phone is better for the sake of communication, education and important cases as opposed to banning as smoking.

First of all, accessing mobile in public areas is better due to the fact that we can communicate at anytime with our families and friends. In other words, if one of our families and friends happen something to them, we can contact easily and acquire the information at once. If only we banned using mobile phones, the consequences of this would be tremendously impact on people for not using them. Therefore, the usages of mobile should not be restricted in the similar ways of smoking because smoking should be definitely not allowed in a certain places for the sake of protecting undesirable effect of diseases which can harm for many people such as cancer and heart disease owing to smoking.

Having said that, when it comes to using mobile phone in public places, it is crucial to be aware of our surroundings because if we ignored our environment, it would be intrusive for other people. For example, if we use mobile phones in libraries, it is essential to silent in order not to disturb others due to the fact that the ring of mobile phone can be extremely annoying for those who are trying to concentrate on their work or reading since libraries are supposed to be silent places. Therefore, we do need to be aware of using mobile phones in a particular places so as to avoid disappointing to others.

In conclusion, I am convinced that using mobile phones has more benefits rather than restricting as smoking, however, we do need to be fully aware of our surroundings when using mobile phones, then there will be no problems of using in a certain places.

Hi all
Can we use this Expression to describe a pie chart or not?

The figures for cooling and lightening are only 2% and 4% respectively.

Thanks

Some people say that mobile phone use in public area seems to be anti-social like smoking, and they recommend stopping access of mobile phone in common places. I am strongly disagree with this statement as mobile phones are essential device and not as detrimental as smoking.
Mobile phones are inevitable component of our daily life. It is the effective means of communication around the world. Smoking is both directly and indirectly detrimental to our health. Mobile Phones have some negative effects but it should be ignored due to its greater effectiveness in mass communication. Furthermore, careless smoking in public areas like train station, market, amusement park etc. causes fire which is precarious for public welfare. Now a days mobile phones or smart phones have every opportunities of talking, messaging, uninterrupted browsing etc. It is perfectly clear that mobile phones have been used throughout the world with an aim to greater public interest, albeit it has some disturbing impacts.
Use of mobile phones in common places should not be compare with smoking as one is for good willing another one is for bad which do not earn any well blessing for human. In addition, mobile phones emerge as an active electronic equipment of easy communication. In these circumstances, mobile phones should not be banned in public places. Take for instance; some marketing individuals need to talk urgently with their superiors via mobile phones regardless of wherever they are. A single phone call can change one’s life when he/she will get good news through his/her mobile phone. So, it would be injustice to restrict mobile phone in public places.

Mobile phones are now unique dependable component of our daily life, and it should not be compare with smoking. Rather it should be creates public awareness of safe use of mobile pnones.

Hi Simon,

If there is only one statement in "To what extent do you agree or disagree" task, how do you separate it into two main paragraphs?

For example, "Some people think that extreme sports such as bungee jumping and rock climbing should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?"

Looking forward to your reply.

Dear Simon,
I have seen some of the ielts videos. They are extremely useful techniques. I would like to Jon the course. Please advise me what to do

Haruki,

In that case you just need to find 2 main reasons for the opinion that you give. For example, you could disagree with the idea of banning those sports. Then you could write one main paragraph about the postives of extreme sports, and the second main paragraph about how difficult it would be to enforce a ban (e.g. sending police to stop people from rock climbing!).


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Many people compare the behavior of using mobile devices and smoking in the same way as they are both antisocial, and they support a ban on mobile phones usage in public areas, which widely implemented on smoking. Personally, I disagree with this view towards mobile phones, and I therefore believe that their use should not be prohibited.

I would argue that the use of mobile phones in communal places is acceptable, and it should not be compared with smoking. Firstly, almost everyone uses cell phones on daily basic, and they are seen as the most effective form of communication, which accompany people wherever they are. They benefit people from different ages or works of life in terms of immediately making or receiving contacts from others regarding study, work or family. Not many of us can ensure that we have never experienced urgent phone contact when we were outside, so that it could be tolerant and empathetic with phone calls in public places. Secondly, users can activate vibration or silence mode that are available for any mobile devices to avoid causing noise or disturbance in communal areas. Finally, there is not enough evidence to prove that cell phones have adverse influences on human health, while the harmful effect of smoking has been examined and publicized to society by scientists worldwide.

It is not necessary to prohibit people’s use of mobile phones, and if this ban were endorsed, our lives would be negatively affected. People can limit or eliminate their impact of using mobile devices on public atmosphere by taking individual responsibilities such as activate vibration or silence mode or getting out for a phone call. This can be enhanced by education at home and school in conjunction with internal regulations within an organization. Another argument against this ban is that people would suffer from unwanted results because of a disconnection. A businessman can lost thousands of dollars if he misses an important call from partners regarding commercial contracts, or a man might not be able to welcome his new born baby, a wonderful moment in a father’s live, because he is not allow to access mobile call.

In conclusion, I do not believe that government should interfere with mobile phones usage in public places because this is not offensive to surroundings.

I feel quite confused about the purpose of writing an essay in IELTS. I realize that writing needs to be flexible. However, if it is expressed in a sophisticated and complex idea of oneself how do we know that the reader understands it?

Some will argue that the usage of cellular phone in public is equally opposing social norms as with smoking. Prohibition of modern phones publicly in certain areas like smoking is also an issue. In my opinion, I totally disagree on both ideas.

Habituating mobile phone in public is far social devastating compared with smoking. Firstly, cigarette smoking creates toxic gas that will be inhaled passively by other people, this is known as second hand smokers, will lead to some serious health diseases. While loud conversations using mobile phones could be stressful to others, it is incomparable with the jeopardy of inhaling the smoke for both the host and second hand smokers. Secondly, environmental damage of smoking is more significant than to mobile phone. For an instance, carbon monoxide emissions from cigarette smoking highly contribute to the phenomenon of global warming. Although, it is proven that mobile phones produce radiation, the amount is not environmental harmful compared with smoking.

Government that will ban the use of mobile phone in common places will violate the freedom of information and communication the citizens. Modern cellular phone is useful for many people wherever and whenever it will be necessary in exploring the vast world of internet for useful information. It is evident by students that utilizing their free time usually in public places to do some research and studies using their mobile phone. Moreover, communication is the umbilical cord of the society, it will act as a catalyst in strengthening the bond between families and people. At the end of the day, sharing thoughts and love through simple mobile messages anywhere without restrictions is satisfying.

In conclusion, the drawbacks of cigarette smoking are not equal socially and more destructive than usage of cellular phone publicly. Also, banning the mobile phones in some areas is not acceptable compared with prohibiting smoking.

comments and suggestions about my essay... Simon pls give some feedback

* my first sentence is wrong. Habituating smoking in public is far social devastating compared with using mobile phones.

Mobile phones are useful thing and it should not be ban like smoking.
I am totally disagree with this.because in a daily life mobile phone is very pragmatic. If accident happen in our family and we were in pupil place and put our gadget in offline mode,then it's absolutely wrong and we do not know about the situation.so,we think that government should allow the citizens to use a gadget in pupil place for sufficient time.
Ex:sometimes when I felt very deadhead them,I visit near park and start playing games,listening songs and many more.if the government force me to off my gadget then,it's absolutely wrong.because many public went to park to felt great and enjoyed them by using there gadget.
The gadget is more essential tool for every person.because we were conversation each other in a easy way but in past it's very difficult.The driver is used navigation to reached there destination in a short period of time.we were receiving the current news and many more thing.

In conclusion, mobile phone is make us to live in society with there daily news.so please don't stop this gadget to use in public places.

So please read my essay and correct mistakes because I am lacking more in writing. Please help me SIMON

In the last decade, it has been a debate whether cellphones have to be restricted in certain places same as smoking, because it isolates people from community. I would absolutely disagree with that statement, so, this point of view will be analyzed prior to coming to a reasoned conclusion.

There is a growing number of people argue that cigarettes produce toxic fumes which result in health issues such lung cancer, therefore, it is prohibited in specific places. On the other hand, in recent years , phone devise has become a popular gadget for everybody, in other words, is not only indispensable but also does not have a negative significant impact on the human regardless it may cause some issue as a consequence of radiofrequency waves which has not been authenticated yet. For instance, mobile could be used in situation matter such as emergency or urgent matter but it is still not danger.

Furthermore, cellphones cannot be prohibited in specific places because it annoys people by having a loud conversation in public but, instead preventing the phone usage, it is better off encourage polite behavior. For instance, individual could lower his/her voice or talks in a private place which lead to receive a respect and appreciation from community. In addition, people need to turn their phones off in specific places such as cinema during the film, hospital, library as well as theater.

In conclusion, after analyzing the point of view,
it is true that both smoking and mobile phones are considered as distraction and annoyance, however, telephones are not deteriorated to society like smoking. Consequently, cellphones must not be prevented.

hello Simon,
kindly evaluate this essay.
"The use of mobile phones in public places is as antisocial a smoking. Smoking is banned in certain places, so mobile phones should be banned in the same way. To what extent do you agree or disagree?"

Mobile phones have become an integral part of our lives. Some people argue that it can be intrusive in public places like smoking so it should be banned in the similar way as smoking is.
The supporters of this view think that this cellular device has threatened to push us further apart. For instance, in public events where people gather for face-to-face interaction, instead of talking to each other, some are busy in messaging others who are away from them. However, this claim is largely exaggerated, this amazing tool has revolutionized our sources of interaction and makes it easier and efficient. A mobile phone is considered as the quickest source of communication in emergency cases like a road accident in public place where timely help can save a life.
The Cell phone itself is not a dangerous device, it depends on us how we use it as if it causes the interruption in some cases that can easily be avoided just by switching it to silent. It is a fact that smoking is injurious to health, considered as one of the leading cause of many chronic illnesses and also the main culprit to air pollution.The hazardous effects of smoking are not only restricted to the smoker but also other people and their environment. On the contrary, research has proved that prolonged exposure to mobile phone's radiation can cause brain damage to their users only and that happens rarely i.e 10 in a billion people.Moreover, cell phones have nothing to do with their surroundings and these aren't as poisonous as smoking.
To conclude, on the basis of sufficient grounds I reject the view of prohibiting it in public places like smoking, this cellular device itself is not as harmful as smoking and it depends on us how we use.

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