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I was shocked on seeing your skeleton on this topic, Simon. I reckon you have chosen a not easy point of view to write (Or maybe that is only not easy for me). Looking forward to your full writing coming.

Cheers!

Simon! Hello sir I want to improve my writing , because I always got only 6 bands .Now I want to improve and get 7 band or 6.5.could you give me some suggestions as I gave exam 3 times what overall band score is 5.5.So what can I do

Hi Simon

Could we use "I" in the essay part 2? Such "I personally believe.....
My ielts teacher said that don't mention "I" or "we" in essay writing . She said it looks like senior high school skill, and you will not get the good band

I get confused.
Please help

Doena

Simon has posted about this several times. It is absolutely fine to use 'I' in IELTS essays. In every essay question, IELTS invites you to use examples from your knowledge or personal experience - there is nothing wrong with talking about yourself in an essay. Also, you are supposed to give your opinion clearly, and in all parts of the essay. It is difficult to give a clear opinion without using 'I' or 'my'.

Hello Sjm

Thank you for the response. I personally agree with you, it should be fine to use 'I" if the question ask for our opinion, but.. it's really confusing me while my ielts teacher who is native speaker and has experienced in teaching ielts in some countries suggests me not to use 'I' in statement. In addition, my ielts teacher was also as ielts examiner.


I have enrolled for next 5 November's IELTS Academic Test. This is going to be my 2nd attempt. I am aiming to achieve 7.0 in each section. Lets see.

First IELTS on August 2014.
L 6.5, R7.5, W6.0 and S6.5
Writing was an absolute shock for me. I am working hard to overcome this time.

Doena

Perhaps your teacher was actually saying that you shouldn't use 'I' too much. If you use it too much in an essay, it can turn the essay into more of a 'personal story' which could be penalised for being the wrong 'form'.

All IELTS examiners are told that using 'I' is perfectly fine in an essay.

Sjm

I only "I" once in the essay part 2, which is for statement.

Remember, your opinion should be 'throughout' the essay, so it's perfectly fine to use 'I' a few times if you want.

Hi doena,

Please read this:

http://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2015/06/ielts-advice-misinformation.html

Thank you Simon. I've learned lots of writing tips.I really wanted to see this introduction. Now I understand what differentiate between our intros.

Hi Simon
Is it ok to use 'distinctive' instead of 'different'? As I applied on my essay introduction here.

People have distinctive opinion whether gaining such high wages is beneficial for the country. Nevertheless, I strongly disagree with that idea and believe that the government should set the maximum level of salaries.

Thanks
😊😊😊😊😊

Hello Simon.

Thank you for the e-book. It helped me a lot. I recently took my IELTS exam. My task 2 question was "should women be allowed to join police force or not. discuss both views and give your opinion".
I wrote 4 paragraphs.
Para 1 : I paraphrased the question and then i wrote THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS. (didnt give my opinion in intro)
para 2 : i started with ON ONE HAND and gave the advantages of women working in police and army.
para 3 : I started with ON THE OTHER HAND and i wrote disadvantages of this and FURTHERMORE gave my opinion.
para 4 : conclusion in which i wrote my conclusion and gave my opinion once again.

In task 1, i wrote about 232 words.

I got 6.5 in writing. Please advice me if i should go for recheck or not. I know you do not check essays, but all i need is just an advice if my coherence and cohesion and task response was right.

i got just 0.5 bands less in writing. I am confused if I should go for recheck or not.

Saad

It is not possible to advise you whether you should apply for a review because there are many factors that can lead to a score under 7. I only advise a review if you get a score at least one whole band lower than previous scores, and you feel you did well.

Here are two comments:

1. Don't write more than 200 words in Task 1. When people write long Task 1s, it is because they are identifying too many details. This can lead to penalties.
2. For opinion essays, always put your opinion in the introduction. The marking criteria says the opinion should be 'throughout' the essay, which means 'in all parts'. Not all examiners are strict about this, but it's in the marking criteria, so you should do it.

Hello sjm
It's always nice to read and learn a lot through your comment. You're such a good advisor for me 😊 You seem very expert, are you an ex-IELTS examiner as well?

Hello Simon, I got 6 in my writing exam and I would be grateful if you asked my question, the topic was (do you agree or disagree with the opinion that social activities are more important than those done alone? and why) should I have mentioned my opinion only?? because i mentioned in the first paragraph (the opinion that the activities alone are more important), then i stated in the second paragraph (my opinion that social activities are more important..)
in brief, does turning an agreement topic to discussion receives a penalty?

Hello Simon 😃😃😃

I do get confused on which types of questions we can choose to 'partly agree'. Can we depend on the words 'to what extent' to decide it?

So far I just highlight that we still can partly agree on the questions containing 'best/most/all/only' by saying 'disagree' so that we can show up the other side. Is it right?

Thanks 😊

Introduction
People have different views about whether governments should introduce a maximum wage. While in some ways it may seem reasonable to allow people to earn as much as companies are willing to pay, I personally believe that employee remuneration should be capped at a certain level.

Pr1:
There are various reasons why it might be considered beneficial to allow people to be paid extremely high salaries. To begin with, high remuneration can motivate the whole society to produce better outcome, due to the intimate link between high salaries and motivation, a number of people will work more harder for pay increments. Therefore, every part of the society can maximize their results and this could strengthen the power of the society. At the same time, talented people can acquire reasonable compensation for their abilities given the fact that a number of companies will be willing to provide high financial rewards to hire them, increasing their job satisfaction.

Pr2.
However, I agree with those who argue that there should be a maximum wage. Firstly, this maximum wage can lessen the social gap between high salaries and low salaries employees, hence conflicts between two groups about the distribution of wealth can be reduced and this can help to build more balanced society. On top of this, people could gain more work/life balance given the fact that employers should provide perks relating to healthy pursuit or less hour work for motivating their staff. Therefore, people will spend more time with family and friend rather than pursuing financial rewards.

Conclusion
In conclusion, it seems to me that it would be better, on balance, for governments to set a limit on the wages of the highest earners in society.

Hi simon and all

I gave test on last Saturday
Task 2 essay: skydiving and rock climbing are considered as dangerous sports so we should be banned . What extent do you agree or desagree?
Task 1 table showing various educational qualifications among workers in a particular country.
Speaking topic: part 2 :project work (team work)

Dear Simon, here is my introduction:

It is believed that there are some positive effects for a nation with a certain percentage of citizens getting their salaries into the top highest ones. However, I would have to argue that it is better to make the salaries under a particular level.

"Governments should not allow salaries above a certain level" - regrding this opinion freelancers from http://mypaperwriting.com often use citations from "1984" by Orwell. [ha-ha-ha]
If I wrote this essay (and this paragraph), I would claim: the limit of salaries stands against the principles of democracy.

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