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Parents’ spending on children’s sports increased gradually over the following six years, and by 2014 the average monthly amount had risen to just over £30

The number of children who chose Swimming as part of his main sport, rose from approximately 2 million in 2008 to around 4 million in 2014.

Parents’ spending on children’s sports increased gradually over the following six years, and by 2014 the average monthly amount had risen to just over £30

The number of children who chose Swimming as part of their main sport activities, rose from approximately 2 million in 2008 to around 4 million in 2014.

Parents’ spending on children’s sports increased gradually over the following six years, and by 2014 the average monthly amount had risen to just over £30.
... sports was increased... "was" is unneeded

The number of British children who played football remained relatively stable over the six-year period, with around 8 to 9 million.
...period, at around 8... "at" -> with

2. Parents' spending on children's sports increased gradually over the following six years, and by 2014 the average monthly amount had risen to just over £30.
4. Swimming saw a rise of children from approximately 2 million in 2008 to around 4 million in 2014.
OR,
There was a rise of children for swimming from approximately 2 million in 2008 to around 4 million in 2014.

2.Parents’ spending on children’s sports increased gradually over the following six years, and by 2014 the average monthly amount had risen to just over £30.

4.The number of children who swam rose from approximately 2 million in 2008 to around 4 million in 2014.

Can someone tell me why we used simple past (increased) instead of past perfect ? there was a range of time (following six years) it is a period not exact day or time

1. spent around $2000
2. was increasd--> increased

Parents’ spending on children’s sports increased gradually over the following six years, and by 2014 the average monthly amount had risen to just over £30.

There was a slight fall in the participation of athletics between 2012 and 2014.

2) Parents’ spending on children’s sports increased gradually over the following six years, and by 2014 the average monthly amount had risen to just over £30.

5) There was a slight fall in the participation of athletics between 2012 and 2014.

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While past simple is used to describe something simply happened in the past, past perfect is used to describe something changed from at point in the past to another point in the past.

Examples are:
IN 2014, the amount of money that parents spent on their children's sporting activities INCREASED to £30.
BY 2014, the amount of money that parents spent on their children's sporting activities HAD INCREASED to £30.

If you still cannnot see the distinction, you should look for it on a grammer book (and maybe, before ask it here...).

2.Parents' spending on children's sports increased gradually over the following six years, and by 2014 the average monthly amount had risen to just over {30.
4.The number or figure of British children who took part in swimming rose from approximately 2 million children in 2008 to around 4 million in 2014

2. It's wrong to use passive voice, so remove 'was'.
Parents’ spending on children’s sports increased gradually over the following six years, and by 2014 the average monthly amount had risen to just over £30.

4. 'Swimming' can not rise, should be 'the number'
The number of children who went swimming rose from approximately 2 million in 2008 to around 4 million in 2014.

In question2, the sentence is grammatically wrong with" was" and "increased" at the same time.

In question 2,an activity like swimming cannot increase in itself,it is either the number,figure,proportion or percentage of people participating that do rise or fall.

Sorry,I mean does rise and fall.

In 2008, British parents spent an average of around £20 per month on their children’s sporting activities.

The wrong use of apostrophe for possesive plural. as children are plural countable noun, it should be children'.


Swimming rose from approximately 2 million children in 2008 to around 4 million in 2014.

The number of British children who went swimming rose from approximately 2 million children in 2008 to around 4 million in 2014.

OR

Britain saw a rise in the number of children who went swimming by about 2 million between 2008 and 2014.

2. was increased --> increased

4. 4 million in 2014 --> 4 million children in 2014

5. Swimming --> The number of children who participated in swimming

Sorry, I've made a small mistake when typing.

Parents’ spending on children’s sports (sentence-2)is the wrong use of apostrophe for possesive plural.

”In many countries of the world few people earn extremely high salary. Some people think that, this is good for the country.Others think that, the government should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both views and give your opinion.”

Plz sir give me ideas what can i write in this essay

In many countries of the world few people earn extremely high salary. Some people think that, this is good for the country.Others think that, the government should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both views and give your opinion.”plz sir give me ideas about this essay through my account plzzzzzz

CORRECT ANSWERS FROM SIMON:

1. The first mistake is in sentence 2.

"was increased" is wrong. This should not be a passive. We need to write "spending on children’s sports increased".

2. The second mistake is in sentence 4.

"Swimming rose" is wrong.

Swimming itself didn't rise - it's the number of children that rose. We could write "The figure for participation in swimming rose..."

Well done if you noticed the 2 mistakes!

Dear friends, I am not talking about mistakes in the sentences here.

To me it seems more important to talk about a steep increase in number of children who took part in athletics between 2010 and 2012, rather than mentioning about slight fall between 2012 and 2014.

1. .......an average of £20 per month....
2. .......children's spots increased gradually...

What a great discussion is... So here we have at least two experts on IELTS, namely Mr. Simon and Mrs. Liz. Nice to be a part of the discussion 😊😀

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