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Hi Simon
I have a silly question. I was wondering what is the difference between BC ielts and IDP ielts papers, can u tell me please. Are the papers same?

Hi Simon,

I'm writing this comment to ask an advice from you. Two years back I sat for the IELTS exam under general scheme after some preparation and my results were Speaking - 6.5, Reading - 6.0, Listening - 6.0 and Writing - 6.0. But my target was 7.0 for each. After that I didn't do anything for IELTS for last couple of years. But now I want to sit for the IELTS exam again to achieve my target. But problem is, now I don't have an idea about how do I prepare for the exam, how long should I practice and when should I take the exam. This time I really confused. Please advice me. I really appreciate your help.

Dear colleagues,
Your comments also warmly welcome.

Thanks

What is indicated on the first line graph is how much pounds were spent from 2008 to 2014 on sports by families and the second graph illustrates how many British children were involved with three kinds of sports, namely, football, athletics and swimming at that time.

As it is perceived from the first chart, families in Britain have increasingly spent money to amuse their children through sports. In 2008, 20 pounds were dedicated to sports on average. While just over 30 pounds were put aside in 2014.

Moving to the second line graph, football has predominantly been spotting over the same period. However, participants in football remained more or less the same between 2008 and 2014, from 7.5 to about 9.5.Also, whereas athletics were the least noticed sport given here until 2008, around 0.5 million children, there was a sharp growth, to just under 5 million athlete taken part on athletics between 2010 and 2012. The athletes have slightly declined by 2014 afterwards. On the other hand, swimming has experienced a steady rise from just under 25 million children in 2008 to around 3.75 in 2014.

Being the most remarkable sport, football has remained the most popular sport in which British has spent more money than the other 2 fields. Additionally, the amount of money spent on sports has steadily been gone up by families within 6 years.

Written by Kami
September 9, 2016
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What is indicated on the first line graph is how much pounds were spent from 2008 to 2014 on sports by families and the second graph illustrates how many British children were involved with three kinds of sports, namely, football, athletics and swimming at that time.

As it is perceived from the first chart, families in Britain have increasingly spent money to amuse their children through sports. In 2008, 20 pounds were dedicated to sports on average. While just over 30 pounds were put aside in 2014.

Moving to the second line graph, football has predominantly been spotting over the same period. However, participants in football remained more or less the same between 2008 and 2014, from 7.5 to about 9.5.Also, whereas athletics were the least noticed sport given here until 2008, around 0.5 million children, there was a sharp growth, to just under 5 million athlete taken part on athletics between 2010 and 2012. The athletes have slightly declined by 2014 afterwards. On the other hand, swimming has experienced a steady rise from just under 25 million children in 2008 to around 3.75 in 2014.

Being the most remarkable sport, football has remained the most popular sport in which British has spent more money than the other 2 fields. Additionally, the amount of money spent on sports has steadily been gone up by families within 6 years.

Written by Kami
September 9, 2016
(228 words)

What is indicated on the first line graph is how much pounds were spent from 2008 to 2014 on sports by families and the second graph illustrates how many British children were involved with three kinds of sports, namely, football, athletics and swimming at that time.

As it is perceived from the first chart, families in Britain have increasingly spent money to amuse their children through sports. In 2008, 20 pounds were dedicated to sports on average. While just over 30 pounds were put aside in 2014.

Moving to the second line graph, football has predominantly been spotting over the same period. However, participants in football remained more or less the same between 2008 and 2014, from 7.5 to about 9.5.Also, whereas athletics were the least noticed sport given here until 2008, around 0.5 million children, there was a sharp growth, to just under 5 million athletes taken part on athletics between 2010 and 2012. The number of athletes has slightly declined by 2014 afterwards. On the other hand, the number of swimmers has experienced a steady rise from just under 25 million children in 2008 to around 3.75 in 2014.

Being the most remarkable sport, football has remained the most popular sport in which British has spent more money than the other 2 fields. Additionally, the amount of money spent on sports has steadily been gone up by families within 6 years.

Revised by Kami
September 9, 2016
(228 words)

Hi Simon,

Thanks for your introduction and overview.
For paragraph 3 and 4, do you suggest we describe each graph separately or mix them together? For the former potion, I find it hard to do comparison for the first graph. But if we combine the two graphs, we can describe them in the same year.

Look forward to your advice.

The line graphs show the average monthly amount that parents in Britain spent on their children’s sporting activities and the number of British children who took part in three different sports from 2008 to 2014.
My question is Monthly or yearly?
Thanks.

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There was a large increase in average monthly spend on their children's sport by almost 12 pounds from 2008 to 2014. The number of children taking part grew gradually and pointed at about 9 millions in 2014. In addition to figure for Athletics took a sharp fluctuation, there was a same level at the beginning amount, then climping to the peak at 5 millions before being a quite dicrease in 2015.

Hi Simon, I have a question. Although we cannot manage to seperate two detailed paragraphs clearly, if our writing is satisfactory enough can we still get a reasonable band, like 6 or more?


The given first chart shows data about average monthly amount spent by parents on sport activites of children in the UK over a period of 6 years from 2008, and the second line graph compares the amounts of money spent by British parents on football, athletics and swimming.
It is clear that the amount of money spent by parents on their children’S participation in sports had risen throughout the period shown. It is also important to mention that out of three activities football was by far the most popular sport in the UK between 2008 and 2014.
In 2008, an average British parent spent about 20 pounds in a month on his or her child’s sports. At that year, around 8 million juveniles goes to courses of football, while the number of children attending swimming and athletics stood at around 2 million and only 0.5 million respectively. The average monthly spendings of parents rose steadily, figure reaching a peak of about 32 pounds in 2014.
On the other hand, the figure for participation in football remained stable over a 6-year period, with the number of children reaching 9 million in 2014. By contrast, the number of children attending athletics fluctuated, and surpassed the figure for swimming. By 2014, just under 5 million children chose to participate in athletics. Furthermore, the popularity of swimming incresed, figures rising to around 4 million children in 2014.

Some people believe families will be more important than friends. do you agree or disagree.. plz give me ideas about this topic

The line graph shows that the average monthly amount that parents in Britain spent on their children's sporting activities and the number of children who take part in three different sports from 2008 to 2014.

It is clear that the parents spent more each year on their children's participation in sports over the 6-year period. In terms of the number of children taking part, football was significantly popular than athletics and swimming.

In 2008, British parents spent an average of about £20 on their children's sports. Over the following six years, average monthly spending on children's sporting activities rose to well over £30.

Looking at the number of children who participate in, the figure for football rose gradually from around 8 million in 2008 to 9 million in 2014. The number of children who enjoyed swimming seem to have doubled, with apporoximately 2 million children in 2008 to 4 million in 2014. With regard to athletics, we can see a dramatic increase and then a slight drop in the number of participants. There was only a neglible number of children who took part in athletics in 2008, but it soared to a peak of 5 million in 2012, and then fell a bit to below 5 million in 2014.

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The first two paragraphs are the same ones as Simon wrote, and then I did the rest two. In the third paragraph, there are only two sentences for the amount of money that parents spent, so I added to the last paragraph mentioning the number of children.
I welcome your suggestions and comments! Thanks.

The graphs compare the average monthly expenditure which spent on children’s sports in period 2008 to 2014 and the number of children who took part in Footbal, Athletics and Swimming in the same year.

Both of the two graphs indicate, there were an increase of amount of money which spent on children’s sports and a rise of the number of children who participate on the three different sports from 2008 to 2014, except for the athletics which decreased slightly in the 2012s onwards.

In 2008, the British parents spent 20 pounds every month on children’s sports, which are athlectics, swimming and football. Football is the most favourite games among others, where more than 7,5 million children played it in that year. However, the number of children who played athlectics and swimming were only below 2,5 million.

The number of british children who played football rose slightly and the number of kids who participated on swimming increased steadily between 2008 and 2014. There was a significant rise on children’s participant of Athletics from 2010 to 2012, which reached at 5 million in 2012.

Dear simon
I am still confused in using in and on , in a sentence, such as in sport or on sport?

Please help
Thank you

The two graphs provide data about an expenditure of British families on their sibling's sporting activities, and the number of candidates who in each sporting program( football, swimming, and athletic), in a period between 2008 to 2014.

The two graphs provide data about an expenditure of British families on their sibling's sporting activities, and the number of candidates in each sporting program( football, swimming, and athletic), in a period between 2008 to 2014.

obviously, in 2008 the expenditure was only 20 pounds, moving on to the subsequent years, there had been a steady increase in the total money given by the parents, therefore, by the end of 2014 families spent just over 30 pounds, which was considered as the highest figure of the period in question.

The two graphs provide data about an expenditure of British families on their sibling's sporting activities, and the number of candidates who in each sporting program( football, swimming, and athletic), in a period between 2008 to 2014.
overall, we can see that money spent by families increased annually, also football was more attractive activity while athletics and swimming were less popular.
obviously, in 2008 the expenditure was only 20 pounds, moving on to the subsequent years, there had been a steady increase in the total money given by the parents, therefore, by the end of 2014 families spent just over 30 pounds, which was considered as the highest figure of the period in question.
on the other hand, during 2008 football was chosen by over 7.5 candidates, this meant it was the most popular sporting activity compared with swimming at around 2, and the least attractive program was athletics at roughly one. Football experienced a slight rise to around 8 in 2012, this figure then remains unchanged for the rest of the period. Strikingly, in 2012 the number of children who selected athletics lessons increased considerably to overtake swimming and ended second at about 5, in turn, swimming number also rose steadily and finished at about 4 as the least favorable activities.

The graphs illustrate how much money spent monthly on children's sport activities by parents and how many children attended in three sports( namelynamely Football, Swimming and Athletic) between the year 2008 and the year 2014

Overall , it is noticeable shown the outlays spent monthly on sports rose gradually year by year while thy numbers of participants on activities experienced some erratic changes with the prevalence of football.

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