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I suggest to change these sentences like this:

1.As a matter of fact, it is no clandestine issue to anybody that sport has indisputable impacts on overall health of people.

-Sport obviously has possitive impacts on overall health of people.
(As a matter of fact,it is no clandestine issue to anybody that = obviously, clearly)

2.The proponents of this view perceive that investment in enhancing the number of health-related facilities is not alone a cure-all for protecting and maintaining healthy atmosphere.

-The proponents of this view perceive that investment in enhancing health facilities is not a core of protecting and maintaining healthy environment.

3.To revolutionize public health, alternative effective measures are entailed.

-To boosting people health, alternative effective measures are required.

clandestine
proponents
entailed
revolutionize

clandestine issue = secret
As a matter of fact, it is no secret to anybody that sport has indisputable impacts on overall health of people.

The proponents of this view perceive = the people who believe
The people who believe that investment in enhancing the number of health-related facilities is not alone a cure-all for protecting and maintaining healthy atmosphere.

entailed = happened
To revolutionize public health, alternative effective measures are happened.

hi simon
1-in fact,it is clear that the sport has positive effect directly on people's health.
2-the fans of this point of view believe that, investment for increase the amount of healthy facilities is not enough for creation of protective and maintaining atmosphere.
3-for total changing in the public health, alternative effective performance would be necessary.

1. Clandestine issue
As a matter of fact , it is obvious that sports have indisputable impact on people's health .

2. Perceive ,enhancing , protecting , maintaining
The proponents state that investing in public health facilities alone is not a cure for all :)

3. Revolutionize ,effective + alternative
Thus , alternative measures are necessary to improve the public health on a broader scale .

FROM SIMON:

The problem words / phrases are:

1. "it is no clandestine issue"

"clandestine" is a very strange word to use here. We use this word only when talking about secret activities, like spying! Don't use this word in IELTS.

I personally wouldn't use "As a matter of fact" or "indisputable impacts" either.

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2. The following phrases are not wrong, but they seem to be "showing off" too much in my opinion:

- proponents... perceive
- a cure-all

The following phrase is wrong and doesn't make sense in the context:

- maintaining healthy atmosphere

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3. "entailed" can't be used here. We just need a simple word like "needed".

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I'll suggest some easier and better sentences in tomorrow's lesson.

Thank you! :)

Sadly, I see this kind of writing every day.....

Thank you :))))

thank you master...

As it’s known to all, sport has positive effects on overall health of people.
The proponents of the view argue that investment on fitness facilities is not the only solution to protecting and maintaining a healthy working out environment.
In order to improve public health, alternative effective measures are necessary.

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1. As a matter of fact, it is no clandestine issue to anybody that sport has indisputable impacts on overall health of people.
. clandestine issue -> secret (clandestine has underlying meaning of deception)
. indisputable -> significant (I believe it's too obvious that no-one will dispute the impact of sports on health)

2. The proponents of this view perceive that investment in enhancing the number of health-related facilities is not alone a cure-all for protecting and maintaining healthy atmosphere.
. proponents of -> people with (feel like the word proponents is used in a court)
. investment in enhancing -> enhancing (focus should be on enhancement not on investment)

3. To revolutionize public health, alternative effective measures are entailed.
. revolutionize : improve (the word revolutionize gives impression that the current public health is on the verge of failing completely)


In my opinion, in general those words are too strong and extreme to emphasize the points.

Sir,if I partially agree to a question should I write the same number of equally important points in others' view paragraph also?Some of my teachers said write more points for my view and less number of points for others'view.

1. In reality, there is no untold issue that sport can impact an overall health of an individual.

2. The advocates of the idea of investing in the enhancement of the health-related facilities, like hospitals or clinics, is not the only cure for maintaining health of the people.

3. To transform public health, effective alternative measures must provided.

1. clandestine, indisputable
2. proponents
3. revolutionize, entailed

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