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1.We live in a rapidly changing and globalized world, and whether the teenage years are the happiest of our lives is a hotly debated issue.
2.In my view, It is teachers rather than politicians that should choose what pupils learn at school.
3.The demerits can be succinctly summarized thusly: children of wealthy parents may not learn the importance of hard work.

1. delete "whether"
2. delete "I am of the opinion that"
3. change to "the importance of hard work"

not very sure...waiting for answers

1. We live in a rapidly changing world, and whether the teenage years is the happiest day of our lives, however it is a hotly debated issue.
2. In my view, I am in the opinion that teachers rather than politicians should choose what pupils could learn at school.
3. The demerits can be succinctly summarized thusly: children of wealthy parents may not learn the importance hard work.
- demerits should not be used ;)

I am thinking for the best possible answer yet that is all that I could get. I am also waiting for the right answer.

1. The conjunction doesn't connect two related ideas.
The best way to fix the sentence is to delete the unrelated idea:
Whether the teenage years are the happiest of our lives is a hotly debated issue.

2. "In my view" is redundant so the best way to improve the sentence is to delete the extra phrase:
In my opinion, teachers, rather than politicians, should choose what pupils learn at school.

3. The register of the vocabulary is not consistent in the sentence. Actually there is also a grammatical mistake in this sentence "the importance OF hard work".
Using the same register throughout the sentence will improve it:

The disadvantages can be summed up this way: children of wealthy parents may not learn the importance of hard work.

Hi Simon,
here are my answers:

1) We live in a rapidly changing globalized
world, and whether the teenage years are
the happiest years of our lives is a
hotly debated issue.

2) In my view, teachers rather than politicians
should choose what pupils learn at school.

3) The drawbacks can be succinctly summarized
therefore: children of wealthy parents may not learn
the importance of hard work.

Nicely done Nina. I would also add that examiners in general have a particular dislike for the phrase 'hotly debated issue', and this is a good example of why. I advise candidates to avoid it, or if they really want to use it, save it for an issue that really is 'hotly debated' (eg: the issue of universal healthcare in the USA).

Hi Simon,

I think,

1. mistake: 'the whether',
2. mistake: 'in my view' or 'I am of the opinion that',
3. mistake: 'the importance'.

I'm not sure and waiting your answers.

We live in a rapidly changing globalized world, and whether the teenage years are the happiest of our lives is a hotly debated issue.

-> changing and globalizing world

In my view, I am of the opinion that teachers, rather than politicians, should choose what pupils learn at school.

-> pupils learn in (or from) school.

The demerits can be succinctly summarized thusly: children of wealthy parents may not learn the importance hard work.

->demerits -> drawbacks
Once Simon said demerit is not recommended.

I hope I'm correct :)

1. We live in a globalized rapidly changing world, and whether the teenage years are the happiest years of our lives is a hotly debated issue.

2. In my view (or I am of the opinion that), teachers, rather than politicians, should choose what pupils learn at school.

3. The demerits can be succinctly summarized thusly: children of wealthy parents may not learn the importance of hard work.

First of all, using the complicated long sentences that the main point is lost somewhere between hard vocabulary. I would change those in this way:

1- We live in a rapidly changing world. the fact of whether the teenage years are the happiest part of our lives is a hotly debated issue.

2- I believe, teachers rather than politicians, should choose what pupils should learn at school.

3- children of wealthy parents may not learn the importance (value)of hard work.


The demerits can be succinctly summarized thusly: children of wealthy parents may not learn the importance hard work.


1- We live in a rapidly changing globalized world, and whether the teenage years are the happiest of our lives is a hotly debated issue.
2- In my view, I am of the opinion that teachers, rather than politicians, should choose what pupils learn at school.
3- The demerits can be succinctly summarized thusly: children of wealthy parents may not learn the importance hard work.
1- "whether" to be deleted
2- we shall say "from my point of view " instead
3- you have advised that words "demerits ", "thusly" should be banned of suing

1- "whether" to be deleted
2- we shall say "from my point of view " instead
3- you have advised that words "demerits ", "thusly" should be banned of suing

I also think as Nina.

1. The sentence shows two unrelated ideas. May be, if you put a period between, it could be well written.

2. Is redundant to say "in my view" and "I am of the opinion". Simply, say In my opinion...

3. The third sentence has the same mistake that second: Saying "succinctly summarized" es redundant. Just say "the demerits can be summarized..." Finally, is has to say "the importance OF hard work".

Hi SIMON,

Kindly please clarify below:

1) Text: 4 x 35P stamps with airmail labels, for sending postcards to anywhere in the world.

Question: How much does it cost to send a postcard by airmail?

My Answer: 1.40P
Actual answer: 35P

I feel my answer is correct, can you please confirm which one could be the answer.

2) If you send something by either international recorded or international registered, what does the person receiving it have to do?

My answer: Signature
Correct answer: Sign on delivery

In this case, my answer is correct or not?

3) Answer should Not be more than three words

In this case, if the answer from text is "trees and public parks" (4 words), is it acceptable?

Or else, do we need to modify that as "trees and parks"?

Thanks,
Naresh

Dear Simon,

I have got a question regarding task 2. I really hope you can help me since my exam is in two weeks.
I usually cannot express my points in less than 450 words, thus clearly I run out of time. I do my best to make a proper plan in the beginning. But in the middle of writing some new ideas come to my mind that I feel I can use some good vocabularies through explaining those new ideas. So, I start to use them and then I just get confused.

Besides, since I bring either examples or explanations for each of my ideas, I am starting to wonder that maybe writing supporters for all ideas is not necessary.

Hi Simon,

Just a simple question, is there any difference between writing task 2 for General and academic module?
Look forward to receiving your answer

Hi All

Here are some answers:

Naresh - without seeing or hearing the whole text it's not possible to explain why an answer is correct, although number 2 is asking for an action, and your answer gives a noun. For 3, if it says 'no more than three words' then four words is incorrect, but again, without the whole text, better advice is not possible.

Par - this is a common problem. The answer is simple: use your plan and do not add extra ideas, especially just to put in 'good vocabulary'. Believe me, examiners are sick of people trying to put 'big words' into essays (Simon has written a lot about this). Concentrate on expressing the ideas in your plan clearly and simply (to reduce errors). A very long essay is bad for many reasons (takes too much time, it usually does not contain specific vocabulary, there is usually poor referencing etc) so keep it under 300 words, and answer the question. You are also probably putting in too many ideas. Try limiting them to two per paragraph and then you can add your detail/examples. There are no 'extra points' in IELTS for having lots of arguments.

Mohamed - both essays are marked in the same way so, no. However the academic questions tend to contain a bit more 'academic' type language.

Hi,

We live in rapidly changing globalized world, and a hotly debated issue is that whether the teenage years are the happiest of our lives.

In my personal point of view, the teachers should choose what pupils learn at school rather than politicians.


The demerits can be succinctly summarised, so children if wealthy parents may not be learn the important hard work.

thank you

1. We live in a rapidly changing globalized world, in which there is a hotly debated issue that whether the teenage years are the happiest of our lives.

2. I am of the opinion that teachers, rather than politicians, should choose what pupils learn at school. (Natuarally, In my view = I am of the opinion)

3. The drawbacks can be succinctly summarized as follow: children of wealthy parents may not learn the importance hard work.

1. There's on link between two sentences (globalising and happiest time)

2. Repetition (in my view & ..opinion of..)

3. Can that be a summary? Indeed it looks Just an example

I mean "no link" not "on link" in the previous posting

Dear Simon,

Could you please give some ideas for this question

"Elderly people think that the way they spent their life was simpler and better than today. Do you agree or disagree? Provide you reasons and real life examples."

Thanks

Dear sjm,
Thanks for your advice:-)
I could finally finish a task 2 in 51 minutes (it used to take 2 hours before) and with around 300 words. Seems like I'm getting closer to the point!

My guess:


1. Whether the teenage years are the happiest of our lives is a hotly debated issue. [remove all the first part]
2. I am of the opinion that teachers, rather than politicians, should choose what pupils learn at school. [get rid of 'In my view,']
3. The drawbacks can be summarized in this manner: children of wealthy parents may not learn the importance of hard work. [change 'demerits' by 'drawbacks', remove 'succinctly' and change 'thusly' by 'in this manner']

Hi Simon......
my handwriting is very bad.... and While i wrote BEC exam i lost marks on writing....
what should i do....please recommend what to do..

FROM SIMON:

I'll have to explain my answers to the above lesson tomorrow. I'm having a busy day today!

1. We live in a rapidly changing globalized world, and whether teenage years are the happiest period of our lives or not are hotly debated issues.
2.Personally, I tend towards the viewpoint that teachers instead of politicians, should choose what pupils learn at school.
3.The demerits can be succinctly summarized thus: children of wealthy parents may not learn the importance of hard work.

Special thanks to simon
Dear simon
Thanks to your great site, I scored 7.5 in writing in academic madule
I am from Iran, and I really appreciate your effort to help student all around the world
Regards
Sepide

CORRECT ANSWERS FROM SIMON:

First, I'll try to explain the problems:

Sentence 1
- The first part of the sentence about living in a rapidly changing world has no relation to the second part about teenage years. The examiner will think that you have memorised "We live in a rapidly changing globalized world".
- Examiners hate phrases (cliches) like "hotly debated issue", especially when the issue is NOT hotly debated - do we really have "hot debates" about whether our teenage years are the happiest??

Sentence 2
- "In my view" and "I am of the opinion" mean the same thing, so this is useless repetition. You might think that this makes your writing look more difficult or academic, but it just looks forced and clumsy.

Sentence 3
- I banned the word "demerits" and "thusly" in the lesson linked here:
http://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2013/10/ielts-advice-words-that-i-would-ban.html
- The whole phrase "The demerits can be succinctly summarized thusly" looks memorised, unnatural and forced. Nobody writes like this in the real world!

FROM SIMON (continued):

Now here are my examples of sentences that an examiner would prefer. Notice that I'm not trying to be 'difficult' or 'original' - I'm just writing normal, clear English!

1. Some people remember their teenage years as the happiest of their lives, but for many others the same period brings back unhappy memories.

2. I believe that teachers, rather than politicians, should choose what pupils learn at school.

3. In summary, children of wealthy parents may not learn the importance of hard work.

Thanks Simon really good explanation! I'm learning a lot.

“3. In summary, children of wealthy parents may not learn the importance hard work.”
It should be the importance of hard work, right?

Hi Q,

Yes, sorry I've corrected that now!

thanks Simon
can u put these lessons in paragraph cause I don't have more ideas


http://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2011/11/ielts-writing-task-2-plan-your-main-paragraphs.html

thanks a lot

1. We live in a globalized world changing rapidly, while whether the teenager years are the happiest time of our life is a hotly debated issue.

2. In my opinion, teachers, rather than politicians, should choose what kind of pupils should learn at school.

3. The demerits can be succinctly summarized: children of wealthy parents may not learn the importance of hard working.

Thank you Simon for your wonderful efforts and website!

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