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hi Simon,
in task 1, my teacher suggests me write the topic sentence for each paragraph.She also recommends to write a concluding and conclusion regardless of the overview
I also quite confuse with your following example in writing task 2.
"People nowadays work hard to buy more things. This has made our lives generally more comfortable, but many traditional values and customs have been lost and this is a pity.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Here are your guide:
I can see two clear ideas in this question: 1) buying things has made our lives more comfortable. 2) traditional values and customs have been lost. I agree with both of these points, so I'll write one paragraph explaining why I agree with the first point, and another paragraph explaining the second point.
Idea: buying things has made life more comfortable. Explain/Examples: we buy appliances like microwave ovens and dishwashers; we use computers to shop online; more people own a car.
Idea: traditional values and customs have been lost. Explain/Examples: people buy microwave meals rather than cooking traditional dishes; traditional local shops disappear and are replaced with online shopping; people are more independent, but lack a sense of community.

My teacher supposes that this argument is whether traditonal values and costoms have been lost is a pity. So we don't need to organise such as your guide.
Can you give me advice, please?
Thank you so much!

The bar chart displays the sum of figure of medals which was prized to twelve various nations.
According to the chart ,The USA’s medals was approximately 2300,which was followed by The Soviet Union’s figure at 1000.The UK , France,Germany and Italy has the figure of medal of more than 500 for each .The rest 6 countries accounted less than 500 medals for each.
It’s clear that the number of gold medal,silver medal, and bronze medal in each countries in the chart is approximately same same

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Dear Simon,
Would you please tell me how to use the words "lowest" and "smallest", "biggest" and "largest" in writing? Actually I can not distinguish them. For example, with "the amount of water", which can be used?
Sorry for asking here, I can not find another way to ask for your help.
I am looking forward from you.
Thank you very much.

hey, hi simon .i have recently joined my ielts class. i had given ur site by my teacher. since i could not find any progress in tnis task 1 writing . can u help me more further or suggest any thing.

hi simon ,I have got your site from my teacher. I should get band score 7 in each modules .If you help me in academic writing task 1 & 2 I can achieve my target score. I am looking forward from you.
Thank you very much.

Thanks for your advice.

Hi Simon.
May I use the phrase: Belong to in this case:
The second highest number of medals belongs to Soviet Union with totally about 1110 medals.

i simon ,I have got your site from my teacher. I should get band score 7 in each modules .If you help me in academic writing task 1 & 2 I can achieve my target score. I am looking forward from you.

In today’s world , the type of music is ever increasing. The music trend has changed from classical to the jazz, metal , rock, rap and so on . The choice for listening music varies on individuals .Music whereby people share their feelings. For instance, In Film Race the actor expresses his feelings by music. Addition to this most of people listen music for entertainment , relaxation and as their hobbies. For instance , many recreational club play the music for fitness and enjoyment.
Nowdays, the traditional music is more important that the international music that is heard everywhere. Preserving the culture and promoting the market will show this.
A country image is popular for its culture , subcultures , norms ,values and peoples. Nowdays , many countries are adapting policy to preserve their cultures. Even, developed countries are protecting their cultural music. For Instance, Country like Nepal is protecting its traiditonal music by including them in tourism industry. Thus , traditional music helps to represents its country and people.
On the other hand , traditional music helps to promote the economy of local market. Those people who knows how to play the instrument are important to the country business activity . The programs conducted in Chitwan National Park include the traditional music played by Ethnicity group” Tharus” which help to generate the dollars . Recently , I have seen the Sarangi Players in the Lake side of Pokhara in Nepal. This shows that how the local people are benefited by the traditional music.
To sum up , music is the soul of body and country’s culture. In regards , I would like to say that traditional music are more important than the international music.

hi simon!! please check this site a use full bar graph i thin so

Hi Simon, twelve countries are given in the chart,and I notice you didn't include each nation in ur main paragraphs,so is it okay not to mention each nation when the information is too much? thx a lot,

Hi Jasmine,

Yes, I think it would become too much like a list if I mentioned all 12 countries. It's ok to miss some of them when there are too many.

I hope that my essay was not very bad:

The bar chart compares the total figure of Olympic medals which have been obtained by twelve countries from the beginning till now.

According to the information provided, the USA is by far the most figure of medals have been won in the world. As well, Japan is bar far lowest number of medals is ranked as 12th place in the chart.

It is clear that American athletes were succeeded to obtain highest rank of either Gold, Silver and Bronze medals across the other countries. They have won around 2300 medals in Olympic Games that it was approximately 40% Gold, 30% Silver and 30% Bronze. After the USA, Soviet Union is located at second place by 1000 medals. Compared to the US, Athletes of Soviet Union have obtained 1 out of 2.5 medals with around 450 Gold, 200 Silver and 200 Bronze.

It is notable that none of eleven countries after the US could not obtain 1000 medals and even each of the last seven countries would not be able to won more than 500 medals in Olympic Games. Interestingly, the proportion of gold, silver and bronze among majority of countries except of Italy, 6th country, and Japan 11th country has followed a same trend in the bar chart.

Dear Simon,
Why ? ... they have won ....
and not ? .... they had won ....
The bar chart compares twelve countries in terms of the overall number of medals that they have won at the Olympic Games.

It's because he is talking about 'medals won up to now'.

Hi Simon, I got your site from a friend and i find it very useful. Since, I'm preparing my IELTS exams by myself, I need a feedback about my essays..could you give me an hand?
Thank you a lot

The stacked bar chart illustrates the differences among twelve countries in terms of the total amount of Olympic medals won by each of them. In addition, the graph split the overall number of medals into the three possible categories they may assume: Gold, Silver and Bronze.
It is clear that the country, which had won the highest number of Olympic prize, is United States. Furthermore, just one country won more than 1,000 medals and just other four nations surpassed the line of 500 medals.
To be more precisely, USA is by far the most successful Olympic winning country, with more than 2250 medals. The proportion among the three prize colors is very proximate to each other. Nevertheless, it is possible to say that the figure of Gold medal is higher than the other categories figures.
With a rather great distance from USA, Soviet Union medals number is about 1,000. So, this country get the second position in the graduation.
The other four countries that got 500 medals are UK, France, Germany and Italy. It is noticeable that neither this four-countries group there is a relevant difference among the proportions of each medal color. All the other nations have less than 500 medals, even if not less than 400. It’s Japan the country which won the least number of Olympic prizes.

China is the only other country with a noticeably higher proportion of gold medals (about 200) compared to silver and bronze (about 100 each).
I can't understand this part :( how Chine is the only and there are other country like, Hungary like China and higher !
please anyone can explain it to me ?:(

hey ,
i cant solve ths task writing task 1 :(
can anyone help me for this i mean chart and graph become difficult for me ...
pls reply, im waiting here for your response guys,
im general category student.

urojfaheem

Hi Simon, Thank you so much for your attention.
I noticed you do not write conclusion for task 1, while I have been taught the conclusion is necessary in this task too(regardless overview)
Could you explain about this too.

Hello Simon. Thanks a lot for your website, it is very useful. I just wanted to make sure I understand it correctly; in the chart on Olympic medals won by the Soviets you wrote that the number of gold medals was "slightly higher than the number of silver or bronze medals." Does the graph show the proportion or the number of medals of each type? Thanks again for your lessons!

Hi Vahid,

It seems to me that it shows both. You can see the numbers along the bottom of the chart, and the amount of each colour in each bar gives you the proportion of the total.

Hi Simon,
Can I pay more attention to describe the total numbers of medals won by different countries and their ranking? Or, it can be better, if I define more about how many gold, silver and bronze medals these nations won?

Dear Simon

I have been studying on this website for 2 weeks. It helps a lot.

The bar chart above illustrates 12 different countries in terms of the total number of medals they won in Olympic Games.

It is noticeable that the U.S. was by far the country who had won the most medals, with figure considerably surpassing that for Soviet Union, which was the second competitive country. The data also indicate that, for each country, the proportion of gold, silver and bronze medals were similar to each other.

American won approximately 2300 medals, with 900 gold medals, 800 silver medals and 600 bronze medals respectively. Soviet Union won just above 1000 medals, with the proportion of gold medals slightly higher than that of silver or bronze medals.

Four European countries, namely the United Kingdom, France, Germany and Italy won more than 500 medals. China won around 400 medals totally, which was a relative small number in comparision with the figures for the others, despite that the proportion of gold medals was impressively high. Japan won about 380 medals, slightly less than that of China, and was the least competitive of the 12 countries.

hi by reading this task i came to that you have not covered reviews all of the countries but rather you have mentioned few important or relevant countries,what i want to ask is is this enough to write like this? and can you get good band sin such format?

The comparative figure illustrates the number of gold, silver and bronze medals won in an Olympic, by twelve countries.

The total of medals that USA has won is around 2300 medals, with a breakdown of 900 medals of gold, 750 silver and the rest are bronzes. Behind the States, it is Russia who won approximately 1000 medals in overall and the country has a higher composition of gold medals than the sliver and the bronze.

It can be seen that the following four countries, which is the UK, France, Germany and Italy have won more than 500 medals, with a same comparison between the three type of medals won. As for the other countries, they have obtained medals between the range of 450 and 490 medals.

In conclusion, It is obvious that United States have the highest number of medals won in the event and also notice that the comparison between the numbers of gold, silver and bronze medals won by the respective countries are similar.

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