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Thank you Simon for sharing this graph type. I can't wait to see the two detail paragraphs.

Thank you for your sharing.

thank you simon for sharing it ...

Hi Simon,

Need urgent help. I have test on 27th. Could you help me to approach this essay?

"Governments these days encourage the use of consumer products. Some say that it is good for the economy, while others claim it is bad for the society as a whole."

Thank you
Trupti

Hi Simon,

I just got my second ielts result for the 13/7 one and my writing dropped to 6 while others have gone up to 8. Immm truly devastated. Last time i got 3 skills 7.5 and reading 6.5. Now my other scores are 8 and writing has dropped. Omg what can i do? I only need 7 each band :(

I havent been studying for the last 2 weeks but im planning on taking the test again asap. Any advice on how to revise please? Im really scared one band would just drop again and again.

Hi Simon, I wonder if you have any classes for reading in Manchester before September ... Or a full course in all the four parts . Please let me know..many thanks

Many students still don't know, but an easy way to improve writing Part1 is by reading and learning from news/reports describing different kinds of figures/statistics.

If you pay attention, you will notice that many of the expressions used by the writers can actually be found in Simon's sample essays. As Simon has repeatedly said, such expressions look simple but not many students can use them accurately, and that's the main reason why scores won't go as high as one wishes.

Hi Martin,

I got 7 from four sections (overall 7).
Do you think it is good and how can I improve it to 8 or 8,5?
Thanks
Sevil

Hi Sevil,

Band 7 is obviously a good score for most students as this is the requirement for many schools.

How to improve to 8 or 8.5? Well, I have never read your essays and never heard you speaking... so you probably need to take some lessons with an experienced private teacher to check your work and identify your weaknesses.

Good luck!

Martin

Hi Simon,

To my mind, your introduction is ambiguity as we can see below..

I can understand that "THAT" refers to "TWELVE COUNTRIES".. However, it may refers to "MEDALS".. If so, after "THAT" we must correct as "they have BEEN won .." in terms of passive structure and grammar rule.

Thank you for checking in advance..

The bar chart compares twelve countries in terms of the overall number of medals THAT they have won at the Olympic Games.

Hi Modest,

I disagree. This is a very normal sentence for and English speaker, and I don't find it ambiguous. It would not be correct to add "been".

Dear Friends, I need your suggestion for improving.

The bar chart illustrates the number of Olympic medals which are won by the different twelve nations.

It is clear that the USA is by far the most successful Olympic winning nation. It is also noticeable that the figures for gold, silver and bronze medals won by any particular country tend to be fairly similar.

The USA won around 1000 gold, more than 1500 silver and 2300 bronze medals. However, Japan and China are the less successful Olympic medals winning nations. Japan won only 100 gold, 200 silver and 350 bronze medals. The figure for china is also approximately similar trend with Japan. The Soviet Union is the second winner which won around 350 gold, 700 silver and 1000 bronze medals. The figures for the gold, silver and bronze medals are nearly 150, 350 and 650 respectively won by the UK which is the third Olympic medals winning nation. Whereas, the France, Germany, and Italy won fewer number of all types of medals than these three countries the USA, Soviet Union and UK. Unfortunately six other nations Sweden, Australia, Hungary, East Germany, Japan and China couldn’t success to win any kind of 500 medals so they got all three medals only less than five hundred.

The stacked bar chart compares twelve countries in term of overall the numbers of mentals which they have won at the Olympic games .
.It is also evident that USA was the country which won the highest numbers of mentals with 2300 mentals . Soviet Union maintained the second positon when this country gained 1000 mentals.In addition,France and UK followed with 750 and 600 mentals respectively.While Germany and Italy earned the equal numbers mental constituting 1000 ones,the rest countries achieved below 1000 metals .Because of winning just 350 mentals ,Japan standed the final position in league tables.
As can be seen from the chart, the proportion of three catergories of mental was fairly similar for any particular countries.Mean while,America earned 1900 gold,1700 sliver and 1600 bronze which were the greatest figures in each catergories of mentals .Furthermore ,Soviet union achieved gold mental most with 800 ones ,while sliver and Bronze had the same numbers with 600 ones.For Japan ,the gained numbers of mental was split almost equally between three kinds of mental.
I think in my writting ,there are some mistakes so I hope that you can correct them and give me some advices in writing task 1 .thank you very much and hope to recieve your response

The stacked bar chart compares twelve countries in term of overall the numbers of mentals which they have won at the Olympic games .
It is also evident that USA was the country which won the highest numbers of mentals with 2300 mentals . Soviet Union maintained the second positon when this country gained 1000 mentals.In addition,France and UK followed with 750 and 600 mentals respectively.While Germany and Italy earned the equal numbers mental constituting 1000 ones,the rest countries achieved below 1000 metals .Because of winning just 350 mentals ,Japan standed the final position in league tables.
As can be seen from the chart, the proportion of three catergories of mental was fairly similar for any particular countries.Mean while,America earned 1900 gold,1700 sliver and 1600 bronze which were the greatest figures in each catergories of mentals .Furthermore ,Soviet union achieved gold mental most with 800 ones ,while sliver and Bronze had the same numbers with 600 ones.For Japan ,the gained numbers of mental was split almost equally between three kinds of mental.

There are some mistake in this writing.I hope you can repair them and give me some advice to writing task 1 .
Thank you and I hope to receive your response

The bar chart compares twelve countries in terms of the overall number of medals that they have won at the Olympic Games.

It is clear that USA is by far the most competitive medal winning nation.

It is also noticeable that the figures for gold, silver and bronze medals won by any other particular nations are tend to be fairly similar.

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