IELTS Writing Task 1: life cycle essay

Here's my full essay for the life cycle question:

The diagram illustrates the various stages in the life of a honey bee. We can see that the complete life cycle lasts between 34 and 36 days. It is also noticeable that there are five main stages in the development of the honey bee, from egg to mature adult insect.

The life cycle of the honey bee begins when the female adult lays an egg; the female typically lays one or two eggs every 3 days. Between 9 and 10 days later, each egg hatches and the immature insect, or nymph, appears.

During the third stage of the life cycle, the nymph grows in size and sheds its skin three times. This moulting first takes place 5 days after the egg hatches, then 7 days later, and again another 9 days later. After a total of 30 to 31 days from the start of the cycle, the young adult honey bee emerges from its final moulting stage, and in the space of only 4 days it reaches full maturity.

(169 words, band 9)

Comments

[Naveed Ahmed Alizai]

!!!!!Simon is simply the best!!!!!

[thangngovan]

Hi Simon
when i read your essays, i really feel that it is simple and clear to understand, good at coherence and cohesion. However, i know that a mistake in writing task 2 is using informal word. So could you tell me how can i avoid this mistake but also write a simple essay?
Could you answer me one more question about length of writing task 1. What number word of the task 1 essay is the most suitable?

[Rakesh]

Dear Simon,

First of all I really want to convey my gratitude towards you from the bottom of my heart to running this wonderful website which is providing a tremendous amount of knowledge and skills to the people who want to do well in their IELTS exam.

Actually, I have just received my IELTS score and I am very happy to share this with you, because I have learnt a lot from your lectures.

Well, my score is as follows:-

L - 7, R - 8.5, W-7.5, S - 8, O - 8

Regards,
Rakesh

[ellen]

dear simon,
i have been told that i can only stick to one side in opinion essay while both sides have to be considered in argument question. the question below is really popular and i even don't know which type is it.
In some countries, the parents expect children to spend long time on studying both in and after school and have less free time. Do you think it has positive or negative effects on children and the society that they live in?

[ellen]

Dear Simon,
I bought ur book some months ago. The ideas are excellent and thanks for that.
My score used to be 6 or 6.5 however i need 7. I took the latest test and only get 5.5 which really shocked me.
One examiner says pick one side and stick to it while another says mention both side otherwise u r task achievement will be low.
I am really confused and even don't know how to start now, pls give me some suggestion.
q.Caring for children is probably the most important thing of the society. It is suggested that all mothers and fathers should be required to take the childcare training courses. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?
this is one of the exam question. after introduction, i wrote a paragraph that training courses are beneficial for children , after that i wrote in another paragraph however it does not mean that all parents
should attend the course bcz blabla . then conclusion.
i m confused bcz someone says u should one opinion and stick to it, while others believe u should mention both parts otherwise u have not address the full task.
i don't know what is the right logic.
Academic Writing Task2: In some countries, the parents expect children to spend long time on studying both in and after school and have less free time. Do you think it has positive or negative effects on children and the society that they live in?
this is another question i met.
i wrote introduction, then body one---its bad for children mentally.body 2---bad for children physically. body3 bad for society. then conclusion.
is it wrong to write like this?is there other better ways?
q.People who read book for pleasure can be better developed in imagination and language skills than watching TV, to what extent you agree or disagree.
this is a v confusing question that i even don't know where to start.if i say i don't agree , do i need to mention other sides?

thx!!!

[Suman Chandra Das]

Hi Simon:)
After Reading your ebook, I feel really much better on writing task 2. Now in the same time I am wondering if you could suggest me or give some tricks like task 2 for writing task 1. It'd be really helpful for me to prepare task 1.
Hope to hear from you.
Have a great day:)
Reagard's
Suman

[Susan]

Hi Simon,

I really appreciate your effort on this website where I learn a lot for ielts writing. Regarding academic writing task 1, your example of life cycle is only one graph, however, in cambridge 6 test 3, there are two graphs which contain life cycle and process as a combination. It is a bit complicate to write an concised essay. Can you please give me some suggestions? Thanks a lot.

Susan

[Winnie]

Hi Simon,

Do you know if we have to put titles in the essays?

Thanks,

Winnie.