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The figure illustrates different stages involved in the life cycle of of a bee.
It is clear that there are six stages in the life cycle of a honey bee,which start from laying out of eggs by mature bees and ends up when they grown up into adult bees.

The figure above illustrates the five stages in the life of the bee.

It is noticeable the life cycle of the bee starts from an egg and ends up as an mature adult bee.

it is noticeable that the life cycle of the bee is just more than a month, and it starts from an egg and ends up as a mature adult bee.

The diagram depicts the life cycle of honey bees with 6 stages starting from eggs. Then steps are replacing each other until bees are ready for breeding with capacity of 1 or 2 eggs for three days.

1. Till to maturity a mare honey bee move through 6 stages of developing process which takes them more than a month.
2. I think in this description active verb forms are rather suitable than passive ones.

Hi simon,
this one of the interesting videos i watched and hope that it can helps everyone.


The diagram highlights the 6 main stages involved in the life-cycle of the honey bee.

Generally speaking,it is ongoing process of changes,with one cycle lasting about 34-36 days to be completed before starting a new one.During this time,the great transformation may be observed,starting from laid eggs through its hatching,nymph forms until full adult developments.

2.As it is a life-process ,the active forms should be used,while describing the stages in detail.

The picture illustrate the life cycle of the honey bee.

As can be seen,before grow up to adult bees,the eggs of bees will experience 6 stages during a span of 34~36 days.

Hi Simon.need a quick response from u.i have completed my speaking test today .interviewer just said that clarity is missing after i completed part3.will this affect my score?please reply...
how many bands will be reduced for clarity?

The graph illustrates a honey bee's life cycle. From an egg, it transforms through 6 stages, with the time around 34-36 days to be an adult bee.

Hi Simon, the diagram illustrate the life cycle of the honey bee process. It consist of 6 stages. Starting as a nymph to a mature bee. It indicate that the process of this honey bee life cycle takes about 34-36 days. At the first stage, females bees will lay about 1-2 eggs every three days. After 9-10 days later, the eggs will hatch. Couple of days later, young adult emerges and final stage when the bees matured.
Simon, im not good in writing, correct me if im wrong.. Tq !

From the figure, it is clearly seen that bee life cycle containing 6 stages which takes around 34-36 days to complete. This cycle begin from egg and end with a reproduction of females bee.

The diagram shows the main stages of development of a honey bee. The cycle is completed within 34 or 36 days starting with laying eggs and finishing with maturity.

The diagram illustrates the period of honey bee up to mature. It becomes adult through five stages which starts with laying and the life cycle completes within 32 to 36 days.

Hi Simon,

I am trying to finish this essay, however, I have a problem with the 2nd stage, it mentions in the diagram that in stage 1 eggs hatch after 9-10 days, then in stage 2 there is another 5 days, I am not quite sure what this 5 days stands for? could you help me on this issue?

thanks a lot for your help!



Hello Simon, I really like your site and I am planning to sit to IELTS exam 16th Feb.
I have some questions:
Is it possible to give me contacts of teachers who can check my writing and give me a feedback, and do you know how much will it cost?
How long do you think it will take me to study your task two in your ebook, currently I have studied all other sections?
Do you know where I can get full IELTS Academic test sample?
Thank you in advance for your reply?

Please help me to collect, thank you!

The picture clearly shows the life cycle of the honey bee. Normally a honey bee's life cycle will take 34-36 days.
Female bees lay 1 or 2 eggs every three days and they will hatch after 9 to 10 days. Then the immature form of an insect will moult 3 times as it grows. The first mounting will last 5 days, then 7 days. After the last time 9 days' moulting, young adult bees emerge. However, this is not the final stage. Young adult bees will take 4 days to maturity.

hi everybody, check my work, please. Tomorrow I am going to take an exam.

The process demonstrates the circul of honey bee’s life.
The initial data that markedly shown by the diagram is that female bees lay eggs between one and two each three days. Then becomes the term of hatching eggs that comes about after nine or ten days. Further and more importantly comes the period of spliting from eggs and it takes young bees 5 days. It is interesting to know that as bees are grow up, bees three times coast the coats. More specific, period of moults occures till nine days. After that, when bees reach slightly more that one month olds, in the life of bees come the period of young adult apises. All in all, after the next 96 hours apises become maturity ages.
Obviously overall, there are various stages in the process of maturity in bees’s lifetime that consist of 5 steps and all process takes about 5weeks to start the chain from the begining.


I'm afraid I no longer have time to answer everyone's questions individually. However, I do still read them all, and I try to answer some questions in a lesson once a week (usually Saturdays).

Simon I need in your help) I am going to take exmas tomorrow)

Dear Bek,

We should understand that Simon cannot correct everyone's essays individually.
I could give you some hints, as I see how it can be improved, changing your trial a bit (last time at A IELTS exam I managed to get 7.5 at writing)

1.Just write what the diagram is about paraphrasing the question.
You can see how I wrote it above, in my first comment:
The diagram highlights the main stages involved in the life cycle of the honey bee or perhaps you would prefer make it more simple: The diagram illustrates (shows) the life-cycle of the honey bee.

2.Then, overall, summary can be put after introduction (as is advised by Simon to make the report clear from the beginning) or in the end, as you did.

So, perhaps you could write it like I did (see my comment above, among other today's people answers) or perhaps like I wrote it now using your ideas:

Overall, (it is not necessary write ‘obviously overall' - it sounds a bit strange to me) through 6 main steps within approximately 5 weeks the full bee development can be completed, from the eggs laid by one adult generation, its transformation, immature nymphs until the new adults appearance.

3. 4 detailed paragraphs, based on your ideas:
At the first stage, mature females in each 3-day period lay 1 or 2 eggs. Then, after 9-10 days the eggs are ready to hatch, which happens during the second step lasting up to 5 days. Following that, the 2 next stages rely on the growth of immature form of insect, which is called nymph. It is interesting to know (I would suggest ‘find out’)that while bees grow (not 'are grow’) they shed 3 times (or ‘change’, ‘moult’ - I don't know the term 'coast the coats' ?) their coats. More specific, the period of moults 'occurs' (I would rather put here 'lasts’) until 9 days.

Then, during the next stage, after passing a month, the young bees evolve into adults, however they are still immature at this time. Finally, the step up to maturity endures 4 days, and once achieving this fully developed females may match their partners and lay eggs to start a new cycle.

Dear Bek,

I wish you the best and good luck for tomorrow.

Try to be calm and sleep well.
Tomorrow be concentrated and exploit all you have learn so far. For me the worst always was the time management so use your time wisely in each of the modules. Do your best! We cannot do more that we can, but everything is possible.

Kind regards,


Dear Aleksandra,

May I know where you from? you are really good in writing. Would you mind to teach how to construct a good essay for writing task 2 or probably any advice you could give me. Thanks.


dear simon,
can you write a whole essay as an example for us, please? i think it's a little bit tough. i made it underlength.
thank you,

1. Introduction and Overview

58 words

The picture illustrates the life cycle of an insects called honey bee.

It is clear from the diagram that there are 4 stages in the life cycle process of the honey bee. The life cycle starts when the female insects lay their eggs until it will grow into a fully mature adults, and usually completed between 34 to 36 days.

2. In describing diagram in Writing task 1, I preferred to use the active form of verb, because it is usually a continued process or in cycle pattern.

Hi Simon and every one I try to write full report.

The figure illustrates the honey bee's life cycle starting from laying eggs by mature bee to grow up and this life cycle takes from 34 to 36 days.

It is clear that the life cycle of honey bee contains of six stages as well two different lives, one life is inside the eggs while the other outside or when the eggs are hatched.

The first stage, the females of honey bees lay from one to two eggs every three days. Then, after nine to ten days those eggs are hatched and become an insect.

The third stage, the insect becomes bigger and this takes five days. Within following 7 days the bee grows up. As much as minimum days when the eggs get hatched, the insect became a young adult emerge in addition, it loses or sheds old skin. Finally the bee becomes mature and ready to lay eggs and staring new life style.

In general I would write using passive but in such question I prefer use both of them because we know the queen lays the eggs

Hi to everyone,
Regarding what voice should be used for such question, I would like to suggest an active one as this is a natural cycle.We use passive voice in cases where people are involved.for instance, a process describing how a brick is made.


This is such a great exercise for those who will just take up the upcoming exam this February. Anyways here's my answer:

It is noticeable that the life cycle of the bee is just more than a month, and it starts from an egg and ends up as a mature adult bee.


Thank you.

Whole essay - 192 words

The picture illustrates the life cycle of honey bee.

It is clear from the diagram that there are 4 stages in the life cycle of the honey bee. The life cycle starts when female insects lay their eggs until it will grow into fully mature adults and completed between 34 and 36 days.

Looking at the first stage of the life cycle of the honey bee, the female insects lay 1 or 2 eggs every three days. The second stage is the incubation period; the eggs will be hatch after 9 to 10 days. During the 5th day of this stage the insects surfaced from the egg shell as a nymph. Between 7th and 9th day the nymph moults three times, it will lose old feathers, hair or skin to allow for new growth.

At the third stage of the cycle, young adult form of insect emerges which is about 30 days old. The honey bee during this period had complete set of wings and learned to fly. Finally, a fully grown mature honey bee appeared between 34 and 36 days, and ready to mate then laid eggs to repeat the cycle.

The graph illustrates a life cycle of a honey bee.
The process in which an egg transforms into an adult insect comprises six stages. It is apparent that it only takes 36 days in all for an egg to evolve into an adult bee.
The cycle of a honey bee starts when a female insect lays an egg. This is done by the females every three days. After approximately 9-10 days the eggs hatch and a nymph comes to life. At the course of for days nymphs grow while shedding their skin three times. This process allows the nymph to mature and become a young adult.
The next stage of a life cycle of the insect is maturing that takes the moult around four days. After that period of time the moult is an adult honey bee that now can lay eggs so its life can be sustained by new insects.

I found some mistakes in my writing so I corrected it and posted it again. My question to SIMON is whether use "that" or "which" when reffering to a noun in a sentence: the nymph becomes an adult which/that now can lay eggs. I'm always confused and not sure which form is OK.

The graph illustrates a life cycle of a honey bee.
The process in which an egg transforms into an adult insect comprises six stages. It is apparent that it only takes 36 days in all for an egg to evolve into an adult bee.
The cycle of a honey bee starts when a female insect lays an egg or two. This is done by the females every three days. After approximately 9 to10 days the eggs hatch and nymphs come to life. At the course of up to nine days nymphs grow while shedding their skin three times. This process is called moulting and allows the insect to completely emerge out of its shell.
The next stage of the insect’s life cycle is maturing that takes the nymph around four days. After that period of time the nymph becomes an adult honey bee which now can lay eggs so its life can be sustained by new insects.

Dear Danny,

I am from Poland, and I have been living in the UK for 5 years. I am still a humble learner, not an expert in English.

It is really nice to hear that you consider my writing as being good. I thought that it was not bad, before my first AIELTS exam. Then, I received my first result at 6 and two times later 6,5. Other modules were better. So, I realised that something must be changed, at least in exam techniques. My writing tendency, was to produce too long essays, I had plenty of ideas but I could not be concise enough and, so I had a problem how to finish it on time. Other problems were like articles, place of adverb In sentences, prepositions. By chance, about 10 months ago I found Simon’s website, and it was very fortunate. Since then it has become my day journal while preparing for next trials. It is a golden-mine, in terms of English language understanding and all preparation needed to go through this difficult exam. Additionally, I attended twice one-day courses on reading and writing separately which are organised by Simon in Manchester. As a result I got my highest score at listening and speaking 7.5, my writing in July 2012 was 7 and in last December 7.5. My max reading score was 8, usually is 7. However, I was unsuccessful to have them at 7 or more from one sitting.

So, I have to take AIELTS again.
So my first and main advice is – just follow all of Simon’s instructions and hints on writing and other modules given on the site.

As regards writing task 2, it is important to know, how to answer to each type of question: problems-solutions, agree or disagree, discussion with the opinion or not. Secondly, how to maintain 4 paragraph structure, with the role of each part, emphasising body paragraphs with its good ideas, according to the topic ,enriching them by the supporting evidence or examples. Look at his explanation about the introduction (present the topic, give an opinion if needed, in two sentences and conclusion(neat, short summary, final restatement).

While the ideas are so important, you have got to gather them in your mind by many possible ways, by reading and listening to different resources on the most popular IELTS topics about modern problems and achievements, but rather in general terms, like science and technology, research, care about environment and prospects about the future of the globe as a whole, demographics, urbanisation, social (gender, family life ,societies) , unemployment, crime ). You can buy Simon’s e-book with ready sentences, ideas that can be exploited and developed in your essays. It is very useful. To add ,if you can enrich your vocabulary, by studying English as a whole, it can be key to success not only for writing but for each module. Read model answers, from Cambridge books, Simon’s model answers, other good sources with that, and try to analyse them, according to the topic, style, adopting some vocabulary, ideas and good features of language.

As regarding the writing task 1 - again Simon teaches us how to deal with different types of graphs, charts, maps or processes. Some patterns are quite similar, if you catch it you would be fine. It is important to have here a good structure as well, with a good summary, after introduction or in the end and with 1 or rather 2 detailed paragraphs. Language is typical, but certainly you know all of that comparing, contrasting, descriptive while writing about the changes ,patterns and differences, with adverbial or adjective phases, like ‘ the sales decreased dramatically,’ ‘ it was a significant growth in sales’, with passive or active forms in processes or life cycles. This language may be learnt with some practice. In short, write a good report highlighting data which is important to achieve the task given. Do not give your opinion unless it is a special form where it is asked for (example - analysing suggestions where the new supermarket would be built, according to the map given.)

Simon also recommends to get your written work checked by a professional teacher, almost for some time which allow you to know what are your weakest points and on what you should work more. Usually, it is difficult to notice your own mistakes. I have to say that I felt lack of that help, as I could not afford private tutoring or a particular IELTS course with the teacher correction. Amazingly, sometimes my own daughter, who was first taught by me, now, near 16 years old, corrects me (after 5 years spent at good English schools, she is now predicted A and A* at GCSE in English language and literature). So if you can, learn with a teacher, if not it is still possible to get a higher score by studying hard yourself exploiting all the best language resources you can find, like mentioned above.



Great advice Aleksandra. Thanks for using your experience to help other learners!

Hi Aleksandra,

Thank you for the great advice, unfortunately like you I can't afford the private tutoring. If I may ask favor from you, would you mind to check my essays? and point some of my corrections and weakness.

Thank you again


Dear Danny,

I appreciate your trust in me, but the fact is I am really busy at this moment. I don't know what I should do, study more medical issues in English or the language itself, having 3 children, a noisy family around. Additionally, I enrolled 2 weeks ago for the first month of promotional price of general English course called 'English Town'. It is quite good, you are scored with each task completed and especially worthy are its daily, interactive conversation classes. But the time is needed to do it decently and I do not think I could afford that with the normal price since the next month. And, it is not focused particularly on IELTS.
However, I am studying it now.

So, it would be hard for me to offer you a regular check up of your essays. But, what we can do, I think is if you could answer 1 or 2 Writing2 questions other students gave us on the site. Choose what you like, write them and I would correct it as an example. I hope it could help others and Simon would not be against that. Later, if I find somehow more time I would give you my e-mail and we would change other essays between us.

I found the last not answered students' examples. Try one or two of them.

1. Should mothers and fathers be required to take childcare training course? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

2. It's been seen that reading for pleasure can better develop imagination and better language skills than watching television, do you agree or disagree?

3.In some countries children are expected to studying long hours in and after school, and have little time. Describe positive and negative effects of this on children and the society they live in.

4.Some people believe that living in high-rise buildings make people lonely and unhappy. Others think there are some advantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.



Hi Aleksandra,

Thank you so much for your time. I will answer one or two of the listed questions. My only wish is to solely send it to you for you to check it and give me some feedback. Don't you worry because I'm not rushing you to do it. you can only correct it once you have time. Just drop me a message on flamboyant31@yahoo.com. Thank you again.

Kind regards,

hi simon
i always see myself as a beginner. i don't know
why i feel this way but i sense it generally that i have less confidence on learning language. it is due to the time i spend for long time to master it with short time.

i am very weak to illustrate the diagram but after seeing your technique, now i am almost good than past.I am sure that you will send me a better steps to improve the diagram.Thanx

The diagram illustrates the various stages in the life of a honey bee. We can see that the complete life cycle lasts between 34 and 36 days. It is also noticeable that there are five main stages in the development of the honey bee, from egg to mature adult insect.

The life cycle of the honey bee begins when the female adult lays an egg; the female typically lays one or two eggs every 3 days. Between 9 and 10 days later, each egg hatches and the immature insect, or nymph, appears.

During the third stage of the life cycle, the nymph grows in size and sheds its skin three times. This moulting first takes place 5 days after the egg hatches, then 7 days later, and again another 9 days later. After a total of 30 to 31 days from the start of the cycle, the young adult honey bee emerges from its final moulting stage, and in the space of only 4 days it reaches full maturity.

(169 words, band 9)

The diagram depicts the various stages of the life of a honey bee.It can be noticed that the whole cycle takes 35 to 36 days to complete. It is also noticeable that there are five stages in the development of a honey bee, starting from an egg and culminating at an adult insect.

The life cycle of a honey bee begins when the female adult bee lays an egg. The female bee usually lays up to two eggs even three days. about nine or ten days later,each egg hatches, producing an immature insect, nymph.During the subsequent stage of the life cycle, the nymph grows in size and sheds its skin three times. The first moulting occurs five days after the egg is hatched, then after seven days and the third one takes place after nine days.After about 31 days from the beginning of the cycle, the young adult honey bee emerges and in the matter of only four days it achieves full maturity.

Hi both Alexandra and Simon
I'm so pleased to have the chance to find your site with the help of my IELTS instructor. I've just started my IETLS course and I sometimes find it too challenging to write task 1. I have problems understanding where to begin my cycles and processes.
I need your help. I am also in need for someone who could give me a hand in correcting the essay I have written.
Roya Ataee

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