IELTS Writing Task 1: a real process description

You might find it useful to read a real process description from this website about insulation manufacturing. The extract below looks very similar to a paragraph from an IELTS essay!

For glass wool, the raw materials are sand, limestone and soda ash, as well as recycled off-cuts from the production process. The raw materials are melted in a furnace at very high temperatures, typically between 1,300°C to 1,500°C. The smoke created during this process is filtered and flue gases are cleaned to minimise any environmental impact. The droplets of melt exiting the furnace are spun into fibres. Small quantities of binding agents are added to the fibres. The mineral wool is then hardened in a curing oven at around 200°C. The mineral wool is cut to the required size and shape.

Task:
Can you find the passive verbs in the paragraph above? Can you improve the paragraph by adding some sequencing words (firstly, then etc.)?

Comments

[Abby]

dear Simon
could i ask for some information about vocab?i was wondering wheather i could use the vocab below in oral part? is it common usage in foreign country?

get into: i really get into reading books.
mind-numbing: nine to five schedle is mind-numbing.
garment: i love casual garment.
i love smaple the plearsure of tour.
attention grabbing(i am not sure how to use it )
make merry : i usually make merry in the party.
am i allowed to use the words above to impress the examer?

many thanks for your generous help.

[Anna]

dear simon

i find an interesting point in writing task i that is if i write an overview as well as the topic sentence in each paragraph in order to get a higher score, they are repetitive .i mean they usually express the same point. how to avoid repetition ？
thanks

[jack]

hello thanks for your lesson

could you expain to me what is the difference between less than and fewer than
and give an example thanks i am puzzled

[Khalda]

Hi
If any one could able to help me in task 2writinng in Cambridge 3 book test one please,coz I found it a bit difficult.?
Ce

[Martin]

This shows the importance of reading all kinds of topics from different sources on a regular basis!!!

Doing practise with Cambridge IELTS books is simply NOT enough if you want to master the language as a whole.

[zarmp48]

*passive verbs in the paragraph above:
-are melted
-is filtered
-are cleaned
-are spun
-are added
-is hardened
-is cut

*improve version of the paragraph using words that link each step together:

For glass wool, the raw materials are sand, limestone and soda ash, as well as recycled off-cuts from the production process.

Firstly, the raw materials are melted in a furnace at very high temperatures, typically between 1,300°C to 1,500°C. Next, the smoke created during this process is filtered and flue gases are cleaned to minimise any environmental impact. Then, the droplets of melt exiting the furnace are spun into fibres. Subsequently, small quantities of binding agents are added to the fibres. The mineral wool is then hardened in a curing oven at around 200°C. Finally, the mineral wool is cut to the required size and shape.

[M Adnan]

Passive verbs:
are melted, is filtered, are cleaned, are spun, are added, is hardened, and is cut.

[M Adnan]

For glass wool, the raw materials are sand, limestone and soda ash, as well as recycled off-cuts from the production process. Firstly, the raw materials are melted in a furnace at very high temperatures, typically between 1,300°C to 1,500°C. Then the smoke created during this process is filtered and flue gases are cleaned to minimise any environmental impact. moreover, the droplets of melt exiting the furnace are spun into fibres. In addition, small quantities of binding agents are added to the fibres. Furthermore, the mineral wool is then hardened in a curing oven at around 200°C. Finally,the mineral wool is cut to the required size and shape.

[M Adnan]

list of sequence and transition words: follow the link.
http://msmclaughlin.wikispaces.com/file/view/Using+Sequence+and+Transition+Words.pdf

[codetyper]

- raw materials are melted
- smoke is filtered
- flue gases are cleaned
- droplets are spun
- uantities are added
- mineral wool is hardened
- mineral wool is cut

For glass wool, the raw materials are sand, limestone and soda ash, as well as recycled off-cuts from the production process.
In the first place the raw materials are melted in a furnace at very high temperatures, typically between 1,300°C to 1,500°C. Then the smoke created during this process is filtered and flue gases are cleaned to minimise any environmental impact. The droplets of melt exiting the furnace are spun into fibres. After, small quantities of binding agents are added to the fibres. The mineral wool is then hardened in a curing oven at around 200°C. And in the end the mineral wool is cut to the required size and shape.

[Makhabbat]

hello Jack,
'Fewer' is used when it would be possible to count the number of things. (Example: There are fewer people here now than there were earlier.) 'Less' is used when you cannot count the number of things.

[Icarus]

The are four raw materials used in the production of glass wool such as sand, limestone, soda ash and recycled off-cuts from the production process.

Firstly, the raw materials are melted in a furnace at very high temperatures, typically between 1,300C to 1500C. The smoke created during this process is then filtered and flue gases are cleaned to minimise any environmental impact. Next, the droplets of melt exiting the furnace are spun into fibers and small quantities of binding agents are added to the fibers. Finally, the mineral wool is then hardened in a curing oven at around 200C and is cut to the required size and shape.

[saru]

Hi simon,
I got 5,5.5,6 in writing task how can i get at least 6.5 in this task. would you ba able to give me some idea. I think i am weak to make sentences structure, how can i improve it. Anyone is welcome to give me some idea.
thanks.

[Angie]

The production of glass involves a number of processes which include melting, filtering, cleansing, spinning and cutting.
Firstly, the raw materials required are melted in a furnace at a very high , temperature typically between 1300 and 1500. The smoke created during the process is then filtered and the flue gases are cleansed to minimize any form of environmental impact.
Subsequently, the droplet of melt exiting the furnace are spun into the fibre and small quantities of binding agent is added to it. This is followed by hardening the mineral wool in a curing oven at around 200. Finally the production of glass is concluded by cutting the mineral wool into the required shape and size.

[Angie]

The production of glass involves a number of process which include melting, filtering cleasing, spinning and cutting.
Firstly, the raw materials required for this production are sandlime stone sodaash and recycled off cut from the production process.These materials are melted in a furnace at a very high temperature, typically between 1300 and 1500. The smoke created during the process is then filtered and the flue gases are cleansed to minimize any form of environmental impact.
Subsequently, the droplet of melt exiting the furnace are spun into the fibre and small quantities of binding agent is added to it. This is followed by haredening the mineral wool in a curing oven at around 200.Finally the production of glass is concluded by cutting the mineral wool into the required shape and size.

[FARHANA]

HI SIMON,
CAN YOU PLEASE HELP ME WRITING AN IINTRODUCTION AND AN OVERVIEW FOR THE FOLLOWING TASK
IELTS BOOK 1 TEST 1 TASK 1

[raheleh]

Dear Simon,

Thank you for your fantastic e-book and website. I’ve got my required score (6.5) for university admission. I know my score is not that much good because I found your marvelous e-book and website late, but I am sure without them I couldn’t get that band. I still study them as I am going to take another exam to get better score!

I wish all the best for you and a happy New Year!

Raheleh,

[Jiny]

Passive v
1 raw materials are melted
2 the process is filtered
3 flue gases are cleaned
4 the droplets are spun
5 quantities are added
6 wool is hardened
7 mineral wool is cut

[Rizvi]

Hi
Thanks for your help