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Hi mh or anyone can check my letter

Dear Sir,
I am writing with regard to public transport trouble in my town.
First of all, there is only one mode of transport to travel to Dubai that is public buses. However, the cost of transport is fine but the main problem of availability and traffic conjunction at peak office hours. Further buses only stop at bus stop point that are few in number and people have been suffering to bus stop. Otherwise they have to hire a taxi that is less expensive.

In my opinion, roads and public transport authority should start a metro rail service or increase the number of buses and bus stop so every citizen can travel hassle free and affordable.

Looking forward to hearing from you.
You’re faithful

Ajay


Hello simon,this is my idea about the task. Guys,kindly make some corrections out this.THANKS....


Dear Sir,

I writing a letter of complaint with regards to the problem the of public transport in our local area.It is just happened that there are many people that is using a motorcycles without a helmet and as we all know that it is very dangerous to ride a motorcycle without a protection of the head.
It also been observed that there is an increasing number of individual having using a motorcycle as a mean of private vehicle,and there is a problem occurs with regards to this because traffic became heavy and there is a lot of motorcycle related accident.In fact, according to the traffic department,motorcycle related accident remains the top list of road accident.The effect of this is not good because the traffic becomes more heavy and there a lot other individual got on this traffic.Their important activities got affect as well as with their work responsibilities and also with the continued usage of motorcycle the life of the driver becomes threatened.
In my point of view, strict rules and regulations should be implemented for those person using motorcycle.There must be fine and imprisonment for those who fails to follow the rules.On the other hand,traffic shoud limit the number of people wants to use a motorcycle so that the traffic will leasen as well.

Im looking forward for the action you are going to make.

Sincerely yours,
Emily


Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing in regards to the train moving from London to Manchester which has caused serious problems for passengers. There are frequently delays, making difficulties such as overcrowded and long queues at the station.
I am quite sure if you visit this station will find that people there complaining about this delay and how this poor service has negative effects on their daily commuting. More often than not, people arrive too late at their destinations and as there are not enough carriages, they have to stay on long queues to get into the train. All that has made the station very crowded.
Consider this circumstance; I’d like to ask you for putting more trains, ensuring that there are enough carriages to move people to work or home. And also it would be much better if you push your employees to stick more to the schedule given by your company.
I look forward to a swift resolution to this matter.
Yours faithfully,

Hi Emily,

You unfortunately you had topic-off. If you read the topic carefully you would notice that
the question(topic) asked you a problem related to public transport not private one. Sorry to say that but you will be penalized if you had topic off. In addition to this you made a couple of grammar mistakes and the style of your writing also not suit the letter one. More advice did send on your email as MH
cheers

Hi Simon,

I was going through your writing task-2 lessons and what I found that you have different ideas in following lessons for 'Do advantages outweigh disadvantages' question.

http://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2011/10/ielts-writing-task-2-when-to-give-your-opinion.html#comments

http://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2012/05/ielts-writing-task-2-both-sides-or-one-side.html#comments

From What I think its better to discuss both sides with opinion for either side.

Please advise appropriately.

Hi Mh i have posted my letter. Please could you make the correction if any

Respected sir,
As a responsible citizen I would like to aware about the transport problems in my city.People are not much concerned about it as they are busy in earning money.I would like to tell you that due to lack of transport facility and overcrowded population there are certain traffic jams,trains are not regular at their departure time and even these problems have harassed many people who are punctual about their work time.Due to this lack of facilities people do not reach on their regular time and they are frustrated and become more wild and not able to behave normally.I kindly request you to make the facilities of trains more better so that every traveller of trains are comfortable and in fact they are satisfy with their transport needs. There could be enough space for travellers to sit and put their carriages properly and safely.the safety of trains can be increased so that people would not worried about their luggage and their money.I hope you will try to bring changes and make the transport facilities better than what its position is now.

yours sincerely
A,B,C

Hi Ld,

You have got point.I am confused now.
Please Simon tell us what to do

Thanks

Hi Rukhsar
Your Letter seems to be more friendly and did not look like formal letter

Please check my Essay and mark it


Dear Sir/ Madam

I am writing to complain about the service of bus, Route number 457, that comes from university to Garden Tower. Every weekdays, the city buses used to come on time and they were providing the service every fifteen minutes. However, nowadays some buses never stop in my bus stand, station no 3.

The another reason for a compliant is that almost every buses look messy and dirty. Similarly, the seats are torn and faded. Sometimes, passengers do not able to use the seats as empty bottles and wastage from formal commuters are not cleaned. Elderly People and tired workers have to stand on the bus.

Therefore, I would like you to take some effective actions to overcome above steps. Firstly, could you please increase the number of buses in the busy hours. The other change could be cleaning of the bus during twice a day. In addition, would you please change the seat covers so that anyone can sit without any hesitation.

I look forward to hearing from you whether you will be able to solve the above problem.

Yours Faithfully,
Sunil Layl

Hi Simon

Could you please write this Essay so that we can get hints and compare our writing with yours.

Thanks

Hi, can anybody please check my letter writing, I am sitting for IELTS test and need to get comment about my writing so I can improve it

Dear Sir or Madam,

I would like to draw your kind attention that, the train service in my area is not operating quite frequently and also overcrowd during the office hour. Due to which lot of commuters are having difficulties using the train service in peak hour.

The train services are running late and overcrowded which make passengers to face very difficult situation. Previously, it was working fine but from last few months many more stops have been included in this route so lot more passengers are using this service now a day which ultimately makes your service unreliable. Unfortunately, because of this problem many commuters are late for their work which is affecting their productivity and also they are very upset about your service.

I would like you to arrange more trains during the peak hours else if not possible then at least add more carriages to increase the space. It will be a great relief if you can resolve this problem as soon as possible.

Waiting for a favourable action from your side.

Thanking you in anticipation.

Yours faithfully,
John Smith

Hi Simon,

If you don't mind, I'd like to make a few points in regard to the 'letter'.

Candidates need to recognise what 150 words looks like in their own handwriting. Not meeting the word count would seriously reduce their score.

Check spelling. Simple spelling errors can also reduce the score.

Looking at the letters above the errors that stand out are mostly basic.
am/is/are - these little words are necessary, as are the 'biggest' little words in the English language - prepositions.
a/an/the - do not forget the articles.
modal verbs - would, could, should - these also help.
Paragraphing - your organisation score will be better if your paragraphs are well laid out.

There is some good use of vocabulary in the letters, try fixing the basics, and your scores will improve.

Good luck,

Magi

Hi Magi
I am impressed with your command over English, could you please check my letter I have posted in the beginning.

Regards
Ajay

Hi Ajay,

I went through the letter and in my opinion there are some points which I need to mention

1. does not count 150 words which is important in IELTS it will affect your marks

2. it is not in formal language like in the end it should be

Yours faithfully,
Ajay
3. grammetical errors

missing "s" like regard should be like "regards" and so on

4. "Looking forward to hearing from you." You are not supposed to hear anything from them but expect they will follow your advice so I think it is not appropriate in this case. Rather we can write something like

"Looking forward for a favourable action from your side"

All these are my own opinion and based on my own ideas only.

Thanks Magi. Great advice!

I really appreciate your advice and time spend to correct my letter.
Thanks Rabin

Hi Ajay,

I think I need to come clean here... I'm an IELTS instructor and teach a lot of General English candidates.

Rabin has given you some really good tips too.

Magi

thanks magi

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with regard to problems of delay and overcrowd of your trains.

Trains had always been punctual before. Unfortunately, they now often arrived late, the time table of train service is no longer reliable. Also, Trains are overcrowded, and Passengers could not have enough space to stand.

These problems have caused so much inconvenience. Due to the delay, commuters arrive late for work. Moreover, it is uncomfortable that passengers need to squash when they taking trains. People are unhappy about this terrible situation.

Therefore, I would suggest that these problems need to be addressed immediately. You can add more regular trains to meet the demand of passengers. At the same time, more carriages are also needed to increase space.

I await your prompt response.

Your faithfully,

Tony

With the growing population more houses needed. Is it a best way to build them on existing cities or develop new towns in country side. Writing TASK 2.
I GOT THIS QUESTION on 13th October in Ielts exam.
I'm really confuse and would be great if someone could answer me.

Can anybody please look after my letter writing please I am sitting on test next week and I need to be prepared.

Hello Magi,

Kindly check also my letter that I posted it is next to Ajay's letter.


Thanks so much

Hi Jass I have written some of my views regarding your question:

Undoubtedly, the population is a big problem for every big city and as a result government could not provide sufficient services for its citizens. They could not ignore this reality and it will be wise to develop new city in country side rather than building more houses in the city.

Firstly, development of new towns in countryside will help people to stop migrating towards the city. As, it will be new towns; council can make proper plan and policy and make it suitable for long run. It will be easy to put infrastructure in place such as proper drainage, sewage system, clean environment as compared to that of city.

Secondly, better opportunity comes up. Industries will get attracted towards the newly developed town because of its good infrastructure in place. For example, good access of public transport, high-speed Internet service and security are some of the issues which business house would like to consider. So, if they get started here then definitely, there will be employment opportunity arises. In other words, the new town can attract more people towards itself, because it has been pre planned there would not be any problem at least for some decades.

Finally, the local people of countryside will get benefitted as well. As there will be the development of hospitals, schools so the local peoples can use this service. Good education helps them to get better jobs and better jobs means the lifestyle will be uplifted.

To sum up, after going through some of the issues I found its a good idea to develop a new town in country side rather than building more houses in city.

OH!!thank you Rabin. Thats a great help.:)

cHEERS!!

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my concerns with regard to some public transport issues in my area.

Lately, the public transport fares increased by almost 170% and I believe this raise is too much that we cannot afford to take public transport any more. The less frequent buses and trains also lead to a lower number of people using public buses and trains.

These problems has caused very severe problems to the public. Very few people are now taking public transport, and it is a shame to see so many buses running on the streets with only several passengers. Due to the increased number of private cars on the roads, the traffic has become very bad.

There are some actions can be taken to tackle these problems. Firstly, public transport fares must be reduced significantly so that individuals can be more motivated to take buses and trains. Also, buses should be run more regularly to cater to the needs of the public.

I hope that this issue can bring your urgent attention and I look forward to receiving your response.

Yours faithfully,

Aaron Smith

Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to express my dissatisfaction on the current train service on our area. Lately, I experience delayed on train schedules and severe congestions during peak hours.
The train services always arrive late even on peak hours. The unreliability of train schedule resulted to delayed and late travel time for the passengers. This has caused unwanted moods among passengers. Due to delayed schedule, overcrowding at the platform area has been another serious problem. This has resulted to some cases of minor accidents like pushing among the travellers.
In addition to that, during weekdays trains are congested and people are uncomfortable. Even the elderly and pregnant women are standing on trains during peak hours. This is serious matter that must address to avoid any serious injuries.
Therefore, I expect an immediate action to be taken on these problems by adding more trains with reliable arrival and departure time. Furthermore, additional carriages are also needed to increase space.
Yours faithfully,
A.F

Dear Sir or Madam
I am writing to bring to your attention some issues with public transport system which cause some troubles for people.
The buses from Hilton Station to Oxford Street, do not usually move according to the specific timeline, and most of drivers are rude when passengers complain with their delay. Furthermore, the underground during rush hours are very crowded and sadly, most of trains do not have adequate seats and the lack of enough strip handles makes standing difficult, and recently one of my colleague’s hand has been broken due to the push of crowd.
For addressing these problem, I would like to suggest that bus drivers should be educated before starting job. They should learn the basic skills related to public relationship, as well as punctuality. Subway problem could be resolved by increasing new trains and even adding extra carriages to existed trains.
I would be grateful if you could consider those difficulties and mange to addressing them.
Thank you in advance.
Yours faithfully,
Sara Safari

Dear Sir/Madam,

I'm writing to put into your attention the problem in the transportation that we always encounter every time we ride on the train.It causes us trouble wherein we usually arrived late for work.

Another thing is that the overcrowding of the public transportation causes uncomfortable and making the passenger unhappy.As I have experienced upon riding, there is always unavailable seats and the handle strips are also not enough causing difficulty in standing. These may cause some injuries to the public.

To address this problem I suggest that their should be additional train and a regular train hour in every station. There should also be limited number of passenger according to its capacity to prevent accidents and injuries to the passengers. An additional carriage should also be consider to increase space.

It would be great if this problem will soon be address properly and accordingly.

Thank you very much.

Sincerely,
Heather Coleman

very good !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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