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Dear Simon;

Today I have got my result,it was disappointing,L 7, R 7,W 6.5,S 7
The problem is still in writing, as I could not improve my score more than 6.5 till now.And I need 7 in each band
what do you suggest?

Ghyath

Hi simon
I would be very grateful if you could give me ideas about this particular essay topic that says:
government spend enormous amount of money on arts some people believe it should rather be spent on health and education .discuss both points of view and state your opinion.
Looking forward to see the ideas
Thank you .

Hi Ghyath,

Sorry to hear about your result. It seems that you would benefit from getting some essays checked to see what you are doing wrong. If you don't know anyone who can help, I can recommend someone. Click below for more information:

http://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2011/10/essay-correction.html

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Hi Sibyl,

I answered your question here:

http://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/recent-exam-questions-4.html#comment-form

Hi Simon !!!!

My name is Mihir and i would like to get some information about your book. i have few question about your book and i need some additional information as below:

1. in your book, does it cover all 4 modules?
2. does it cover writing task 1?
3. I need some help to make mature sentences because as you were ex-examiner, In Australia, they are looking for mature sentences in writing task 1 & 2.
4. If you can help me with that or may be you know other books which can help me to create sanceable sentences.

Please help me with above information because i need 7 band each within four months and i have booked my ielts test end of the next month.

i really thankful if you could help me.

thanking you,

regards,

Mihir

Hi Simon, could you please give some points for this essay as it is one of the past questions.

"Teenagers have problems at home and school. What difficulties are they facing now? What should parents and schools do to help them?"

Regards

Hi Mihir,

I've replied to your email.

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Hi Sunil,

Thanks. I'll use that topic in a future lesson.

hi Simon,
Kindly give some information how to make this essay, NOWaDAYS INVIRONMEntal PROBLEMS ARE TOO BIG TO BE MANAGED BY INDIVIDUAL PERSONS OR INDIVIDUALS COUNTRIES.OR IT IS AN INTERNATIONAL PROBLEM.TO WHAT EXTEND DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

Regards,
ladis

Hello, Simon,
Could u pls tell me where these two sentences are correct or not?
"it is worth spending maintaining libraries"
"libraries are worth spending"

thanks a lot

Hi Ladis,

You can probably get some ideas from this lesson:

http://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2010/08/ielts-writing-task-2-full-essay.html

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Hi Jessica,

I'll answer your question in tomorrow's lesson.

Hi Simon

In two-sides essays, if we want to mention both of side, should we start with its drawbacks in the first paragraph? i have read that somewhere and it seems it doesn't make any sense. What do you think?

Hi Emre,

If you have a balanced view, it doesn't really matter which side you discuss first. You choose.

In the question like To what extent would you say that television has positively or negatively affected the cultural development of your society?

Is it a question requiring my opinion?
I understand that it is only a discussion question
How could I respond to this question?

Hi,
all IELTS taker, I will write the response to this essay as follows. Everyone is welcomed to make correstion.
The number of plants and animals is declining. Describe some reasons for this problem and suggest some solutions.
It is unquestionable that many plant and animal species are losing their natural habitats and they are becoming extinct in nature. There are several causes of this universal issue, but measures could be taken to tackle the problem. This will be proven by looking at some of the causes and effective solutions to the problem.
Firstly, in many countries the trees are being uprooted giving the way to farmland, on which crops are grown and animals are kept on it. This sort of deforestation leads to the loss of natural habitats of these species, and the likely hood is that the whole species of animals will be at the level of extinction. For example, Giant panda has become an endangered species because they have lost their wildlife habitats. As this shows that deforestation of jungles is causing elimination of these animals. Thus, it is clear from this example that animals are disappearing because of cutting down of plants.
Secondly, much of the human actions are responsible for the destruction of marine life. This, devastation is apparent when the industrial waste and nuclear waste is pumped into sea and oceans. This chemical waste kills the aquatic plants and animals, and as result of this life cycle gets halted. Overall, this would significantly affect the production of food. For example, in Bhopal, India, multinational fertilizer companies in 1992 throw their chemical waste into the river, and because of this almost all species of fish were killed. Thus, it can be concluded from this example that chemical waste kills the fish and plant.
The most effective solution to tackle this problem is the intervention of government. The authorities should put some sort of levy on the companies who are pumping deadly chemical waste into lakes and rivers.
In conclusion, it has been shown that plants and animals are on its last leg. Thus, it is predicted that the government should make some stricter rules in an attempt to safeguard plants and animals.

Hi,
ALL ielts taker
Can someone make a question from the following ielts essay introduction.
Many people choose to work in cities in order to earn huge sums of money, but they like to live in countryside for a pice of mind. Is this a positive or negative trend?

Hi Simon

i brought your e-book a few months ago, it contains lots of great ideas which is very helpful. Thank you.

i have a question about using it and hope u can answer me.

you mentioned that we need to add few things along with the ideas from the e-book to make a nice paragraph, am i right?
but, may i ask u why we need to add other information(few things) rather than just linking those ideas together using connectives?

the question is a bit silly, but i just want to know the purpose of adding extra information.

cheers :)
nick

Hi Pond,

The phrase "To what extent would YOU say" tells you that you should give your opinion. It's probably easiest to that TV has both positive and negative effects.

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Hi Nick,

You don't have to add anything if the question topic is EXACTLY the same as one of the topics I wrote about. However, if the topic is a little bit different, you will need to adapt my ideas. Another reason might be that you want to write a slightly longer paragraph - in this case, you could add an example from your own experience.

I'm glad you like the ebook!

hello Simon,
what do you think about this topic sentence?
Nowadays the number of animals and plants all over the world are under the threat of extinction. The existing problems should be of everybody’s concern to offer the certain ways of solution.
Thanks,
Aizhan

Here is another prblem (causes) solutions essay. Comments are welcomed.
In cities and towns all over the world the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?


It is true that many mega cities and country sides largely suffer from congestion across the globe.. This will be proven by looking at reasons that leads to this problem and also some possible measures that the government could take to reduce the level of transport in urban areas.
The initial strategy is to understand why traffic has increased in the urban areas? There are three main reasons to this. First, the prices of cars are much less than ever before, so as a result the vehicles are affordable to average individuals. Second reason is that cars are being used as a symbol of status for commuters to go to work. Finally, the public transport is having less services and insufficient number of buses. Many services of train and motor have been reduced because of less government funding to these means of transport. Al these factors causes worldwide traffic jams.
There are some effective solutions to this l issue. The authorities should increase more services and roads to serve the general public. If there will be more services of transporting people from one city to another, then people may think to ditch their cars for short trips. One of the most effective solutions is that authorities should apply some levy on the drivers using the roads in rush hours. There is a good illustration of this is the congestion policy implemented by transport authorities in London city during the peak traffic.
In conclusion, it has been shown that the increased number of cars is causing traffic issues at a greater extant. Although there are some measures that can be implemented by the local administration in an attempt to reduce the congestion universally.

One more problem and solution Essay
\Comments are welcome\
Traffic congestion is becoming a huge problem for many major cities. Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce traffic in big cities.
Problem:
Increasing numbers of cars is a major reason as it is easily affordable
Due to lack of awareness People do not follow traffic rules
Road network is not properly maintained.
Solutions
Use of public transport
Strict rules should be imposed who break the traffic rules
Govt should maintain roads to help in decrease congestion problem

Commuters
It is true that traffic congestion is a global issue which is causing a great hassle for all the commuters worldwide. People who live in big cities are mainly affected by this problem. In my opinion, some effective solution should be implemented to handle this issue.
Main reason of this problem is increasing number of car users. Now a day, it is easy to afford a car and it is very popular because of its comfort and security reasons. Majorities of people prefer their own cars instead of using public transport. However, it is not impossible to find out good and effective ways to solve this problem. Public transport is the easiest way to solve this issue. Cheap and comfortable transportation can encourage people to use it enormously rather than drive. For instance, In Delhi, Metro trains and buses are most convenient public transport which helps to reduce traffic. In fact, Government should provide comfortable public transport on affordable prices to everyone.
Another cause of traffic jams is lack of awareness about traffic rules. Many people break traffic rules and do not bother about it at all. To resolve this issue, strict rules should be imposed. For instance, Congestion charges should be imposed if someone enters in no driving zone. Penalty amount should be increased on jumping red lights, parking vehicles in No parking zones. A good example of this situation is London, which now has Congestion charges. Going to the city centre costs about 8 pounds per day.
Also, one more considerable cause is poorly constructed road network which is damaged and not smooth. Government should put some efforts to maintain roads and construct flyovers to divert the busiest road’s traffic flow.
Ultimately, Problem of traffic congestion can be tackled by improving public transport, by imposing Congestion charges and maintaining road network.

Dear simon, I got confused with the number of ideas I should explain in one paragraph. I mean one teacher suggested me to mention as mucb as possible information, of course in a persuasive and sensible way, like causes of obesity: there are many causes. Firstly,... Secondly.... However another one said I should focus on only one ideas and use some supporting ones in each graph. For ex: causes of obesity: there are many causes, thd major being lack of doing exercise.; then turn to effects.
So what should I do? And the question is the same with other types of essays
Thank you

Yesterday I read this topic and tried to write about it. It is really difficult for me but I have finished two important parts : introduction and body.

In recent years, the decrease of various types of plants and animals becomes the serious problem threatening to the sustainability of ecosystems in many countries around the world. There are many causes for this, and long-term solutions need to early be adopted to improve the situation.
The first cause is excessive logging. This is happening more and more seriously and difficult to control because of the considerable increase in foreign and domestic demand for wood products while timber volume is declining quickly. In addition, this situation was also caused by the convertion of land use with aim of growing the large plantations of rubber, coffee and tea to export that has led to the clear-cutting forest. The natural habitat of wildlife has been affected significantly by the loss of forest, and worsened by forest fires and poaching endangered animals.
The first-proposed solution is to encourage companies, organizations and people especially ethnic to participate in planting trees and protecting forest through supporting interest rate for related activities such as buying seedlings. Next to this solution, government should regulate tightly the cutting of forest. A international agreement between developing and industrialize nations should be adopted to tighten the consumption of wildlife and illegal-sourced wood products. Besides, building wildlife sanctuaries is an alternative necessary solution to save endangered species from extinction.

my completed essay.

In recent years, the decrease in various types of plants and animals becomes the serious problem threatening to the sustainability of ecosystems in many countries around the world. There are a range of reasons for this, and long-term solutions need to early be adopted to improve the situation.

One of direct causes should be mentioned that is indiscriminate logging of tropical hardwoods. This status is extremely difficult to tackle due to the sizable increase in foreign and domestic demand for wood products while forest recovery requires a considerable number of years. In addition, the conversion of land use with aim of developing large-scale rubber, coffee and tea plantations for exportation resulted in the clear-cutting forest and disappeared a range of unique plants and species. The natural habitat of wildlife has been affected significantly by the loss of forest, and be worsened by forest fires and poaching endangered species. According to the World Wide Fund For Nature (WWF), Bio-diversity has declined by more than 30% since 1970 around the world and approximately 60% in the tropics.

The first-proposed solution is to encourage companies, organizations and people especially ethnic to participate in planting trees and protecting forest through supporting interest rate for related activities such as buying seedlings. Next to this solution, government should regulate tightly the cutting of forest. An international agreement between developing and industrialize nations should early be adopted to tighten the consumption of wildlife and illegal-sourced wood products. Besides, building or expanding natural reserves is an alternative necessary solution to save endangered species from extinction.

In conclusion, the environment protection and bio-diversity conservation play a vital role in the survival of humankind, so these need to be considered as urgent tasks in the 21st century to ensure the better life for the next generations.

I know no one will check me, but i'm just trying for my test tomorrow :

These days it has been noticeable the number of wildlife species that are disappearing. It is a huge problem with various causes..

It is certainly true that in this era of globalization, plants and animals are facing extinction at a greater rate than before. There are several reasons for this, and various measures can be taken to mitigate the situation.

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