IELTS General Writing: letter to a tutor

The following question comes from Cambridge IELTS book 5.

You have a full-time job and are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to the course tutor. In your letter

• describe the situation
• explain why you cannot continue at this time
• say what action you would like to take

There are three main things to consider before writing your essay:

1. Tone (formal or informal)
Sometimes students are friendly with their tutors, but I think it would be better to write a formal letter. Start with your tutor’s surname (e.g. Dear Mr. Smith,) and end with “Yours sincerely,”. Avoid contractions (write “I am” instead of “I’m”), and avoid using informal idioms or expressions. Be polite rather than friendly.

2. Purpose
The main purpose of this letter is to inform your tutor that you are leaving the course. Make this clear straight away (e.g. I am writing to inform you that...). Then cover the three points, writing a short paragraph for each.

3. Ideas
I recommend spending a few minutes planning ideas for each of the task points before you start writing. You need to decide what the evening course is about, what your full-time job is, a reason why you are too busy with work to continue with the course, and whether you want to leave completely or perhaps continue at a later date.

Comments

[meso]

hi simon,
which is correct, partially agree or partly agree?
thanks

[Ziaul huda]

Can someone check my letter on the above mentiones question?
Dear Mr. pattrick,
I am writing to bring to your attention that I can not continue a part time coure about fashion technology for which I had enrolled myself on 15th of last month.
Unfortunately, my compony has got some extra orders from Horizin Computers for supplying urgent computer accessories by the end of this year. Owing to this traumatic situation, I am working twelve hour shift from today.
I know it will be difficult for you to consider my request in the middle of the semister. I am not asking any refund, but i am rethinking to start this course later sometime the following year. It will be appreciated, if you would instruct the accounting department to adjust my fee for the next session.
I lookforward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,
Ziaul Huda

[Ethan]

Dear Mr. Smith,

I am your part-time student, learning Guitar in Royal College of Music and I am writing this letter to inform you that I would not be able continue the classes from 10th of July onwards.

I am working as a Software Engineer in Cisco and I am assigned to a new project in London. Hence, I need to relocate to London for next three months. I shall return to India in October. [a]

Initially, I was hesitant to join this new project since I am continuing classes in your college. However, I chose to take part in the new project, since it is very crucial for my career. [b]

Since it is a temporary assignment at my work, I would like to resume my course in October, if you permit. So far, I thoroughly enjoyed your classes and would not want to drop out. [c]

I am hoping for your kind consideration.

Yours Sincerely,
Ethan

[Simon]

Hi Meso,

Both are fine.

[Simon]

Thanks for sharing your essays Ziaul and Ethan. I'm afraid I don't check students' work - if I did this, everyone would send me their essays.

[nur]

dear simon,
i have the same letter 2 times came in IELTS AND the letter is...your friend wants to visit your country with his family,tell him where he will stay,which places of your country he should visit and what things he will bring?
i dont know what mistakes i had done.both time i got 6.5
can you please go through this letter..it will be a great help..thanks

[Simon]

Hi Nur,

I'll try to use that letter in a lesson soon.

[Ziaul huda]

HI nur,
I am tring to write a good response to the letter you got in your exDear Johnson.
Hope this letter fined you in good health and sprit. I am writing to inform you that I have arranged my farm house for staying there with your family in tranquility. The farm house is actually quite spacious and is located on the opposite side of a bank of a river. I hope, you will have a great time.
You see, I am happy to share with you some popular destinations and historical landmarks you should visit. There are many beaches, art related venues and famous historical buildings to visit here, but I would like to mention here the names of two land marks that always inspire me are The Char Minar and the Salare Jung Museum. You should visit both skyscrapers.
You should also bring some warm clothing, sun glass and video camera to have a fun with your family. These days, there is a cold wave in southern India, so don’t forget to bring your jackets and coats to protect from chilly nights.
I look forward to your reply.
See you soon.
Abdu Rahman

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