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Hi Simon,

I am going to have my General IELTS test on this coming Saturday. I was just wondering if you would recommend me to purchase your ebook for General but not Academic IELTS test? It seems to me that the writing task 2 in general IELTS differs to an extent to the academic one.

Also, could you please advise me a good site for General IELTS test?

Kind regards,
Wayne

Hi Simon,

The graph and table provides information regarding consumption of water around the world and water utilized by two different countries.
As shown in the graph,maximum volume of water was used by agriculture sector as compare to other sectors.More water was consumed per person in Brazil than Congo.
In 1900,approximately 50km3 water was utilized in domestic work and industries which remained same until 1950.After that,there was a gradual increase in water consumption in both areas which was more than 1000km3 in industrial sector and nearly 500km3 for domestic use.The volume of water used in farming was around 500km3 in 1900 which rose to 3000km3 in 2000 which was almost double than industrial use and three times more than domestic use.
It is clear that Brazil had more population than Congo,so water consumed by each person is much higher (359m3) than Domestic Republic of Congo(8m3).Brazil needed large amount of water for irrigation of land whereas very small amount of water used for land.

does it seems ok or not?
please check......


thanks

Morning Simon

Likewise, leisure time, females spend shorter time on work and study than males.

is this sentence correct? i want to say females spend shorter time on both leisure and work/study

thank u

sorry seem instead of seems

Hi Simon!

describing two types of chart/ table in one report is quite difficult. My problem is that I always use struture " while the graph shows..., the table provides information of...", so I don't know how to connect two main points in summary paragraph ( I means how to write a logical summary with two quite different main point).

for example, in this task.
My introduction:

The graph and the table given concern water usage. while the graph reveals the volumn of water for 3 sectors namely agriculture, industrial use and domestic use during the period 1900-2000, the table compares water consumption between Brazil and Congo in 2000.

In my summary, I would use two main points are " as can be seen from the graph, there was an increase of water volume in three sectors", and " water consumption in Brazil was much greater than in Congo". Two point are so different that I couldnot put them in logical paragraph.

Hi Simon,
can u tell the difference between affect and effect?

The line graph shows the water consumed by three sectors in the whole universe in the last century. The table compares between Brazil and Congo in terms of water consumption and population.
Hi Simon

It is obvious that the total amount of water consumed worldwide between 1900 and 2000 increased dramatically, by far the largest amount was used for agriculture. In 2000, Brazil used much more water than Congo; however the irrigated land was broader in Congo.

In 1900, about 500 km3 used for agriculture in the whole world, compared to inconsiderable amount consumed on both domestic and industrial sectors, less than 200km3.Between 1900 and 1950 the amount of water used for each sector rose very slightly. From 1950 onward, the water amount used for agriculture climbed considerably reaching approximately 3000 km3 in 2000. By contrast in 2000, the figures for domestic and industrial use reached only about 1000 km3 and 500 km3 respectively.

In 2000, Brazil, which had 176 million populations, consumes much more water than Congo, 359 km3 and 8 km3 correspondingly. However, in Brazil the irrigated land was only about quarter of that in Congo. (186 wards)

my test is this Saturday and i need 7 in writing.please give me any advice that may help me.
i really appreciate your help

can we use correspondingly instead of respectively as I did in the 4th paragraph?

Hello Simon,
Could you comment on my answer?

The given line graph illustrates the use of water all over the world in three different sectors for 100 years. On the other hand, the table shows water consumption in Brazil and Congo during the year 2000.

It is obvious from the graph that the total global use of water steadily increased during the given time period. In 2000, more people consumed water in Brazil than in Congo as seen in the given table.

Globally, It is clear that most of water was used in agriculture, rising from 500 km3 in 1900 to 3000 in 2000. In contrast, the least amount of water was used domestically. This amount slightly increased but it was always below 500 km. Industry was the last sector in which water was used by an amount of 100 km in 1900, reaching 1000 km in 2000.

As regards to the two mentioned countries, it was found that the amount of water consumption per person in Brazil(with a population of 176 million) was much higher than in Congo (with a population of 5.2 million). The numbers were 359m and 8m respectively.

The graph shows the amount of water consumed by three different sectors in the worldwide from 1900 to 2000,as well as the table represents the quantities of water consumed by 2 countries in 2000.In general there was upward trend in water usage by the whole world at that period of time.
In 1900 the Agriculture sector consumed water almost double the quantity that consumed by industrial and domestic sectors. Until 1940, both industrial and domestic sectors show a very slow increase in water usage, after that there was a gradual increase to reach about 500Km3 for domestic use and rapid increase to around 1000km3 for industrial use. However, agriculture sector was still the predominant sector on water usage until 2000 when it reached to 3000 km3.
In the table , we can see that people in Brazil consumed water much more higher than people in Democratic Republic of Congo in 2000.It seems that the population in Brazil was higher than in Congo by almost 170 million. Moreover the land which irrigated in Brazil was also exceeded that land which irrigated in Congo.

The line graph provides information about water usage globally in three different sectors, over a period of 100 years, whereas the table shows the consumption of water in Brazil and Dominic Republic of Congo in 2000.

It is clear that the basic general trend in line graph is upward for three sectors.However, the table, there is a huge difference between the two countries in terms of population, irrigated land, and water usage per individual.

In 1900, the sector of agriculture had the highest figures than industrial and domestic area, at about 5000 kilometers but it rose gradually and reached its peak to almost 3000 kilometers. By contrast, the two other sectors leveled off for nearly 50 years before it rose steadily at the end of the period, at 11000 kilometers for industrial usage and 500 kilometers for domestic use.

Meanwhile, the number of water consumption in the table had a huge gap between Brazil and Congo in 2000. The former had 176 million population and the latter had merely 52 million. In addition, the category of irrigated land and consumption of water per person in Congo was significantly lower than Brazil, with 20 times difference between the two nations.

What can you say about my essay Simon? could I get a good grade for this. :)

effect is noun ,

affect is verb ,

When you affect something, you produce an effect

Hi guys,

Thanks for sharing your essays. I'm afraid I don't give feedback or scores because too many people would send me their essays if I did. I'll post my essay next week so that you can compare.

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Hi Wayne,

Task 2 is basically the same in both general and academic, so the ebook is useful for both.

I'm afraid I don't know any sites for the general test. Have a look on Amazon to see if you can find a book.

Good luck tomorrow!

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Hi Ram,

"Likewise, leisure time" is a bit strange. Write "In terms of leisure time,..."

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Hi Thao,

Your way of doing it is good. Don't worry about linking the 2 summary ideas. It's fine to put them in the same paragraph without linking them - you can put them in the same paragraph because they are both summarising.

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Hi Mandeep,

Rayan answers your question perfectly. See the comment above mine.

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Hi Ramadan,

Yes, "correspondingly" is fine.

The line graph, combined with the table illustrates world water use in three sections and water dispense in Brazil and Congo countries in 2000 year.

It is clear that Agriculture sector consumed significantly greater number of water between 1900 and 2000 years apart from Industrial and Domestic users. In 2000 year Brazil’s citizen spend dramatically more water than people from Congo.

According to the line graph worldwide water use in Agriculture section considerably increased over the period in 1900 at approximately 500 km3 to 3000 km3 in 2000 year. The quantity of global water consumption in two sectors Industrial and Domestic were marginally distinguish. In the period from 1900 to 1970 both sector charged around 100 km3 of water, after that the level of Industrial water consumption moderately rose to 1000 km3 than Domestic sector which increased at roughly 300 km3.

It is noticeable that majority of water consumers were Brazil country in 2000 year. The population of Congo used gradually less water at 5.2 million than Brazil 176 million. Meanwhile per person in Brazil country drunk more water than Republic of Congo (359 m3 and 8 m3 respectively). Likewise In 2000 year Brazil farmers irrigated by water roughly 25.500 km2 of land in contrast to Congo there was a low number of irrigated land just less than 100 km2.

The line graph succinctly reveals the amount of consumption of water globally by the three different sectors namely agricultural, industrial and domestic from 1990 to 2000 whereas, the table shows the comparison between the water consumption of two countries in 2000.
As shown in the graph, there was an overall increase in water over the period. The agricultural sector had the highest amount of water consumed. On the other hand, the table showed a substantial gap between Brazil and Republic of Congo in terms of population, irrigated land, and water usage per individual..
In 1990, Agricultural sector had the highest amount of water consumed compared to domestic and industrial sector with approximately 5000km3, but it gradually rose until it reached its peak of 3000 km3 in 2000. In contrast, both remaining sector remained constantly for 50 years then experienced a gradual increase by the end of the period at about 1000 km3 and 500 km3 respectively.
Meanwhile, the number of water consumption in the table had a huge gap between Brazil and Congo in 2000. Brazil had 176 million population compared to the Republic of Congo with only 52 million. Furthermore, irrigated land and consumption of water per person in Congo was significantly lower than Brazil, with a substantial difference could be seen between the two nations.
Good day Simon....could you help me know if i used the right verb tenses fo the introduction, summary and the body....
thanks...

hi simon I would like to write exam.Please help me for preparation.Thank you.

Hi Erzhan and Mark,

Thanks for sharing your essays. You can compare them with mine on Thursday.

Your tenses are fine Mark.

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Hi Ashitha,

All of my best advice and materials are here on the site. Try to follow the daily lessons - I'm sure they will help you to prepare for the test.

Hi Simon,

The table and graph illustrates the water consumption use in other areas of global and two countries are Brazil and Democratic Republic of Congo.
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The graph shows the consumption of water in three main sectors is Agriculture, Industrial use and Domestic use from year 1900 to 2000. Beside that, the table provides information regarding water use in Brazil and Congo in 2000.

Review the graph, Agriculture area was the highest consumption of water in the world and over the period from 1900 to 2000 it increased sharply from only around 500 km2 to nearly 3000 km2. Industrial sector stand in second position of water consumption when slightly growth over the year from 1900 to 1950 then rose significantly from nearly 100 km2 to more than 1200. Domestic use is the lowest consumption, the figure of this is minimal rose from 1900 to 1970, after that there was a fractional increase from this point to the end of report period and reach the area around 500 km2.

On the report table, Brazil in 2000 with total population is 176 million people integrated in an area of 26,500km2 have the consumption for each person reach 359 m3. In contrast, Congo although have 5.2 million people integrated land in 100km2, the water for each person only have 8 m3.

Hi Phung,

I'm afraid I don't give essay correction, but you can compare your essay with mine on Thursday.

my attemt
The line chart illustrates use of water in three different categories (agriculture, industrial use and domestic use) all over the world from 1900 to 2000. The table compares population, irrigated land and water consumption per person between Brazil and Congo.

It can be clearly seen that global water consumptions increased dramatically in all of these three sectors, especially second half of the century. Brazil had more water consumption per person and irrigated land compared to Congo during 2000.

In 1900, while huge amount, nearly 500 million tonnes km3, of water was used for agricultural sector, very less water was used for industrial and domestic purpose, about 100 tonnes km3 and 50 km3 respectively. The use of water increased slowly in all three sectors until 1950 but after that the use rose dramatically until end of the century. By 2000, agricultural use was nearly 3000 million tonnes km3, an increase of nearly 2500 million tonnes km3 over the hundred years. Industrial use and domestic use increased nearly 100 times over the same period and reached well over the 100 million tonnes km3 and 50 million km3 correspondingly.

In 2000, Brazil had 176 million people while Congo had only 5.2 million people. Similarly, the use of water per person (359 m3) and for irrigation (26, 500 km3) was also very high compared to Congo where use of water per person was only 8 m3 and for irrigation was 100 km3.
(too big 238 words. wonder how to shroten it)
Does it really matter aprt from it takes more time?

Hi Kai,

If you can write 238 words in 20 minutes, it's fine. Have a look at my essay to see how I did it:

http://ielts-simon.com/ielts-help-and-english-pr/2011/12/ielts-writing-task-1-graph-and-table-essay.html

Thanks,

Hi,

This exercise on IELTS writing is really good. Though its quite difficult because you are to compare and contrast the water consumption of the two different countries, but this will serve as a challenged to them and would make them enhance their English writing even better. TheIELTSSolution.com

Thank you.

Hi Simon,

The line graph compares global water use by three different sectors, namely Agriculture, Industrial and Domestic sections between 1900 and 2000 and the table shows how much Brazil and Congo used water in terms of their population and irrigated land in 2000.
It is immediately evident that the water consumption rose significantly in all three fields, especially in Agriculture, during the previous century. In comparison with Congo, in Brazil by more population and land area much more quantity of water was consumed by each person in 2000.
In 1900, while agriculture sector was the largest consumer of water at around 500 km3, the two other sectors used almost one fifth of that amount. The amount of water which was used around the world for industrials and domestics needs reached over 1000 km3 and under 500 km3 ,respectively while this figure for agriculture peaked to 3000 km3 at the end of the previous century.
It is noticeable that Brazil with a great deal of population around 176 million and with the total irrigated land area (26,500 km2) used substantially more water than Congo where each person consumed just 8 m3 of water compared to Brazil with 359 m3 water consumption by individuals in the year 2000.

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