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HI Simon
Iwrote the following 2 paragraphs for task 1 of test one
The line graph illustrates the global use of water in three different sectors over one hundred year from 1900 to 2000, while the table compares water consumption in two different countries, Brazil of 176 population and Democratic Republic of Congo of 5.2 population.
As can be seen from the line graph, water used in the three sectors increased all over the world between 1900 and 2000, but the marked increase was in the agriculture sector. The amount of water used in this sector jumped from 500km3 in 1900 to 3000 km3 in 2000. On the other hand, water used for industrial and domestic purposes is fluctuated around 1 km3 during the first half of this period. During the last half, volume of water used for industry rose dramatically to reach approximately 700km3 in year2000, while that of domestic use increased slowly to reach about 100km3.
thanks

Hi Simon,

In the P53 of Cambridge 7, can I write the introduction like this(namely part)?
The line graph compares the consumption of four different kinds of meat, namely chicken, beef, lamb and fish, in a European country over a period of 25 years.

Thanks.

Joshua

M Hatbe,

Your writing looks good. I'll use this question for a lesson at some point in the future.

...

Hi Joshua,

It's fine, but fish isn't really a meat. Maybe change 'meat' for 'food'.

The 'namely' part is good.

hi simon

plz. tell me when we can use has and had together .
example: i have had that old book.
"what it means"
give some examples

Hi Vishal,

When you use the present perfect tense:

I have been on holiday.
I have finished my work.
I HAVE HAD a good day.
I HAVE HAD a cold for the last few days.
He HAS HAD some problems recently.

Hi simon , I tried to continue tha answer for silkworm diagram.i would be thankful if you could correct this ,thanks

...Interestingly in 10 days eggs of the adult moth convert to lava which depends on mulbery leaf as their main food.In terms of the duration of transformation from lava to silk thread for certain takes the longest time compare to all other stages.Then in 3-8 days cocoons result from larva which is the most pivotal product of this biological process for the foreseeing project of silk material.
The silk material production process commence with boiling the selected eggs in the hot water then follows a drying procedure.The end result indeed we name as ''Thread'' is undergoing a dyeing procedure in any colour, in order to weave to get a silk material.

Hi Shi,

I'm afraid I don't check grammar or give scores on this site (too many people would send me their essays if I did this).

You seem to have the right idea.

It's true, Simon :]]

I'm glad you understand :)

Hi simon,
In the P53 of Cambridge 7, can I write the introduction like this
The graph indicates how much fish, chicken,beef and lamb consumed by the people in a European country between the years 1979 and 2004

Hi Natalie,

Yes, but just add "WERE consumed..."

HI DEAR SIMON
Instead of 'the process of producing silk cloth'I wrote -->' the process how silk cloth is produced'
Is it true?
Thanks

Hi Goli,

We wouldn't say "the process how", but you could write "the diagram shows how silk cloth..."

Hi Simon ,
Could I say silkworm larva comes out of the eggs and feed on Mulberry leaves.
Is it true acc to diagram to say:
It usually takes the silkworm larva 4-6 weeks to produce the silk thread.After3-8 days larva will come out leaving behind the cocoon.Larva always mature to moth after 16 days.


Should I put the period immediately after it usu takes or is it ok as above.
Thanks a lot.

Which is better?
The worm lay down eggs or eggs are PRODUCED?

Hi Moka,


Your sentences are fine. Don't put any punctuation after 'takes'.

You can't say 'lay DOWN eggs'. Write 'the worm lays eggs' or 'eggs are produced' - both of these are fine.

Thank you very much!

Hi Simon
Can we say the figures illustrate the stages of a silkworm's life...or illustrate the stages in a silkworm's life

Thank you

Both are equally good.

The illustration shows the life cycle of the silk worm and how silk cloth is produced.

There are five stages in the life cycle of the silk worm which starts from adult moths laying their eggs and ends with the cocoon hatching into a moth. Production of silk cloth also has five steps which starts from the boiling of selected cocoons and ends with weaving the silk threads.
In the silkworm’s life cycle, the first stage starts from the laying of eggs by the adult moth which then hatches to silk worm larva in 10 days. These larvae have mulberry leaf as their main source of food. The larvae then start to wrap their bodies with silk thread in 4 to 6 weeks time and in 3 to 8 days the larvae form their cocoon

Silk production starts by the selection of silk worm cocoon, which are then boiled in water. After boiling the cocoons they are then unwinded. Each cocoon may produce around 300 to 900 metres of thread. The threads are then twisted together and a dye of different colors are then added. The production of silk cloth ends with the weaving of the dyed silk threads.

I have a plea: if you were thinking of sharing another process description sample writing with us, I wanted to suggest tackling the one from IELTS 8, Test 3, regarding cement and concrete production. Organising this task is particularly challenging for me and I always end up writing more than 200 words.
The main enigma is whether to have a separate paragraph focusing on the dissimilarities of the 2 processes or to contrast them simultaneously.
'Tis rather mind-boggling and I would appreciate it tremendously if you could help us out with this one.

hi everyone,

here is my trial.


The figures illustrate the stages in the life of a silkworm and the process of producing silk cloth.

There are four main stages in the life cycle of the silkworm, from eggs to adult moth. The process of silk cloth production involves six steps, from silkworm cocoon to silk material.

At the first stage of the life cycle, the moths lay eggs, and then these eggs transform into larvae/ these eggs hatch into larvae after 10 days. They start to eat mulberry leafs as food to gradually grow up. Then only after 4 to 6 weeks, these larvae create silk thread around them. This process is completed during 3 to 8 days, and cocoons are created. At the final stage of the process, the larvae is going to become mature moths after 16 days, and then they are continue to repeat the life cycle following the natural process.

The second picture is shown how silk cloth is produced with the first stage conducting to select the cocoons. After that, these cocoons are boiled in water at the high temperature. Next, producers are going to unwind the threads with each of them lengthening about from 300 meter to 900 meter. In the final step, the threads are twisted or waved, and then dyed to complete the process.

Thanks.

simple and great

Thank you so much

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