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Hi

This is my answer:

Some people believe that all police officers should carry a gun, while others disagree with this idea. They argue that it is intimidating to see armed police officers at the streets. In my view, the advantages of police officers carrying guns have overweighed the disadvantages. Because the police needs to be able to protect both himself and the general public.


Thank you :)

Hi Simon,
Here is my answer.

Some people believe that (no need comma) all police officers should carry a gun, (comma instead of full stop) While others disagree with this idea, and argue that it is intimidating to see armed police officers in the streets. From my point of view, the advantages of carrying guns by police officers have overweighed the disadvantages, (comma instead of full stop) because polices need to protect both themselves and the general public.

Thanks,

Some people believe that all police officers should carry a gun. While others disagree with this idea, and argue that it is intimidating to see armed police officers on the streets. From my view, the advantages of police officers carrying guns overweigh the disadvantages. Because the polices need to be able to protect both themselves and general public.

CORRECT ANSWERS:

1. 'Some people believe that all...' (no comma after "that")

2. '... should carry a gun, while...' (don't begin a sentence with "While," - use "while" after a comma to link contrasting ideas in the same sentence)

3. 'In my view' OR 'From my point of view' (not "From my view")

4. 'the advantages of police officers carrying guns OUTWEIGH the disadvantages' ("outweigh" NOT "have overweighed")

5. '... the disadvantages because...' ("because" is used to connect ideas in the SAME sentence. You don't need a comma before "because")

Good work Hana, Felora and Evan

Simon

Hi Simon,
My answer is:
Some people believe that( delete commas)all police officers should carry a gun. While(delete commas) others disagree with this idea, and argue that it is intimidating to see armed police officers on the streets(STREET). From(IN) my view, the advantages of police officers carrying guns have overweighed(delete have,only overweigh) the disadvantages. Because the police need to be able to protect both themselves and the general public.

I have got one question here:many times I confuse the usages of the words CAN,COULD,WOULD.Can you tell me how to use them appropriately?

Thanks!

Joshua

Hi Joshua,

Check my answers above. You've made some mistakes: while, overweigh, because.

Oh my god.I even made these kinds of mistakes.Punctuation problems,spelling mistakes.Seems I have a lot of things to do.

Thanks.I won't make a second mistake again.

Joshua

No problem Joshua. These mistakes are really common. Always check your writing carefully - it makes a big difference.

Simon

hey Simon,

I have a question about the difference between but and however in meaning. A book (Writing Academic English, 4th Edition, published by Longman) suggests we should use however to add an unexpected or surprising continuation--the cost of attending a community college is low; however, many students need financial aid; while "but" is used to add a complete contrast. For example, diet is one factor in how long people live, but it is not the only one.

As a native-speaker, do you think we need to pay attention to this point in IELTS writing test? Does the difference only exist in American English?

Cheers

Hi Will

This point isn't worth worrying about in relation to IELTS. My advice is to use "however" at the beginning of sentences and "but" in the middle of sentences. I think this punctuation difference is more relevant for IELTS students.

While the examples do show a small difference between the use of the two words (in US or British English), you could actually argue that it would be acceptable to use either "however" or "but" in both of the examples given by the book.

Hope this helps

Hi,Simon

Is it fine to write 'I am not good in this field' or is it better to write 'I am not good at this field'?

Thank you.

Hi,

We'd say:

I'm not good in this field / I'm not very experienced in this field.

OR: I'm not good at this. (without 'field')

Thank you.

No problem

Hi Dear Simon,

some people believe that all police officers should carry a gun ,While others disagree with this idea and argue that it is intimidating to see armed police officers on the streets. In my view/from my point of view, the advantages of police officers carrying guns have over-weighed the disadvantages. Because the police needs to be able to protect both himself and the general public.

Hi

Dear Simon,

I think this is wright...

some people believe that all police officers should carry a gun, while others disagree with this idea and argue that it is intimidating to see armed police officers on the streets. In my view, the advantages of police officers carrying guns over-weigh the disadvantages because the police needs to be able to protect both himself and the general public.

Dear Simon,

This is my answer:

Some people believe that all police officers should carry a gun, while others disagree with this idea and argue that it is intimidating to see armed police officers on the streets. In my view/ from my point of view, the advantages of police officers carrying guns outweigh the disadvantages because the police need to be able to protect both themselves and the general public.

I have an idea that we do not need a comma in the situation '...disagree with this idea, and argue that...'. Is it right?

Thanks so much

Chris Sol

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